UNIVERSIDAD DE LA SABANA

DEPARTMENT OF FOREIGN LANGUAGES AND CULTURES

WRITING TASK 1
LEVEL 5, 2018-1
WRITING WORKSHOP – 3
BODY PARAGRAPH 2 AND CONCLUDING PARAGRAPH

Name: ___________________________________ Code: ___________________ Group: ________

1. A body paragraph must include…

a. Topic sentence – one of the causes or effects mentioned in the thesis statement.
b. _______________________________________________________________ Include two
c. ______________________________________________________________ supporting ideas
in the body
2. Read the following thesis statement. Identify its components. Restate the thesis. paragraph!

Example Given
 Original thesis: Lack of proper sleep in university students produces stress and lower grades.
Topic: Lack of proper sleep
Focus: effects - produces
Two effects identified: stress and lower grades

 Restatement: mental tiredness and bad academic results are some of the consequences of sleeping a
few hours.
Topic: Sleeping a few hours
Focus: effects – consequences
Two effects identified: mental tiredness and bad academic results

Original thesis: Watching violent films has a great impact on the child’s psychological and physiological
condition.
Topic: _______________________________________________________
Focus: ________________________________________________________
Causes or effects: _______________________________________________

Restatement: __________________________________________________________________________
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Topic: ________________________________________________________
Focus: ________________________________________________________
Causes or effects: _______________________________________________ Use synonyms to
avoid repetition
when restating
3. What are the three (3) components of the Concluding paragraph?
the thesis!
a. _____________________________________________________________
b. _____________________________________________________________
c. _____________________________________________________________
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DEPARTMENT OF FOREIGN LANGUAGES AND CULTURES
WRITING TASK 1
LEVEL 5, 2018-1
4. Read the following introduction, the effects and supporting ideas and write a possible concluding
paragraph.
Topic: What a Lack of Sleep Does to You

Introduction
Everyone has at least once in their lives stayed awake throughout an entire night. Usually, being up all night is a
choice of high school or college students–usually, for partying; excessively responsible workers and workaholics
also tend to spend sleepless nights working on their tasks. It is widely believed that, unlike insomnia (which
means a regular lack of sleep), a couple of sleepless nights now and then cannot do much harm. Unfortunately,
this is not true–being awake for 24 hours even once in a long period of time has unpleasant effects on health.

Effect 1: a night spent without sleep (or having little sleep) can result in fatigue and bad mood in the
morning.
Supporting details: several sleepless nights can cause more serious mental effects. In particular, your ability to
focus and to make decisions will decrease significantly.
Effect 2: one night without sleep can increase the levels of dopamine in the brain–a substance responsible,
in particular, for wakefulness.
Supporting details: Scientists believe that by producing more dopamine, the brain tries to compensate for the
negative effects of a sleepless night.
Conclusion:
_______________________________________________________________________ Restate the thesis
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_______________________________________________________________________ Summarize the causes
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Concluding sentence

5. Write 5 different transition words that can be used to conclude.

For concluding, we can use…

All things considered Use a connector
to link ideas in
the BP2. And to
start the
conclusion.

in the BP2
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DEPARTMENT OF FOREIGN LANGUAGES AND CULTURES
WRITING TASK 1
LEVEL 5, 2018-1
CAUSE AND EFFECT ESSAY
BODY PARAGRAPH 2 (70 to 80 words) AND CONCLUDING PARAGRAPH (70 to 80 words) - DRAFT
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Teacher’s comments:
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DEPARTMENT OF FOREIGN LANGUAGES AND CULTURES
WRITING TASK 1
LEVEL 5, 2018-1

Criteria EXCELLENT VERY GOOD GOOD INSUFICIENT NEEDS WORK

Grade: 5 Grade: 4 Grade: 3 Grade: 2 Grade: 1
 The body paragraph contains a clearly focused topic  The body paragraph contains an adequate topic  The body paragraph contains a topic sentence 0.4  The body paragraph does not
sentence (cause or effect) that relates to the thesis of the sentence (cause or effect) that relates to the thesis (cause or effect) that somehow relates to the  The body paragraph contains a topic have a topic sentence.
TASK essay. statement. thesis statement. sentence (cause or effect) but it does not  There are not relevant
FULFILMENT  Supporting details are concrete and specific, and they  Supporting details are concrete and somehow  Supporting details are sometimes unclear and relate to the thesis statement. supporting details.
effectively represent either the causes or effects related to specific and they represent either the causes or somehow specific and they represent either the  Supporting details are either wrong or  The concluding paragraph does
25% the topic of analysis. effects related to the topic of analysis. causes or effects related to the topic of analysis. lacking, or they are not related to the topic not unify the essay around the
 There are several relevant details to analyze the topic,  There are enough details to analyze the topic, and  There are limited details to analyze the topic. sentence or the analysis. thesis statement.
and the cause or effect has sufficient details for clear the cause or effect has sufficient details for clear The cause or effect has some details for clear  The concluding paragraph does not  The thesis statement is not re-
Body support. support. support. unify the essay around the thesis stated and the concluding
paragraph 2  The concluding paragraph effectively unifies the essay  The concluding paragraph unifies the essay around  The concluding paragraph somehow unifies statement. sentence does not close the
Conclusion around the thesis statement. the thesis statement. the essay around the thesis statement.  The thesis statement is somehow re- essay.
 The thesis statement is clearly re-stated and the  The thesis statement is well re-stated and the  The thesis statement is re-stated and the stated and the concluding sentence  Shows no knowledge of the topic
concluding sentence effectively closes the essay. concluding sentence effectively closes the essay. concluding sentence somehow closes the essay. somehow closes the essay. and the paper is OFF TOPIC;
 Word number is outstandingly reached.  Word number is mostly reached.  Word number is fairly reached.  Word number is poorly reached. therefore, YOUR FINAL GRADE
 There is evidence of valuable research and ideas are cited  There is evidence of effective research and ideas  There is evidence of research and ideas are  There is no evidence of research and IS 1.0.
properly. are cited properly. cited. ideas are not cited.  There is evidence of plagiarism
in one or more paragraphs;
therefore, YOUR FINAL GRADE
1.25 1.0 0.75 IS 0.0.
0.5 0.25
 The details are in a clear, order, and they effectively  The details are in a clear, order, and they  The details are somehow clearly organized and  The details are unclear and they analyze  There is not a clear, well-
analyze the topic in terms of either causes or effects. adequately analyze the topic in terms of either causes they analyze the topic in terms of either causes or the topic poorly (in terms of either causes or focused topic. Main idea is not
COHERENCE  Details engage the reader and create interest with or effects. effects. effects). presented.
AND creativity.  Details engage the reader and create interest.  Details somewhat engage the reader  Details do not engage the reader.  Details are not presented and
 One cause or effect is thoroughly discussed. All details  One cause or effect is appropriately discussed.  One cause or effect is discussed. Some details  One cause or effect is discussed. Few do not effectively engage the
COHESION reader.
are well chosen and all ideas are completely developed. Most details are well chosen and all ideas are well are well chosen and some ideas are well details are chosen and few ideas are
20%  Ideas are accurately linked with cohesive devices. developed. developed. developed.  One cause or effect is poorly
 Ideas are correctly linked with some cohesive  Ideas are linked with some cohesive devices.  Ideas are poorly linked. discussed.
1.0 devices.  Ideas are not linked.
0.8 0.6
0.4 0.2
 Cause-effect transition words and phrases are used  Cause-effect transition words and phrases  Some cause-effect transition words and  Cause-effect transition words and  Any cause-effect transition
effectively. are used effectively. phrases are used. phrases are used inadequately. words and phrases are
 Vocabulary is highly related to the topic.  Vocabulary is appropriately related to the  Vocabulary is somehow related to the  Vocabulary is poorly related to the used.
VOCABULARY  Transitions are appropriate and add to the topic. topic. topic  Vocabulary is extremely
20% effectiveness of the paragraph.  Transitions are appropriate and add to the  Transitions are somewhat proper and  The paragraph shows limited limited.
 The choice of the words seems accurate, natural paragraphs. add to the paragraphs. vocabulary that does not
and not forced.  Word choice is occasionally used  The paragraphs show imprecise word communicate strongly or capture the
inaccurately. usage that distorts the text content. reader's interest.
1.0 0.8 0.6 0.4 0.2
 Sentences are strong and expressive with varied  There is effective use of grammar  There is evident misuse of grammar  There is substantial misuse of  Grammar structure used
GRAMMAR structure. structures. structures. grammar structures. is noticeably incorrect.
20%  There is high effective use of grammar  Uses the tenses required for the task with a  Some of the tenses used are done in a  The ideas in the paragraphs are not
structures. few mistakes. faulty way. done with the tenses required for
 Uses the tenses required for the task. this task.
1.0 0.8 0.6 0.4 0.2
MECHANICS  There are no or minimal errors in spelling,  There are some errors; however, these  There are some errors which somehow  There are errors that distract the  There are serious errors that
(Capitalization, capitalization and punctuation. errors do not interfere with the message. interfere with the message. reader and interfere with the interfere with the message.
Spelling, message.
Punctuation) 0.75 0.6 0.45 0.15
15% 0.3