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DESCRIPTIONADDING INTEREST
What often adds interest to a memoir, or to any narrative for that matter, is description.
Adjectives and Adverbs are your new best friends.
Adverbdescribes an action
DESCRIPTION
THE CURSE OF
The word very never works the way you want it to.
Most of the the time we use very to add emphasis. It does the OPPOSITE of adding emphasis.
Lets compare:
Voldemort was very upset that Harry was still alive. Verdict= weak sauce Explanation = words like very make us lazy. We opt for them instead of choosing a stronger more impactful word. Voldemort was upset that Harry was still alive. Voldemort was enraged that Harry Potter was still among the living.
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2 minsDescribe this place without using the words space, sky, night, or moon.
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2 minsDescribe this emotion in terms of your 5 senses.
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PARAGRAPHING TIME!
he was just normally fearful. The one day he came in from the fields and found his house reduced to a pile of smoking ash. Where was his wife, where were his children? Fortunately for him, his wife and children were not at the bottom of the pile of smoking ash, but sprinting joyfully up the road, relieved to find that he wasnt at the bottom of the pile of smoking ash. But the damage had been done: He was now excessively fearful. When he rebuilt the house, he made some changes. The new house had no fireplace. No matches were allowed inside. The house had no stove, and all cooking was to be done in a little shack several hundred yards away. The family was not allowed inside the Cooking Shack. Every hour one of the servants was required to walk around the house, dousing the walls with water from a special FireDousing Bucket, just in case.
Lars Farf had not always been excessively fearful. + Originally, he was just normally fearful. The one day he came
in from the fields and found his house reduced to a pile of smoking ash. Where was his wife, where were his children? Fortunately for him, his wife and children were not at the bottom of the pile of smoking ash, but sprinting joyfully up the road, relieved to find that he wasnt at the bottom of the pile of smoking ash. But the damage had been done: He was now excessively fearful. When he rebuilt the house, he made some changes. The new house had no fireplace. No matches were allowed inside. The house had no stove, and all cooking was to be done in a little shack several hundred yards away. The family was not allowed inside the Cooking Shack. Every hour one of the servants was required to walk around the house, dousing the walls with water from a special Fire-Dousing Bucket, just in case.
Excerpted from Lars Farf, Excessively Fearful Father and Husband by George Saunders
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ELEMENTS OF A PARAGRAPH
UCD BASICS
UNITY: The entire paragraph should concern itself with a single focus. No wandering around mentioning random things that have nothing to do with each other! COHERENCE: This means your paragraph is easy for a reader to follow and understand. You create coherence by building bridges between your sentences. DEVELOPMENT: Help your paragraphs reach maturity-dont abandon them in an awkward tween phase!
Use examples and anecdotes Define terms Evaluate causes, examine effects
(There are more development methods but these are the most relevant to our narratives. See the OWL for more!)
BRIDGES
not just for the Blues Brothers and Spice Girls of the world VERBAL BRIDGES
Repeat key words in several sentences Use of synonyms in several sentences Pronouns referring to nouns in previous sentences Transition words linking ideas from different sentences
LOGICAL BRIDGES
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Think of your narrative as something you can zoom in and out of. Choose the most important or meaningful moments to zoom in on for emphasis by creating a scene using description and dialogue. In between these major scenes you can zoom out and address the intervening time in summary.
Develop a scene that you think you can use in your narrative. Use the concepts weve gone over today. Type this out, bring a copy to class Tuesday, AND post it to Blackboard Learn. Theres no strict limit for the length of this scene, but try to make it at least one double-spaced typed page. Read Mindy Kalings Is Everybody Hanging Out Without Me?
Read Jonathan Lethems 13, 1977, 21
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