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Acknowledgements
This work draws from my two previous texts. Thank you to our reviewers for their insightful and constructive comments: Writing for Success (2011), Chapters 1-8; 14
Gregory Gibson, Henderson State University Michael Heumann, Imperial Valley College Kevin F. Boyle, College of Southern Nevada Sharon Tash, Saddleback College Andzhela Keshishyan, California State University, Northridge Jacqueline Blackwell, Thomas Nelson Community College Kathleen Duff Wilson, Arizona State University Thomas Bonfiglio, Arizona State University Roseann Grotjan, Lincoln University of Missouri Jacquelyne Kibler, Phoenix College Catherine Coleman, Long Beach City College/Orange Coast College/Irvine Valley College Professor Claudia Rubner, Mesa Community College Abby Rotstein, College of Southern Nevada
Brenda Jolivette Jones, San Jacinto College - Central Campus Christina McCale, Regis University Billie Miller, Ph.D., Cosumnes River College Joyce Ezrow, Anne Arundel Community College Sally Lederer, U of M Carlson School of Management Greg Larson, Salt Lake Community College Gayla Jurevich, Fresno City College Laura Newton, Florida State University Judy Grace, Arizona State University Rita Rud, Purdue University Edna Boroski, Trident Technical College
Special thanks to Pam, Michael, Jenn, Sanford, and Jeff at Flat World Knowledge. This book, like everything at Flat World, is a team effort and is better for it! I am honored to be a small part of a much larger movement to increase open access to educational materials. Flat World Knowledge is inspirational. Finally, Lisa, my partner and spouse, was always supportive and quick with the so what? requests for clarification. Thank you to everyone who made a suggestion, made a correction, or otherwise contributed to this project.
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Preface
Business English for Success is a creative solution to a common challenge across Business Communication courses: Business English or Business Presentations? Some classes place an equal emphasis on oral and written communication, and if that is the case for you please let me direct you to our free online text Business Communication for Success. If, however, your class places the emphasis squarely on written communication and writing proficiency then this book is for you. The Business English course and corresponding text often starts with a solid foundation in written communication with several opportunities to both review the fundamentals as well as to demonstrate mastery and move on to more challenging assignments. Our students are sometimes learning English as they enter a business program and benefit from the attention to the basics. At the same time this course often articulates as a course-equivalent for English or fulfills a writing requirement for a degree program. This range provides the instructor with both challenges and opportunities that Business English for Success can address. We open the text with a discussion on the sentence and then break it down into its elemental components, before reconstructing them into effective sentences with paragraphs and larger assignments. This step-by-step approach, with many exercises and opportunities for reinforcement along the way, provide a clear path to student-centered learning.
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Each chapter also has integrated examples that unify the discussion and form a common, easy-tounderstand basis for discussion and exploration. This will put students at ease and allow for greater understand and demonstration of mastery of the material. Tips for effective writing are included in every chapter, as well. Thought-provoking scenarios provide challenges and opportunities for collaboration and interaction. These exercises are especially helpful for working with groups of students. Clear exercises teach sentence and paragraph writing skills that lead to common English composition and business documents. Business English for Success also offers a separate chapter for English Language Learners. This chapter focuses on word order, negative statements, count and noncount nouns and articles, verb tenses, modal auxiliaries, prepositions, slang and idioms. Starting in Chapter 9 "Effective Business Writing": Effective Business Writing, the discussion applies lessons learned from the previous foundational chapters into common business issues and applications. From paraphrasing and plagiarism to style to the research process, the expectations increase as several common business documents are presented, including text messages and email (and netiquette), memorandums and letters, the business proposal, business report, resume, and the sales message. Business English for Success provides a range of discussion, examples, and exercises, from writing development to mastery of the academic essay, that serve both student and instructor.
Features
Exercises are integrated in each segment. Each concept is immediately reinforced as soon as it is introduced to keep students on track. Exercises are designed to facilitate interaction and collaboration. This allows for peer-peer engagement, development of interpersonal skills, and promotion of critical-thinking skills. Exercises that involve self-editing and collaborative writing are featured. This feature develops and promotes student interest in the knowledge areas and content. There are clear internal summaries and effective displays of information. This contributes to ease of access to information and increases students ability to locate desired content. Rule explanations are simplified with clear, relevant, and theme-based examples. This feature provides context that will facilitate learning and increase knowledge retention. There is an obvious structure to the chapter and segment level. This allows for easy adaptation to existing and changing course needs or assessment outcomes.
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Learning Objectives
1. Identify
the
components
of
a
basic
sentence.
2. Identify
the
four
most
serious
writing
errors.
Imagine you are reading a book for school. You need to find important details that you can use for an assignment. However, when you begin to read, you notice that the book has very little punctuation. Sentences fail to form complete paragraphs and instead form one block of text without clear organization. Most likely, this book would frustrate and confuse you. Without clear and concise sentences, it is difficult to find the information you need. For both students and professionals, clear communication is important. Whether you are typing an e-mail or writing a report, it is your responsibility to present your thoughts and ideas clearly and precisely. Writing in complete sentences is one way to ensure that you communicate well. This section covers how to recognize and write basic sentence structures and how to avoid some common writing errors.
Components
of
a
Sentence
Clearly written, complete sentences require key information: a subject, a verb and a complete idea. A sentence needs to make sense on its own. Sometimes, complete sentences are also called independent clauses. A clause is a group of words that may make up a sentence. An independent clause is a group of words that may stand alone as a complete, grammatically correct thought. The following sentences show independent clauses.
All complete sentences have at least one independent clause. You can identify an independent clause by reading it on its own and looking for the subject and the verb.
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Subjects
When you read a sentence, you may first look for the subject, or what the sentence is about. The subject usually appears at the beginning of a sentence as a noun or a pronoun. A noun is a word that identifies a person, place, thing, or idea. A pronoun is a word that replaces a noun. Common pronouns are I, he, she, it, you, they, and we. In the following sentences, the subject is underlined once.
In these sentences, the subject is a person: Malik. The pronoun He replaces and refers back to Malik.
In the first sentence, the subject is a place: computer lab. In the second sentence, the pronoun It substitutes for computer lab as the subject.
In the first sentence, the subject is a thing: project. In the second sentence, the pronoun It stands in for the project.
Tip
In this chapter, please refer to the following grammar key:
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Compound
Subjects
A sentence may have more than one person, place, or thing as the subject. These subjects are called compound subjects. Compound subjects are useful when you want to discuss several subjects at once.
Prepositional
Phrases
You will often read a sentence that has more than one noun or pronoun in it. You may encounter a group of words that includes a preposition with a noun or a pronoun. Prepositions connect a noun, pronoun, or verb to another word that describes or modifies that noun, pronoun, or verb. Common prepositions include in, on, under, near, by, with, and about. A group of words that begin with a preposition is called a prepositional phrase. A prepositional phrase begins with a preposition and modifies or describes a word. It cannot act as the subject of a sentence. The following circled phrases are examples of prepositional phrases.
Exercise 1
Read the following sentences. Underline the subjects, and circle the prepositional phrases.
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. 6. 7. 8. 9. 10. The
gym
is
open
until
nine
oclock
tonight.
We
went
to
the
store
to
get
some
ice.
The
student
with
the
most
extra
credit
will
win
a
homework
pass.
Maya
and
Tia
found
an
abandoned
cat
by
the
side
of
the
road.
The
driver
of
that
pickup
truck
skidded
on
the
ice.
Anita
won
the
race
with
time
to
spare.
The
people
who
work
for
that
company
were
surprised
about
the
merger.
Working
in
haste
means
that
you
are
more
likely
to
make
mistakes.
The
soundtrack
has
over
sixty
songs
in
languages
from
around
the
world.
His
latest
invention
does
not
work,
but
it
has
inspired
the
rest
of
us.
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Verbs
Once you locate the subject of a sentence, you can move on to the next part of a complete sentence: the verb. A verb is often an action word that shows what the subject is doing. A verb can also link the subject to a describing word. There are three types of verbs that you can use in a sentence: action verbs, linking verbs, or helping verbs.
Action
Verbs
A verb that connects the subject to an action is called an action verb. An action verb answers the question what is the subject doing? In the following sentences, the words underlined twice are action verbs.
Linking
Verbs
A verb can often connect the subject of the sentence to a describing word. This type of verb is called a linking verb because it links the subject to a describing word. In the following sentences, the words underlined twice are linking verbs.
If you have trouble telling the difference between action verbs and linking verbs, remember that an action verb shows that the subject is doing something, whereas a linking verb simply connects the subject to another word that describes or modifies the subject. A few verbs can be used as either action verbs or linking verbs.
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Although both sentences use the same verb, the two sentences have completely different meanings. In the first sentence, the verb describes the boys action. In the second sentence, the verb describes the boys appearance.
Helping
Verbs
A third type of verb you may use as you write is a helping verb. Helping verbs are verbs that are used with the main verb to describe a mood or tense. Helping verbs are usually a form of be, do, or have. The word can is also used as a helping verb.
Tip
Whenever you write or edit sentences, keep the subject and verb in mind. As you write, ask yourself these questions to keep yourself on track: Subject: Who or what is the sentence about? Verb: Which word shows an action or links the subject to a description?
Exercise 2
Copy each sentence onto your own sheet of paper and underline the verb(s) twice. Name the type of verb(s) used in the sentence in the space provided (LV, HV, or V).
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. 6. 7. The
cat
sounds
ready
to
come
back
inside.
________
We
have
not
eaten
dinner
yet.
________
It
took
four
people
to
move
the
broken-down
car.
________
The
book
was
filled
with
notes
from
class.
________
We
walked
from
room
to
room,
inspecting
for
damages.
________
Harold
was
expecting
a
package
in
the
mail.
________
The
clothes
still
felt
damp
even
though
they
had
been
through
the
dryer
twice.
________
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8. The teacher who runs the studio is often praised for his restoration work on old masterpieces. ________
Sentence
Patterns
Six basic subject-verb patterns can enhance your writing. A sample sentence is provided for each pattern. As you read each sentence, take note of where each part of the sentence falls. Notice that some sentence patterns use action verbs and others use linking verbs.
SubjectVerb
SubjectLinking VerbNoun
SubjectLinking VerbAdjective
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SubjectVerbAdverb
SubjectVerbDirect
Object
When you write a sentence with a direct object (DO), make sure that the DO receives the action of the verb.
Exercise 3
Use what you have learned so far to bring variety in your writing. Use the following lines or your own sheet of paper to write six sentences that practice each basic sentence pattern. When you have finished, label each part of the sentence (S, V, LV, N, Adj, Adv, DO, IO).
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. 6. ________________________________________________________________
________________________________________________________________
________________________________________________________________
________________________________________________________________
________________________________________________________________
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Collaboration Find an article in a newspaper, a magazine, or online that interests you. Bring it to class or post it online. Then, looking at a classmates article, identify one example of each part of a sentence (S, V, LV, N, Adj, Adv, DO, IO). Please share or post your results.
Fragments
The sentences you have encountered so far have been independent clauses. As you look more closely at your past writing assignments, you may notice that some of your sentences are not complete. A sentence that is missing a subject or a verb is called a fragment. A fragment may include a description or may express part of an idea, but it does not express a complete thought. Fragment: Children helping in the kitchen. Complete sentence: Children helping in the kitchen often make a mess. You can easily fix a fragment by adding the missing subject or verb. In the example, the sentence was missing a verb. Adding often make a mess creates an S-V-N sentence structure.
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See whether you can identify what is missing in the following fragments. Fragment: Told her about the broken vase. Complete sentence: I told her about the broken vase. Fragment: The store down on Main Street. Complete sentence: The store down on Main Street sells music.
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Example A
Example B
Clauses that start with a dependent wordsuch as since, because, without, or unlessare similar to prepositional phrases. Like prepositional phrases, these clauses can be fragments if they are not connected to an independent clause containing a subject and a verb. To fix the problem, you can add such a fragment to the beginning or end of a sentence. If the fragment is added at the beginning of a sentence, add a comma.
When you encounter a word ending in -ing in a sentence, identify whether or not this word is used as a verb in the sentence. You may also look for a helping verb. If the word is not used as a
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verb or if no helping verb is used with the -ing verb form, the verb is being used as a noun. An ing verb form used as a noun is called a gerund.
Once you know whether the -ing word is acting as a noun or a verb, look at the rest of the sentence. Does the entire sentence make sense on its own? If not, what you are looking at is a fragment. You will need to either add the parts of speech that are missing or combine the fragment with a nearby sentence.
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Incorrect: Taking deep breaths. Saul prepared for his presentation. Correct: Taking deep breaths, Saul prepared for his presentation. Correct: Saul prepared for his presentation. He was taking deep breaths. Incorrect: Congratulating the entire team. Sarah raised her glass to toast their success. Correct: She was congratulating the entire team. Sarah raised her glass to toast their success. Correct: Congratulating the entire team, Sarah raised her glass to toast their success. Another error in sentence construction is a fragment that begins with an infinitive. An infinitive is a verb paired with the word to; for example, to run, to write, or to reach. Although infinitives are verbs, they can be used as nouns, adjectives, or adverbs. You can correct a fragment that begins with an infinitive by either combining it with another sentence or adding the parts of speech that are missing. Incorrect: We needed to make three hundred more paper cranes. To reach the one thousand mark. Correct: We needed to make three hundred more paper cranes to reach the one thousand mark. Correct: We needed to make three hundred more paper cranes. We wanted to reach the one thousand mark.
Exercise 4
Copy the following sentences onto your own sheet of paper and circle the fragments. Then combine the fragment with the independent clause to create a complete sentence.
1. 2. 3. 4. Working
without
taking
a
break.
We
try
to
get
as
much
work
done
as
we
can
in
an
hour.
I
needed
to
bring
work
home.
In
order
to
meet
the
deadline.
Unless
the
ground
thaws
before
spring
break.
We
wont
be
planting
any
tulips
this
year.
Turning
the
lights
off
after
he
was
done
in
the
kitchen.
Robert
tries
to
conserve
energy
whenever
possible.
5. Youll
find
what
you
need
if
you
look.
On
the
shelf
next
to
the
potted
plant.
6. To
find
the
perfect
apartment.
Deidre
scoured
the
classifieds
each
day.
Run-on
Sentences
Just as short, incomplete sentences can be problematic, lengthy sentences can be problematic too. Sentences with two or more independent clauses that have been incorrectly combined are known as run-on sentences. A run-on sentence may be either a fused sentence or a comma splice.
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Fused sentence: A family of foxes lived under our shed young foxes played all over the yard. Comma splice: We looked outside, the kids were hopping on the trampoline. When two complete sentences are combined into one without any punctuation, the result is a fused sentence. When two complete sentences are joined by a comma, the result is a comma splice. Both errors can easily be fixed.
Punctuation
One way to correct run-on sentences is to correct the punctuation. For example, adding a period will correct the run-on by creating two separate sentences.
Using a semicolon between the two complete sentences will also correct the error. A semicolon allows you to keep the two closely related ideas together in one sentence. When you punctuate with a semicolon, make sure that both parts of the sentence are independent clauses. For more information on semicolons, see . Run-on: The accident closed both lanes of traffic we waited an hour for the wreckage to be cleared. Complete sentence: The accident closed both lanes of traffic; we waited an hour for the wreckage to be cleared. When you use a semicolon to separate two independent clauses, you may wish to add a transition word to show the connection between the two thoughts. After the semicolon, add the transition word and follow it with a comma. For more information on transition words, see . Run-on: The project was put on hold we didnt have time to slow down, so we kept working. Complete sentence: The project was put on hold; however, we didnt have time to slow down, so we kept working.
Coordinating
Conjunctions
You can also fix run-on sentences by adding a comma and a coordinating conjunction. A coordinating conjunction acts as a link between two independent clauses.
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Tip
These are the seven coordinating conjunctions that you can use: for, and, nor, but, or, yet, and so. Use these words appropriately when you want to link the two independent clauses. The acronym FANBOYS will help you remember this group of coordinating conjunctions. Run-on: The new printer was installed, no one knew how to use it. Complete sentence: The new printer was installed, but no one knew how to use it.
Dependent
Words
Adding dependent words is another way to link independent clauses. Like the coordinating conjunctions, dependent words show a relationship between two independent clauses. Run-on: We took the elevator, the others still got there before us. Complete sentence: Although we took the elevator, the others got there before us. Run-on: Cobwebs covered the furniture, the room hadnt been used in years. Complete sentence: Cobwebs covered the furniture because the room hadnt been used in years.
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Writing at Work
Isabelles e-mail opens with two fragments and two run-on sentences containing comma splices. The e-mail ends with another fragment. What effect would this e-mail have on Mr. Blankenship or other readers? Mr. Blankenship or other readers may not think highly of Isaebelles communication skills orworsemay not understand the message at all! Communications written in precise, complete sentences are not only more professional but also easier to understand. Before you hit the send button, read your e-mail carefully to make sure that the sentences are complete, are not run together, and are correctly punctuated.
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Exercise 5
A reader can get lost or lose interest in material that is too dense and rambling. Use what you have learned about run-on sentences to correct the following passages:
1. The
report
is
due
on
Wednesday
but
were
flying
back
from
Miami
that
morning.
I
told
the
project
manager
that
we
would
be
able
to
get
the
report
to
her
later
that
day
she
suggested
that
we
come
back
a
day
early
to
get
the
report
done
and
I
told
her
we
had
meetings
until
our
flight
took
off.
We
e-mailed
our
contact
who
said
that
they
would
check
with
his
boss,
she
said
that
the
project
could
afford
a
delay
as
long
as
they
wouldnt
have
to
make
any
edits
or
changes
to
the
file
our
new
deadline
is
next
Friday.
2. Anna
tried
getting
a
reservation
at
the
restaurant,
but
when
she
called
they
said
that
there
was
a
waiting
list
so
she
put
our
names
down
on
the
list
when
the
day
of
our
reservation
arrived
we
only
had
to
wait
thirty
minutes
because
a
table
opened
up
unexpectedly
which
was
good
because
we
were
able
to
catch
a
movie
after
dinner
in
the
time
wed
expected
to
wait
to
be
seated.
3. Without
a
doubt,
my
favorite
artist
is
Leonardo
da
Vinci,
not
because
of
his
paintings
but
because
of
his
fascinating
designs,
models,
and
sketches,
including
plans
for
scuba
gear,
a
flying
machine,
and
a
life-size
mechanical
lion
that
actually
walked
and
moved
its
head.
His
paintings
are
beautiful
too,
especially
when
you
see
the
computer
enhanced
versions
researchers
use
a
variety
of
methods
to
discover
and
enhance
the
paintings
original
colors,
the
result
of
which
are
stunningly
vibrant
and
yet
delicate
displays
of
the
mans
genius.
Key Takeaways
A sentence is complete when it contains both a subject and verb. A complete sentence makes sense on its own. Every sentence must have a subject, which usually appears at the beginning of the sentence. A subject may be a noun (a person, place, or thing) or a pronoun. A compound subject contains more than one noun. A prepositional phrase describes, or modifies, another word in the sentence but cannot be the subject of a sentence. A verb is often an action word that indicates what the subject is doing. Verbs may be action verbs, linking verbs, or helping verbs. Variety in sentence structure and length improves writing by making it more interesting and more complex. Focusing on the six basic sentence patterns will enhance your writing. Fragments and run-on sentences are two common errors in sentence construction. Fragments can be corrected by adding a missing subject or verb. Fragments that begin with a preposition or a dependent word can be corrected by combining the fragment with another sentence. Run-on sentences can be corrected by adding appropriate punctuation or adding a coordinating conjunction.
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Writing Application
Using the six basic sentence structures, write one of the following:
1. 2. 3. 4. A
work
e-mail
to
a
coworker
about
a
presentation.
A
business
letter
to
a
potential
employer.
A
status
report
about
your
current
project.
A
job
description
for
your
rsum.
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Learning Objectives
1. Define
subject-verb
agreement.
2. Identify
common
errors
in
subject-verb
agreement.
In the workplace, you want to present a professional image. Your outfit or suit says something about you when meeting face-to-face, and your writing represents you in your absence. Grammatical mistakes in your writing or even in speaking make a negative impression on coworkers, clients, and potential employers. Subject-verb agreement is one of the most common errors that people make. Having a solid understanding of this concept is critical when making a good impression, and it will help ensure that your ideas are communicated clearly.
Agreement
Agreement in speech and in writing refers to the proper grammatical match between words and phrases. Parts of sentences must agree, or correspond with other parts, in number, person, case, and gender.
Number. All parts must match in singular or plural forms. Person. All parts must match in first person (I), second person (you), or third person (he, she, it, they) forms. Case. All parts must match in subjective (I, you, he, she, it, they, we), objective (me, her, him, them, us), or possessive (my, mine, your, yours, his, her, hers, their, theirs, our, ours) forms. For more information on pronoun case agreement, see Section 1.5.1 "Pronoun Agreement". Gender. All parts must match in male or female forms.
Subject-verb agreement describes the proper match between subjects and verbs. Because subjects and verbs are either singular or plural, the subject of a sentence and the verb of a sentence must agree with each other in number. That is, a singular subject belongs with a singular verb form, and a plural subject belongs with a plural verb form. For more information on subjects and verbs, see Section 1.1 "Sentence Writing".
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Regular
Verbs
Regular verbs follow a predictable pattern. For example, in the third person singular, regular verbs always end in -s. Other forms of regular verbs do not end in -s. Study the following regular verb forms in the present tense.
Singular
Form
Plural
Form
We
live.
You
live.
Tip
Add an -es to the third person singular form of regular verbs that end in -sh, -x, -ch, and -s. (I wish/He wishes, I fix/She fixes, I watch/It watches, I kiss/He kisses.)
In these sentences, the verb form stays the same for the first person singular and the first person plural.
In these sentences, the verb form stays the same for the second person singular and the second person plural. In the singular form, the pronoun you refers to one person. In the plural form, the pronoun you refers to a group of people, such as a team.
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In this sentence, the subject is mother. Because the sentence only refers to one mother, the subject is singular. The verb in this sentence must be in the third person singular form.
In this sentence, the subject is friends. Because this subject refers to more than one person, the subject is plural. The verb in this sentence must be in the third person plural form.
Tip
Many singular subjects can be made plural by adding an -s. Most regular verbs in the present tense end with an -s in the third person singular. This does not make the verbs plural.
Exercise 1
On your own sheet of paper, write the correct verb form for each of the following sentences.
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. 6. 7. 8. 9. 10. I
(brush/brushes)
my
teeth
twice
a
day.
You
(wear/wears)
the
same
shoes
every
time
we
go
out.
He
(kick/kicks)
the
soccer
ball
into
the
goal.
She
(watch/watches)
foreign
films.
Catherine
(hide/hides)
behind
the
door.
We
(want/wants)
to
have
dinner
with
you.
You
(work/works)
together
to
finish
the
project.
They
(need/needs)
to
score
another
point
to
win
the
game.
It
(eat/eats)
four
times
a
day.
David
(fix/fixes)
his
own
motorcycle.
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Irregular
Verbs
Not all verbs follow a predictable pattern. These verbs are called irregular verbs. Some of the most common irregular verbs are be, have, and do. Learn the forms of these verbs in the present tense to avoid errors in subject-verb agreement.
Be
Study the different forms of the verb to be in the present tense.
Singular
FormPlural
Form
We
are.
You
are.
Have
Study the different forms of the verb to have in the present tense.
Singular
Form
Plural
Form
We
have.
You
have.
Do
Study the different forms of the verb to do in the present tense.
Singular
Form
Plural
Form
We
do.
You
do.
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Exercise 2
Complete the following sentences by writing the correct present tense form of be, have, or do. Use your own sheet of paper to complete this exercise.
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. 6. 7. 8. 9. 10. I
________
sure
that
you
will
succeed.
They
________
front-row
tickets
to
the
show.
He
________
a
great
Elvis
impersonation.
We
________
so
excited
to
meet
you
in
person!
She
________
a
fever
and
a
sore
throat.
You
________
not
know
what
you
are
talking
about.
You
________
all
going
to
pass
this
class.
She
________
not
going
to
like
that.
It
________
appear
to
be
the
right
size.
They
________
ready
to
take
this
job
seriously.
a sentence contains a compound subject; the subject of the sentence is separate from the verb; the subject of the sentence is an indefinite pronoun, such as anyone or everyone; the subject of the sentence is a collective noun, such as team or organization; the subject appears after the verb.
Recognizing the sources of common errors in subject-verb agreement will help you avoid these errors in your writing. This section covers the subject-verb agreement errors in more detail.
Compound
Subjects
A compound subject is formed by two or more nouns and the coordinating conjunctions and, or, or nor. A compound subject can be made of singular subjects, plural subjects, or a combination of singular and plural subjects. Compound subjects combined with and take a plural verb form.
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Compound subjects combined with or and nor are treated separately. The verb must agree with the subject that is nearest to the verb.
Tip
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Indefinite
Pronouns
Indefinite pronouns refer to an unspecified person, thing, or number. When an indefinite pronoun serves as the subject of a sentence, you will often use a singular verb form. However, keep in mind that exceptions arise. Some indefinite pronouns may require a plural verb form. To determine whether to use a singular or plural verb with an indefinite pronoun, consider the noun that the pronoun would refer to. If the noun is plural, then use a plural verb with the indefinite pronoun. View the chart to see a list of common indefinite pronouns and the verb forms they agree with.
Indefinite
Pronouns
That
Always
Take
a
Singular
Verb
anybody,
anyone,
anything
each
everybody,
everyone,
everything
much
many
nobody,
no
one,
nothing
somebody,
someone,
something
Indefinite
Pronouns
That
Can
Take
a
Singular
or
Plural
Verb
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The indefinite pronoun everybody takes a singular verb form because everybody refers to a group performing the same action as a single unit.
The indefinite pronoun all takes a plural verb form because all refers to the plural noun people. Because people is plural, all is plural.
In this sentence, the indefinite pronoun all takes a singular verb form because all refers to the singular noun cake. Because cake is singular, all is singular.
Collective
Nouns
A collective noun is a noun that identifies more than one person, place, or thing and considers those people, places, or things one singular unit. Because collective nouns are counted as one, they are singular and require a singular verb. Some commonly used collective nouns are group, team, army, flock, family, and class.
In this sentence, class is a collective noun. Although the class consists of many students, the class is treated as a singular unit and requires a singular verb form.
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Here
or
There
In sentences that begin with here or there, the subject follows the verb.
If you have trouble identifying the subject and the verb in sentences that start with here or there; it may help to reverse the order of the sentence so the subject comes first.
Questions
When you ask questions, a question word (who, what, where, when, why, or how) appears first. The verb and then the subject follow.
Tip
If you have trouble finding the subject and the verb in questions, try answering the question being asked.
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Exercise 3
Correct the errors in subject-verb agreement in the following sentences. If there are no errors in subject-verb agreement, write OK. Copy the corrected sentence or the word OK on your own sheet of notebook paper. 1. My dog and cats chases each other all the time. ________________________________________________________________ 2. The books that are in my library is the best I have ever read. ________________________________________________________________ 3. Everyone are going to the concert except me. ________________________________________________________________ 4. My family are moving to California. ________________________________________________________________ 5. Here is the lake I told you about. ________________________________________________________________ 6. There is the newspapers I was supposed to deliver. ________________________________________________________________ 7. Which room is bigger? ________________________________________________________________ 8. When are the movie going to start? ________________________________________________________________ 9. My sister and brother cleans up after themselves. ________________________________________________________________ 10. Some of the clothes is packed away in the attic.
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Exercise 4
Correct the errors in subject-verb agreement in the following paragraph. Copy the paragraph on a piece of notebook paper and make corrections. Dear Hiring Manager, I feels that I am the ideal candidate for the receptionist position at your company. I has three years of experience as a receptionist in a company that is similar to yours. My phone skills and written communication is excellent. These skills, and others that I have learned on the job, helps me understand that every person in a company helps make the business a success. At my current job, the team always say that I am very helpful. Everyone appreciate when I go the extra mile to get the job done right. My current employer and coworkers feels that I am an asset to the team. I is efficient and organized. Is there any other details about me that you would like to know? If so, please contact me. Here are my rsum. You can reach me by e-mail or phone. I looks forward to speaking with you in person. Thanks, Felicia Fellini
Writing at Work
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Imagine that you are a prospective client and that you saw this ad online. Would you call Terra Services to handle your next project? Probably not! Mistakes in subject-verb agreement can cost a company business. Paying careful attention to grammatical details ensures professionalism that clients will recognize and respect.
Key Takeaways
Parts of sentences must agree in number, person, case, and gender. A verb must always agree with its subject in number. A singular subject requires a singular verb; a plural subject requires a plural verb. Irregular verbs do not follow a predictable pattern in their singular and plural forms. Common irregular verbs are to be, to have, and to do. A compound subject is formed when two or more nouns are joined by the words and, or, or nor. In some sentences, the subject and verb may be separated by a phrase or clause, but the verb must still agree with the subject. Indefinite pronouns, such as anyone, each, everyone, many, no one, and something, refer to unspecified people or objects. Most indefinite pronouns are singular. A collective noun is a noun that identifies more than one person, place, or thing and treats those people, places, or things one singular unit. Collective nouns require singular verbs. In sentences that begin with here and there, the subject follows the verb. In questions, the subject follows the verb.
Writing Application
Use your knowledge of subject-verb agreement to write one of the following:
1. An
advertisement
for
a
potential
company
2. A
memo
to
all
employees
of
a
particular
company
3. A
cover
letter
describing
your
qualifications
to
a
potential
employer
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Learning Objectives
1. Use
the
correct
regular
verb
tense
in
basic
sentences.
2. Use
the
correct
irregular
verb
tense
in
basic
sentences.
Suppose you must give an oral presentation about what you did last summer. How do you make it clear that you are talking about the past and not about the present or the future? Using the correct verb tense can help you do this. It is important to use the proper verb tense. Otherwise, your listener might judge you harshly. Mistakes in tense often leave a listener or reader with a negative impression.
Regular
Verbs
Verbs indicate actions or states of being in the past, present, or future using tenses. Regular verbs follow regular patterns when shifting from the present to past tense. For example, to form a pasttense or past-participle verb form, add -ed or -d to the end of a verb. You can avoid mistakes by understanding this basic pattern. Verb tense identifies the time of action described in a sentence. Verbs take different forms to indicate different tenses. Verb tenses indicate
an action or state of being in the present, an action or state of being in the past, an action or state of being in the future.
Helping verbs, such as be and have, also work to create verb tenses, such as the future tense.
Exercise 1
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Complete the following sentences by selecting the correct form of the verb in simple present, simple past, or simple future tenses. Write the corrected sentence on your own sheet of paper.
1. The
Dust
Bowl
(is,
was,
will
be)
a
name
given
to
a
period
of
very
destructive
dust
storms
that
occurred
in
the
United
States
during
the
1930s.
2. Historians
today
(consider,
considered,
will
consider)
The
Dust
Bowl
to
be
one
of
the
worst
weather
of
events
in
American
history.
3. The
Dust
Bowl
mostly
(affects,
affected,
will
affect)
the
states
of
Kansas,
Colorado,
Oklahoma,
Texas,
and
New
Mexico.
4. Dust
storms
(continue,
continued,
will
continue)
to
occur
in
these
dry
regions,
but
not
to
the
devastating
degree
of
the
1930s.
5. The
dust
storms
during
The
Dust
Bowl
(cause,
caused,
will
cause)
irreparable
damage
to
farms
and
the
environment
for
a
period
of
several
years.
6. When
early
settlers
(move,
moved,
will
move)
into
this
area,
they
(remove,
removed,
will
remove)
the
natural
prairie
grasses
in
order
to
plant
crops
and
graze
their
cattle.
7. They
did
not
(realize,
realized,
will
realize)
that
the
grasses
kept
the
soil
in
place.
8. There
(is,
was,
will
be)
also
a
severe
drought
that
(affects,
affected,
will
affect)
the
region.
9. The
worst
dust
storm
(happens,
happened,
will
happen)
on
April
14,
1935,
a
day
called
Black
Sunday.
10. The
Dust
Bowl
era
finally
came
to
end
in
1939
when
the
rains
(arrive,
arrived,
will
arrive).
11. Dust
storms
(continue,
continued,
will
continue)
to
affect
the
region,
but
hopefully
they
will
not
be
as
destructive
as
the
storms
of
the
1930s.
Irregular
Verbs
The past tense of irregular verbs is not formed using the patterns that regular verbs follow. Study , which lists the most common irregular verbs.
Tip
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was, were lose became began blew broke brought built burst bought caught chose came cut make mean meet pay put quit read ride ring rise run say
dove (dived)see did drew drank drove ate fell fed felt seek sell send set shake shine shrink sing
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Simple Present fight find fly forget forgive freeze get give go grow have hear hide hold hurt keep know lay lead leave let
Past
Simple Present sit sleep speak spend spring stand steal strike swim swing take teach tear tell think throw understand wake wear win wind sat slept
Past
fought found flew forgot forgave froze got gave went grew had heard hid held hurt kept knew laid led left let
spoke spent sprang stood stole struck swam swung took taught tore told thought threw understood woke wore won wound
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Exercise 2
Complete the following sentences by selecting the correct form of the irregular verb in simple present, simple past, or simple future tense. Copy the corrected sentence onto your own sheet of paper.
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. 6. 7. Marina
finally
(forgived,
forgave,
will
forgive)
her
sister
for
snooping
around
her
room.
The
house
(shook,
shaked,
shakes)
as
the
airplane
rumbled
overhead.
I
(buyed,
bought,
buy)
several
items
of
clothing
at
the
thrift
store
on
Wednesday.
She
(put,
putted,
puts)
the
lotion
in
her
shopping
basket
and
proceeded
to
the
checkout
line.
The
prized
goose
(layed,
laid,
lay)
several
golden
eggs
last
night.
Mr.
Batista
(teached,
taught,
taughted)
the
class
how
to
use
correct
punctuation.
I
(drink,
drank,
will
drink)
several
glasses
of
sparkling
cider
instead
of
champagne
on
New
Years
Eve
next
year.
8. Although
Hector
(growed,
grew,
grows)
three
inches
in
one
year,
we
still
called
him
Little
Hector.
9. Yesterday
our
tour
guide
(lead,
led,
will
lead)
us
through
the
maze
of
people
in
Times
Square.
10. The
rock
band
(burst,
bursted,
bursts)
onto
the
music
scene
with
their
catchy
songs.
Exercise 3
On your own sheet of paper, write a sentence using the correct form of the verb tense shown below.
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. Throw
(past)
Paint
(simple
present)
Smile
(future)
Tell
(past)
Share
(simple
present)
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Tip
In some cases, clear communication will call for different tenses. Look at the following example:
If the time frame for each action or state is different, a tense shift is appropriate.
Exercise 4
Edit the following paragraph by correcting the inconsistent verb tense. Copy the corrected paragraph onto your own sheet of paper. In the Middle Ages, most people lived in villages and work as agricultural laborers, or peasants. Every village has a lord, and the peasants worked on his land. Much of what they produce go to the lord and his family. What little food was leftover goes to support the peasants families. In return for their labor, the lord offers them protection. A peasants day usually began before sunrise and involves long hours of backbreaking work, which includes plowing the land, planting
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seeds, and cutting crops for harvesting. The working life of a peasant in the Middle Ages is usually demanding and exhausting.
Writing at Work
Read the following excerpt from a work e-mail:
The inconsistent tense in the e-mail will very likely distract the reader from its overall point. Most likely, your coworkers will not correct your verb tenses or call attention to grammatical errors, but it is important to keep in mind that errors such as these do have a subtle negative impact in the workplace.
Key Takeaways
Verb tense helps you express when an event takes place. Regular verbs follow regular patterns when shifting from present to past tense. Irregular verbs do not follow regular, predictable patterns when shifting from present to past tense. Using consistent verb tense is a key element to effective writing.
Writing Application
Tell a family story. You likely have several family stories to choose from, but pick the one that you find most interesting to write about. Use as many details as you can in the telling. As you write and proofread, make sure your all your verbs are correct and the tenses are consistent.
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1.4 Capitalization
Learning Objectives
1. Learn
the
basic
rules
of
capitalization.
2. Identify
common
capitalization
errors.
Text messages, casual e-mails, and instant messages often ignore the rules of capitalization. In fact, it can seem unnecessary to capitalize in these contexts. In other, more formal forms of communication, however, knowing the basic rules of capitalization and using capitalization correctly gives the reader the impression that you choose your words carefully and care about the ideas you are conveying.
Tip
Always capitalize nationalities, races, languages, and religions. For example, American, African American, Hispanic, Catholic, Protestant, Jewish, Muslim, Hindu, Buddhist, and so on.
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Do not capitalize nouns for people, places, things, streets, buildings, events, and titles when the noun is used in general or common way. See the following chart for the difference between proper nouns and common nouns.
Common
Noun
museum
theater
country
uncle
doctor
book
college
war
Proper
Noun
The Art Institute of Chicago Apollo Theater Malaysia Uncle Javier Dr. Jackson Pride and Prejudice Smith College the Spanish-American War
Exercise 1
On your own sheet of paper, write five proper nouns for each common noun that is listed. The first one has been done for you. Common noun: river
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. Nile
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1. 2. 3. 4.
Capitalize Titles
Tip
Computer-related words such as Internet and World Wide Web are usually capitalized; however, e-mail and online are never capitalized.
Exercise 2
Edit the following sentences by correcting the capitalization of the titles or names.
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. The
prince
of
england
enjoys
playing
polo.
Ode
to
a
nightingale
is
a
sad
poem.
My
sister
loves
to
read
magazines
such
as
the
new
yorker.
The
house
on
Mango
street
is
an
excellent
novel
written
by
Sandra
Cisneros.
My
physician,
dr.
alvarez,
always
makes
me
feel
comfortable
in
her
office.
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Edit the following paragraphs by correcting the capitalization. david granns the lost City of Z mimics the snake-like winding of the amazon River. The three distinct Stories that are introduced are like twists in the River. First, the Author describes his own journey to the amazon in the present day, which is contrasted by an account of percy fawcetts voyage in 1925 and a depiction of James Lynchs expedition in 1996. Where does the river lead these explorers? the answer is one that both the Author and the reader are hungry to discover. The first lines of the preface pull the reader in immediately because we know the author, david grann, is lost in the amazon. It is a compelling beginning not only because its thrilling but also because this is a true account of granns experience. grann has dropped the reader smack in the middle of his conflict by admitting the recklessness of his decision to come to this place. the suspense is further perpetuated by his unnerving observation that he always considered himself A Neutral Witness, never getting personally involved in his stories, a notion that is swiftly contradicted in the opening pages, as the reader can clearly perceive that he is in a dire predicamentand frighteningly involved.
Writing at Work
Did you know that, if you use all capital letters to convey a message, the capital letters come across like shouting? In addition, all capital letters are actually more difficult to read and may annoy the reader. To avoid shouting at or annoying your reader, follow the rules of capitalization and find other ways to emphasize your point.
Key Takeaways
Learning and applying the basic rules of capitalization is a fundamental aspect of good writing. Identifying and correcting errors in capitalization is an important writing skill.
Writing Application
Write a one-page biography. Make sure to identify people, places, and dates and use capitalization correctly.
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1.5 Pronouns
Learning Objectives
1. Identify
pronouns
and
their
antecedents.
2. Use
pronouns
and
their
antecedents
correctly.
If there were no pronouns, all types of writing would be quite tedious to read. We would soon be frustrated by reading sentences like Bob said that Bob was tired or Christina told the class that Christina received an A. Pronouns help a writer avoid constant repetition. Knowing just how pronouns work is an important aspect of clear and concise writing.
Pronoun
Agreement
A pronoun is a word that takes the place of (or refers back to) a noun or another pronoun. The word or words a pronoun refers to is called the antecedent of the pronoun. 1. Lani complained that she was exhausted.
o o o o o o
She refers to Lani. Lani is the antecedent of she. Him refers to Jeremy. Jeremy is the antecedent of him. They refers to Crina and Rosalie. Crina and Rosalie is the antecedent of they.
2. Jeremy left the party early, so I did not see him until Monday at work. 3. Crina and Rosalie have been best friends ever since they were freshman in high school.
Pronoun agreement errors occur when the pronoun and the antecedent do not match or agree with each other. There are several types of pronoun agreement.
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Agreement
in
Number
If the pronoun takes the place of or refers to a singular noun, the pronoun must also be singular.
Agreement
in
Person
First
Person
I
Second
Person
you
my (mine) we us
Third Person he, she, ithim, her, it his, her, its they them their (theirs)
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Exercise 1
Edit the following paragraph by correcting pronoun agreement errors in number and person. Over spring break I visited my older cousin, Diana, and they took me to a butterfly exhibit at a museum. Diana and I have been close ever since she was young. Our mothers are twin sisters, and she is inseparable! Diana knows how much I love butterflies, so it was their special present to me. I have a soft spot for caterpillars too. I love them because something about the way it transforms is so interesting to me. One summer my grandmother gave me a butterfly growing kit, and you got to see the entire life cycle of five Painted Lady butterflies. I even got to set it free. So when my cousin said they wanted to take me to the butterfly exhibit, I was really excited!
anybody either
anything everybody nobodyoneself both each everyone none other everything no one others
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Collective
Nouns
Collective nouns suggest more than one person but are usually considered singular. Look over the following examples of collective nouns.
Common
Collective
Nouns
audience
faculty
band
class
family
public
school
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Exercise 2
Complete the following sentences by selecting the correct pronoun. Copy the completed sentence onto your own sheet of paper. Then circle the noun the pronoun replaces.
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. 6. 7. 8. 9. 10. In
the
current
economy,
nobody
wants
to
waste
________
money
on
frivolous
things.
If
anybody
chooses
to
go
to
medical
school,
________
must
be
prepared
to
work
long
hours.
The
plumbing
crew
did
________
best
to
repair
the
broken
pipes
before
the
next
ice
storm.
If
someone
is
rude
to
you,
try
giving
________
a
smile
in
return.
My
family
has
________
faults,
but
I
still
love
them
no
matter
what.
The
school
of
education
plans
to
train
________
students
to
be
literacy
tutors.
The
commencement
speaker
said
that
each
student
has
a
responsibility
toward
________.
My
mothers
singing
group
has
________
rehearsals
on
Thursday
evenings.
No
one
should
suffer
________
pains
alone.
I
thought
the
flock
of
birds
lost
________
way
in
the
storm.
Tip
Note that a pronoun can also be the object of a preposition. Near them, the children played.
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My mother stood between us. The pronouns us and them are objects of the prepositions near and between. They answer the questions near whom? And between whom? Compound subject pronouns are two or more pronouns joined by a conjunction or a preposition that function as the subject of the sentence. The following sentences show pronouns with compound subjects: Incorrect:Me and Harriet visited the Grand Canyon last summer. Correct:Harriet and I visited the Grand Canyon last summer. Correct: Jenna accompanied Harriet and me on our trip.
Tip
Note that object pronouns are never used in the subject position. One way to remember this rule is to remove the other subject in a compound subject, leave only the pronoun, and see whether the sentence makes sense. For example, Me visited the Grand Canyon last summer sounds immediately incorrect. Compound object pronouns are two or more pronouns joined by a conjunction or a preposition that function as the object of the sentence. Incorrect: I have a good feeling about Janice and I. Correct: I have a good feeling about Janice and me.
Tip
It is correct to write Janice and me, as opposed to me and Janice. Just remember it is more polite to refer to yourself last.
Writing at Work
In casual conversation, people sometimes mix up subject and object pronouns. For instance, you might say, Me and Donnie went to a movie last night. However, when you are writing or speaking at work or in any other formal situation, you need to remember the distinctions between subject and object pronouns and be able to correct yourself. These subtle grammar corrections will enhance your professional image and reputation.
Exercise 3
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Revise the following sentences in which the subject and object pronouns are used incorrectly. Copy the revised sentence onto your own sheet of paper. Write a C for each sentence that is correct. 1. Meera and me enjoy doing yoga together on Sundays. ________________________________________________________________ 2. She and him have decided to sell their house. ________________________________________________________________ 3. Between you and I, I do not think Jeffrey will win the election. ________________________________________________________________
4. Us and our friends have game night the first Thursday of every month. ________________________________________________________________ 5. They and I met while on vacation in Mexico. ________________________________________________________________ 6. Napping on the beach never gets boring for Alice and I. ________________________________________________________________ 7. New Years Eve is not a good time for she and I to have a serious talk. ________________________________________________________________ 8. You exercise much more often than me. ________________________________________________________________ 9. I am going to the comedy club with Yolanda and she. ________________________________________________________________ 10. The cooking instructor taught her and me a lot. ________________________________________________________________
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Tip
If you are having trouble deciding when to use who and whom, try this trick. Take the following sentence: Who/Whom do I consider my best friend? Reorder the sentence in your head, using either he or him in place of who or whom. I consider him my best friend. I consider he my best friend. Which sentence sounds better? The first one, of course. So the trick is, if you can use him, you should use whom.
Exercise 4
Complete the following sentences by adding who or whom. Copy the completed sentence onto your own sheet of paper.
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. 6. ________
hit
the
home
run?
I
remember
________
won
the
Academy
Award
for
Best
Actor
last
year.
To
________
is
the
letter
addressed?
I
have
no
idea
________
left
the
iron
on,
but
I
am
going
to
find
out.
________
are
you
going
to
recommend
for
the
internship?
With
________
are
you
going
to
Hawaii?
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7. 8. 9. 10.
No one knew ________ the famous actor was. ________ in the office knows how to fix the copy machine? From ________ did you get the concert tickets? No one knew ________ ate the cake mom was saving.
Key Takeaways
Pronouns and their antecedents need to agree in number and person. Most indefinite pronouns are singular. Collective nouns are usually singular. Pronouns can function as subjects or objects. Subject pronouns are never used as objects, and object pronouns are never used as subjects. Who serves as a subject of a verb. Whom serves as an object of a sentence or the object of a preposition.
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Writing Application
Write about what makes an ideal marriage or long-term relationship. Provide specific details to back up your assertions. After you have written a few paragraphs, go back and proofread your paper for correct pronoun usage.
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Learning Objectives
1. Identify
adjectives
and
adverbs.
2. Use
adjectives
and
adverbs
correctly.
Adjectives and adverbs are descriptive words that bring your writing to life.
In sentence 1, the adjective green describes the noun sweater. In sentence 2, the adjective beautiful describes the pronoun she.
An adverb is a word that describes a verb, an adjective, or another adverb. Adverbs frequently end in -ly. They answer questions such as how, to what extent, why, when, and where.
3. Bertrand
sings
horribly.
4. My
sociology
instructor
is
extremely
wise.
In sentence 3, horribly describes the verb sings. How does Bertrand sing? He sings horribly. In sentence 4, extremely describes the adjective wise. How wise is the instructor? Extremely wise. In sentence 5, very describes the adverb accurately. How accurately did he throw the ball? Very accurately.
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Exercise 1
Complete the following sentences by adding the correct adjective or adverb from the list in the previous section. Identify the word as an adjective or an adverb (Adj, Adv).
1. Frederick
________
choked
on
the
piece
of
chicken
when
he
saw
Margaret
walk
through
the
door.
2. His
________
eyes
looked
at
everyone
and
everything
as
if
they
were
specimens
in
a
biology
lab.
3. Despite
her
pessimistic
views
on
life,
Lauren
believes
that
most
people
have
________
hearts.
4. Although
Stefan
took
the
criticism
________,
he
remained
calm.
5. The
child
developed
a
________
imagination
because
he
read
a
lot
of
books.
6. Madeleine
spoke
________
while
she
was
visiting
her
grandmother
in
the
hospital.
7. Hectors
most
________
possession
was
his
fathers
bass
guitar
from
the
1970s.
8. My
definition
of
a
________
afternoon
is
walking
to
the
park
on
a
beautiful
day,
spreading
out
my
blanket,
and
losing
myself
in
a
good
book.
9. She
________
eyed
her
new
coworker
and
wondered
if
he
was
single.
10. At
the
party,
Denise
________
devoured
two
pieces
of
pepperoni
pizza
and
a
several
slices
of
ripe
watermelon.
Sentence 1 describes Jorge with the adjective thin. Sentence 2 compares Jorge to Steven, stating that Steven is thinner. So thinner is the comparative form of thin.
Superlative adjectives and adverbs are used to compare more than two people or two things.
1. Jackie
is
the
loudest
cheerleader
on
the
squad.
2. Kenyatta was voted the most confident student by her graduating class.
o
Sentence 1 shows that Jackie is not just louder than one other person, but she is the loudest of all the cheerleaders on the squad.
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Sentence 2 shows that Kenyatta was voted the most confident student of all the students in her class.
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Tip
Remember the following exception: If the word has two syllables and ends in -y, change the -y to an -i and add -est. For example, happy would change to happiest in the superlative form; healthy would change to healthiest.
Exercise 2
Edit the following paragraph by correcting the errors in comparative and superlative adjectives. Our argument started on the most sunny afternoon that I have ever experienced. Max and I were sitting on my front stoop when I started it. I told him that my dog, Jacko, was more smart than his dog, Merlin. I could not help myself. Merlin never came when he was called, and he chased his tail and barked at rocks. I told Max that Merlin was the most dumbest dog on the block. I guess I was angrier about a bad grade that I received, so I decided to pick on poor little Merlin. Even though Max insulted Jacko too, I felt I had been more mean. The next day I apologized to Max and brought Merlin some of Jackos treats. When Merlin placed his paw on my knee and licked my hand, I was the most sorry person on the block. Collaboration Share and compare your answers with a classmate.
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Tip
Remember better and worse compare two persons or things. Best and worst compare three or more persons or things.
Exercise 3
Write good, well, bad, or badly to complete each sentence. Copy the completed sentence onto your own sheet of paper.
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. 6. 7. 8. 9. 10. Donna
always
felt
________
if
she
did
not
see
the
sun
in
the
morning.
The
school
board
president
gave
a
________
speech
for
once.
Although
my
dog,
Comet,
is
mischievous,
he
always
behaves
________
at
the
dog
park.
I
thought
my
back
injury
was
________
at
first,
but
it
turned
out
to
be
minor.
Steve
was
shaking
________
from
the
extreme
cold.
Apple
crisp
is
a
very
________
dessert
that
can
be
made
using
whole
grains
instead
of
white
flour.
The
meeting
with
my
sons
math
teacher
went
very
________.
Juan
has
a
________
appetite,
especially
when
it
comes
to
dessert.
Magritte
thought
the
guests
had
a
________
time
at
the
party
because
most
people
left
early.
She
________
wanted
to
win
the
writing
contest
prize,
which
included
a
trip
to
New
York.
Exercise 4
Write the correct comparative or superlative form of the word in parentheses. Copy the completed sentence onto your own sheet of paper.
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. 6. 7. 8. 9. This
research
paper
is
________
(good)
than
my
last
one.
Tanaya
likes
country
music
________
(well)
of
all.
My
motorcycle
rides
________
(bad)
than
it
did
last
summer.
That
is
the
________
(bad)
joke
my
father
ever
told.
The
hockey
team
played
________
(badly)
than
it
did
last
season.
Tracey
plays
guitar
________
(well)
than
she
plays
the
piano.
It
will
go
down
as
one
of
the
________
(bad)
movies
I
have
ever
seen.
The
deforestation
in
the
Amazon
is
________
(bad)
than
it
was
last
year.
Movie
ticket
sales
are
________
(good)
this
year
than
last.
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10. My husband says mystery novels are the ________ (good) types of books.
Writing at Work
The irregular words good, well, bad, and badly are often misused along with their comparative and superlative forms better, best, worse, and worst. You may not hear the difference between worse and worst, and therefore type it incorrectly. In a formal or business-like tone, use each of these words to write eight separate sentences. Assume these sentences will be seen and judged by your current or future employer.
Key Takeaways
Adjectives describe a noun or a pronoun. Adverbs describe a verb, adjective, or another adverb. Most adverbs are formed by adding -ly to an adjective. Comparative adjectives and adverbs compare two persons or things. Superlative adjectives or adverbs compare more than two persons or things. The adjectives good and bad and the adverbs well and badly are unique in their comparative and superlative forms and require special attention.
Writing Application
Using the exercises as a guide, write your own ten-sentence quiz for your classmate(s) using the concepts covered in this section. Try to include two questions from each subsection in your quiz. Exchange papers and see whether you can get a perfect score.
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Learning Objectives
1. Identify
modifiers.
2. Learn
how
to
correct
misplaced
and
dangling
modifiers.
A modifier is a word, phrase, or clause that clarifies or describes another word, phrase, or clause. Sometimes writers use modifiers incorrectly, leading to strange and unintentionally humorous sentences. The two common types of modifier errors are called misplaced modifiers and dangling modifiers. If either of these errors occurs, readers can no longer read smoothly. Instead, they become stumped trying to figure out what the writer meant to say. A writers goal must always be to communicate clearly and to avoid distracting the reader with strange sentences or awkward sentence constructions. The good news is that these errors can be easily overcome.
Misplaced
Modifiers
A misplaced modifier is a modifier that is placed too far from the word or words it modifies. Misplaced modifiers make the sentence awkward and sometimes unintentionally humorous. Incorrect: She wore a bicycle helmet on her head that was too large. Correct: She wore a bicycle helmet that was too large on her head.
Notice in the incorrect sentence it sounds as if her head was too large! Of course, the writer is referring to the helmet, not to the persons head. The corrected version of the sentence clarifies the writers meaning.
Look at the following two examples: Incorrect: They bought a kitten for my brother they call Shadow. Correct: They bought a kitten they call Shadow for my brother.
In the incorrect sentence, it seems that the brothers name is Shadow. Thats because the modifier is too far from the word it modifies, which is kitten.
Incorrect: The patient was referred to the physician with stomach pains. Correct: The patient with stomach pains was referred to the physician.
The incorrect sentence reads as if it is the physician who has stomach pains! What the writer means is that the patient has stomach pains.
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Tip
Simple modifiers like only, almost, just, nearly, and barely often get used incorrectly because writers often stick them in the wrong place. Confusing: Tyler almost found fifty cents under the sofa cushions. Repaired: Tyler found almost fifty cents under the sofa cushions.
How do you almost find something? Either you find it or you do not. The repaired sentence is much clearer.
Exercise 1
On a separate sheet of paper, rewrite the following sentences to correct the misplaced modifiers.
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. 6. 7. 8. 9. 10. The
young
lady
was
walking
the
dog
on
the
telephone.
I
heard
that
there
was
a
robbery
on
the
evening
news.
Uncle
Louie
bought
a
running
stroller
for
the
baby
that
he
called
Speed
Racer.
Rolling
down
the
mountain,
the
explorer
stopped
the
boulder
with
his
powerful
foot.
We
are
looking
for
a
babysitter
for
our
precious
six-year-old
who
doesnt
drink
or
smoke
and
owns
a
car.
The
teacher
served
cookies
to
the
children
wrapped
in
aluminum
foil.
The
mysterious
woman
walked
toward
the
car
holding
an
umbrella.
We
returned
the
wine
to
the
waiter
that
was
sour.
Charlie
spotted
a
stray
puppy
driving
home
from
work.
I
ate
nothing
but
a
cold
bowl
of
noodles
for
dinner.
Dangling
Modifiers
A dangling modifier is a word, phrase, or clause that describes something that has been left out of the sentence. When there is nothing that the word, phrase, or clause can modify, the modifier is said to dangle. Incorrect:Riding in the sports car, the world whizzed by rapidly. Correct: As Jane was riding in the sports car, the world whizzed by rapidly.
In the incorrect sentence, riding in the sports car is dangling. The reader is left wondering who is riding in the sports car. The writer must tell the reader!
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Incorrect:Walking home at night, the trees looked like spooky aliens. Correct: As Jonas was walking home at night, the trees looked like spooky aliens. Correct: The trees looked like spooky aliens as Jonas was walking home at night.
In the incorrect sentence walking home at night is dangling. Who is walking home at night? Jonas. Note that there are two different ways the dangling modifier can be corrected.
Incorrect: To win the spelling bee, Luis and Gerard should join our team. Correct: If we want to win the spelling bee this year, Luis and Gerard should join our team.
In the incorrect sentence, to win the spelling bee is dangling. Who wants to win the spelling bee? We do!
Tip
The following three steps will help you quickly spot a dangling modifier: 1. Look for an -ing modifier at the beginning of your sentence or another modifying phrase: Painting for three hours at night, the kitchen was finally finished by Maggie. (Painting is the -ing modifier.) 2. Underline the first noun that follows it: Painting for three hours at night, the kitchen was finally finished by Maggie. 3. Make sure the modifier and noun go together logically. If they do not, it is very likely you have a dangling modifier. After identifying the dangling modifier, rewrite the sentence. Painting for three hours at night, Maggie finally finished the kitchen.
Exercise 2
Rewrite the following the sentences onto your own sheet of paper to correct the dangling modifiers.
1. Bent
over
backward,
the
posture
was
very
challenging.
2. Making
discoveries
about
new
creatures,
this
is
an
interesting
time
to
be
a
biologist.
3. Walking
in
the
dark,
the
picture
fell
off
the
wall.
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4. 5. 6. 7. 8. 9. 10.
Playing a guitar in the bedroom, the cat was seen under the bed. Packing for a trip, a cockroach scurried down the hallway. While looking in the mirror, the towel swayed in the breeze. While driving to the veterinarians office, the dog nervously whined. The priceless painting drew large crowds when walking into the museum. Piled up next to the bookshelf, I chose a romance novel. Chewing furiously, the gum fell out of my mouth.
Exercise 3
Rewrite the following paragraph correcting all the misplaced and dangling modifiers. I bought a fresh loaf of bread for my sandwich shopping in the grocery store. Wanting to make a delicious sandwich, the mayonnaise was thickly spread. Placing the cold cuts on the bread, the lettuce was placed on top. I cut the sandwich in half with a knife turning on the radio. Biting into the sandwich, my favorite song blared loudly in my ears. Humming and chewing, my sandwich went down smoothly. Smiling, my sandwich will be made again, but next time I will add cheese. Collaboration Please share with a classmate and compare your answers.
Key Takeaways
Misplaced and dangling modifiers make sentences difficult to understand. Misplaced and dangling modifiers distract the reader. There are several effective ways to identify and correct misplaced and dangling modifiers.
Writing Application
See how creative and humorous you can get by writing ten sentences with misplaced and dangling modifiers. This is a deceptively simple task, but rise to the challenge. Your writing will be stronger for it. Exchange papers with a classmate, and rewrite your classmates sentences to correct any misplaced modifiers.
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Learning Objectives
1. Use
the
skills
you
have
learned
in
the
chapter.
2. Work
collaboratively
with
other
students.
Exercises
1. On your own sheet of paper, identify each sentence as a fragment, a run-on, or correct (no error). Then rewrite the paragraph by correcting the sentence fragments and run-ons. My favorite book is Brave New World by Aldous Huxley, he was born in 1894 and died in 1963 ________. Written in 1931 ________. A futuristic society where humans are born out of test tubes and kept in rigid social classes ________. This may not seem like a humorous premise for a novel, but Huxley uses satire, which is a type of humor that is used to make a serious point ________. The humans in Brave New World learn through sleep teaching, Huxley calls this hypnopedia ________. Everyone is kept happy in the brave new world by taking a pill called soma, there is one character named John the Savage who does not take soma ________. because he comes from a different part of the world where there is no technology, and he believes in natural ways of living ________. It turns out that John has a big problem with the brave new world and how people live there ________. Will he be able to survive living there, well you will have to read the novel to find out ________. Brave New World is considered a classic in English literature, it is one of the best novels I have ever read ________. 2. Each sentence contains an error in subject-verb agreement, irregular verb form, or consistent verb tense. Identify the type of error. Then, on your own sheet of paper, rewrite the sentence correctly. 1. Maria and Ty meets me at the community center for cooking classes on Tuesdays. ________________________________________________________________ 2. Johns ability to laugh at almost anything amaze me. ________________________________________________________________ 3. Samantha and I were walking near the lake when the large, colorful bird appears. ________________________________________________________________ 4. I builded my own telescope using materials I bought at the hardware store. ________________________________________________________________
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to
Scott
McLean
Saylor
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5. My mother freezed the remaining tomatoes from her garden so that she could use them during the winter. ________________________________________________________________ 6. Bernard asked the stranger sitting next to him for the time, and she says it was past midnight. ________________________________________________________________ 7. My mother and brother wears glasses, but my father and sister do not. ________________________________________________________________ 8. We held our noses as the skunk runs away. ________________________________________________________________ 9. Neither Soren nor Andrew are excited about the early morning swim meet. ________________________________________________________________ 10. My hands hurted at the thought of transcribing all those notes. ________________________________________________________________ 11. The police questioned the suspect for hours but she gives them no useful information. ________________________________________________________________ 12. Terry takes short weekend trips because her job as a therapist was very emotionally draining. ________________________________________________________________ 13. She criticize delicately, making sure not to hurt anyones feelings. ________________________________________________________________ 14. Davis winded the old clock and set it atop his nightstand. ________________________________________________________________ 15. Cherie losed four poker hands in a row before realizing that she was playing against professionals.
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to
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McLean
Saylor
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________________________________________________________________ 16. Janis and Joan describes their trip to the Amazon in vivid detail. ________________________________________________________________ 17. You should decides for yourself whether or not to reduce the amount of processed foods in your diet. ________________________________________________________________ 18. The oil rig exploded and spills millions of gallons of oil into the ocean. ________________________________________________________________ 19. The handsome vampire appeared out of nowhere and smiles at the smitten woman. ________________________________________________________________ 20. The batter swinged at the ball several times but never hit it. ________________________________________________________________ 3. Correct the capitalization errors in the following fictional story. Copy the corrected paragraph onto your own sheet of paper. lance worthington signed a Recording Contract with Capitol records on june 15, 2007. Despite selling two million copies of his Debut Album, nothing to lose, lance lost quite a bit as his tax returns from the irs revealed. lance did not think it was fair that the Record Company kept so much of his earnings, so he decided to hire robert bergman, a prominent music Attorney with a Shark-like reputation. bergman represented lance all the way to the supreme court, where lance won the case against capitol records. Lance worthington was instrumental in changing intellectual property rights and long standing Record Company practices. All artists and musicians can thank him for his brave stance against record companies. Lance subsequently formed his own independent record label called worthy records. worthy is now a successful Label based out of chicago, illinois, and its Artists have appeared on well known shows such as The tonight show and Saturday night live. Lance worthington is a model for success in the do-it-yourself World that has become the Music Industry. Collaboration Please share with a classmate and compare your answers.
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4. Complete the following sentences by selecting the correct comparative or superlative adjective or adverb. Then copy the completed sentence onto your own sheet of paper.
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. 6. 7. 8. 9. 10. Denise
has
a
(cheerful)
________
outlook
on
life
than
her
husband.
I
dont
mean
to
brag,
but
I
think
I
am
the
(good)
________
cook
in
my
family.
Lydia
is
the
(thoughtful)
________
person
I
know.
Italy
experienced
the
(bad)
________
heat
wave
in
its
history
last
year.
My
teacher,
Ms.
Beckett,
is
the
(strange)
________
person
I
know,
and
I
like
that.
Dorians
drawing
skills
are
(good)
________
this
semester
than
last.
My
handwriting
is
the
(sloppy)
________
of
all
my
classmates.
Melvins
soccer
team
played
(badly)
________
than
it
did
last
season.
Josies
pen
writes
(smooth)
________
than
mine.
I
felt
(lucky)
________
than
my
sister
because
I
got
in
to
the
college
of
my
choice.
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Chapter
2
Punctuation
Suppose you are presenting a speech. If you speak too quickly, your audience will not be able to understand what you are saying. It is important to stop and take a breath a few times as you read from your notes. But how do you know where to pause, where to change your voice, and where to stop? The answer is easy. You can use the punctuation marks you encounter as a guide for your pacing. Punctuation marks provide visual clues to readers, telling them how they should read the sentence. Some punctuation marks tell you that you are reading a list of items while other marks tell you that a sentence contains two independent ideas. Punctuation marks tell you not only when a sentence ends but also what kind of sentence you have read. This chapter covers different types of punctuation and the meanings they convey.
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2.1 Commas
Learning Objectives
1. Identify
the
uses
of
commas.
2. Correctly
use
commas
in
sentences.
One of the punctuation clues to reading you may encounter is the comma. The comma is a punctuation mark that indicates a pause in a sentence or a separation of things in a list. Commas can be used in a variety of ways. Look at some of the following sentences to see how you might use a comma when writing a sentence.
Introductory word: Personally, I think the practice is helpful. Lists: The barn, the tool shed, and the back porch were destroyed by the wind. Coordinating adjectives: He was tired, hungry, and late. Conjunctions in compound sentences: The bedroom door was closed, so the children knew their mother was asleep. Interrupting words: I knew where it was hidden, of course, but I wanted them to find it themselves. Dates, addresses, greetings, and letters: The letter was postmarked December 8, 1945.
Exercise 1
Look for the introductory word or phrase. On your own sheet of paper, copy the sentence and add a comma to correct the sentence.
1. 2. 3. 4. Suddenly
the
dog
ran
into
the
house.
In
the
blink
of
an
eye
the
kids
were
ready
to
go
to
the
movies.
Confused
he
tried
opening
the
box
from
the
other
end.
Every
year
we
go
camping
in
the
woods.
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5. 6. 7. 8.
Without a doubt green is my favorite color. Hesitating she looked back at the directions before proceeding. Fortunately the sleeping baby did not stir when the doorbell rang. Believe it or not the criminal was able to rob the same bank three times.
Exercise 2
On your own sheet of paper, use what you have learned so far about comma use to add commas to the following sentences.
1. Monday
Tuesday
and
Wednesday
are
all
booked
with
meetings.
2. It
was
a
quiet
uneventful
unproductive
day.
3. Well
need
to
prepare
statements
for
the
Franks
Todds
and
Smiths
before
their
portfolio
reviews
next
week.
4. Michael
Nita
and
Desmond
finished
their
report
last
Tuesday.
5. With
cold
wet
aching
fingers
he
was
able
to
secure
the
sails
before
the
storm.
6. He
wrote
his
name
on
the
board
in
clear
precise
delicate
letters.
He missed class today, and he thinks he will be out tomorrow, too. He says his fever is gone, but he is still very tired.
Exercise 3
On your own sheet of paper, create a compound sentence by combining the two independent clauses with a comma and a coordinating conjunction. 1. The presentation was scheduled for Monday. The weather delayed the presentation for four days. ________________________________________________________________ 2. He wanted a snack before bedtime. He ate some fruit. ________________________________________________________________ 3. The patient is in the next room. I can hardly hear anything. ________________________________________________________________ 4. We could go camping for vacation. We could go to the beach for vacation. ________________________________________________________________ 5. I want to get a better job. I am taking courses at night. ________________________________________________________________ 6. I cannot move forward on this project. I cannot afford to stop on this project. ________________________________________________________________ 7. Patrice wants to stop for lunch. We will take the next exit to look for a restaurant. ________________________________________________________________ 8. Ive got to get this paper done. I have class in ten minutes. ________________________________________________________________ 9. The weather was clear yesterday. We decided to go on a picnic. ________________________________________________________________
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10. I have never dealt with this client before. I know Leonardo has worked with them. Lets ask Leonardo for his help. ________________________________________________________________
Exercise 4
On your own sheet of paper, copy the sentence and insert commas to separate the interrupting words from the rest of the sentence.
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. 6. 7. I
asked
my
neighbors
the
retired
couple
from
Florida
to
bring
in
my
mail.
Without
a
doubt
his
work
has
improved
over
the
last
few
weeks.
Our
professor
Mr.
Alamut
drilled
the
lessons
into
our
heads.
The
meeting
is
at
noon
unfortunately
which
means
I
will
be
late
for
lunch.
We
came
in
time
for
the
last
part
of
dinner
but
most
importantly
we
came
in
time
for
dessert.
All
of
a
sudden
our
network
crashed
and
we
lost
our
files.
Alex
hand
the
wrench
to
me
before
the
pipe
comes
loose
again.
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Exercise 5
On your own sheet of paper, use what you have learned about using commas to edit the following letter.
March 27 2010 Alexa March 14 Taylor Drive Apt. 6 New Castle Maine 90342 Dear Mr. Timmons Thank you for agreeing to meet with me. I am available on Monday the fifth. I can stop by your office at any time. Is your address still 7309 Marcourt Circle #501? Please get back to me at your earliest convenience. Thank you Alexa
Exercise 6
On your own sheet of paper, use what you have learned about comma usage to edit the following paragraphs.
1. My
brother
Nathaniel
is
a
collector
of
many
rare
unusual
things.
He
has
collected
lunch
boxes
limited
edition
books
and
hatpins
at
various
points
of
his
life.
His
current
collection
of
unusual
bottles
has
over
fifty
pieces.
Usually
he
sells
one
collection
before
starting
another.
2. Our
meeting
is
scheduled
for
Thursday
March
20.
In
that
time
we
need
to
gather
all
our
documents
together.
Alice
is
in
charge
of
the
timetables
and
schedules.
Tom
is
in
charge
of
updating
the
guidelines.
I
am
in
charge
of
the
presentation.
To
prepare
for
this
meeting
please
print
out
any
e-mails
faxes
or
documents
you
have
referred
to
when
writing
your
sample.
3. It
was
a
cool
crisp
autumn
day
when
the
group
set
out.
They
needed
to
cover
several
miles
before
they
made
camp
so
they
walked
at
a
brisk
pace.
The
leader
of
the
group
Garth
kept
checking
his
watch
and
their
GPS
location.
Isabelle
Raoul
and
Maggie
took
turns
carrying
the
equipment
while
Carrie
took
notes
about
the
wildlife
they
saw.
As
a
result
no
one
noticed
the
darkening
sky
until
the
first
drops
of
rain
splattered
on
their
faces.
4. Please
have
your
report
complete
and
filed
by
April
15
2010.
In
your
submission
letter
please
include
your
contact
information
the
position
you
are
applying
for
and
two
people
we
can
contact
as
references.
We
will
not
be
available
for
consultation
after
April
10
but
you
may
contact
the
office
if
you
have
any
questions.
Thank
you
HR
Department.
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Key Takeaways
Punctuation marks provide visual cues to readers to tell them how to read a sentence. Punctuation marks convey meaning. Commas indicate a pause or a list in a sentence. A comma should be used after an introductory word to separate this word from the main sentence. A comma comes after each noun in a list. The word and is added before the last noun, which is not followed by a comma. A comma comes after every coordinating adjective except for the last adjective. Commas can be used to separate the two independent clauses in compound sentences as long as a conjunction follows the comma. Commas are used to separate interrupting words from the rest of the sentence. When you write the date, you add a comma between the day and the year. You also add a comma after the year if the sentence continues after the date. When they are used in a sentence, addresses have commas after the street address, and the city. If a sentence continues after the address, a comma comes after the zip code. When you write a letter, you use commas in your greeting at the beginning and in your closing at the end of your letter.
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2.2 Semicolons
Learning Objectives
1. Identify
the
uses
of
semicolons.
2. Properly
use
semicolons
in
sentences.
Another punctuation mark that you will encounter is the semicolon (;). Like most punctuation marks, the semicolon can be used in a variety of ways. The semicolon indicates a break in the flow of a sentence, but functions differently than a period or a comma. When you encounter a semicolon while reading aloud, this represents a good place to pause and take a breath.
Tip
Use semicolons to join two main clauses. Do not use semicolons with coordinating conjunctions such as and, or, and but.
Exercise 1
On your own sheet of paper, correct the following sentences by adding semicolons. If the sentence is correct as it is, write OK.
1. I
did
not
notice
that
you
were
in
the
office
I
was
behind
the
front
desk
all
day.
2. Do
you
want
turkey,
spinach,
and
cheese
roast
beef,
lettuce,
and
cheese
or
ham,
tomato,
and
cheese?
3. Please
close
the
blinds
there
is
a
glare
on
the
screen.
4. Unbelievably,
no
one
was
hurt
in
the
accident.
5. I
cannot
decide
if
I
want
my
room
to
be
green,
brown,
and
purple
green,
black,
and
brown
or
green,
brown,
and
dark
red.
6. Lets
go
for
a
walk
the
air
is
so
refreshing.
Key Takeaways
Use a semicolon to join two independent clauses. Use a semicolon to separate items in a list when those items already require a comma.
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2.3 Colons
Learning Objectives
1. Identify
the
uses
of
colons.
2. Properly
use
colons
in
sentences.
The colon (:) is another punctuation mark used to indicate a full stop. Use a colon to introduce lists, quotes, examples, and explanations. You can also use a colon after the greeting in business letters and memos. Dear Hiring Manager: To: Human Resources From: Deanna Dean
Tip
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Long quotations, which are forty words or more, are called block quotations. Block quotations frequently appear in longer essays and research papers. For more information about block quotations, see Chapter 10 "Writing Preparation".
Tip
Capitalize the first letter following a colon for a proper noun, the beginning of a quote, or the first letter of another independent clause. Do NOT capitalize if the information following the colon is not a complete sentence. Proper noun: We visited three countries: Belize, Honduras, and El Salvador. Beginning of a quote: My mother loved this line from Hamlet: To thine own self be true. Two independent clauses: There are drawbacks to modern technology: My brothers cell phone died and he lost a lot of phone numbers. Incorrect: The recipe is simple: Tomato, basil, and avocado.
Exercise 1
On your own sheet of paper, correct the following sentences by adding semicolons or colons where needed. If the sentence does not need a semicolon or colon, write OK. 1. Dont give up you never know what tomorrow brings. ________________________________________________________________ 2. Our records show that the patient was admitted on March 9, 2010 January 13, 2010 and November 16, 2009. ________________________________________________________________ 3. Allow me to introduce myself I am the greatest ice-carver in the world.
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________________________________________________________________ 4. Where I come from there are three ways to get to the grocery store by car, by bus, and by foot. ________________________________________________________________ 5. Listen closely you will want to remember this speech. ________________________________________________________________ 6. I have lived in Sedona, Arizona Baltimore, Maryland and Knoxville, Tennessee. ________________________________________________________________ 7. The bosss message was clear Lateness would not be tolerated. ________________________________________________________________ 8. Next semester, we will read some more contemporary authors, such as Vonnegut, Miller, and Orwell. ________________________________________________________________ 9. My little sister said what we were all thinking We should have stayed home. ________________________________________________________________ 10. Trust me I have done this before. ________________________________________________________________
Key Takeaways
Use a colon to introduce a list, quote, or example. Use a colon after a greeting in business letters and memos.
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2.4 Quotes
Learning Objectives
1. Identify
the
uses
of
quotes.
2. Correctly
use
quotes
in
sentences.
Quotation marks ( ) set off a group of words from the rest of the text. Use quotation marks to indicate direct quotations of another persons words or to indicate a title. Quotation marks always appear in pairs.
Direct
Quotations
A direct quotation is an exact account of what someone said or wrote. To include a direct quotation in your writing, enclose the words in quotation marks. An indirect quotation is a restatement of what someone said or wrote. An indirect quotation does not use the persons exact words. You do not need to use quotation marks for indirect quotations. Direct quotation: Carly said, Im not ever going back there again. Indirect quotation: Carly said that she would never go back there.
Writing at Work
Most word processsing software is designed to catch errors in grammar, spelling, and punctuation. While this can be a useful tool, it is better to be well acquainted with the rules of punctuation than to leave the thinking to the computer. Properly punctuated writing will convey your meaning clearly. Consider the subtle shifts in meaning in the following sentences:
The client said he thought our manuscript was garbage. The client said, He thought our manuscript was garbage.
The first sentence reads as an indirect quote in which the client does not like the manuscript. But did he actually use the word garbage? (This would be alarming!) Or has the speaker paraphrased (and exaggerated) the clients words? The second sentence reads as a direct quote from the client. But who is he in this sentence? Is it a third party? Word processing software would not catch this because the sentences are not grammatically incorrect. However, the meanings of the sentences are not the same. Understanding punctuation will help you write what you mean, and in this case, could save a lot of confusion around the office!
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Titles
Use quotation marks around titles of short works of writing, such as essays, songs, poems, short stories, and chapters in books. Usually, titles of longer works, such as books, magazines, albums, newspapers, and novels, are italicized. Annabelle Lee is one of my favorite romantic poems. The New York Times has been in publication since 1851.
Writing at Work
In many businesses, the difference between exact wording and a paraphrase is extremely important. For legal purposes, or for the purposes of doing a job correctly, it can be important to know exactly what the client, customer, or supervisor said. Sometimes, important details can be lost when instructions are paraphrased. Use quotes to indicate exact words where needed, and let your coworkers know the source of the quotation (client, customer, peer, etc.).
Exercise 1
Copy the following sentences onto your own sheet of paper, and correct them by adding quotation marks where necessary. If the sentence does not need any quotation marks, write OK. 1. Yasmin said, I dont feel like cooking. Lets go out to eat. ________________________________________________________________ 2. Where should we go? said Russell. ________________________________________________________________ 3. Yasmin said it didnt matter to her. ________________________________________________________________ 4. I know, said Russell, lets go to the Two Roads Juice Bar. ________________________________________________________________ 5. Perfect! said Yasmin. ________________________________________________________________ 6. Did you know that the name of the Juice Bar is a reference to a poem? asked Russell. ________________________________________________________________
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7. I didnt! exclaimed Yasmin. Which poem? ________________________________________________________________ 8. The Road Not Taken, by Robert Frost Russell explained. ________________________________________________________________ 9. Oh! said Yasmin, Is that the one that starts with the line, Two roads diverged in a yellow wood? ________________________________________________________________ 10. Thats the one said Russell. ________________________________________________________________
Key Takeaways
Use quotation marks to enclose direct quotes and titles of short works. Use single quotation marks to enclose a quote within a quote. Do not use any quotation marks for indirect quotations.
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2.5 Apostrophes
Learning Objectives
1. Identify
the
uses
of
apostrophes.
2. Correctly
use
apostrophes
in
sentences.
An apostrophe () is a punctuation mark that is used with a noun to show possession or to indicate where a letter has been left out to form a contraction.
Possession
An apostrophe and the letter s indicate who or what owns something. To show possession with a singular noun, add s. Jens dance routine mesmerized everyone in the room. The dogs leash is hanging on the hook beside the door. Jesss sister is also coming to the party. Notice that singular nouns that end in s still take the apostrophe s (s) ending to show possession. To show possession with a plural noun that ends in s, just add an apostrophe (). If the plural noun does not end in s, add an apostrophe and an s (s). Plural noun that ends ins: The drummers sticks all moved in the same rhythm, like a machine. Plural noun that does not end ins: The peoples votes clearly showed that no one supported the management decision.
Contractions
A contraction is a word that is formed by combining two words. In a contraction, an apostrophe shows where one or more letters have been left out. Contractions are commonly used in informal writing but not in formal writing. I do not like ice cream. I dont like ice cream. Notice how the words do and not have been combined to form the contraction dont. The apostrophe shows where the o in not has been left out.
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We will see you later. Well see you later. Look at the chart for some examples of commonly used contractions.
arent
are
not
cant
cannot
doesnt
does
not
dont
do
not
isnt
hell
Ill
is
not
he
will
I
will
shell she will theyll they will youll you will its lets it is, it has let us
shes she is, she has theres there is, there has whos who is, who has
Tip
Be careful not to confuse its with its. Its is a contraction of the words it and is. Its is a possessive pronoun. Its cold and rainy outside. (It is cold and rainy outside.) The cat was chasing its tail. (Shows that the tail belongs to the cat.) When in doubt, substitute the words it is in a sentence. If sentence still makes sense, use the contraction its.
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Exercise 1
On your own sheet of paper, correct the following sentences by adding apostrophes. If the sentence is correct as it is, write OK.
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. 6. What
a
beautiful
child!
She
has
her
mothers
eyes.
My
brothers
wife
is
one
of
my
best
friends.
I
couldnt
believe
it
when
I
found
out
that
I
got
the
job!
My
supervisors
informed
me
that
I
wouldnt
be
able
to
take
the
days
off.
Each
of
the
students
responses
were
unique.
Wont
you
please
join
me
for
dinner
tonight?
Key Takeaways
Use apostrophes to show possession. Add s to singular nouns and plural nouns that do not end in s. Add to plural nouns that end in s. Use apostrophes in contractions to show where a letter or letters have been left out.
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2.6 Parentheses
Learning Objectives
1. Identify
the
uses
of
parentheses.
2. Properly
use
parentheses
in
sentences.
Parentheses ( ) are punctuation marks that are always used in pairs and contain material that is secondary to the meaning of a sentence. Parentheses must never contain the subject or verb of a sentence. A sentence should make sense if you delete any text within parentheses and the parentheses. Attack of the Killer Potatoes has to be the worst movie I have seen (so far). Your spinach and garlic salad is one of the most delicious (and nutritious) foods I have ever tasted!
Exercise 1
On your own sheet of paper, clarify the following sentences by adding parentheses. If the sentence is clear as it is, write OK.
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. 6. Are
you
going
to
the
seminar
this
weekend
I
am?
I
recommend
that
you
try
the
sushi
bar
unless
you
dont
like
sushi.
I
was
able
to
solve
the
puzzle
after
taking
a
few
moments
to
think
about
it.
Please
complete
the
questionnaire
at
the
end
of
this
letter.
Has
anyone
besides
me
read
the
assignment?
Please
be
sure
to
circle
not
underline
the
correct
answers.
Key Takeaways
Parentheses enclose information that is secondary to the meaning of a sentence. Parentheses are always used in pairs.
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2.7 Dashes
Learning Objectives
1. Identify
the
uses
of
dashes.
2. Correctly
use
dashes
in
sentences.
A dash () is a punctuation mark used to set off information in a sentence for emphasis. You can enclose text between two dashes, or use just one dash. To create a dash in Microsoft Word, type two hyphens together. Do not put a space between dashes and text. Arrive to the interview earlybut not too early. Any of the suitsexcept for the purple oneshould be fine to wear.
Exercise 1
On your own sheet of paper, clarify the following sentences by adding dashes. If the sentence is clear as it is, write OK.
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. Which
hairstyle
do
you
prefer
short
or
long?
I
dont
know
I
hadnt
even
thought
about
that.
Guess
what
I
got
the
job!
I
will
be
happy
to
work
over
the
weekend
if
I
can
have
Monday
off.
You
have
all
the
qualities
that
we
are
looking
for
in
a
candidate
intelligence,
dedication,
and
a
strong
work
ethic.
Key Takeaways
Dashes indicate a pause in text. Dashes set off information in a sentence to show emphasis.
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2.8 Hyphens
Learning Objectives
1. Identify
the
uses
of
hyphens.
2. Properly
use
hyphens
in
sentences.
A hyphen (-) looks similar to a dash but is shorter and used in different ways.
Key Takeaways
Hyphens join words that work as one adjective. Hyphens break words across two lines of text.
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Learning Objectives
1. Use
the
skills
you
have
learned
in
this
chapter.
2. Work
collaboratively
with
other
students.
Exercises
1. Each sentence contains a punctuation error. On your own sheet of paper, correct each sentence by adding the correct punctuation. The headings will let you know which type of punctuation mistakes to look for. If the sentence does not need corrections, write OK. Commas
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. 6. The
wedding
will
be
July
13
2012.
The
date
by
the
way
is
the
anniversary
of
the
day
that
they
met.
The
groom
the
bride
and
their
parents
are
all
planning
the
event.
Actually
all
of
their
friends
and
relatives
are
involved
in
the
planning.
The
bride
is
a
baker
so
she
will
be
making
the
wedding
cake
herself.
The
photography
the
catering
and
the
music
will
all
be
friends.
Semicolons
7. Some
people
spend
a
lot
of
money
hiring
people
for
wedding
services
they
are
lucky
to
have
such
talented
friends.
8. The
flowers
will
be
either
roses,
daisies,
and
snapdragons
orchids,
tulips,
and
irises
or
peonies
and
lilies.
Colons
9. There
will
be
three
colors
for
the
wedding:
white,
black,
and
gold.
10. Theyve
finally
narrowed
down
the
dinner
choices
salmon,
steak,
and
a
vegan
stew.
11. Their
wedding
invitations
contained
the
following
quote
from
the
Roman
poet
Ovid
If
you
want
to
be
loved,
be
lovable.
Quotes
12. The
invitations
said
that
the
wedding
would
be
outdoor
casual.
13. What
exactly
does
outdoor
casual
mean?
I
asked
the
bride.
14. She
told
me
to
dress
comfortably
and
wear
shoes
that
do
not
sink
into
the
ground.
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Apostrophes
15. On
the
day
of
the
wedding,
were
going
to
rent
a
limo.
16. My
brothers
wife
will
make
the
arrangements.
17. Shes
a
great
party
organizer.
Parentheses
18. On
the
day
of
the
wedding,
the
bride
looked
more
beautiful
than
ever
and
Ive
known
her
for
fifteen
years.
19. All
the
details
were
perfect
in
my
opinion.
Dashes
20. Everyone
danced
at
the
wedding
except
my
mother.
21. It
was
to
be
expected
she
just
had
hip
surgery.
Hyphens
22. The
groom
danced
with
his
new
mother
in
law.
23. It
was
a
spectacular,
fun
filled
day
for
everyone.
2. Each sentence contains a punctuation error. On your own sheet of paper, correct each sentence by adding commas, semicolons, colons, apostrophes, parentheses, hyphens, and dashes as needed.
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. 6. 7. 8. 9. 10. My
mothers
garden
is
full
of
beautiful
flowers.
She
has
carefully
planted
several
species
of
roses
peonies
and
irises.
She
is
especially
proud
of
her
thirty
year
old
Japanese
maple
tree.
I
am
especially
proud
of
the
sunflowers
I
planted
them!
You
should
see
the
birds
that
are
attracted
to
the
garden
hummingbirds,
finches,
robins,
and
sparrows.
I
like
to
watch
the
hummingbirds
they
are
my
favorite.
We
spend
a
lot
of
time
in
the
garden
planting
weeding
and
just
enjoying
the
view.
Each
flower
has
its
own
personality
some
seem
shy
and
others
seem
bold.
Arent
gardens
wonderful?
You
should
come
visit
sometime
Do
you
like
to
garden?
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3. The following paragraph contains errors in punctuation. On your own sheet of paper, correct the paragraph by adding commas, semicolons, colons, apostrophes, parentheses, hyphens, and dashes as needed. There may be more than one way to correct the paragraph. May 18 2011 Dear Hiring Manager Allow me to introduce myself in my previous position I was known as the King of Sales. I hope to earn the same title within your company. My name is Frances Fortune. I have thirteen years experience in corporate sales and account management. I have been the top rated seller for two years in a row in my previous position. Clients recognize me as dependable honest and resourceful. I have a strong work ethic and great interpersonal skills. I excel at goal setting and time management. However you dont have to take my word for it I will be happy to provide personal and professional references upon request. Youre welcome to contact my previous employer to inquire about my work performance. I look forward to speaking with you in person in the near future. Sincerely Frances Fortune 4. Read the following paragraph. Edit by adding apostrophes, parentheses, dashes, and hyphens where needed. There may be more than one correct way to edit some sentences. Consider how the punctuation you choose affects the meaning of the sentence. I was a little nervous about the interview it was my first in years. I had to borrow my roommates suit, but it fit me well. A few days ago, I started to research the companys history and mission. I felt like I was well qualified for the job. When I arrived, I shook hands with the interviewer she had a strong grip! It nearly caught me off guard, but I did my best to smile and relax. I was a little distracted by all the books in the womans office she must have had a hundred books in that tiny room. However, I think my responses to her questions were good. Ill send her an e-mail to thank her for her time. Hopefully shell call me soon about the position. Collaboration Please share with a classmate and compare your answers.
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Writing Application
Review some of the recent or current assignments you have completed for school or work. Look through recent business and personal e-mails. Does your work contain any errors in punctuation? Correct the errors and compile a list of the types of errors you are correcting (commas, semicolons, colons, apostrophes, quotation marks, parentheses, dashes, hyphens, etc.). Use this list as a reference for the types of punctuation marks that you should review and practice. If you do not find many errorsgreat! You can still look for ways to add interest to your writing by using dashes, semicolons, colons, and parentheses to create a variety of sentence lengths and structures.
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Learning Objectives
1. Identify
commonly
confused
words.
2. Use
strategies
to
avoid
commonly
confused
words.
Just as a mason uses bricks to build sturdy homes, writers use words to build successful documents. Consider the construction of a building. Builders need to use tough, reliable materials to build a solid and structurally sound skyscraper. From the foundation to the roof and every floor in between, every part is necessary. Writers need to use strong, meaningful words from the first sentence to the last and in every sentence in between. You already know many words that you use everyday as part of your writing and speaking vocabulary. You probably also know that certain words fit better in certain situations. Letters, emails, and even quickly jotted grocery lists require the proper selection of vocabulary. Imagine you are writing a grocery list to purchase the ingredients for a recipe but accidentally write down cilantro when the recipe calls for parsley. Even though cilantro and parsley look remarkably alike, each produces a very different effect in food. This seemingly small error could radically alter the flavor of your dish! Having a solid everyday vocabulary will help you while writing, but learning new words and avoiding common word errors will make a real impression on your readers. Experienced writers know that deliberate, careful word selection and usage can lead to more polished, more meaningful work. This chapter covers word choice and vocabulary-building strategies that will improve your writing.
know. To read more about adjectives, verbs, and other parts of speech see Chapter 1 "Writing Basics: What Makes a Good Sentence?".
A (article). Used before a word that begins with a consonant. a key, a mouse, a screen
An (article). Used before a word that begins with a vowel. an airplane, an ocean, an igloo
And (conjunction). Connects two or more words together. peanut butter and jelly, pen and pencil, jump and shout
Accept, Except
Accept (verb). Means to take or agree to something offered. They accepted our proposal for the conference.
Except (conjunction). Means only or but. We could fly there except the tickets cost too much.
Affect, Effect
Affect (verb). Means to create a change. Hurricane winds affect the amount of rainfall.
Effect (noun). Means an outcome or result. The heavy rains will have an effect on the crop growth.
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Are, Our
Are (verb). A conjugated form of the verb to be. My cousins are all tall and blonde.
Our (pronoun). Indicates possession, usually follows the pronoun we. We will bring our cameras to take pictures.
By, Buy
Buy (verb). Means to purchase. I will buy new glasses after the doctors appointment.
Its, Its
Its (pronoun). A form of it that shows possession. The butterfly flapped its wings.
Its (contraction). Joins the words it and is. Its the most beautiful butterfly I have ever seen.
Know, No
Know (verb). Means to understand or possess knowledge. I know the male peacock sports the brilliant feathers.
No. Used to make a negative. I have no time to visit the zoo this weekend.
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Loose, Lose
Loose (adjective). Describes something that is not tight or is detached. Without a belt, her pants are loose on her waist.
Lose (verb). Means to forget, to give up, or to fail to earn something. She will lose even more weight after finishing the marathon training.
Of, Have
Of (preposition). Means from or about. I studied maps of the city to know where to rent a new apartment.
Have (verb). Means to possess something. I have many friends to help me move.
Have (linking verb). Used to connect verbs. I should have helped her with that heavy box.
Quite (adverb). Means really or truly. My work will require quite a lot of concentration.
Quiet (adjective). Means not loud. I need a quiet room to complete the assignments.
Quit (verb). Means to stop or to end. I will quit when I am hungry for dinner.
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Right, Write
Right (adjective). Means proper or correct. When bowling, she practices the right form.
Right (adjective). Also means the opposite of left. The ball curved to the right and hit the last pin.
Write (verb). Means to communicate on paper. After the team members bowl, I will write down their scores.
Set, Sit
Set (verb). Means to put an item down. She set the mug on the saucer.
Set (noun). Means a group of similar objects. All the mugs and saucers belonged in a set.
Sit (verb). Means to lower oneself down on a chair or another place Ill sit on the sofa while she brews the tea.
Suppose, Supposed
Suppose (verb). Means to think or to consider I suppose I will bake the bread, because no one else has the recipe.
Suppose (verb). Means to suggest. Suppose we all split the cost of the dinner.
Supposed (verb). The past tense form of the verb suppose, meaning required or allowed. She was supposed to create the menu.
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Than, Then
Than (conjunction). Used to connect two or more items when comparing Registered nurses require less schooling than doctors.
Then (adverb). Means next or at a specific time. Doctors first complete medical school and then obtain a residency.
Their (pronoun). A form of they that shows possession. The dog walker feeds their dogs everyday at two oclock.
Theyre (contraction). Joins the words they and are. Theyre the sweetest dogs in the neighborhood.
There (adverb). Indicates a particular place. The dogs bowls are over there, next to the pantry.
There (pronoun). Indicates the presence of something There are more treats if the dogs behave.
Two. The number after one. It describes how many. Two clowns squirted the elephants with water.
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Use (verb). Means to apply for some purpose. We use a weed whacker to trim the hedges.
Used. The past tense form of the verb to use He used the lawnmower last night before it rained.
Used to. Indicates something done in the past but not in the present He used to hire a team to landscape, but now he landscapes alone.
Whos, Whose
Whos (contraction). Joins the words who and either is or has. Whos the new student? Whos met him?
Whose (pronoun). A form of who that shows possession. Whose schedule allows them to take the new student on a campus tour?
Your, Youre
Your (pronoun). A form of you that shows possession. Your book bag is unzipped.
Youre (contraction). Joins the words you and are. Youre the girl with the unzipped book bag.
The English language contains so many words; no one can say for certain how many words exist. In fact, many words in English are borrowed from other languages. Many words have multiple meanings and forms, further expanding the immeasurable number of English words. Although the list of commonly confused words serves as a helpful guide, even these words may have more meanings than shown here. When in doubt, consult an expert: the dictionary!
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Exercise 1
Complete the following sentences by selecting the correct word.
1. My
little
cousin
turns
________(to,
too,
two)
years
old
tomorrow.
2. The
next-door
neighbors
dog
is
________(quite,
quiet,
quit)
loud.
He
barks
constantly
throughout
the
night.
3. ________(Your,
Youre)
mother
called
this
morning
to
talk
about
the
party.
4. I
would
rather
eat
a
slice
of
chocolate
cake
________(than,
then)
eat
a
chocolate
muffin.
5. Before
the
meeting,
he
drank
a
cup
of
coffee
and
________(than,
then)
brushed
his
teeth.
6. Do
you
have
any
________(loose,
lose)
change
to
pay
the
parking
meter?
7. Father
must
________(have,
of)
left
his
briefcase
at
the
office.
8. Before
playing
ice
hockey,
I
was
________(suppose,
supposed)
to
read
the
contract,
but
I
only
skimmed
it
and
signed
my
name
quickly,
which
may
________(affect,
effect)
my
understanding
of
the
rules.
9. Tonight
she
will
________(set,
sit)
down
and
________(right,
write)
a
cover
letter
to
accompany
her
rsum
and
job
application.
10. It
must
be
fall,
because
the
leaves
________(are,
our)
changing,
and
________(its,
its)
getting
darker
earlier.
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Tip
Figure 3.1 A Commonly Misused Word on a Public Sign
Commonly confused words appear in many locations, not just at work or at school. Be on the lookout for misused words wherever you find yourself throughout the day. Make a mental note of the error and remember its correction for your own pieces of writing.
Writing at Work
All employers value effective communication. From an application to an interview to the first month on the job, employers pay attention to your vocabulary. You do not need a large vocabulary to succeed, but you do need to be able to express yourself clearly and avoid commonly misused words. When giving an important presentation on the effect of inflation on profit margins, you must know the difference between effect and affect and choose the correct word. When writing an email to confirm deliveries, you must know if the shipment will arrive in to days, too days, or two days. Confusion may arise if you choose the wrong word.
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Consistently using the proper words will improve your communication and make a positive impression on your boss and colleagues.
Exercise 2
The following paragraph contains eleven errors. Find each misused word and correct it by adding the proper word. The original United States Declaration of Independence sets in a case at the Rotunda for the Charters of Freedom as part of the National Archives in Washington, DC. Since 1952, over one million visitors each year of passed through the Rotunda too snap a photograph to capture theyre experience. Although signs state, No Flash Photography, forgetful tourists leave the flash on, an a bright light flickers for just a millisecond. This millisecond of light may not seem like enough to effect the precious document, but supposed how much light could be generated when all those milliseconds are added up. According to the National Archives administrators, its enough to significantly damage the historic document. So, now, the signs display quit a different message: No Photography. Visitors continue to travel to see the Declaration that began are country, but know longer can personal pictures serve as mementos. The administrators compromise, they say, is a visit to the gift shop for a preprinted photograph. Collaboration Please share with a classmate and compare your answers.
Key Takeaways
In order to write accurately, it is important for writers to be aware of commonly confused words. Although commonly confused words may look alike or sound alike, their meanings are very different. Consulting the dictionary is one way to make sure you are using the correct word in your writing. You may also keep a list of commonly confused words nearby when you write or study the chart in this book. Choosing the proper words leaves a positive impression on your readers.
Writing Application
Review the latest assignment you completed for school or for work. Does it contain any commonly confused words? Circle each example and use the circled words to begin your own checklist of commonly confused words. Continue to add to your checklist each time you complete an assignment and find a misused word.
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3.2 Spelling
Learning Objectives
1. Identify
common
spelling
rules.
2. Identify
commonly
misused
homonyms.
3. Identify
commonly
misspelled
words.
One essential aspect of good writing is accurate spelling. With computer spell checkers, spelling may seem simple, but these programs fail to catch every error. Spell checkers identify some errors, but writers still have to consider the flagged words and suggested replacements. Writers are still responsible for the errors that remain. For example, if the spell checker highlights a word that is misspelled and gives you a list of alternative words, you may choose a word that you never intended even though it is spelled correctly. This can change the meaning of your sentence. It can also confuse readers, making them lose interest. Computer spell checkers are useful editing tools, but they can never replace human knowledge of spelling rules, homonyms, and commonly misspelled words.
When words end in a consonant plus y, drop the y and add an i before adding another ending.
When words end in a vowel plus y, keep the y and add the ending.
delay + ed = delayed
Memorize the following exceptions to this rule: day, lay, say, pay = daily, laid, said, paid
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When adding an ending that begins with a vowel, such as -able, -ence, -ing, or -ity, drop the last e in a word.
When adding an ending that begins with a consonant, such as -less, -ment, or -ly, keep the last e in a word.
For many words ending in a consonant and an o, add -s when using the plural form.
Exercise 1
Identify and correct the nine misspelled words in the following paragraph. Sherman J. Alexie Jr. was born in October 1966. He is a Spokane/Coeur dAlene Indian and an American writer, poet, and filmmaker. Alexie was born with hydrocephalus, or water on the brain. This condition led doctors to predict that he would likly suffer long-term brain damage and possibly mental retardation. Although Alexie survived with no mental disabilitys, he did suffer other serious side effects from his condition that plagud him throughout his childhood. Amazingly, Alexie learned to read by the age of three, and by age five he had read novels such as John Steinbecks The Grapes of Wrath. Raised on an Indian reservation, Alexie often felt aleinated from his peers due to his avid love for reading and also from the long-term effects of his illness, which often kept him from socializeing with his peers on the reservation. The reading skills he displaid at such a young age foreshadowed what he would later become. Today Alexie is a prolific and successful writer with several story anthologeis to his credit, noteably The Lone Ranger and Tonto Fistfight in Heaven and The Toughest Indian in the World. Most of his fiction is about contemporary Native Americans who are influenced by pop culture and pow wows and everything in between. His work is sometimes funny but always thoughtful and full of richness and depth. Alexie also writes poetry, novels, and screenplays. His latest collection of storys is called War Dances, which came out in 2009. Collaboration
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Tip
Eight Tips to Improve Spelling Skills
1. Read
the
words
in
your
assignment
carefully,
and
avoid
skimming
over
the
page.
Focusing
on
your
written
assignment
word
by
word
will
help
you
pay
close
attention
to
each
words
spelling.
Skimming
quickly,
you
may
overlook
misspelled
words.
2. Use
mnemonic
devices
to
remember
the
correct
spelling
of
words.
Mnemonic
devices,
or
memory
techniques
and
learning
aids,
include
inventive
sayings
or
practices
that
help
you
remember.
For
example,
the
saying
It
is
important
to
be
a
beautiful
person
inside
and
out
may
help
you
remember
that
beautiful
begins
with
be
a.
The
practice
of
pronouncing
the
word
Wednesday
Wed-nes-day
may
help
you
remember
how
to
spell
the
word
correctly.
3. Use
a
dictionary.
Many
professional
writers
rely
on
the
dictionaryeither
in
print
or
online.
If
you
find
it
difficult
to
use
a
regular
dictionary,
ask
your
instructor
to
help
you
find
a
poor
spellers
dictionary.
4. Use
your
computers
spell
checker.
The
spell
checker
will
not
solve
all
your
spelling
problems,
but
it
is
a
useful
tool.
See
the
introduction
to
this
section
for
cautions
about
spell
checkers.
5. Keep
a
list
of
frequently
misspelled
words.
You
will
often
misspell
the
same
words
again
and
again,
but
do
not
let
this
discourage
you.
All
writers
struggle
with
the
spellings
of
certain
words;
they
become
aware
of
their
spelling
weaknesses
and
work
to
improve.
Be
aware
of
which
words
you
commonly
misspell,
and
you
can
add
them
to
a
list
to
learn
to
spell
them
correctly.
6. Look
over
corrected
papers
for
misspelled
words.
Add
these
words
to
your
list
and
practice
writing
each
word
four
to
five
times
each.
Writing
teachers
will
especially
notice
which
words
you
frequently
misspell,
and
it
will
help
you
excel
in
your
classes
if
they
see
your
spelling
improve.
7. Test
yourself
with
flashcards.
Sometimes
the
old-fashioned
methods
are
best,
and
for
spelling,
this
tried
and
true
technique
has
worked
for
many
students.
You
can
work
with
a
peer
or
alone.
8. Review
the
common
spelling
rules
explained
in
this
chapter.
Take
the
necessary
time
to
master
the
material;
you
may
return
to
the
rules
in
this
chapter
again
and
again,
as
needed.
Tip
Remember to focus on spelling during the editing and revising step of the writing process. Start with the big ideas such as organizing your piece of writing and developing effective paragraphs, and then work your way down toward the smallerbut equally importantdetails like spelling and punctuation. To read more about the writing process and editing and revising, see Chapter 7 "The Writing Process: How Do I Begin?".
Homonyms
Homonyms are words that sound like one another but have different meanings.
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Principle (noun). A fundamental concept that is accepted as true. The principle of human equality is an important foundation for all nations.
Principal (noun). The original amount of debt on which interest is calculated. The payment plan allows me to pay back only the principal amount, not any compounded interest.
Principal (noun). A person who is the main authority of a school. The principal held a conference for both parents and teachers.
Where (adverb). The place in which something happens. Where is the restaurant?
Wear (verb). To carry or have on the body. I will wear my hiking shoes when go on a climb tomorrow morning.
Ware (noun). Articles of merchandise or manufacture (usually, wares). When I return from shopping, I will show you my wares.
Lead, Led
Lead (noun). A type of metal used in pipes and batteries. The lead pipes in my homes are old and need to be replaced.
Led (verb). The past tense of the verb lead. After the garden, she led the patrons through the museum.
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Which, Witch
Witch (noun). A person who practices sorcery or who has supernatural powers. She thinks she is a witch, but she does not seem to have any powers.
Peace, Piece
Peace (noun). A state of tranquility or quiet. For once, there was peace between the argumentative brothers.
Piece (noun). A part of a whole. I would like a large piece of cake, thank you.
Passed, Past
Passed (verb). To go away or move. He passed the slower cars on the road using the left lane.
Past (noun). Having existed or taken place in a period before the present. The argument happened in the past, so there is no use in dwelling on it.
Lessen, Lesson
Lessen (verb). To reduce in number, size, or degree. My dentist gave me medicine to lessen the pain of my aching tooth.
Lesson (noun). A reading or exercise to be studied by a student. Todays lesson was about mortgage interest rates.
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Patience, Patients
Patience (noun). The capacity of being patient (waiting for a period of time or enduring pains and trials calmly). The novice teachers patience with the unruly class was astounding.
Patients (plural noun). Individuals under medical care. The patients were tired of eating the hospital food, and they could not wait for a homecooked meal.
Sees (verb). To perceive with the eye. He sees a whale through his binoculars.
Seas (plural noun). The plural of sea, a great body of salt water. The tidal fluctuation of the oceans and seas are influenced by the moon.
Seize (verb). To possess or take by force. The king plans to seize all the peasants land.
Threw, Through
Threw (verb). The past tense of throw. She threw the football with perfect form.
Through (preposition). A word that indicates movement. She walked through the door and out of his life.
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Complete the following sentences by selecting the correct homonym.
1. Do
you
agree
with
the
underlying
________(principle,
principal)
that
ensures
copyrights
are
protected
in
the
digital
age?
2. I
like
to
________(where,
wear,
ware)
unique
clothing
from
thrift
stores
that
do
not
have
company
logos
on
them.
3. Marjorie
felt
like
she
was
being
________(led,
lead)
on
a
wild
goose
chase,
and
she
did
not
like
it
one
bit.
4. Serina
described
________(witch,
which)
house
was
hers,
but
now
that
I
am
here,
they
all
look
the
same.
5. Seeing
his
friend
without
a
lunch,
Miguel
gave
her
a
________(peace,
piece)
of
his
apple.
6. Do
you
think
that
it
is
healthy
for
mother
to
talk
about
the
________(passed,
past)
all
the
time?
7. Eating
healthier
foods
will
________(lessen,
lesson)
the
risk
of
heart
disease.
8. I
know
it
sounds
clich,
but
my
father
had
the
________(patients,
patience)
of
a
saint.
9. Daniela
________(sees,
seas,
seize)
possibilities
in
the
bleakest
situations,
and
that
it
is
why
she
is
successful.
10. Everyone
goes
________(through,
threw)
hardships
in
life
regardless
of
who
they
are.
Tip
Use the following two tricks to help you master these troublesome words:
1. Copy
each
word
a
few
times
and
underline
the
problem
area.
2. Copy
the
words
onto
flash
cards
and
have
a
friend
test
you.
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embarrass jewelry
prejudice taught
consciencegove rnment meant crowded grammar definite height necessary nervous occasion
describe illegal
ridiculous written
Exercise 3
Identify and correct the ten commonly misspelled words in the following paragraph. Brooklyn is one of the five boroughs that make up New York City. It is located on the eastern shore of Long Island directly accross the East River from the island of Manhattan. Its beginings stretch back to the sixteenth century when it was founded by the Dutch who originally called it Breuckelen. Immedietely after the Dutch settled Brooklyn, it came under British rule. However, neither the Dutch nor the British were Brooklyns first inhabitants. When European settlers first arrived, Brooklyn was largely inhabited by the Lenapi, a collective name for several organized bands of Native American people who settled a large area of land that extended from upstate New York through the entire state of New Jersey. They are sometimes referred to as the Delaware Indians. Over time, the Lenapi succumbed to European diseases or conflicts between
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European settlers or other Native American enemies. Finalley they were pushed out of Brooklyn completely by the British. In 1776, Brooklyn was the site of the first importent battle of the American Revolution known as the Battle of Brooklyn. The colonists lost this battle, which was led by George Washington, but over the next two years they would win the war, kicking the British out of the colonies once and for all. By the end of the nineteenth century, Brooklyn grew to be a city in its own right. The completion of the Brooklyn Bridge was an ocasion for celebration; transportation and commerce between Brooklyn and Manhattan now became much easier. Eventually, in 1898, Brooklyn lost its seperate identity as an independent city and became one of five boroughs of New York City. However, in some peoples opinien, the intagration into New York City should have never happened; they though Brooklyn should have remained an independent city. Collaboration Please share with a classmate and compare your answers.
Writing at Work
In todays job market, writing e-mails has become a means by which many people find employment. E-mails to prospective employers require thoughtful word choice, accurate spelling, and perfect punctuation. Employers inboxes are inundated with countless e-mails daily. If even the subject line of an e-mail contains a spelling error, it will likely be overlooked and someone elses e-mail will take priority. The best thing to do after you proofread an e-mail to an employer and run the spell checker is to have an additional set of eyes go over it with you; one of your teachers may be able to read the email and give you suggestions for improvement. Most colleges and universities have writing centers, which may also be able to assist you.
Key Takeaways
Accurate, error-free spelling enhances your credibility with the reader. Mastering the rules of spelling may help you become a better speller. Knowing the commonly misused homonyms may prevent spelling errors. Studying the list of commonly misspelled words in this chapter, or studying a list of your own, is one way to improve your spelling skills.
Writing Application
What is your definition of a successful person? Is it based on a persons profession or is it based on his or her character? Perhaps success means a combination of both. In one paragraph, describe in detail what you think makes a person successful. When you are finished, proofread
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Learning Objectives
1. Identify
the
reasons
why
using
a
dictionary
and
thesaurus
is
important
when
writing.
2. Identify
how
to
use
proper
connotations.
3. Identify
how
to
avoid
using
slang,
clichs,
and
overly
general
words
in
your
writing.
Effective writing involves making conscious choices with words. When you prepare to sit down to write your first draft, you likely have already completed some freewriting exercises, chosen your topic, developed your thesis statement, written an outline, and even selected your sources. When it is time to write your first draft, start to consider which words to use to best convey your ideas to the reader. Some writers are picky about word choice as they start drafting. They may practice some specific strategies, such as using a dictionary and thesaurus, using words and phrases with proper connotations, and avoiding slang, clichs, and overly general words. Once you understand these tricks of the trade, you can move ahead confidently in writing your assignment. Remember, the skill and accuracy of your word choice is a major factor in developing your writing style. Precise selection of your words will help you be more clearly understoodin both writing and speaking.
Spelling. How the word and its different forms are spelled. Pronunciation. How to say the word. Part of speech. The function of the word. Definition. The meaning of the word. Synonyms. Words that have similar meanings. Etymology. The history of the word.
Look at the following sample dictionary entry and see which of the preceeding information you can identify: myth, mith, n. [Gr. mythos, a word, a fable, a legend.] A fable or legend embodying the convictions of a people as to their gods or other divine beings, their own beginnings and early
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history and the heroes connected with it, or the origin of the world; any invented story; something or someone having no existence in fact.myth ic, myth i cal Like a dictionary, a thesaurus is another indispensable writing tool. A thesaurus gives you a list of synonyms, words that have the same (or very close to the same) meaning as another word. It also lists antonyms, words with the opposite meaning of the word. A thesaurus will help you when you are looking for the perfect word with just the right meaning to convey your ideas. It will also help you learn more words and use the ones you already know more correctly. precociousadj, Shes such a precocious little girl!: uncommonly smart, mature, advanced, smart, bright, brilliant, gifted, quick, clever, apt. Ant. slow, backward, stupid.
Denotation: Exceptionally thin and slight or meager in body or size. Word used in a sentence: Although he was a premature baby and a scrawny child, Martin has developed into a strong man. Connotation: (Negative) In this sentence the word scrawny may have a negative connotation in the readers minds. They might find it to mean a weakness or a personal flaw; however, the word fits into the sentence appropriately.
Skinny
Denotation: Lacking sufficient flesh, very thin. Word used in a sentence: Skinny jeans have become very fashionable in the past couple of years. Connotation: (Positive) Based on cultural and personal impressions of what it means to be skinny, the reader may have positive connotations of the word skinny.
Lean
Denotation: Lacking or deficient in flesh; containing little or no fat. Word used in a sentence: My brother has a lean figure, whereas I have a more muscular build. Connotation: (Neutral) In this sentence, lean has a neutral connotation. It does not call to mind an overly skinny person like the word scrawny, nor does imply the positive cultural impressions of the word skinny. It is merely a neutral descriptive word.
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Notice that all the words have a very similar denotation; however, the connotations of each word differ.
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Exercise 1
In each of the following items, you will find words with similar denotations. Identify the words connotations as positive, negative, or neutral by writing the word in the appropriate box. Copy the chart onto your own piece of paper.
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. 6. 7. 8. 9. 10. curious,
nosy,
interested
lazy,
relaxed,
slow
courageous,
foolhardy,
assured
new,
newfangled,
modern
mansion,
shack,
residence
spinster,
unmarried
woman,
career
woman
giggle,
laugh,
cackle
boring,
routine,
prosaic
noted,
notorious,
famous
assertive,
confident,
pushy
Positive
Negative
Neutral
Avoiding
Slang
Slang describes informal words that are considered nonstandard English. Slang often changes with passing fads and may be used by or familiar to only a specific group of people. Most people use slang when they speak and in personal correspondences, such as e-mails, text messages, and instant messages. Slang is appropriate between friends in an informal context but should be avoided in formal academic writing.
Writing at Work
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powerful effect. Slang in professional e-mails or during meetings may convey the wrong message or even mistakenly offend someone.
Exercise 2
Edit the following paragraph by replacing the slang words and phrases with more formal language. Rewrite the paragraph on your own sheet of paper. I felt like such an airhead when I got up to give my speech. As I walked toward the podium, I banged my knee on a chair. Man, I felt like such a klutz. On top of that, I kept saying like and um, and I could not stop fidgeting. I was so stressed out about being up there. I feel like Ive been practicing this speech 24/7, and I still bombed. It was ten minutes of me going off about how we sometimes have to do things we dont enjoy doing. Wow, did I ever prove my point. My speech was so bad Im surprised that people didnt boo. My teacher said not to sweat it, though. Everyone gets nervous his or her first time speaking in public, and she said, with time, I would become a whiz at this speech giving stuff. I wonder if I have the guts to do it again. Collaboration Please share with a classmate and compare your answers.
Avoiding
Clichs
Clichs are descriptive expressions that have lost their effectiveness because they are overused. Writing that uses clichs often suffers from a lack of originality and insight. Avoiding clichs in formal writing will help you write in original and fresh ways.
Clichd: Whenever my brother and I get into an argument, he always says something that makes my blood boil. Plain: Whenever my brother and I get into an argument, he always says something that makes me really angry. Original: Whenever my brother and I get into an argument, he always says something that makes me want to go to the gym and punch the bag for a few hours.
Tip
Think about all the clich phrases that you hear in popular music or in everyday conversation. What would happen if these clichs were transformed into something unique?
Exercise 3
On your own sheet of paper, revise the following sentences by replacing the clichs with fresh, original descriptions.
1. She
is
writing
a
memoir
in
which
she
will
air
her
familys
dirty
laundry.
2. Fran
had
an
ax
to
grind
with
Benny,
and
she
planned
to
confront
him
that
night
at
the
party.
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3. 4. 5. 6. 7. 8. 9. 10.
Mr. Muller was at his wits end with the rowdy class of seventh graders. The bottom line is that Greg was fired because he missed too many days of work. Sometimes it is hard to make ends meet with just one paycheck. My brain is fried from pulling an all-nighter. Maria left the dishes in the sink all week to give Jeff a taste of his own medicine. While they were at the carnival Janice exclaimed, Time sure does fly when you are having fun! Jeremy became tongue-tied after the interviewer asked him where he saw himself in five years. Jordan was dressed to the nines that night.
General: My new puppy is cute. Specific: My new puppy is a ball of white fuzz with the biggest black eyes I have ever seen. General: My teacher told us that plagiarism is bad. Specific: My teacher, Ms. Atwater, created a presentation detailing exactly how plagiarism is illegal and unethical.
Exercise 4
Revise the following sentences by replacing the overly general words with more precise and attractive language. Write the new sentences on your own sheet of paper.
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. 6. 7. 8. 9. 10. Reilly
got
into
her
car
and
drove
off.
I
would
like
to
travel
to
outer
space
because
it
would
be
amazing.
Jane
came
home
after
a
bad
day
at
the
office.
I
thought
Milos
essay
was
fascinating.
The
dog
walked
up
the
street.
The
coal
miners
were
tired
after
a
long
day.
The
tropical
fish
are
pretty.
I
sweat
a
lot
after
running.
The
goalie
blocked
the
shot.
I
enjoyed
my
Mexican
meal.
Key Takeaways
Using a dictionary and thesaurus as you write will improve your writing by improving your word choice. Connotations of words may be positive, neutral, or negative. Slang, clichs, and overly general words should be avoided in academic writing.
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Review a piece of writing that you have completed for school. Circle any sentences with slang, clichs, or overly general words and rewrite them using stronger language.
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Learning Objectives
1. Identify
the
meanings
of
common
prefixes.
2. Become
familiar
with
common
suffix
rules.
The English language contains an enormous and ever-growing number of words. Enhancing your vocabulary by learning new words can seem overwhelming, but if you know the common prefixes and suffixes of English, you will understand many more words. Mastering common prefixes and suffixes is like learning a code. Once you crack the code, you can not only spell words more correctly but also recognize and perhaps even define unfamiliar words.
Prefixes
A prefix is a word part added to the beginning of a word to create a new meaning. Study the common prefixes in Table 3.2 "Common Prefixes".
Tip
The main rule to remember when adding a prefix to a word is not to add letters or leave out any letters. See Table 3.2 "Common Prefixes" for examples of this rule. Table 3.2 Common Prefixes
Prefix
dis
Meaning
Example
not, opposite of dis + satisfied = dissatisfied mis + spell = misspell un + acceptable = unacceptable re + election = reelection inter + related = interrelated pre + pay = prepay non + sense = nonsense super + script = superscript
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Prefix
Meaning
sub under
Exercise 1
Identify the five words with prefixes in the following paragraph, and write their meanings on a separate sheet of paper. At first, I thought one of my fuzzy, orange socks disappeared in the dryer, but I could not find it in there. Because it was my favorite pair, nothing was going to prevent me from finding that sock. I looked all around my bedroom, under the bed, on top of the bed, and in my closet, but I still could not find it. I did not know that I would discover the answer just as I gave up my search. As I sat down on the couch in the family room, my Dad was reclining on his chair. I laughed when I saw that one of his feet was orange and the other blue! I forgot that he was colorblind. Next time he does laundry I will have to supervise him while he folds the socks so that he does not accidentally take one of mine! Collaboration Please share with a classmate and compare your answers.
Exercise 2
Add the correct prefix to the word to complete each sentence. Write the word on your own sheet of paper.
1. I
wanted
to
ease
my
stomach
________comfort,
so
I
drank
some
ginger
root
tea.
2. Lenny
looked
funny
in
his
________matched
shirt
and
pants.
3. Penelope
felt
________glamorous
at
the
party
because
she
was
the
only
one
not
wearing
a
dress.
4. My
mother
said
those
________aging
creams
do
not
work,
so
I
should
not
waste
my
money
on
them.
5. The
childs
________standard
performance
on
the
test
alarmed
his
parents.
6. When
my
sister
first
saw
the
meteor,
she
thought
it
was
a
________natural
phenomenon.
7. Even
though
she
got
an
excellent
job
offer,
Cherie
did
not
want
to
________locate
to
a
different
country.
8. With
a
small
class
size,
the
students
get
to
________act
with
the
teacher
more
frequently.
9. I
slipped
on
the
ice
because
I
did
not
heed
the
________cautions
about
watching
my
step.
10. A
________combatant
is
another
word
for
civilian.
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Suffixes
A suffix is a word part added to the end of a word to create a new meaning. Study the suffix rules in the following boxes. Rule 1 When adding the suffixes -ness and -ly to a word, the spelling of the word does not change. Examples:
Exceptions to Rule 1 When the word ends in y, change the y to i before adding -ness and -ly. Examples:
Rule 2 When the suffix begins with a vowel, drop the silent e in the root word. Examples:
Exceptions to Rule 2 When the word ends in ce or ge, keep the silent e if the suffix begins with a or o. Examples:
Rule 3 When the suffix begins with a consonant, keep the silent e in the original word. Examples:
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Rule 4 When the word ends in a consonant plus y, change the y to i before any suffix not beginning with i. Examples:
Rule 5 When the suffix begins with a vowel, double the final consonant only if (1) the word has only one syllable or is accented on the last syllable and (2) the word ends in a single vowel followed by a single consonant. Examples:
tan + ing = tanning (one syllable word) regret + ing = regretting (The accent is on the last syllable; the word ends in a single vowel followed by a single consonant.) cancel + ed = canceled (The accent is not on the last syllable.) prefer + ed = preferred
Exercise 3
On your own sheet of paper, write correctly the forms of the words with their suffixes.
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. 6. 7. 8. 9. refer
+
ed
refer
+
ence
mope
+
ing
approve
+
al
green
+
ness
benefit
+
ed
resubmit
+
ing
use
+
age
greedy
+
ly
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Key Takeaways
A prefix is a word part added to the beginning of a word that changes the words meaning. A suffix is a word part added to the end of a word that changes the words meaning. Learning the meanings of prefixes and suffixes will help expand your vocabulary, which will help improve your writing.
Writing Application
Write a paragraph describing one of your life goals. Include five words with prefixes and five words with suffixes. Exchange papers with a classmate and circle the prefixes and suffixes in your classmates paper. Correct each prefix or suffix that is spelled incorrectly.
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Learning Objectives
1. Recognize
how
synonyms
improve
writing.
2. Identify
common
antonyms
to
increase
your
vocabulary.
As you work with your draft, you will want to pay particular attention to the words you have chosen. Do they express exactly what you are trying to convey? Can you choose better, more effective words? Familiarity with synonyms and antonyms can be helpful in answering these questions.
Synonyms
Synonyms are words that have the same, or almost the same, meaning as another word. You can say an easy task or a simple task because easy and simple are synonyms. You can say Hong Kong is a large city or a metropolis because city and metropolis are synonyms. However, it is important to remember that not all pairs of words in the English language are so easily interchangeable. The slight but important differences in meaning between synonyms can make a big difference in your writing. For example, the words boring and insipid may have similar meanings, but the subtle differences between the two will affect the message your writing conveys. The word insipid evokes a scholarly and perhaps more pretentious message than boring. The English language is full of pairs of words that have subtle distinctions between them. All writers, professionals and beginners alike, face the challenge of choosing the most appropriate synonym to best convey their ideas. When you pay particular attention to synonyms in your writing, it comes across to your reader. The sentences become much more clear and rich in meaning.
Writing at Work
Any writing you do at work involves a careful choice of words. For example, if you are writing an e-mail to your employer regarding your earnings, you can use the word pay, salary, or hourly wage. There are also other synonyms to choose from. Just keep in mind that the word you choose will have an effect on the reader, so you want to choose wisely to get the desired effect.
Exercise 1
Replace the underlined words in the paragraph with appropriate synonyms. Write the new paragraph on your own sheet of paper.
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When most people think of the Renaissance, they might think of artists like Michelangelo, Raphael, or Leonardo da Vinci, but they often overlook one of the very important figures of the Renaissance: Filippo Brunelleschi. Brunelleschi was born in Florence, Italy in 1377. He is considered the very best architect and engineer of the Renaissance. His impressive accomplishments are a testament to following ones dreams, persevering in the face of obstacles, and realizing ones vision. The most difficult undertaking of Brunelleschis career was the dome of Florence Cathedral, which took sixteen years to construct. A major blow to the progress of the construction happened in 1428. Brunelleschi had designed a special ship to carry the one hundred tons of marble needed for the dome. He felt this would be the most inexpensive way to transport the marble, but the unthinkable happened. The ship went down to the bottom of the water, taking all the marble with it to the bottom of the river. Brunelleschi was really sad. Nevertheless, he did not give up. He held true to his vision of the completed dome. Filippo Brunelleschi completed construction of the dome of Florence Cathedral in 1446. His influence on artists and architects alike was felt strongly during his lifetime and can still be felt in this day and age. Collaboration Please share with a classmate and compare your answers.
Exercise 2
On your own sheet of paper, write a sentence with each of the following words that illustrates the specific meaning of each synonym.
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. 6. 7. 8. 9. 10. leave,
abandon
mad,
insane
outside,
exterior
poor,
destitute
quiet,
peaceful
riot,
revolt
rude,
impolite
talk,
conversation
hug,
embrace
home,
residence
Antonyms
Antonyms are words that have the opposite meaning of a given word. The study of antonyms will not only help you choose the most appropriate word as you write; it will also sharpen your overall sense of language. lists common words and their antonyms.
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Table 3.3 Common Antonyms Word absence accept accurate advantage ancient abundant artificial attractive borrow bravery create bold capable combine conceal common decrease definite despair discourage employer expand forget Antonym presence refuse inaccurate disadvantage modern scarce natural repulsive lend cowardice destroy, demolish timid, meek incapable separate reveal rare increase indefinite hope encourage employee contract remember Word frequent harmful horizontal imitation inhabited inferior intentional justice knowledge landlord likely minority miser obedient optimist permanent plentiful private prudent qualified satisfactory tame vacant Antonym seldom harmless vertical genuine uninhabited superior accidental injustice ignorance tenant unlikely majority spendthrift disobedient pessimist temporary scarce public imprudent unqualified unsatisfactory wild occupied
Tip
Learning antonyms is an effective way to increase your vocabulary. Memorizing words in combination with or in relation to other words often helps us retain them.
Exercise 3
Correct the following sentences by replacing the underlined words with an antonym. Write the antonym on your own sheet of paper.
1. The
pilot
who
landed
the
plane
was
a
coward
because
no
one
was
injured.
2. Even
though
the
botany
lecture
was
two
hours
long,
Gerard
found
it
incredibly
dull.
3. My
mother
says
it
is
impolite
to
say
thank
you
like
you
really
mean
it.
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4. Although I have learned a lot of information through textbooks, it is life experience that has given me ignorance. 5. When our instructor said the final paper was compulsory, it was music to my ears! 6. My only virtues are coffee, video games, and really loud music. 7. Elvin was so bold when he walked in the classroom that he sat in the back row and did not participate. 8. Maria thinks elephants who live in freedom have a sad look in their eyes. 9. The teacher filled her students minds with gloomy thoughts about their futures. 10. The guest attended to every one of our needs.
Key Takeaways
Synonyms are words that have the same, or almost the same, meaning as another word. Antonyms are words that have the opposite meaning of another word. Choosing the right synonym refines your writing. Learning common antonyms sharpens your sense of language and expands your vocabulary.
Writing Application
Write a paragraph that describes your favorite dish or food. Use as many synonyms as you can in the description, even if it seems too many. Be creative. Consult a thesaurus, and take this opportunity to use words you have never used before. Be prepared to share your paragraph.
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Learning Objectives
1. Identify
the
different
types
of
context
clues.
2. Practice
using
context
clues
while
reading.
Context clues are bits of information within a text that will assist you in deciphering the meaning of unknown words. Since most of your knowledge of vocabulary comes from reading, it is important that you recognize context clues. By becoming more aware of particular words and phrases surrounding a difficult word, you can make logical guesses about its meaning. The following are the different types of context clues:
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Examples
Sometimes a text will give you an example of the word that sheds light on its meaning: I knew Marks ailurophobia was in full force because he began trembling and stuttering when he saw my cat, Ludwig, slink out from under the bed. Although ailurophobia is an unknown word, the sentence gives an example of its effects. Based on this example, a reader could confidently surmise that the word means a fear of cats.
Tip
Look for signal words like such as, for instance, and for example. These words signal that a words meaning may be revealed through an example.
Exercise 1
Identify the context clue that helps define the underlined words in each of the following sentences. Write the context clue on your own sheet of paper.
1. Lucinda
is
very
adroit
on
the
balance
beam,
but
Constance
is
rather
clumsy.
2. I
saw
the
entomologist,
a
scientist
who
studies
insects,
cradle
the
giant
dung
beetle
in
her
palm.
3. Lances
comments
about
politics
were
irrelevant
and
meaningless
to
the
botanists
lecture
on
plant
reproduction.
4. Before
I
left
for
my
trip
to
the
Czech
Republic,
I
listened
to
my
mothers
sage
advice
and
made
a
copy
of
my
passport.
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5. His rancor, or hatred, for socializing resulted in a life of loneliness and boredom. 6. Martin was mortified, way beyond embarrassment, when his friends teamed up to shove him into the pool. 7. The petulant four-year-old had a baby sister who was, on the contrary, not grouchy at all. 8. The philosophy teacher presented the students with several conundrums, or riddles, to solve. 9. Most Americans are omnivores, people that eat both plants and animals. 10. Elena is effervescent, as excited as a cheerleader, for example, when she meets someone for the first time.
Exercise 2
On your own sheet of paper, write the name of the context clue that helps to define the underlined words. Maggie was a precocious child to say the least. She produced brilliant watercolor paintings by the age of three. At first, her parents were flabbergastedutterly blown awayby their daughters ability, but soon they got used to their little painter. Her preschool teacher said that Maggies dexterity, or ease with which she used her hands, was something she had never before seen in such a young child. Little Maggie never gloated or took pride in her paintings; she just smiled contentedly when she finished one and requested her parents give it to someone as a gift. Whenever people met Maggie for the first time they often watched her paint with their mouths agape, but her parents always kept their mouths closed and simply smiled over their little Monet. Collaboration Please share with a classmate and compare your answers.
Tip
In addition to context clues to help you figure out the meaning of a word, examine the following word parts: prefixes, roots, and suffixes.
Writing at Work
Jargon a type of shorthand communication often used in the workplace. It is the technical language of a special field. Imagine it is your first time working as a server in a restaurant and your manager tells you he is going to eighty-six the roasted chicken. If you do not realize that eighty-six means to remove an item from the menu, you could be confused. When you first start a job, no matter where it may be, you will encounter jargon that will likely be foreign to you. Perhaps after working the job for a short time, you too will feel comfortable enough to use it. When you are first hired, however, jargon can be baffling and make you feel like an outsider. If you cannot decipher the jargon based on the context, it is always a good policy to ask.
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Key Takeaways
Context clues are words or phrases within a text that help clarify vocabulary that is unknown to you. There are several types of context clues including brief definition and restatement, synonyms and antonyms, and example.
Writing Application
Write a paragraph describing your first job. In the paragraph, use five words previously unknown to you. These words could be jargon words or you may consult a dictionary or thesaurus to find a new word. Make sure to provide a specific context clue for understanding each word. Exchange papers with a classmate and try to decipher the meaning of the words in each others paragraphs based on the context clues.
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Learning Objectives
1. Use
the
skills
you
have
learned
in
the
chapter.
2. Work
collaboratively
with
other
students.
Exercises
1. Proofread the paragraph and correct any commonly confused words and misspelled words. Grunge, or the Seattle sound, is a type of rock music that became quiet popular in the late 1980s and early 1990s. It began in Seattle, Washington. Grunge musicians rejected the dramatic an expensive stage productions that were trendy at the time. There music was striped down with an emphasis on distorted electric guitars. Grunge musicians did not ware makeup or sport extravagent hairstyles like many of the days rock musicians and bands. Many grunge musicians would by theyre clothes from secondhand stores. The lyrics too grunge songs were also quit different compared two what was populer at the time. Grunge lyrics are charecterized by dark or socially conscience themes. Grunge music is still admired today buy music lovers of all ages. 2. Complete the following sentences by filling in the blank line with the correct homonym or frequently misspelled word.
1. Kevin
asked
me
a
serious
question
and
________(then,
than)
interrupted
me
when
I
attempted
to
answer.
2. A
hot
compress
will
________(lessen,
lesson)
the
pain
of
muscle
cramps.
3. Jason
was
not
a
graceful
________(looser,
loser)
because
he
knocked
his
chair
over
and
stormed
off
the
basketball
court.
4. Please
consider
the
________(effects,
affects)
of
not
getting
enough
green
vegetables
in
your
diet.
5. ________(Except,
Accept)
for
Ajay,
we
all
had
our
tickets
to
the
play.
6. I
am
________(threw,
through)
with
this
magazine,
so
you
can
read
it
if
you
like.
7. I
dont
care
________(whose,
whos)
coming
to
the
party
and
________(whose,
whos)
not.
8. Crystal
could
________(sea,
see)
the
soaring
hawk
through
her
binoculars.
9. The
________(principal,
principle)
gave
the
students
a
very
long
lecture
about
peer
pressure.
10. Dr.
Frankl
nearly
lost
his
________(patience,
patients)
with
one
of
his
________(patience,
patients).
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3. Rewrite the following personal essay by replacing the slang, clichs, and overly general language with stronger, more precise language. My biggest regret happened in high school. I had always felt like a fish out of water, so during my sophomore year I was determined to fit in with the cool people. Man, was that an uphill battle. I dont even know why I tried, but hindsight is 20/20 I guess. The first thing I did was change the way I dressed. I went from wearing clothes I was comfortable in to wearing stuff that was so not me. Then I started wearing a ton of makeup, and my brother was all like, What happened to your face? Not only did my looks change, my personality changed a lot too. I started to act all stuck up and bossy with my friends, and they didnt know how to respond to this person that used to be me. Luckily, this phase didnt last more than a couple of months. I decided it was more fun to be me than to try to be someone else. I guess you cant fit a square peg in a round hole after all. 4. Write the correct synonym for each word.
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. 6. 7. 8. 9. 10. lenient
________(relaxed,
callous)
abandon
________(vacate,
deceive)
berate
________(criticize,
encourage)
experienced
________(callow,
matured)
spiteful
________(malevolent,
mellow)
tame
________(subdued,
wild)
tasty
________(savory,
bland)
banal
________(common,
interesting)
contradict
________(deny,
revolt)
vain
________(boastful,
simple)
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Learning Objectives
1. Identify
the
basic
structures
of
sentences.
2. Determine
ways
to
turn
sentences
into
questions.
3. Define
adjectives
and
how
they
are
used.
If your first language is not English, you will most likely need some extra help when writing in Standard, or formal, English. New students of Standard English often make similar kinds of errors. Even if you have been speaking English for a long time, you may not feel as confident in your written English skills. This chapter covers the most common errors made by English language learners and helps you avoid similar mistakes in your writing.
Not all sentences are as simple as a subject plus a verb. To form more complex sentences, writers build upon this basic structure. Adding a prepositional phrase to the basic sentence creates a more complex sentence. A preposition is a part of speech that relates a noun or a pronoun to another word in a sentence. It also introduces a prepositional phrase. If you can identify a preposition, you will be able to identify a prepositional phrase.
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about above across after against along among around at before behind
Common Prepositions
beside
between
by
during
except
for
from
in
into
like
of
Exercise 1
Copy the following sentences onto your own sheet of paper and underline the prepositional phrases.
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. Linda
and
Javier
danced
under
the
stars.
Each
person
has
an
opinion
about
the
topic.
The
fans
walked
through
the
gates.
Jamyra
ran
around
the
track.
Maria
celebrated
her
birthday
in
January.
Another sentence structure that is important to understand is subject + verb + object. There are two types of objects: direct objects and indirect objects. A direct object receives the action of the verb.
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Tip
A quick way to find the direct object is to ask what? or who? Sentence: Maurice kicked the ball. What did Maurice kick? The direct object, ball. Sentence: Maurice kicked Tom by accident. Who did Maurice kick? The direct object, Tom. An indirect object does not receive the action of the verb.
Tip
Even though the indirect object is not found after a preposition in English, it can be discovered by asking to whom? or for whom? after the verb. Sentence: Dad baked the children some cookies. For whom did Dad bake the cookies? The indirect object, children.
Exercise 2
On a separate sheet of paper, identify the subject, verb, direct object, and indirect object in the following sentences.
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1. 2. 3. 4. 5.
Captain Kirk told the crew a story. Jermaine gave his girlfriend a dozen yellow tulips. That hospital offers nurses better pay. Dad served Grandma a delicious dinner. Mom bought herself a new car.
Exercise 3
On a separate sheet of paper, rewrite the sentences in the correct order. If the sentence is correct as it is, write OK.
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. The
pizza
Jeannine
burnt.
To
the
Mexican
restaurant
we
had
to
go
for
dinner.
Jeannine
loved
the
food.
So
full
were
we
during
the
walk
home.
I
will
make
the
pizza
next
time.
Questions
English speakers rely on the following two common ways to turn sentences into questions:
1. Move
the
helping
verb
and
add
a
question
mark.
2. Add
the
verb
do,
does,
or
did
and
add
a
question
mark.
Move the helping verb and add a question mark. Sentence: Sierra can pack these boxes. Question: Can Sierra pack these boxes? Add the verb do, does, or did, and add a question mark: Sentence: Jolene skated across the pond. Question: Did Jolene skate across the pond?
Exercise 4
On a separate sheet of paper, create questions from the following sentences.
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. Slumdog
Millionaire
is
a
film
directed
by
Danny
Boyle.
The
story
centers
on
a
character
named
Jamal
Malik.
He
and
his
older
brother
find
different
ways
to
escape
the
slums.
His
brother,
Salim,
pursues
a
life
of
crime.
Jamal
ends
up
on
the
game
show
Who
Wants
to
Be
a
Millionaire?
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Adjectives
An adjective is a kind of descriptive word that describes a noun or a pronoun. It tells which one, what kind, and how many. Adjectives make your writing more lively and interesting. Keep in mind, a common error that English language learners make is misplacing the adjectives in a sentence. It is important to know where to place the adjective in a sentence so that readers are not confused. If you are using more than one adjective to describe a noun, place the adjectives in the following order before the noun:
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. 6. 7. Opinion:
an
interesting
book,
a
boring
movie,
a
fun
ride
Size:
a
large
box,
a
tiny
turtle,
a
tall
woman
Shape:
a
round
ball,
a
long
hose,
a
square
field
Age:
a
new
day,
an
old
horse,
a
modern
building
Color:
an
orange
sunset,
a
green
jacket,
a
red
bug
Ethnicity:
Italian
cheese,
French
wine,
Chinese
tea
Material:
silk
shirt,
wool
socks,
a
cotton
dress
Tip
Adjectives can also be placed at the end of a sentence if they describe the subject of a sentence and appear after the verb. Sentence: My English teacher is excellent.
Exercise 5
On a separate sheet of paper, place the following sets of adjectives in the correct order before the noun. The first one has been done for you. 1. book: old, small, Spanish a small old Spanish book (age, size, ethnicity)
2. 3. 4. 5. photograph:
new,
strange
suit:
wool,
green,
funny
opinion:
refreshing,
new
dress:
fashionable,
purple
Key Takeaways
The most basic sentence structure is a subject plus a verb that expresses a complete thought. Adding a prepositional phrase or a direct or indirect object to a sentence makes it more complex.
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English speakers change a sentence into a question in one of the following two ways: moving the helping verb and adding a question mark or adding the verb do, does, or did and adding a question mark. Adjectives follow a particular order before the noun they describe. The order is opinion, size, shape, age, color, ethnicity, and material.
Writing Application
Write a paragraph about a memorable family trip. Use at least two adjectives to describe each noun in your paragraph. Proofread your paragraph, and then exchange papers with a classmate. Check your classmates use of adjectives to make sure they are correct.
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Learning Objectives
1. Identify
a
negative
statement.
2. Write
negative
statements.
Negative statements are the opposite of positive statements and are necessary to express an opposing idea. The following charts list negative words and helping verbs that can be combined to form a negative statement.
never nobody no one nowhere am was being has does could must would
Negative Words no none not Common Helping Verbs is were been had did may will ought to
hardly scarcely barely rarely are be have do can might should used to
The following examples show several ways to make a sentence negative in the present tense. 1. A helping verb used with the negative word not. Sentence: My guests are arriving now. Negative: My guests are not arriving now. 2. The negative word no. Sentence: Jennie has money. Negative: Jennie has no money.
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3. The contraction nt. Sentence: Janetta does miss her mom. Negative: Janetta doesnt miss her mom. 4. The negative adverb rarely. Sentence: I always go to the gym after work. Negative: I rarely go to the gym after work. 5. The negative subject nobody. Sentence: Everybody gets the day off. Negative: Nobody gets the day off.
Exercise 1
On a separate sheet of paper, rewrite the positive sentences as negative sentences. Be sure to keep the sentences in the present tense.
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. Everybody
is
happy
about
the
mandatory
lunch.
Deborah
likes
to
visit
online
dating
sites.
Jordan
donates
blood
every
six
months.
Our
writing
instructor
is
very
effective.
That
beautiful
papaya
is
cheap.
The following sentences show you the ways to make a sentence negative in the past tense. Sentence: Paul called me yesterday. Negative: Paul did not call me yesterday. Sentence: Jamilee went to the grocery store. Negative: Jamilee never went to the grocery store. Sentence: Gina laughed when she saw the huge pile of laundry. Negative: Gina did not laugh when she saw the huge pile of laundry.
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Notice that when forming a negative in the past tense, the helping verb did is what signals the past tense, and the main verb laugh does not have an -ed ending.
Exercise 2
Rewrite the following paragraph by correcting the errors in the past-tense negative sentences. Celeste no did call me when she reached North Carolina. I was worried because she not drove alone before. She was going to meet her friend, Terry, who lived in a town called Asheville, North Carolina. I did never want to worry, but she said she was going to call when she reached there. Finally, four hours later, she called and said, Mom, Im sorry I did not call. I lost track of time because I was so happy to see Terry! I was relieved. Collaboration Once you have found all the errors you can, please share with a classmate and compare your answers. Did your partner find an error you missed? Did you find an error your partner missed? Compare with your instructors answers. Double negatives are two negatives used in the same phrase or sentence. They are considered incorrect in Standard English. You should avoid using double negatives in all formal writing. If you want to say something negative, use only one negative word in the sentence. Return to the beginning of this section for a list of negative words, and then study the following examples.
Tip
Aint is considered a contraction of am not. Although some may use it in everyday speech, it is considered incorrect in Standard English. Avoid using it when speaking and writing in formal contexts.
Exercise 3
On your own sheet of paper, correct the double negatives and rewrite the following sentences.
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1. 2. 3. 4. 5.
Jose didnt like none of the choices on the menu. Brittany cant make no friends with nobody. The Southwest hardly had no rain last summer. My kids never get into no trouble. I could not do nothing about the past.
Key Takeaways
Negatives are usually formed using a negative word plus a helping verb. Double negatives are considered incorrect in Standard English. Only one negative word is used to express a negative statement.
Writing Application
Write a paragraph describing your favorite meal. Use rich, colorful language to describe the meal. Exchange papers with a classmate and read his or her paragraph. Then rewrite each sentence of your classmates paragraph using negatives. Be sure to avoid double negatives. Share your negative paragraphs with each other.
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Learning Objectives
1. Define
and
use
count
and
noncount
nouns.
2. Recognize
and
use
definite
and
indefinite
articles.
Nouns are words that name things, places, people, and ideas. Right now, you may be surrounded by desks, computers, and notebooks. These are called count nouns because you can count the exact number of desks, computers, and notebooksthree desks, one computer, and six notebooks, for example. On the other hand, you may be carrying a small amount of money in your wallet and sitting on a piece of furniture. These are called noncount nouns. Although you can count the pieces of furniture or the amount of money, you cannot add a number in front of money or furniture and simply add -s to the end of the noun. Instead, you must use other words and phrases to indicate the quantity of money and furniture. Incorrect: five moneys, two furnitures Correct: some money, two pieces of furniture By the end of , you will grasp the difference between the two types of nouns and be able to use them confidently in speaking and writing.
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A noncount noun identifies a whole object that cannot separate and count individually. Noncount nouns may refer to concrete objects or abstract objects. A concrete noun identifies an object you can see, taste, touch, or count. An abstract noun identifies an object that you cannot see, touch, or count. There are some exceptions, but most abstract nouns cannot be made plural, so they are noncount nouns. Examples of abstract nouns include anger, education, melancholy, softness, violence, and conduct. Table 4.2 Types of Noncount Nouns
Type
of
Noncount
Noun
Food
Solids
Abstract
Nouns
Examples
sugar,
salt,
pepper,
lettuce,
rice
concrete,
chocolate,
silver,
soap
peace,
warmth,
hospitality,
information
Sentence
Add
more
sugar
to
my
coffee,
please.
The
ice
cream
was
covered
in
creamy
chocolate.
I
need
more
information
about
the
insurance
policy.
Exercise 1
On a separate sheet of paper, label each of the following nouns as count or noncount.
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. Electricity
________
Water
________
Book
________
Sculpture
________
Advice
________
Exercise 2
On a separate sheet of paper, identify whether the italicized noun in the sentence is a count or noncount noun by writing C or NC above the noun.
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. The
amount
of
traffic
on
the
way
home
was
terrible.
Forgiveness
is
an
important
part
of
growing
up.
I
made
caramel
sauce
for
the
organic
apples
I
bought.
I
prefer
film
cameras
instead
of
digital
ones.
My
favorite
subject
is
history.
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Exercise 3
On a separate sheet of paper, write the correct article in the blank for each of the following sentences. Write OK if the sentence is correct.
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. (A/An/The)
camel
can
live
for
days
without
water.
________
I
enjoyed
(a/an/the)
pastries
at
the
Bar
Mitzvah.
________
(A/An/The)
politician
spoke
of
many
important
issues.
________
I
really
enjoyed
(a/an/the)
actors
performance
in
the
play.
________
(A/An/The)
goal
I
have
is
to
run
a
marathon
this
year.
________
Exercise 4
Correct the misused or missing articles and rewrite the paragraph. Stars are large balls of spinning hot gas like our sun. The stars look tiny because they are far away. Many of them are much larger than sun. Did you know that a Milky Way galaxy has between two hundred billion and four hundred billion stars in it? Scientists estimate that there may be as many as five hundred billion galaxies in an entire universe! Just like a human being, the star has a life cycle from birth to death, but its lifespan is billions of years long. The star is born in a cloud of cosmic gas and dust called a nebula. Our sun was born in the nebula nearly five billion years ago. Photographs of the star-forming nebulas are astonishing.
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Collaboration Once you have found all the errors you can, share with a classmate and compare your answers. Did your partner find an error you missed? Did you find an error your partner missed? Compare with your instructors answers.
Key Takeaways
You can make count nouns plural by adding -s. Count nouns are individual people, places, or things that can be counted, such as politicians, deserts, or candles. Noncount nouns refer to whole things that cannot be made plural, such as salt, peace, or happiness. The is a definite article and is used to refer to a specific person, place, or thing, such as the Queen of England. A and an are indefinite articles, and they refer to nonspecific people, places, or things, such as an apple or a bicycle.
Writing Application
Write five sentences using the definite article the. Write five sentences using the indefinite article a or an. Exchange papers with a classmate and check each others work.
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4.4 Pronouns
Learning Objectives
1. Recognize
subject
and
object
pronouns.
2. Identify
possessive
pronouns.
3. Determine
common
pronoun
errors.
A pronoun is a word that can be used in place of the noun. We use pronouns so we do not have to repeat words. For example, imagine writing the following sentence: Afrah put her scarf on because Afrah was cold. The sentence sounds a bit strange because Afrah is named twice; however, if you use a pronoun, the sentence will be shorter and less repetitive. You might rewrite the sentence to something similar to the following: Afrah put her scarf on because she was cold. She refers to Afrah, so you do not have to write the name twice.
Types
of
Pronouns
Subject pronouns are often the subject of a sentencewho and what the sentence is about. Sentence: She loves the desserts in France. She is the subject. Sentence: By lunch time, they were hungry. They is the subject. Object pronouns are often the object of the verb who or what was acted upon. Sentence: Melanies thoughtfulness touched him. Him is the object of the verb touched. Sentence: We lifted it. It is the object of the verb lifted.
Tip
The masculine subject pronoun is he, and the masculine object pronoun is him. The feminine subject pronoun is she, and the feminine object pronoun is her. A pronoun that shows possession or ownership is called a possessive pronoun.
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Sentence: The teacher took her apple and left. The pronoun her shows the teacher owns the apple. Sentence: The hikers spotted their guide on the trail. The pronoun their shows the hikers follow the guide who was assigned to the hikers. Table 4.3 Pronouns
Subject
Pronouns
Object
Pronouns
Possessive
Pronouns
I,
you,
he,
she,
it,
we,
they
me,
you,
him,
her,
it,
us,
them
my
(mine),
your(s),
his,
hers,
its,
our(s),
their(s)
Exercise 1
On a separate sheet of paper, complete the following sentences by circling the correct pronoun.
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. Unfortunately,
the
house
was
too
expensive
for
(we,
us,
they).
I
completed
(mine,
my,
your)
research
paper,
and
she
completed
(his,
hers,
theirs).
My
dog
Buster
is
old,
but
(he,
it,
them)
is
very
playful.
That
ring
belongs
to
my
father,
so
it
is
(hers,
his,
theirs).
I
cannot
find
my
textbook,
so
I
think
(they,
it,
he)
is
lost.
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This sentence is now correct because the male pronoun his refers to the male person, Mark. Incorrect: The woman she went to work earlier than usual. This sentence is incorrect because the subject the woman is repeated by the pronoun she. Correct: The woman went to work earlier than usual. Correct: She went to work earlier than usual. These sentences are now correct because the unnecessary repeated subject has been removed.
Exercise 2
On a separate sheet of paper, correct the following sentences that have pronoun errors. If the sentence is correct as it is, write OK.
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. Us
are
going
to
the
county
fair
this
weekend.
Steven
did
not
want
to
see
a
movie
because
she
had
a
headache.
The
teacher
congratulated
Maria
and
me.
The
eighth
grade
students
they
were
all
behaving
mysteriously
well.
Derrick
and
he
received
the
best
grade
on
the
grammar
test.
Relative
Pronouns
A relative pronoun is a type of pronoun that helps connect details to the subject of the sentence and may often combine two shorter sentences. The relative pronouns are who, whom, whose, which or that. Sentence: A relative pronoun is a type of pronoun. The subject of this sentence is a relative pronoun. The clause is a type of pronoun gives some information about the subject. The relative pronoun that may be added to give more details to the subject. Sentence using a relative pronoun: A relative pronoun is a type of pronoun that helps connect details to the subject of the sentence.
Tip
Remember the following uses of relative pronouns:
Who,
whom,
and
whose
refer
only
to
people.
Which
refers
to
things.
That
refers
to
people
or
things.
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The following examples show how a relative pronoun may be used to connect two sentences and to connect details to the subject. Sentence 1: Gossip is a form of communication. Sentence 2: It is a waste of time and energy. Combination of 1 and 2: Gossip is a form of communication that is a waste of time and energy. Notice how the relative pronoun that replaces the subject it in sentence 2. That is called a relative pronoun because it connects the details (is a waste of time and energy) to the subject (Gossip). Sentence 1: My grandmother is eighty years old. Sentence 2: She collects seashells. Combination of 1 and 2: My grandmother, who is eighty years old, collects seashells. Notice how the relative pronoun who replaces the subject she in sentence 2. Who is called a relative pronoun because it connects the details (is eighty years old) to the subject (My grandmother).
Exercise 3
On a separate sheet of paper, complete the following sentences by selecting the correct relative pronoun.
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. He
showed
me
a
photo
(who,
that)
upset
me.
Soccer
is
a
fast
moving
game
(who,
that)
has
many
fans
worldwide.
Juan
is
a
man
(which,
who)
has
high
standards
for
everything.
Jamaica
is
a
beautiful
country
(that,
who)
I
would
like
to
visit
next
year.
My
mother
only
eats
bananas
(who,
that)
are
green.
Exercise 4
On a separate sheet of paper, combine the two sentences into one sentence using a relative pronoun.
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. Jeff
is
a
dependable
person.
He
will
never
let
you
down.
I
rode
a
roller
coaster.
It
was
scary.
At
the
beach,
I
always
dig
my
feet
into
the
sand.
It
protects
them
from
the
hot
sun.
Jackie
is
trying
not
to
use
so
many
plastic
products.
They
are
not
good
for
the
environment.
My
Aunt
Sherry
is
teaching
me
how
to
drive.
She
has
never
been
in
accident
or
gotten
a
ticket.
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Key Takeaways
A pronoun is used in place of a noun. There are several types of pronouns, including subject and object pronouns, possessive pronouns, and relative pronouns. Subject pronouns are the who and what the sentence is about. Object pronouns are the who and what that receives the action. A possessive pronoun is a pronoun showing ownership. Common pronoun errors include mixing up subject, object, and gender pronouns, and repeating the subject of a sentence with a pronoun. Relative pronouns help combine two separate sentences.
Writing Application
Proofread a piece of your writing for the types of pronoun errors discussed in this section. Correct any errors you come across.
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Learning Objectives
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. Identify
simple
verb
tenses.
Recognize
to
be,
to
have,
and
to
do
verbs.
Use
perfect
verb
tenses.
Apply
progressive
verb
tenses.
Define
gerunds
and
infinitives.
You must always use a verb in every sentence you write. Verbs are parts of speech that indicate actions or states of being. The most basic sentence structure is a subject followed by a verb.
Simple present verbs are used in the following situations: 1. When the action takes place now I drink the water greedily. 2. When the action is something that happens regularly I always cross my fingers for good luck. 3. When describing things that are generally true College tuition is very costly.
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When it is he, she, or it doing the present tense action, remember to add -s, or -es to the end of the verb or to change the y to -ies. Simple past verbs are used when the action has already taken place and is now finished:
I washed my uniform last night. I asked for more pie. I coughed loudly last night.
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When he, she, or it is doing the action in the past tense, remember to add -d or -ed to the end of regular verbs. Simple future verbs are used when the action has not yet taken place:
I will work late tomorrow. I will kiss my boyfriend when I see him. I will erase the board after class.
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Going to can also be added to the main verb to make it future tense:
Exercise 1
On a separate sheet of paper, complete the following sentences by adding the verb in the correct simple tense.
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. Please
do
not
(erase,
erased,
will
erase)
what
I
have
written
on
the
board.
They
(dance,
danced,
will
dance)
for
hours
after
the
party
was
over.
Harrison
(wash,
washed,
will
wash)
his
laundry
after
several
weeks
had
passed.
Yesterday
Mom
(ask,
asked,
will
ask)
me
about
my
plans
for
college.
I
(bake,
baked,
will
bake)
several
dozen
cookies
for
tomorrows
bake
sale.
Exercise 2
Correct the verb tense mistakes in the following paragraph. Last summer, I walk around Walden Pond. Walden Pond is in Concord, Massachusetts. It is where the philosopher Henry David Thoreau will live during the mid-nineteenth century. During his time there, he wrote a book called Walden. Walden is a book of Thoreaus reflections on the natural environment. It will be consider a classic in American literature. I did not know that Walden Pond is consider the birthplace of the environmental movement. It was very relaxing there. I will listen to birds, frogs, and crickets, not to mention the peaceful sound of the pond itself. Collaboration
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Once you have found all the errors you can, please share with a classmate and compare your answers. Did your partner find an error you missed? Did you find an error your partner missed? Compare with your instructors answers.
Tip
Memorize the present tense forms of to be, to do, and to have. A song or rhythmic pattern will make them easier to memorize. Review these examples of to be, to do, and to have used in sentences.
To
Be
Yesterday
I
was
angry.
To
Do
I
did
my
best
yesterday.
To
Have
Yesterday
I
had
ten
dollars.
Past
Present
Today
I
am
not
angry.
I
do
my
best
every
day.
Today
I
have
ten
dollars.
Future
Tomorrow
I
will
be
angry.
Tomorrow
I
will
do
my
best.
Tomorrow
I
will
have
ten
dollars.
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To Do
Tip
Remember, if you have a compound subject like Marie and Jennifer, think of the subject as they to determine the correct verb form.
Exercise 3
On a separate sheet of paper, complete the following sentences by circling the correct form of the verbs to be, to have, and to do in the three simple tenses.
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. Stefan
always
(do,
does,
will
do)
his
taxes
the
day
before
they
are
due.
We
(are,
is,
was)
planning
a
surprise
birthday
party
for
my
mother.
Turtles
(have,
had,
has)
the
most
beautiful
patterns
on
their
shells.
I
always
(do,
did,
will
do)
my
homework
before
dinner,
so
I
can
eat
in
peace.
You
(is,
are,
was)
so
much
smarter
than
you
think!
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The present perfect tense has a connection with the past and the present.
Use the present perfect tense to describe a continuing situation and to describe an action that has just happened.
I have worked as a caretaker since June. This sentence tells us that the subject has worked as a caretaker in the past and is still working as a caretaker in the present.
Dmitri has just received an award from the Dean of Students. This sentence tells us that Dmitri has very recently received the award. The word just emphasizes that the action happened very recently.
Study the following basic formula for the past perfect tense:
Subject
I
+
The bus had left by the time Theo arrived at the station.
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Notice that both actions occurred entirely in the past, but one action occurred before the other. At some time in the past, Theo arrived (simple past tense) at the station, but at some time before that, the bus had left (past perfect). Look at the following basic formula for the future perfect tense:
Subject
I
+
The future perfect tense describes an action from the past in the future, as if the past event has already occurred. Use the future perfect tense when you anticipate completing an event in the future, but you have not completed it yet.
You will have forgotten me after you move to London. Notice that both actions occur in the future, but one action will occur before the other. At some time in the future, the subject (you) will move (future tense) to London, and at some time after that, the subject will have forgotten (future perfect tense) the speaker, me.
Exercise 4
On a separate sheet of paper, complete the following sentences by using the correct perfect verb tense for the verb in parentheses.
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. I
plan
to
start
a
compost
bin
because
I
________
(to
want)
one
for
a
long
time
now.
My
brother
told
me
he
________
(to
argue)
with
his
friend
about
politics.
By
the
time
we
reach
the
mountain
top
the
sun
________
(to
set).
Denise
________
(to
walk)
several
miles
in
the
past
three
hours.
His
mother
________
(to
offer)
to
pay
him
to
work
in
her
office.
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You should use the present progressive tense to describe a planned activity, to describe an activity that is recurring right now, and to describe an activity that is in progress, although not actually occurring at the time of speaking:
Janetta is getting her teeth cleaned right now. This sentence describes an activity that is occurring right now.
I am studying ballet at school. This sentence describes an activity that is in progress but not actually occurring at the time of speaking.
The past progressive tense describes an action or state of being that took place in the past and that continues to take place. To make verbs in the past progressive tense, combine these two parts:
Past
tense
form
of
to
be
was/were
+
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You should use the past progressive tense to describe a continuous action in the past, to describe a past activity in progress while another activity occurred, or to describe two past activities in progress at the same time:
Ella and I were planning a vacation. This sentence describes a continuous action in the past.
I was helping a customer when I smelled delicious fried chicken. This sentence describes a past activity in progress while another activity occurred.
While I was finishing my homework, my wife was talking on the phone. This sentence describes two past activities in progress at the same time.
The future progressive tense describes an action or state of being that will take place in the future and that will continue to take place. The action will have started at that future moment, but it will not have finished at that moment. To make verbs in the future progressive tense, combine these parts:
Future
tense
form
of
to
be
will
be
+
Use the future progressive tense to describe an activity that will be in progress in the future:
Samantha and I will be dancing in the school play next week. Tomorrow Agnes will be reading two of her poems.
Exercise 5
On a separate sheet of paper, revise the following sentences, written in simple tenses, using the progressive tenses indicated in parentheses.
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. 6. He
prepared
the
food
while
I
watched.
(past
progressive
tense)
Jonathan
will
speak
at
the
conference.
(future
progressive)
Josie
traveled
to
Egypt
last
July.
(past
progressive
tense)
My
foot
aches,
so
I
know
it
will
rain.
(present
progressive
tense)
Micah
will
talk
a
lot
when
I
see
him.
(future
progressive)
I
yawn
a
lot
because
I
feel
tired.
(present
progressive
tense)
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Similar to the present perfect tense, the present perfect progressive tense is used to indicate an action that was begun in the past and continues into the present. However, the present perfect progressive is used when you want to stress that the action is ongoing. To make verbs in the present perfect progressive tense, combine the following parts:
Present
tense
form
of
to
have
has
or
have
+
Been
been
+
-ing
(present
participle)
helping
She has been talking for the last hour. This sentence indicates that she started talking in the past and is continuing to talk in the present.
I have been feeling tired lately. This sentence indicates that I started feeling tired in the past, and I continue to feel tired in the present. Instead of indicating time, as in the first sentence, the second sentence uses the adverb lately. You can also use the adverb recently when using the present perfect progressive tense.
Similar to the past perfect tense, the past perfect progressive tense is used to indicate an action that was begun in the past and continued until another time in the past. The past perfect progressive does not continue into the present but stops at a designated moment in the past. To make verbs in the past perfect progressive tense, combine the following parts:
Past
tense
form
of
to
have
had
+
been
been
+
-ing
(present
participle)
helping
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The employees had been talking until their boss arrived. This sentence indicates that the employees were talking in the past and they stopped talking when their boss arrived, which also happened in the past.
I had been working all day. This sentence implies that I was working in the past. The action does not continue into the future, and the sentence implies that the subject stopped working for unstated reasons.
The future perfect progressive tense is rarely used. It is used to indicate an action that will begin in the future and will continue until another time in the future. To make verbs in the future perfect progressive tense, combine the following parts:
Future
tense
form
of
to
have
will
have
+
been
Been
+
-ing
(present
participle)
helping
By the end of the meeting, I will have been hearing about mortgages and taxes for eight hours. This sentence indicates that in the future I will hear about mortgages and taxes for eight hours, but it has not happened yet. It also indicates the action of hearing will continue until the end of the meeting, something that is also in the future.
Gerunds
A gerund is a form of a verb that is used as a noun. All gerunds end in -ing. Since gerunds function as nouns, they occupy places in a sentence that a noun would, such as the subject, direct object, and object of a preposition. You can use a gerund in the following ways: 1. As a subject Traveling is Cynthias favorite pastime. 2. As a direct object
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3. As an object of a proposition The librarian scolded me for laughing. Often verbs are followed by gerunds. Study for examples. Table 4.8 Gerunds and Verbs
Gerund
moving
cleaning
winning
worrying
taking
Verb
Followed
by
a
Gerund
Denise
considered
moving
to
Paris.
I
hate
cleaning
the
bathroom.
Nate
imagines
winning
an
Oscar
one
day.
Mom
says
she
has
stopped
worrying.
She
admitted
taking
the
pumpkin.
Infinitives
An infinitive is a form of a verb that comes after the word to and acts as a noun, adjective, or adverb. to + verb = infinitive Examples of infinitives include to move, to sleep, to look, to throw, to read, and to sneeze. Often verbs are followed by infinitives. Study for examples. Table 4.9 Infinitives and Verbs
Infinitive
to
help
to
arrive
to
win
to
close
to
eat
Verb
Followed
by
Infinitive
Jessica
offered
to
help
her
move.
Mick
expects
to
arrive
early.
Sunita
wants
to
win
the
writing
contest.
He
forgot
to
close
the
curtains.
She
likes
to
eat
late.
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You may wonder which verbs can be followed by gerunds and which verbs can be followed by infinitives. With the following verbs, you can use either a gerund or an infinitive. Table 4.10 Infinitives and Gerunds Verbs
Base
Form
of
Verb
begin
hate
forget
like
continue
start
try
prefer
love
Sentences
with
Verbs
Followed
by
Gerunds
and
Infinitives
1.
John
began
crying.
2.
John
began
to
cry.
1.
Marie
hated
talking
on
the
phone.
2.
Marie
hated
to
talk
on
the
phone.
1.
Wendell
forgot
paying
the
bills.
2.
Wendell
forgot
to
pay
the
bills.
1.
I
liked
leaving
messages.
2.
I
liked
to
leave
messages.
1.
He
continued
listening
to
the
news.
2.
He
continued
to
listen
to
the
news.
1.
I
will
start
recycling
immediately.
2.
I
will
start
to
recycle
immediately.
1.
Mikhail
will
try
climbing
the
tree.
2.
Mikhail
will
try
to
climb
the
tree.
1.
I
prefer
baking.
2.
I
prefer
to
bake.
1.
Josh
loves
diving.
2.
Josh
loves
to
dive.
Exercise 6
On your own sheet of paper, complete the following sentences by choosing the correct infinitive or gerund.
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. I
meant
________
(to
kiss,
kissing)
my
kids
before
they
left
for
school.
The
children
hoped
(to
go,
going)
to
a
restaurant
for
dinner.
Do
you
intend
________
(to
eat,
eating)
the
entire
pie?
Crystal
postponed
________
(to
get
dressed,
getting
dressed)
for
the
party.
When
we
finish
________
(to
play,
playing)
this
game,
we
will
go
home.
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Key Takeaways
Verb tenses tell the reader when the action takes place. Actions could be in the past, present, or future. There are some irregular verbs in English that are formed in special ways. The most common of these irregular verbs are the verbs to be, to have, and to do. There are six main verb tenses in English: simple present, simple past, simple future, present perfect, past perfect, and future perfect. Verbs can be followed by either gerunds or infinitives.
Writing Application
Write about a lively event that is either remembered or imagined. Ask yourself the following three questions: What happened during the event? What happened after the event? Looking back, what do you think of the event now? Answer each question in a separate paragraph to keep the present, past, and future tense verbs separate.
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Learning Objectives
1. Define
and
identify
modal
auxiliaries.
2. Learn
how
and
when
to
use
modal
auxiliaries.
We all need to express our moods and emotions, both in writing and in our everyday life. We do this by using modal auxiliaries.
Modal
Auxiliaries
Modal auxiliaries are a type of helping verb that are used only with a main verb to help express its mood. The following is the basic formula for using a modal auxiliary:
Subject
James
+
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may
Expresses uncertain future action; permission; ask a yes-no question You may begin the exam. (permission)
May I attend the concert? (yes-no questions) might shall Expresses uncertain future action Expresses intended future action I might attend the concert (uncertain future actionsame as may) I shall go to the opera. (intended future action) I should mail my RSVP. (obligation, same as ought to) Should I call my mother? (asking if an obligation exists)
should
will
I will get an A in this class. (intended future action) Expresses intended future action; ask a favor; ask for information Will you buy me some chocolate? (favor) Will you be finished soon? (information)
would
States a preference; request a choice politely; I would like the steak, please. (preference) explain an action; introduce habitual past actions Would you like to have breakfast in bed?
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Modal Auxiliary
Use
Modal Auxiliary + Main Verb (request a choice politely) I would go with you if I didnt have to babysit tonight. (explain an action) He would write to me every week when we were dating. (habitual past action)
must ought to
We must be on time for class. I ought to mail my RSVP. (obligation, same as may)
Tip
Use the following format to form a yes-no question with a modal auxiliary:
Modal
auxiliary
Should
+
subject I
Be aware of these four common errors when using modal auxiliaries: 1. Using an infinitive instead of a base verb after a modal Incorrect: I can to move this heavy table. Correct: I can move this heavy table. 2. Using a gerund instead of an infinitive or a base verb after a modal Incorrect: I could moving to the United States. Correct: I could move to the United States. 3. Using two modals in a row Incorrect: I should must renew my passport. Correct: I must renew my passport. Correct: I should renew my passport.
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to
Scott
McLean
Saylor
URL:
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4. Leaving out a modal Incorrect: I renew my passport. Correct: I must renew my passport.
Exercise 1
Edit the following paragraph by correcting the common modal auxiliary errors. I may to go to France on vacation next summer. I shall might visit the Palace of Versailles. I would to drive around the countryside. I could imagining myself living there; however, I will not move to France because my family should miss me very much.
Remember, when a sentence contains a modal auxiliary before the verb, the helping verb is always have.
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Be aware of the following common errors when using modal auxiliaries in the present perfect tense: 1. Using had instead of have Incorrect: Jamie would had attended the party, but he was sick. Correct: Jamie would have attended the party, but he was sick. 2. Leaving out have Incorrect: Jamie would attended the party, but he was sick. Correct: Jamie would have attended the party, but he was sick.
Exercise 2
On a separate sheet of paper, complete the following sentences by changing the given verb form to a modal auxiliary in present perfect tense.
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. The
man
________
(laugh).
The
frogs
________
(croak).
My
writing
teacher
________
(smile).
The
audience
________
(cheer)
all
night.
My
best
friend
________
(giggled).
Key Takeaways
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There are ten main modal auxiliaries in English: can, could, may, might, shall, should, will, would, must, and ought to. The four common types of errors when using modals include the following: using an infinitive instead of a base verb after a modal, using a gerund instead of an infinitive or a base verb after a modal, using two modals in a row, and leaving out a modal. In the present perfect tense, when a sentence has a modal auxiliary before the verb, the helping verb is always have. The two common errors when using modals in the present perfect tense include using had instead of have and leaving out have.
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Writing Application
On a separate sheet of paper, write ten original sentences using modal auxiliaries.
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4.7 Prepositions
Learning Objectives
1. Identify
prepositions.
2. Learn
how
and
when
to
use
prepositions.
A preposition is a word that connects a noun or a pronoun to another word in a sentence. Most prepositions such as above, below, and behind usually indicate a location in the physical world, but some prepositions such as during, after, and until show location in time.
Table 4.13 On
Preposition
on
Time
day
date
specific
days/dates
Example
on
Monday
on
May
23
on
Monday
Place
surfaces
streets
modes
of
transportation
Example
on
the
table
on
124th
Street
on
the
bus
Table 4.14 At
Preposition
at
Time
time
Example
at
five
oclock
Place
addresses
Example
at
1600
Pennsylvania
Avenue
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with night
at night
location
at Rooneys Grill
Exercise 1
Edit the following letter from a resident to her landlord by correcting errors with in, at, and on. Dear Mrs. Salazar, I am writing this letter to inform you that I will be vacating apartment 2A in 356 Maple Street at Wednesday, June 30, 2010. I will be cleaning the apartment at the Monday before I leave. I will return the keys to you on 5 p.m., sharp, at June 30. If you have any questions or specific instructions for me, please contact me in my office. I have enjoyed living at Austin, Texas, but I want to explore other parts of the country now. Sincerely, Milani Davis
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to express regret for something, to say sorry about I apologize for being late. something to ask for something formally I will apply for that job.
to have a firm conviction in something; to believe in I believe in educating the worlds the existence of something women. to think that someone or something is important to be told about something or someone to watch or to protect someone or something to discuss something I care about the health of our oceans. I heard about the teachers strike. Will you look after my dog while I am on vacation? We will talk about the importance of recycling. I will speak to his teacher tomorrow. I will wait for my package to arrive.
speak to, with to talk to/with someone wait for to await the arrival of someone or something
Tip
It is a good idea to memorize these combinations of verbs plus prepositions. Write them down in a notebook along with the definition and practice using them when you speak.
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Exercise 2
On a separate sheet of paper, complete the following sentences by writing the correct preposition after the verb.
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. Charlotte
does
not
________
(apologize
for,
believe
in)
aliens
or
ghosts.
It
is
impolite
to
________
(hear
about,
talk
about)
people
when
they
are
not
here.
Herman
said
he
was
going
to
________
(believe
in,
apply
for)
the
internship.
Jonas
would
not
________
(talk
about,
apologize
for)
eating
the
last
piece
of
cake.
I
________
(care
about,
agree
with)
the
environment
very
much.
Meaning
Example
to
feel
or
show
anger
toward
(or
I
am
angry
about
the
oil
spill
in
the
about)
someone
or
something
ocean.
to
be
unable
to
think
with
clarity
Shawn
was
confused
about
the
about
someone
or
something.
concepts
presented
at
the
meeting.
to
feel
dissatisfaction
with
someone
or
I
was
disappointed
in
my
husband
something
because
he
voted
for
that
candidate.
to
clothe
the
body
He
was
dressed
in
a
pin-striped
suit.
to
show
happiness
for
someone
or
I
was
happy
for
my
sister
who
something
graduated
from
college.
giving
attention
to
something,
I
am
interested
in
musical
theater.
expressing
interest
to
feel
resentful
or
bitter
toward
I
was
jealous
of
her
because
she
someone
or
something
(because
of
always
went
on
vacation.
their
status,
possessions,
or
ability)
I
am
thankful
for
my
wonderful
to
express
thanks
for
something
friends.
to
be
disgusted
with,
have
a
distaste
I
was
tired
of
driving
for
hours
for
without
end.
to
express
anxiety
or
worry
about
I
am
worried
about
my
fathers
something
health.
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Exercise 3
On a separate sheet of paper, complete the following sentences by writing the correct preposition after the verb.
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. Meera
was
deeply
________
(interested
in,
thankful
for)
marine
biology.
I
was
________
(jealous
of,
disappointed
in)
the
season
finale
of
my
favorite
show.
Jordan
won
the
race,
and
I
am
________
(happy
for,
interested
in)
him.
The
lawyer
was
________
(thankful
for,
confused
about)
the
details
of
the
case.
Chloe
was
________
(dressed
in,
tired
of)
a
comfortable
blue
tunic.
Tip
The following adjectives are always followed by the preposition at:
Key Takeaways
The prepositions in, at, and on are used to indicate both location and time, but they are used in specific ways. The preposition in is used when expressing the following: year, month, season, time of day (not with night), country, state, and city. The preposition on is used to express day, date, and specific days or dates and surfaces, streets, and transportation modes. The preposition at is used for expressions of time, with night, and with addresses and locations. Prepositions often follow verbs to create expressions with distinct meanings that are unique to English. Prepositions also follow adjectives to create expressions with distinct meanings that are unique to English.
Writing Application
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Write about a happy childhood memory using as many prepositions followed by verbs and adjectives as you can. Use at least ten. When you are finished, exchange papers with a classmate and correct any preposition errors you find.
Learning Objectives
1. Recognize
slang
and
idioms.
2. Learn
to
avoid
using
slang
and
idioms
in
formal
writing.
Words are the basis of how a reader or listener judges you, the writer and speaker. When you write an academic paper or speak in a business interview, you want to be sure to choose your words carefully. In our casual, everyday talk, we often use a lot of ums, likes, yeahs, and so on. This everyday language is not appropriate for formal contexts, such as academic papers and business interviews. You should switch between different ways of speaking and writing depending on whether the context is formal or informal.
Slang
Hey guys, lets learn about slang and other cool stuff like that! It will be awesome, trust me. This section is off the hook! What do you notice about the previous paragraph? You might notice that the language sounds informal, or casual, like someone might talk with a friend or family member. The paragraph also uses a lot of slang. Slang is a type of language that is informal and playful. It often changes over time. The slang of the past is different than the slang of today, but some slang has carried over into the present. Slang also varies by region and culture. The important thing to understand is that slang is casual talk, and you should avoid using it in formal contexts. There are literally thousands of slang words and expressions. Table 4.17 "Slang Expressions" explains just a few of the more common terms. Table 4.17 Slang Expressions
Slang
Word
or
Phrase
check
it
out,
check
this
out
chocoholic,
workaholic,
shopaholic
stuff
taking
care
of
business
pro
crack
up
veg
(sounds
like
the
veg
in
vegetable)
dude,
man
all-nighter
cool
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to
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McLean
Saylor
URL:
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Meaning
v.
look
at,
watch,
examine
n.
a
person
who
loves,
is
addicted
to
chocolate/work/shopping
n.
things
(used
as
a
singular,
noncount
noun)
doing
things
that
need
to
be
done
n.
a
person
who
is
a
professional
v.
to
laugh
uncontrollably
v.
relax
and
do
nothing
n.
person,
man
n.
studying
all
night
adj.
good,
fashionable
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Exercise 1
Edit the business e-mail by replacing any slang words and phrases with more formal language. Dear Ms. OConnor: I am writing to follow up on my interview from last week. First of all, it was awesome to meet you. You are a really cool lady. I believe I would be a pro at all the stuff you mentioned that would be required of me in this job. I am not a workaholic, but I do work hard and take care of business. Haha. Please contact me if you have any questions or concerns. Sincerely, M. Ernest Anderson
Idioms
Idioms are expressions that have a meaning different from the dictionary definitions of the individual words in the expression. Because English contains many idioms, nonnative English speakers have difficulties making logical sense of idioms and idiomatic expressions. The more you are exposed to English, however, the more idioms you will come to understand. Until then, memorizing the more common idioms may be of some help. Table 4.18 Idioms
Idiom
a
blessing
in
disguise
a
piece
of
cake
better
late
than
never
get
over
it
I
have
no
idea
not
a
chance
on
pins
and
needles
on
top
of
the
world
pulling
your
leg
the
sky
is
the
limit
Definition
a
good
thing
you
do
not
recognize
at
first
easy
to
do
it
is
better
to
do
something
late
than
not
at
all
recover
from
something
(like
a
perceived
insult)
I
dont
know
it
will
definitely
not
happen
very
nervous
about
something
that
is
happening
feeling
great
making
a
joke
by
tricking
another
person
the
possibilities
are
endless
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What if you come across an idiom that you do not understand? There are clues that can help you. They are called context clues. Context clues are words or phrases around the unknown word or phrase that may help you decipher its meaning. 1. Definition or explanation clue. An idiom may be explained immediately after its use. Sentence: I felt like I was sitting on pins and needles I was so nervous. 2. Restatement or synonym clues. An idiom may be simplified or restated. Sentence: The young girl felt as though she had been sent to the dog house when her mother punished her for fighting in school. 3. Contrast or Antonym clues. An idiom may be clarified by a contrasting phrase or antonym that is near it. Sentence: Chynna thought the 5k marathon would be a piece of cake, but it turned out to be very difficult. Pay attention to the signal word but, which tells the reader that an opposite thought or concept is occurring.
Key Takeaways
Informal language is not appropriate in formal writing or speaking contexts. Slang and idioms might not make logical sense to nonnative speakers of English. It is good to be aware of slang and idioms so they do not appear in your formal writing.
Writing Application
Write a short paragraph about yourself to a friend. Write another paragraph about yourself to an employer. Examine and discuss the differences in language between the two paragraphs.
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Learning Objectives
1. Use
the
skills
you
have
learned
in
the
chapter.
2. Work
collaboratively
with
other
students.
Exercises
1. On a separate sheet of paper, create questions from the following sentences.
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. 1. 2. 3. 4. 5. 1. 2. 3. 4. 5. My
daughter
will
have
to
think
about
her
college
options.
Otto
is
waiting
in
the
car
for
his
girlfriend.
The
article
talks
about
conserving
energy.
We
need
to
reduce
our
needs.
Rusha
is
always
complaining
about
her
work.
Monica
told
us
about
her
trip.
I
hope
we
have
sunshine
throughout
the
summer.
The
panther
climbed
up
the
tree.
The
little
boy
was
standing
behind
his
mothers
legs.
We
stayed
awake
until
dawn.
eyes:
black,
mesmerizing
jacket:
vintage,
orange,
suede
pineapple:
ripe,
yellow,
sweet
vacation:
fun,
skiing
movie:
hilarious,
independent
3. Place the following sets of adjectives in the correct order before the noun.
4. On a separate sheet of paper, rewrite the positive sentences as negative sentences. Be sure to keep the sentences in the present tense.
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. Sometimes
I
work
on
Saturdays.
The
garden
attracts
butterflies
and
bees.
He
breathes
loudly
at
night.
I
chew
on
blades
of
grass
in
the
summer
time.
I
communicate
well
with
my
husband.
5. On a separate sheet of paper, rewrite the following paragraph by correcting the double negatives. That morning it was so hot Forrest felt like he couldnt hardly breathe. Aint nothing would get him out the door into that scorching heat. Then he remembered his dog, Zeus, who started whining right then. Zeus was whining and barking so much that Forrest didnt have no choice but to get off the couch and face the day. That dog didnt do nothing but sniff around the bushes and try to stay in the shade while Forrest was sweating in the sun holding the leash. He couldnt not wait for winter to come.
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Learning Objectives
1. Identify
the
four
common
academic
purposes.
2. Identify
audience,
tone,
and
content.
3. Apply
purpose,
audience,
tone,
and
content
to
a
specific
assignment.
Imagine reading one long block of text, with each idea blurring into the next. Even if you are reading a thrilling novel or an interesting news article, you will likely lose interest in what the author has to say very quickly. During the writing process, it is helpful to position yourself as a reader. Ask yourself whether you can focus easily on each point you make. One technique that effective writers use is to begin a fresh paragraph for each new idea they introduce. Paragraphs separate ideas into logical, manageable chunks. One paragraph focuses on only one main idea and presents coherent sentences to support that one point. Because all the sentences in one paragraph support the same point, a paragraph may stand on its own. To create longer assignments and to discuss more than one point, writers group together paragraphs. Three elements shape the content of each paragraph:
1. Purpose.
The
reason
the
writer
composes
the
paragraph.
2. Tone.
The
attitude
the
writer
conveys
about
the
paragraphs
subject.
3. Audience.
The
individual
or
group
whom
the
writer
intends
to
address.
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The assignments purpose, audience, and tone dictate what the paragraph covers and how it will support one main point. This section covers how purpose, audience, and tone affect reading and writing paragraphs.
Summary
Paragraphs
A summary shrinks a large amount of information into only the essentials. You probably summarize events, books, and movies daily. Think about the last blockbuster movie you saw or
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the last novel you read. Chances are, at some point in a casual conversation with a friend, coworker, or classmate, you compressed all the action in a two-hour film or in a two-hundredpage book into a brief description of the major plot movements. While in conversation, you probably described the major highlights, or the main points in just a few sentences, using your own vocabulary and manner of speaking. Similarly, a summary paragraph condenses a long piece of writing into a smaller paragraph by extracting only the vital information. A summary uses only the writers own words. Like the summarys purpose in daily conversation, the purpose of an academic summary paragraph is to maintain all the essential information from a longer document. Although shorter than the original piece of writing, a summary should still communicate all the key points and key support. In other words, summary paragraphs should be succinct and to the point.
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A summary of the report should present all the main points and supporting details in brief. Read the following summary of the report written by a student:
Notice how the summary retains the key points made by the writers of the original report but omits most of the statistical data. Summaries need not contain all the specific facts and figures in the original document; they provide only an overview of the essential information.
Analysis
Paragraphs
An analysis separates complex materials in their different parts and studies how the parts relate to one another. The analysis of simple table salt, for example, would require a deconstruction of its partsthe elements sodium (Na) and chloride (Cl). Then, scientists would study how the two elements interact to create the compound NaCl, or sodium chloride, which is also called simple table salt. Analysis is not limited to the sciences, of course. An analysis paragraph in academic writing fulfills the same purpose. Instead of deconstructing compounds, academic analysis paragraphs typically deconstruct documents. An analysis takes apart a primary source (an essay, a book, an article, etc.) point by point. It communicates the main points of the document by examining individual points and identifying how the points relate to one another.
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Notice how the analysis does not simply repeat information from the original report, but considers how the points within the report relate to one another. By doing this, the student uncovers a discrepancy between the points that are backed up by statistics and those that require additional information. Analyzing a document involves a close examination of each of the individual parts and how they work together.
Synthesis
Paragraphs
A synthesis combines two or more items to create an entirely new item. Consider the electronic musical instrument aptly named the synthesizer. It looks like a simple keyboard but displays a dashboard of switches, buttons, and levers. With the flip of a few switches, a musician may combine the distinct sounds of a piano, a flute, or a guitaror any other combination of instrumentsto create a new sound. The purpose of the synthesizer is to blend together the notes from individual instruments to form new, unique notes. The purpose of an academic synthesis is to blend individual documents into a new document. An academic synthesis paragraph considers the main points from one or more pieces of writing and links the main points together to create a new point, one not replicated in either document.
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Notice how the synthesis paragraphs consider each source and use information from each to create a new thesis. A good synthesis does not repeat information; the writer uses a variety of sources to create a new idea.
Evaluation
Paragraphs
An evaluation judges the value of something and determines its worth. Evaluations in everyday experiences are often not only dictated by set standards but also influenced by opinion and prior knowledge. For example, at work, a supervisor may complete an employee evaluation by judging his subordinates performance based on the companys goals. If the company focuses on improving communication, the supervisor will rate the employees customer service according to a standard scale. However, the evaluation still depends on the supervisors opinion and prior experience with the employee. The purpose of the evaluation is to determine how well the employee performs at his or her job. An academic evaluation communicates your opinion, and its justifications, about a document or a topic of discussion. Evaluations are influenced by your reading of the document, your prior knowledge, and your prior experience with the topic or issue. Because an evaluation incorporates your point of view and reasons for your point of view, it typically requires more critical thinking and a combination of summary, analysis, and synthesis skills. Thus evaluation paragraphs often follow summary, analysis, and synthesis paragraphs. Read a students evaluation paragraph.
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Notice how the paragraph incorporates the students personal judgment within the evaluation. Evaluating a document requires prior knowledge that is often based on additional research.
Tip
When reviewing directions for assignments, look for the verbs summarize, analyze, synthesize, or evaluate. Instructors often use these words to clearly indicate the assignments purpose. These words will cue you on how to complete the assignment because you will know its exact purpose.
Exercise 1
Read the following paragraphs about four films and then identify the purpose of each paragraph.
1. This
film
could
easily
have
been
cut
down
to
less
than
two
hours.
By
the
final
scene,
I
noticed
that
most
of
my
fellow
moviegoers
were
snoozing
in
their
seats
and
were
barely
paying
attention
to
what
was
happening
on
screen.
Although
the
director
sticks
diligently
to
the
book,
he
tries
too
hard
to
cram
in
all
the
action,
which
is
just
too
ambitious
for
such
a
detail-oriented
story.
If
you
want
my
advice,
read
the
book
and
give
the
movie
a
miss.
2. During
the
opening
scene,
we
learn
that
the
character
Laura
is
adopted
and
that
she
has
spent
the
past
three
years
desperately
trying
to
track
down
her
real
parents.
Having
exhausted
all
the
usual
optionsadoption
agencies,
online
searches,
family
trees,
and
so
onshe
is
on
the
verge
of
giving
up
when
she
meets
a
stranger
on
a
bus.
The
chance
encounter
leads
to
a
complicated
chain
of
events
that
ultimately
result
in
Laura
getting
her
lifelong
wish.
But
is
it
really
what
she
wants?
Throughout
the
rest
of
the
film,
Laura
discovers
that
sometimes
the
past
is
best
left
where
it
belongs.
3. To
create
the
feeling
of
being
gripped
in
a
vice,
the
director,
May
Lee,
uses
a
variety
of
elements
to
gradually
increase
the
tension.
The
creepy,
haunting
melody
that
subtly
enhances
the
earlier
scenes
becomes
ever
more
insistent,
rising
to
a
disturbing
crescendo
toward
the
end
of
the
movie.
The
desperation
of
the
actors,
combined
with
the
claustrophobic
atmosphere
and
tight
camera
angles
create
a
realistic
firestorm,
from
which
there
is
little
hope
of
escape.
Walking
out
of
the
theater
at
the
end
feels
like
staggering
out
of
a
Roman
dungeon.
4. The
scene
in
which
Campbell
and
his
fellow
prisoners
assist
the
guards
in
shutting
down
the
riot
immediately
strikes
the
viewer
as
unrealistic.
Based
on
the
recent
reports
on
prison
riots
in
both
Detroit
and
California,
it
seems
highly
unlikely
that
a
posse
of
hardened
criminals
will
intentionally
help
their
captors
at
the
risk
of
inciting
future
revenge
from
other
inmates.
Instead,
both
news
reports
and
psychological
studies
indicate
that
prisoners
who
do
not
actively
participate
in
a
riot
will
go
back
to
their
cells
and
avoid
conflict
altogether.
Examples
of
this
lack
of
attention
to
detail
occur
throughout
the
film,
making
it
almost
unbearable
to
watch.
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Thinking about the purpose of writing a report in the workplace can help focus and structure the document. A summary should provide colleagues with a factual overview of your findings without going into too much specific detail. In contrast, an evaluation should include your personal opinion, along with supporting evidence, research, or examples to back it up. Listen for words such as summarize, analyze, synthesize, or evaluate when your boss asks you to complete a report to help determine a purpose for writing.
Exercise 2
Consider the essay most recently assigned to you. Identify the most effective academic purpose for the assignment. My assignment: ____________________________________________ My purpose: ____________________________________________
characteristics, interests, and expectations before making decisions about what you write. In fact, thinking about audience has become so common that you may not even detect the audiencedriven decisions. For example, you update your status on a social networking site with the awareness of who will digitally follow the post. If you want to brag about a good grade, you may write the post to please family members. If you want to describe a funny moment, you may write with your friends senses of humor in mind. Even at work, you send e-mails with an awareness of an unintended receiver who could intercept the message. In other words, being aware of invisible readers is a skill you most likely already possess and one you rely on every day. Consider the following paragraphs. Which one would the author send to her parents? Which one would she send to her best friend? Example A Last Saturday, I volunteered at a local hospital. The visit was fun and rewarding. I even learned how to do cardiopulmonary resuscitation, or CPR. Unfortunately, I think caught a cold from one of the patients. This week, I will rest in bed and drink plenty of clear fluids. I hope I am well by next Saturday to volunteer again. Example B OMG! You wont believe this! My advisor forced me to do my community service hours at this hospital all weekend! We learned CPR but we did it on dummies, not even real peeps. And some kid sneezed on me and got me sick! I was so bored and sniffling all weekend; I hope I dont have to go back next week. I def do NOT want to miss the basketball tournament! Most likely, you matched each paragraph to its intended audience with little hesitation. Because each paragraph reveals the authors relationship with her intended readers, you can identify the audience fairly quickly. When writing your own paragraphs, you must engage with your audience to build an appropriate relationship given your subject. Imagining your readers during each stage of the writing process will help you make decisions about your writing. Ultimately, the people you visualize will affect what and how you write.
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While giving a speech, you may articulate an inspiring or critical message, but if you left your hair a mess and laced up mismatched shoes, your audience would not take you seriously. They may be too distracted by your appearance to listen to your words. Similarly, grammar and sentence structure serve as the appearance of a piece of writing. Polishing your work using correct grammar will impress your readers and allow them to focus on what you have to say.
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Because focusing on audience will enhance your writing, your process, and your finished product, you must consider the specific traits of your audience members. Use your imagination to anticipate the readers demographics, education, prior knowledge, and expectations.
Demographics. These measure important data about a group of people, such as their age range, their ethnicity, their religious beliefs, or their gender. Certain topics and assignments will require these kinds of considerations about your audience. For other topics and assignments, these measurements may not influence your writing in the end. Regardless, it is important to consider demographics when you begin to think about your purpose for writing. Education. Education considers the audiences level of schooling. If audience members have earned a doctorate degree, for example, you may need to elevate your style and use more formal language. Or, if audience members are still in college, you could write in a more relaxed style. An audience members major or emphasis may also dictate your writing. Prior knowledge. This refers to what the audience already knows about your topic. If your readers have studied certain topics, they may already know some terms and concepts related to the topic. You may decide whether to define terms and explain concepts based on your audiences prior knowledge. Although you cannot peer inside the brains of your readers to discover their knowledge, you can make reasonable assumptions. For instance, a nursing major would presumably know more about health-related topics than a business major would. Expectations. These indicate what readers will look for while reading your assignment. Readers may expect consistencies in the assignments appearance, such as correct grammar and traditional formatting like double-spaced lines and legible font. Readers may also have content- based expectations given the assignments purpose and organization. In an essay titled The Economics of Enlightenment: The Effects of Rising Tuition, for example, audience members may expect to read about the economic repercussions of college tuition costs.
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Exercise 3
On your own sheet of paper, generate a list of characteristics under each category for each audience. This list will help you later when you read about tone and content. 1. Your classmates
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4. Now think about your next writing assignment. Identify the purpose (you may use the same purpose listed in Note 5.12 "Exercise 2"), and then identify the audience. Create a list of characteristics under each category. My assignment: ____________________________________________ My purpose: ____________________________________________ My audience: ____________________________________________
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Also, remember that decisions about style depend on audience, purpose, and content. Identifying your audiences demographics, education, prior knowledge, and expectations will affect how you write, but purpose and content play an equally important role. The next subsection covers how to select an appropriate tone to match the audience and purpose.
Exercise 4
Think about the assignment and purpose you selected in Note 5.12 "Exercise 2", and the audience you selected in Note 5.16 "Exercise 3". Now, identify the tone you would use in the assignment. My assignment: ____________________________________________ My purpose: ____________________________________________ My audience: ____________________________________________ My tone: ____________________________________________
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Exercise 5
Match the content in the box to the appropriate audience and purpose. On your own sheet of paper, write the correct letter next to the number.
1. Whereas
economist
Holmes
contends
that
the
financial
crisis
is
far
from
over,
the
presidential
advisor
Jones
points
out
that
it
is
vital
to
catch
the
first
wave
of
opportunity
to
increase
market
share.
We
can
use
elements
of
both
experts
visions.
Let
me
explain
how.
2. In
2000,
foreign
money
flowed
into
the
United
States,
contributing
to
easy
credit
conditions.
People
bought
larger
houses
than
they
could
afford,
eventually
defaulting
on
their
loans
as
interest
rates
rose.
3. The
Emergency
Economic
Stabilization
Act,
known
by
most
of
us
as
the
humungous
government
bailout,
caused
mixed
reactions.
Although
supported
by
many
political
leaders,
the
statute
provoked
outrage
among
grassroots
groups.
In
their
opinion,
the
government
was
actually
rewarding
banks
for
their
appalling
behavior.
1. Audience: An instructor Purpose: To analyze the reasons behind the 2007 financial crisis Content: ____________________________________________ 2. Audience: Classmates Purpose: To summarize the effects of the $700 billion government bailout Content: ____________________________________________ 3. Audience: An employer
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Purpose: To synthesize two articles on preparing businesses for economic recovery Content: ____________________________________________ Collaboration Please share with a classmate and compare your answers.
Exercise 6
Using the assignment, purpose, audience, and tone from Note 5.18 "Exercise 4", generate a list of content ideas. Remember that content consists of examples, statistics, facts, anecdotes, testimonies, and observations. My assignment: ____________________________________________ My purpose: ____________________________________________ My audience: ____________________________________________ My tone: ____________________________________________ My content ideas: ____________________________________________
Key Takeaways
Paragraphs separate ideas into logical, manageable chunks of information. The content of each paragraph and document is shaped by purpose, audience, and tone. The four common academic purposes are to summarize, to analyze, to synthesize, and to evaluate. Identifying the audiences demographics, education, prior knowledge, and expectations will affect how and what you write. Devices such as sentence structure, word choice, punctuation, and formal or informal language communicate tone and create a relationship between the writer and his or her audience. Content may consist of examples, statistics, facts, anecdotes, testimonies, and observations. All content must be appropriate and interesting for the audience, purpose and tone.
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Learning Objectives
1. Identify
characteristics
of
a
good
topic
sentence.
2. Identify
the
three
parts
of
a
developed
paragraph.
3. Apply
knowledge
of
topic
sentences
and
parts
of
a
developed
paragraph
in
an
assignment.
Now that you have identified common purposes for writing and learned how to select appropriate content for a particular audience, you can think about the structure of a paragraph in greater detail. Composing an effective paragraph requires a method similar to building a house. You may have the finest content, or materials, but if you do not arrange them in the correct order, then the final product will not hold together very well. A strong paragraph contains three distinct components:
1. Topic
sentence.
The
topic
sentence
is
the
main
idea
of
the
paragraph.
2. Body.
The
body
is
composed
of
the
supporting
sentences
that
develop
the
main
point.
3. Conclusion.
The
conclusion
is
the
final
sentence
that
summarizes
the
main
point.
The foundation of a good paragraph is the topic sentence, which expresses the main idea of the paragraph. The topic sentence relates to the thesis, or main point, of the essay (see Chapter 8 "Writing Essays: From Start to Finish" for more information about thesis statements) and guides the reader by signposting what the paragraph is about. All the sentences in the rest of the paragraph should relate to the topic sentence. This section covers the major components of a paragraph and examines how to develop an effective topic sentence.
particular state, or to discuss math or English education specifically, then the topic sentence is misleading.
Tip
When writing a draft of an essay, allow a friend or colleague to read the opening line of your first paragraph. Ask your reader to predict what your paper will be about. If he or she is unable to guess your topic accurately, you should consider revising your topic sentence so that it clearly defines your purpose in writing.
Marijuana is a destructive influence on teens and causes long-term brain damage. The antinausea properties in marijuana are a lifeline for many cancer patients. Legalizing marijuana would create a higher demand for Class A and Class B drugs.
Although the main ideamarijuanais the same in all three topic sentences, the controlling idea differs depending on the writers viewpoint.
Exercise 1
Circle the main idea and underline the controlling idea in each of the following topic sentences.
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. Exercising
three
times
a
week
is
the
only
way
to
maintain
good
physical
health.
Sexism
and
racism
are
still
rampant
in
todays
workplace.
Raising
the
legal
driving
age
to
twenty-one
would
decrease
road
traffic
accidents.
Owning
a
business
is
the
only
way
to
achieve
financial
success.
Dog
owners
should
be
prohibited
from
taking
their
pets
on
public
beaches.
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Weak example. People rarely give firefighters the credit they deserve for such a physically and emotionally demanding job. (The paragraph is about a specific incident that involved firefighters; therefore, this topic sentence is too general.) Stronger example. During the October riots, Unit 3B went beyond the call of duty. (This topic sentence is more specific and indicates that the paragraph will contain information about a particular incident involving Unit 3B.) 2. A good topic sentence contains both a topic and a controlling idea or opinion. Weak example. In this paper, I am going to discuss the rising suicide rate among young professionals. (This topic sentence provides a main idea, but it does not present a controlling idea, or thesis.) Stronger example. The rising suicide rate among young professionals is a cause for immediate concern. (This topic sentence presents the writers opinion on the subject of rising suicide rates among young professionals.) 3. A good topic sentence is clear and easy to follow. Weak example. In general, writing an essay, thesis, or other academic or nonacademic document is considerably easier and of much higher quality if you first construct an outline, of which there are many different types. (This topic sentence includes a main idea and a controlling thesis, but both are buried beneath the confusing sentence structure and unnecessary vocabulary. These obstacles make it difficult for the reader to follow.) Stronger example. Most forms of writing can be improved by first creating an outline. (This topic sentence cuts out unnecessary verbiage and simplifies the previous statement, making it easier for the reader to follow.) 4. A good topic sentence does not include supporting details. Weak example. Salaries should be capped in baseball for many reasons, most importantly so we dont allow the same team to win year after year. (This topic sentence includes a supporting detail that should be included later in the paragraph to back up the main point.) Stronger example. Introducing a salary cap would improve the game of baseball for many reasons. (This topic sentence omits the additional supporting detail so that it can be expanded upon later in the paragraph.) 5. A good topic sentence engages the reader by using interesting vocabulary. Weak example. The military deserves better equipment. (This topic sentence includes a main idea and a controlling thesis, but the language is bland and unexciting.)
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Stronger example. The appalling lack of resources provided to the military is outrageous and requires our immediate attention. (This topic sentence reiterates the same idea and controlling thesis, but adjectives such as appalling and immediate better engage the reader. These words also indicate the writers tone.)
Exercise 2
Choose the most effective topic sentence from the following sentence pairs. 1. a. This paper will discuss the likelihood of the Democrats winning the next election. b. To boost their chances of winning the next election, the Democrats need to listen to public opinion. 2. a. The unrealistic demands of union workers are crippling the economy for three main reasons. b. Union workers are crippling the economy because companies are unable to remain competitive as a result of added financial pressure. 3. a. Authors are losing money as a result of technological advances. b. The introduction of new technology will devastate the literary world. 4. a. Rap music is produced by untalented individuals with oversized egos. b. This essay will consider whether talent is required in the rap music industry.
Exercise 3
Using the tips on developing effective topic sentences in this section, create a topic sentence on each of the following subjects. Remember to include a controlling idea as well as a main idea. Write your responses on your own sheet of paper. 1. An endangered species ____________________________________________ 2. The cost of fuel ____________________________________________ 3. The legal drinking age ____________________________________________
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When creating a workplace document, use the top-down approachkeep the topic sentence at the beginning of each paragraph so that readers immediately understand the gist of the message. This method saves busy colleagues precious time and effort trying to figure out the main points and relevant details. Headings are another helpful tool. In a text-heavy document, break up each paragraph with individual headings. These serve as useful navigation aids, enabling colleagues to skim through the document and locate paragraphs that are relevant to them.
Developing
Paragraphs
That
Use
Topic
Sentences,
Supporting
Ideas,
and
Transitions
Effectively
Learning how to develop a good topic sentence is the first step toward writing a solid paragraph. Once you have composed your topic sentence, you have a guideline for the rest of the paragraph. To complete the paragraph, a writer must support the topic sentence with additional information and summarize the main point with a concluding sentence. This section identifies the three major structural parts of a paragraph and covers how to develop a paragraph using transitional words and phrases.
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Read the following paragraph. The topic sentence is underlined for you. After reading the new TV guide this week I had just one thoughtwhy are we still being bombarded with reality shows? This season, the plague of reality television continues to darken our airwaves. Along with the return of viewer favorites, we are to be cursed with yet another mindless creation. Prisoner follows the daily lives of eight suburban housewives who have chosen to be put in jail for the purposes of this fake psychological experiment. A preview for the first episode shows the usual tears and tantrums associated with reality television. I dread to think what producers will come up with next season, but if any of them are reading this blog stop it! Weve had enough reality television to last us a lifetime! The first sentence of this paragraph is the topic sentence. It tells the reader that the paragraph will be about reality television shows, and it expresses the writers distaste for these shows through the use of the word bombarded. Each of the following sentences in the paragraph supports the topic sentence by providing further information about a specific reality television show. The final sentence is the concluding sentence. It reiterates the main point that viewers are bored with reality television shows by using different words from the topic sentence. Paragraphs that begin with the topic sentence move from the general to the specific. They open with a general statement about a subject (reality shows) and then discuss specific examples (the reality show Prisoner). Most academic essays contain the topic sentence at the beginning of the first paragraph. Now take a look at the following paragraph. The topic sentence is underlined for you. Last year, a cat traveled 130 miles to reach its family, who had moved to another state and had left their pet behind. Even though it had never been to their new home, the cat was able to track down its former owners. A dog in my neighborhood can predict when its master is about to have a seizure. It makes sure that he does not hurt himself during an epileptic fit. Compared to many animals, our own senses are almost dull. The last sentence of this paragraph is the topic sentence. It draws on specific examples (a cat that tracked down its owners and a dog that can predict seizures) and then makes a general statement that draws a conclusion from these examples (animals senses are better than humans). In this case, the supporting sentences are placed before the topic sentence and the concluding sentence is the same as the topic sentence. This technique is frequently used in persuasive writing. The writer produces detailed examples as evidence to back up his or her point, preparing the reader to accept the concluding topic sentence as the truth. Sometimes, the topic sentence appears in the middle of a paragraph. Read the following example. The topic sentence is underlined for you.
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For many years, I suffered from severe anxiety every time I took an exam. Hours before the exam, my heart would begin pounding, my legs would shake, and sometimes I would become physically unable to move. Last year, I was referred to a specialist and finally found a way to control my anxietybreathing exercises. It seems so simple, but by doing just a few breathing exercises a couple of hours before an exam, I gradually got my anxiety under control. The exercises help slow my heart rate and make me feel less anxious. Better yet, they require no pills, no equipment, and very little time. Its amazing how just breathing correctly has helped me learn to manage my anxiety symptoms. In this paragraph, the underlined sentence is the topic sentence. It expresses the main ideathat breathing exercises can help control anxiety. The preceding sentences enable the writer to build up to his main point (breathing exercises can help control anxiety) by using a personal anecdote (how he used to suffer from anxiety). The supporting sentences then expand on how breathing exercises help the writer by providing additional information. The last sentence is the concluding sentence and restates how breathing can help manage anxiety. Placing a topic sentence in the middle of a paragraph is often used in creative writing. If you notice that you have used a topic sentence in the middle of a paragraph in an academic essay, read through the paragraph carefully to make sure that it contains only one major topic. To read more about topic sentences and where they appear in paragraphs, see Chapter 7 "The Writing Process: How Do I Begin?".
Tip
Avoid using implied topic sentences in an informational document. Readers often lose patience if they are unable to quickly grasp what the writer is trying to say. The clearest and most efficient way to communicate in an informational document is to position the topic sentence at the beginning of the paragraph.
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Exercise 4
Identify the topic sentence, supporting sentences, and concluding sentence in the following paragraph. The desert provides a harsh environment in which few mammals are able to adapt. Of these hardy creatures, the kangaroo rat is possibly the most fascinating. Able to live in some of the most arid parts of the southwest, the kangaroo rat neither sweats nor pants to keep cool. Its specialized kidneys enable it to survive on a miniscule amount of water. Unlike other desert creatures, the kangaroo rat does not store water in its body but instead is able to convert the dry seeds it eats into moisture. Its ability to adapt to such a hostile environment makes the kangaroo rat a truly amazing creature. Collaboration Please share with a classmate and compare your answers.
Supporting
Sentences
If you think of a paragraph as a hamburger, the supporting sentences are the meat inside the bun. They make up the body of the paragraph by explaining, proving, or enhancing the controlling idea in the topic sentence. Most paragraphs contain three to six supporting sentences depending on the audience and purpose for writing. A supporting sentence usually offers one of the following:
Reason Sentence: The refusal of the baby boom generation to retire is contributing to the current lack of available jobs.
Fact Sentence: Many families now rely on older relatives to support them financially.
Statistic Sentence: Nearly 10 percent of adults are currently unemployed in the United States.
Quotation Sentence: We will not allow this situation to continue, stated Senator Johns.
Example Sentence: Last year, Bill was asked to retire at the age of fifty-five.
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The type of supporting sentence you choose will depend on what you are writing and why you are writing. For example, if you are attempting to persuade your audience to take a particular position you should rely on facts, statistics, and concrete examples, rather than personal opinions. Read the following example: There are numerous advantages to owning a hybrid car. (Topic sentence) First, they get 20 percent to 35 percent more miles to the gallon than a fuel-efficient gas-powered vehicle. (Supporting sentence 1: statistic) Second, they produce very few emissions during low speed city driving. (Supporting sentence 2: fact) Because they do not require gas, hybrid cars reduce dependency on fossil fuels, which helps lower prices at the pump. (Supporting sentence 3: reason) Alex bought a hybrid car two years ago and has been extremely impressed with its performance. (Supporting sentence 4: example) Its the cheapest car Ive ever had, she said. The running costs are far lower than previous gas powered vehicles Ive owned. (Supporting sentence 5: quotation) Given the low running costs and environmental benefits of owning a hybrid car, it is likely that many more people will follow Alexs example in the near future. (Concluding sentence) To find information for your supporting sentences, you might consider using one of the following sources:
Reference book Encyclopedia Website Biography/autobiography Map Dictionary Newspaper/magazine Interview Previous experience Personal research
To read more about sources and research, see Chapter 10 "Writing Preparation".
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Tip
When searching for information on the Internet, remember that some websites are more reliable than others. websites ending in .gov or .edu are generally more reliable than websites ending in .com or .org. Wikis and blogs are not reliable sources of information because they are subject to inaccuracies.
Concluding
Sentences
An effective concluding sentence draws together all the ideas you have raised in your paragraph. It reminds readers of the main pointthe topic sentencewithout restating it in exactly the same words. Using the hamburger example, the top bun (the topic sentence) and the bottom bun (the concluding sentence) are very similar. They frame the meat or body of the paragraph. Compare the topic sentence and concluding sentence from the previous example: Topic sentence: There are numerous advantages to owning a hybrid car. Concluding sentence: Given the low running costs and environmental benefits of owning a hybrid car, it is likely that many more people will follow Alexs example in the near future. Notice the use of the synonyms advantages and benefits. The concluding sentence reiterates the idea that owning a hybrid is advantageous without using the exact same words. It also summarizes two examples of the advantages covered in the supporting sentences: low running costs and environmental benefits. You should avoid introducing any new ideas into your concluding sentence. A conclusion is intended to provide the reader with a sense of completion. Introducing a subject that is not covered in the paragraph will confuse the reader and weaken your writing. A concluding sentence may do any of the following:
Restate the main idea. Example: Childhood obesity is a growing problem in the United States.
Summarize the key points in the paragraph. Example: A lack of healthy choices, poor parenting, and an addiction to video games are among the many factors contributing to childhood obesity.
Draw a conclusion based on the information in the paragraph. Example: These statistics indicate that unless we take action, childhood obesity rates will continue to rise.
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Make a prediction, suggestion, or recommendation about the information in the paragraph. Example: Based on this research, more than 60 percent of children in the United States will be morbidly obese by the year 2030 unless we take evasive action.
Offer an additional observation about the controlling idea. Example: Childhood obesity is an entirely preventable tragedy.
Exercise 5
On your own paper, write one example of each type of concluding sentence based on a topic of your choice.
Transitions
A strong paragraph moves seamlessly from the topic sentence into the supporting sentences and on to the concluding sentence. To help organize a paragraph and ensure that ideas logically connect to one another, writers use transitional words and phrases. A transition is a connecting word that describes a relationship between ideas. Take another look at the earlier example: There are numerous advantages to owning a hybrid car. First, they get 20 percent to 35 percent more miles to the gallon than a fuel-efficient gas-powered vehicle. Second, they produce very few emissions during low speed city driving. Because they do not require gas, hybrid cars reduce dependency on fossil fuels, which helps lower prices at the pump. Alex bought a hybrid car two years ago and has been extremely impressed with its performance. Its the cheapest car Ive ever had, she said. The running costs are far lower than previous gas-powered vehicles Ive owned. Given the low running costs and environmental benefits of owning a hybrid car, it is likely that many more people will follow Alexs example in the near future. Each of the underlined words is a transition word. Words such as first and second are transition words that show sequence or clarify order. They help organize the writers ideas by showing that he or she has another point to make in support of the topic sentence. Other transition words that show order include third, also, and furthermore. The transition word because is a transition word of consequence that continues a line of thought. It indicates that the writer will provide an explanation of a result. In this sentence, the writer explains why hybrid cars will reduce dependency on fossil fuels (because they do not require gas). Other transition words of consequence include as a result, so that, since, or for this reason. To include a summarizing transition in her concluding sentence, the writer could rewrite the final sentence as follows: In conclusion, given the low running costs and environmental benefits of owning a hybrid car, it is likely that many more people will follow Alexs example in the near future.
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The following chart provides some useful transition words to connect supporting sentences and concluding sentences. See Chapter 7 "The Writing Process: How Do I Begin?" for a more comprehensive look at transitional words and phrases. Table 5.1 Useful Transitional Words and Phrases
above
all
also
aside
from
at
the
same
time
but
conversely
correspondingly
for
example
For Supporting Sentences for
instance
in
particular
furthermore
later
on
however
likewise
in
addition
meanwhile
For Concluding Sentences all things in brief in considered summary finally in on conclusion balance
to sum up
Exercise 6
Using your own paper, write a paragraph on a topic of your choice. Be sure to include a topic sentence, supporting sentences, and a concluding sentence and to use transitional words and phrases to link your ideas together. Collaboration Please share with a classmate and compare your answers.
Writing at Work
Transitional words and phrases are useful tools to incorporate into workplace documents. They guide the reader through the document, clarifying relationships between sentences and paragraphs so that the reader understands why they have been written in that particular order. For example, when writing an instructional memo, it may be helpful to consider the following transitional words and phrases: before you begin, first, next, then, finally, after you have completed. Using these transitions as a template to write your memo will provide readers with clear, logical instructions about a particular process and the order in which steps are supposed to be completed.
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Key Takeaways
A good paragraph contains three distinct components: a topic sentence, body, and concluding sentence. The topic sentence expresses the main idea of the paragraph combined with the writers attitude or opinion about the topic. Good topic sentences contain both a main idea and a controlling idea, are clear and easy to follow, use engaging vocabulary, and provide an accurate indication of what will follow in the rest of the paragraph. Topic sentences may be placed at the beginning, middle, or end of a paragraph. In most academic essays, the topic sentence is placed at the beginning of a paragraph. Supporting sentences help explain, prove, or enhance the topic sentence by offering facts, reasons, statistics, quotations, or examples. Concluding sentences summarize the key points in a paragraph and reiterate the main idea without repeating it word for word. Transitional words and phrases help organize ideas in a paragraph and show how these ideas relate to one another.
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Exercises
1. Select one of the following topics or choose a topic of your choice:
o o o o o
Drilling for oil in Alaska Health care reform Introducing a four-day work week Bringing pets to work Charging airline passengers to use the in-flight bathroom
Create a topic sentence based on the topic you chose, remembering to include both a main idea and a controlling idea. Next, write an alternative topic sentence using the same main idea but a different controlling idea. Explain how each fully developed paragraph might differ in tone and content. Collaboration Please share with a classmate and compare your answers. 2. At some point during your career, you may be asked to write a report or complete a presentation. Imagine that you have been asked to report on the issue of health and safety in the workplace. Using the information in Section 5.1.2 "Identifying the Audience", complete an analysis of your intended audienceyour fellow office workers. Consider how demographics, education, prior knowledge, and expectations will influence your report and explain how you will tailor it to your audience accordingly. Collaboration Please share with a classmate and compare your answers.
3. Group
activity.
Working
in
a
group
of
four
or
five,
assign
each
group
member
the
task
of
collecting
one
document
each.
These
documents
might
include
magazine
or
newspaper
articles,
workplace
documents,
academic
essays,
chapters
from
a
reference
book,
film
or
book
reviews,
or
any
other
type
of
writing.
As
a
group,
read
through
each
document
and
discuss
the
authors
purpose
for
writing.
Use
the
information
you
have
learned
in
this
chapter
to
decide
whether
the
main
purpose
is
to
summarize,
analyze,
synthesize,
or
evaluate.
Write
a
brief
report
on
the
purpose
of
each
document,
using
supporting
evidence
from
the
text.
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4. Group activity. Working in a small group, select a workplace document or academic essay that has a clear thesis. Examine each paragraph and identify the topic sentence, supporting sentences, and concluding sentence. Then, choose one particular paragraph and discuss the following questions:
o o o o
Is the topic sentence clearly identifiable or is it implied? Do all the supporting sentences relate to the topic sentence? Does the writer use effective transitions to link his or her ideas? Does the concluding sentence accurately summarize the main point of the paragraph?
As a group, identify the weakest areas of the paragraph and rewrite them. Focus on the relationship among the topic sentence, supporting sentences, and concluding sentence. Use transitions to illustrate the connection between each sentence in the paragraph. 5. Peer activity. Using the information you have learned in this chapter, write a paragraph about a current event. Underline the topic sentence in your paragraph. Now, rewrite the paragraph, placing the topic sentence in a different part of the paragraph. Read the two paragraphs aloud to a peer and have him or her identify the topic sentence. Discuss which paragraph is more effective and why. Collaboration Please share with a classmate, compare your answers, and discuss the contrasting results.
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Learning Objectives
1. Identify
ways
to
vary
sentence
structure.
2. Write
and
revise
sentence
structure
at
the
beginning
of
sentences.
3. Write
and
revise
sentence
structure
by
connecting
ideas.
Have you ever ordered a dish in a restaurant and been not happy with its taste, even though it contained most of your favorite ingredients? Just as a meal might lack the finishing touches needed to spice it up, so too might a paragraph contain all the basic components but still lack the stylistic finesse required to engage a reader. Sometimes writers have a tendency to reuse the same sentence pattern throughout their writing. Like any repetitive task, reading text that contains too many sentences with the same length and structure can become monotonous and boring. Experienced writers mix it up by using an assortment of sentence patterns, rhythms, and lengths. In this chapter, you will follow a student named Naomi who has written a draft of an essay but needs to refine her writing. This section discusses how to introduce sentence variety into writing, how to open sentences using a variety of techniques, and how to use different types of sentence structure when connecting ideas. You can use these techniques when revising a paper to bring life and rhythm to your work. They will also make reading your work more enjoyable.
During my time in office, I have helped increase funding for local schools, reduced crime rates in the neighborhood, and encouraged young people to get involved in their community. Why fix what isnt broken? If you reelect me this year, I will continue to achieve great things for this community. Dont take a chance on an unknown contender; vote for the proven success. Notice how introducing a short rhetorical question among the longer sentences in the paragraph is an effective means of keeping the readers attention. In the revised version, the writer combines the choppy sentences at the beginning into one longer sentence, which adds rhythm and interest to the paragraph.
Tip
Effective writers often implement the rule of three, which is basically the thought that things that contain three elements are more memorable and more satisfying to readers than any other number. Try to use a series of three when providing examples, grouping adjectives, or generating a list.
Exercise 1
Combine each set of simple sentences into a compound or a complex sentence. Write the combined sentence on your own sheet of paper.
1. Heroin
is
an
extremely
addictive
drug.
Thousands
of
heroin
addicts
die
each
year.
2. Shakespeares
writing
is
still
relevant
today.
He
wrote
about
timeless
themes.
These
themes
include
love,
hate,
jealousy,
death,
and
destiny.
3. Gay
marriage
is
now
legal
in
six
states.
Iowa,
Massachusetts,
Connecticut,
Vermont,
New
Hampshire,
and
Maine
all
permit
same-sex
marriage.
Other
states
are
likely
to
follow
their
example.
4. Prewriting
is
a
vital
stage
of
the
writing
process.
Prewriting
helps
you
organize
your
ideas.
Types
of
prewriting
include
outlining,
brainstorming,
and
idea
mapping.
5. Mitch
Bancroft
is
a
famous
writer.
He
also
serves
as
a
governor
on
the
local
school
board.
Mitchs
two
children
attend
the
school.
If you are having trouble figuring out why these sentences are similar, try underlining the subject in each. You will notice that the subject is positioned at the beginning of each sentenceJohn and Amanda, the car, students. Since the subject-verb-object pattern is the simplest sentence structure, many writers tend to overuse this technique, which can result in repetitive paragraphs with little sentence variety. Naomi wrote an essay about the 2008 government bailout. Read this excerpt from Naomis essay:
This section examines several ways to introduce sentence variety at the beginning of sentences, using Naomis essay as an example.
Note that an adverb used at the beginning of a sentence is usually followed by a comma. A comma indicates that the reader should pause briefly, which creates a useful rhetorical device. Read the following sentences aloud and consider the effect of pausing after the adverb: Cautiously, he unlocked the kennel and waited for the dogs reaction. Solemnly, the policeman approached the mayor and placed him under arrest. Suddenly, he slammed the door shut and sprinted across the street. In an academic essay, moving an adverb to the beginning of a sentence serves to vary the rhythm of a paragraph and increase sentence variety.
Naomi has used two adverbs in her essay that could be moved to the beginning of their respective sentences. Notice how the following revised version creates a more varied paragraph:
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Tip
Adverbs of timeadverbs that indicate when an action takes placedo not always require a comma when used at the beginning of a sentence. Adverbs of time include words such as yesterday, today, later, sometimes, often, and now.
Exercise 2
On your own sheet of paper, rewrite the following sentences by moving the adverbs to the beginning.
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. The
red
truck
sped
furiously
past
the
camper
van,
blaring
its
horn.
Jeff
snatched
at
the
bread
hungrily,
polishing
off
three
slices
in
under
a
minute.
Underage
drinking
typically
results
from
peer
pressure
and
lack
of
parental
attention.
The
firefighters
bravely
tackled
the
blaze,
but
they
were
beaten
back
by
flames.
Mayor
Johnson
privately
acknowledged
that
the
budget
was
excessive
and
that
further
discussion
was
needed.
Read the following sentence: The terrified child hid underneath the table. In this sentence, the prepositional phrase is underneath the table. The preposition underneath relates to the object that follows the prepositionthe table. Adjectives may be placed between the preposition and the object in a prepositional phrase. The terrified child hid underneath the heavy wooden table. Some prepositional phrases can be moved to the beginning of a sentence in order to create variety in a piece of writing. Look at the following revised sentence: Underneath the heavy wooden table, the terrified child hid. Notice that when the prepositional phrase is moved to the beginning of the sentence, the emphasis shifts from the subjectthe terrified childto the location in which the child is hiding. Words that are placed at the beginning or end of a sentence generally receive the greatest emphasis. Take a look at the following examples. The prepositional phrase is underlined in each: The bandaged man waited in the doctors office. In the doctors office, the bandaged man waited. My train leaves the station at 6:45 a.m. At 6:45 a.m., my train leaves the station. Teenagers exchange drugs and money under the railway bridge. Under the railway bridge, teenagers exchange drugs and money.
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Prepositional phrases are useful in any type of writing. Take another look at Naomis essay on the government bailout.
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The underlined words are all prepositional phrases. Notice how they add additional information to the text and provide a sense of flow to the essay, making it less choppy and more pleasurable to read.
Unmovable Prepositional Phrases Not all prepositional phrases can be placed at the beginning of a sentence. Read the following sentence: I would like a chocolate sundae without whipped cream. In this sentence, without whipped cream is the prepositional phrase. Because it describes the chocolate sundae, it cannot be moved to the beginning of the sentence. Without whipped cream I would like a chocolate sundae does not make as much (if any) sense. To determine whether a prepositional phrase can be moved, we must determine the meaning of the sentence. Overuse of Prepositional Phrases Experienced writers often include more than one prepositional phrase in a sentence; however, it is important not to overload your writing. Using too many modifiers in a paragraph may create an unintentionally comical effect as the following example shows: The treasure lay buried under the old oak tree, behind the crumbling fifteenth-century wall, near the schoolyard, where children played merrily during their lunch hour, unaware of the riches that remained hidden beneath their feet. A sentence is not necessarily effective just because it is long and complex. If your sentence appears cluttered with prepositional phrases, divide it into two shorter sentences. The previous sentence is far more effective when written as two simpler sentences: The treasure lay buried under the old oak tree, behind the crumbling fifteenth-century wall. In the nearby schoolyard, children played merrily during their lunch hour, unaware of the riches that remained hidden beneath their feet.
Writing at Work
The overuse of prepositional phrases often occurs when our thoughts are jumbled and we are unsure how concepts or ideas relate to one another. If you are preparing a report or a proposal, take the time to organize your thoughts in an outline before writing a rough draft. Read the draft aloud, either to yourself or to a colleague, and identify areas that are rambling or unclear. If you notice that a particular part of your report contains several sentences over twenty words, you should double check that particular section to make certain that it is coherent and does not contain unnecessary prepositional phrases. Reading aloud sometimes helps detect unclear and
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wordy sentences. You can also ask a colleague to paraphrase your main points to ensure that the meaning is clear.
Notice how the second sentence in each pair places more emphasis on the subjecta truck in the first example and the file in the second. This technique is useful for drawing the readers attention to your primary area of focus. We can apply this method to an academic essay. Take another look at Naomis paragraph.
To emphasize the subject in certain sentences, Naomi can invert the traditional sentence structure. Read her revised paragraph:
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Notice that in the first underlined sentence, the subject (some economists) is placed after the verb (argued). In the second underlined sentence, the subject (the government) is placed after the verb (expects).
Exercise 3
On your own sheet of paper, rewrite the following sentences as inverted sentences.
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. Teresa
will
never
attempt
to
run
another
marathon.
A
detailed
job
description
is
enclosed
with
this
letter.
Bathroom
facilities
are
across
the
hall
to
the
left
of
the
water
cooler.
The
well-dressed
stranger
stumbled
through
the
doorway.
My
colleagues
remain
unconvinced
about
the
proposed
merger.
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Dangling
Modifiers
A common mistake when combining sentences using the -ing verb form is to misplace the modifier so that it is not logically connected to the rest of the sentence. This creates a dangling modifier. Look at the following example: Jogging across the parking lot, my breath grew ragged and shallow. In this sentence, jogging across the parking lot seems to modify my breath. Since breath cannot jog, the sentence should be rewritten so that the subject is placed immediately after the modifier or added to the dangling phrase.
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Jogging across the parking lot, I felt my breath grow ragged and shallow. For more information on dangling modifiers, see Chapter 1 "Writing Basics: What Makes a Good Sentence?".
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The revised version of the essay uses the -ing modifier opting to draw a connection between the governments decision to bail out the banks and the result of that decisionthe acquisition of the mortgage-backed securities.
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Relative clauses are a useful way of providing additional, nonessential information in a sentence. Take a look at how Naomi might incorporate relative clauses into her essay.
Notice how the underlined relative clauses can be removed from Naomis essay without changing the meaning of the sentence.
Tip
To check the punctuation of relative clauses, assess whether or not the clause can be taken out of the sentence without changing its meaning. If the relative clause is not essential to the meaning of the sentence, it should be placed in commas. If the relative clause is essential to the meaning of the sentence, it does not require commas around it.
In the revised sentence, the Colonel is an appositive because it renames Harland Sanders. To combine two sentences using an appositive, drop the subject and verb from the sentence that renames the noun and turn it into a phrase. Note that in the previous example, the appositive is positioned immediately after the noun it describes. An appositive may be placed anywhere in a sentence, but it must come directly before or after the noun to which it refers: Appositive after noun: Scott, a poorly trained athlete, was not expected to win the race. Appositive before noun: A poorly trained athlete, Scott was not expected to win the race. Unlike relative clauses, appositives are always punctuated by a comma or a set commas. Take a look at the way Naomi uses appositives to include additional facts in her essay.
Exercise 4
On your own sheet of paper, rewrite the following sentence pairs as one sentence using the techniques you have learned in this section.
1. Baby
sharks
are
called
pups.
Pups
can
be
born
in
one
of
three
ways.
2. The
Pacific
Ocean
is
the
worlds
largest
ocean.
It
extends
from
the
Arctic
in
the
north
to
the
Southern
Ocean
in
the
south.
3. Michael
Phelps
won
eight
gold
medals
in
the
2008
Olympics.
He
is
a
champion
swimmer.
4. Ashley
introduced
her
colleague
Dan
to
her
husband,
Jim.
She
speculated
that
the
two
of
them
would
have
a
lot
in
common.
5. Cacao
is
harvested
by
hand.
It
is
then
sold
to
chocolate-processing
companies
at
the
Coffee,
Sugar,
and
Cocoa
Exchange.
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Writing at Work
In addition to varying sentence structure, consider varying the types of sentences you are using in a report or other workplace document. Most sentences are declarative, but a carefully placed question, exclamation, or command can pique colleagues interest, even if the subject material is fairly dry. Imagine that you are writing a budget analysis. Beginning your report with a rhetorical question, such as Where is our money going? or How can we increase sales? encourages people to continue reading to find out the answers. Although they should be used sparingly in academic and professional writing, questions or commands are effective rhetorical devices.
Key Takeaways
Sentence variety reduces repetition in a piece of writing and adds emphasis to important points in the text. Sentence variety can be introduced to the beginning of sentences by starting a sentence with an adverb, starting a sentence with a prepositional phrase, or by inverting the subject and verb. Combine ideas, using modifiers, relative clauses, or appositives, to achieve sentence variety.
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Learning Objectives
1. Identify
coordination
and
subordination
in
writing.
2. Combine
sentences
and
ideas
using
coordination.
3. Combine
sentences
and
ideas
using
subordination.
In the previous section, we learned how to use different patterns to create sentence variety and to add emphasis to important points in our writing. Next, we will examine two ways in which we can join sentences with related ideas:
Coordination. Joining two related ideas of equal importance. Subordination. Joining two related ideas of unequal importance.
Connecting sentences with coordinate or subordinate clauses creates more coherent paragraphs, and in turn, produces more effective writing. In this section, you will read excerpts from Naomis classmate named Joshua, who drafted an essay about wine production. Read this excerpt from Joshuas essay.
This section examines several ways to combine sentences with coordination and subordination, using Joshuas essay as an example.
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Coordination
Coordination joins two independent clauses that contain related ideas of equal importance. Original sentences: I spent my entire paycheck last week. I am staying home this weekend. In their current form, these sentences contain two separate ideas that may or may not be related. Am I staying home this week because I spent my paycheck, or is there another reason for my lack of enthusiasm to leave the house? To indicate a relationship between the two ideas, we can use the coordinating conjunction so: Revised sentence: I spent my entire paycheck last week, so I am staying home this weekend. The revised sentence illustrates that the two ideas are connected. Notice that the sentence retains two independent clauses (I spent my entire paycheck; I am staying home this weekend) because each can stand alone as a complete idea.
Coordinating
Conjunctions
A coordinating conjunction is a word that joins two independent clauses. The most common coordinating conjunctions are for, and, nor, but, or, yet, and so. Note that a comma precedes the coordinating conjunction when joining two clauses.
Independent
Clause
I
will
not
be
attending
the
dance.
I
plan
to
stay
home.
Jessie
isnt
going
to
be
at
the
dance.
The
fundraisers
are
hoping
for
a
record- breaking
attendance.
I
might
go
to
the
next
fundraising
event.
My
parents
are
worried
that
I
am
antisocial.
Buying
a
new
dress
is
expensive.
Coordinating
Conjunction
for
(indicates
a
reason
or
cause)
and
(joins
two
ideas)
nor
(indicates
a
negative)
but
(indicates
a
contrast)
Independent
Clause
I
have
no
one
to
go
with.
I
will
complete
an
essay
for
class.
Tom
wont
be
there
either.
I
dont
think
many
people
are
going.
Revised
Sentence
I
will
not
be
attending
the
dance,
for
I
have
no
one
to
go
with.
I
plan
to
stay
home,
and
I
will
complete
an
essay
for
class.
Jessie
isnt
going
to
be
at
the
dance,
nor
will
Tom
be
there.
The
fundraisers
are
hoping
for
a
record-breaking
attendance,
but
I
dont
think
many
people
are
going.
I
might
donate
I
might
go
to
the
next
fundraising
some
money
to
the
event,
or
I
might
donate
some
cause.
money
to
the
cause.
I
have
many
friends
My
parents
are
worried
that
I
am
at
school.
antisocial,
yet
I
have
many
friends
at
school.
By
staying
home
I
Buying
a
new
dress
is
expensive,
will
save
money.
so
by
staying
home
I
will
save
money.
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Tip
To help you remember the seven coordinating conjunctions, think of the acronym FANBOYS: for, and, nor, but, or, yet, so. Remember that when you use a coordinating conjunction in a sentence, a comma should precede it.
Conjunctive
Adverbs
Another method of joining two independent clauses with related and equal ideas is to use a conjunctive adverb and a semicolon (see Chapter 1 "Writing Basics: What Makes a Good Sentence?" for information on semicolon usage). A conjunctive adverb is a linking word that demonstrates a relationship between two clauses. Read the following sentences: Original sentences: Bridget wants to take part in the next Olympics. She trains every day. Since these sentences contain two equal and related ideas, they may be joined using a conjunctive adverb. Now, read the revised sentence: Revised sentence: Bridget wants to take part in the next Olympics; therefore, she trains every day. The revised sentence explains the relationship between Bridgets desire to take part in the next Olympics and her daily training. Notice that the conjunctive adverb comes after a semicolon that separates the two clauses and is followed by a comma. Review the following chart of some common conjunctive adverbs with examples of how they are used:
Function
Addition
Comparison
Contrast
Emphasis
Cause
and
Effect
Time
Conjunctive
Adverb
also,
furthermore,
moreover,
besides
similarly,
likewise
Example
Alicia
was
late
for
class
and
stuck
in
traffic;
furthermore,
her
shoe
heel
had
broken
and
she
had
forgotten
her
lunch.
Recycling
aluminum
cans
is
beneficial
to
the
environment;
similarly,
reusing
plastic
bags
and
switching
off
lights
reduces
waste.
Most
people
do
not
walk
to
work;
instead,
they
drive
or
take
the
train.
The
Siberian
tiger
is
a
rare
creature;
indeed,
there
are
fewer
than
five
hundred
left
in
the
wild.
I
missed
my
train
this
morning;
consequently,
I
was
late
for
my
meeting.
Tim
crossed
the
barrier,
jumped
over
the
wall,
and
pushed
through
the
hole
in
the
fence;
finally,
he
made
it
to
the
station.
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instead, however, conversely namely, certainly, indeed accordingly, consequently, hence, thus finally, next, subsequently, then
Take a look at Joshuas essay on wine production and identify some areas in which he might use coordination.
Now look at Joshuas revised essay. Did you coordinate the same sentences? You may find that your answers are different because there are usually several ways to join two independent clauses.
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Exercise 1
Combine each sentence pair into a single sentence using either a coordinating conjunction or a conjunctive adverb. Then copy the combined sentence onto your own sheet of paper.
1. Pets
are
not
allowed
in
Mr.
Taylors
building.
He
owns
several
cats
and
a
parrot.
2. New
legislation
prevents
drivers
from
sending
or
reading
text
messages
while
driving.
Many
people
continue
to
use
their
phones
illegally.
3. The
coroner
concluded
that
the
young
man
had
taken
a
lethal
concoction
of
drugs.
By
the
time
his
relatives
found
him,
nothing
could
be
done.
4. Amphibians
are
vertebrates
that
live
on
land
and
in
the
water.
Flatworms
are
invertebrates
that
live
only
in
water.
5. Ashley
carefully
fed
and
watered
her
tomato
plants
all
summer.
The
tomatoes
grew
juicy
and
ripe.
6. When
he
lost
his
car
key,
Simon
attempted
to
open
the
door
with
a
wire
hanger,
a
credit
card,
and
a
paper
clip.
He
called
the
manufacturer
for
advice.
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When writing an essay or a report, it is important that you do not use excessive coordination. Workplace documents should be clear and concise, so only join two clauses that are logically connected and can work together to make one main point. If you repeat the same coordinating conjunction several times in a sentence, you are probably including more than one idea. This may make it difficult for readers to pick out the most important information in each sentence.
Subordination
Subordination joins two sentences with related ideas by merging them into a main clause (a complete sentence) and a dependent clause (a construction that relies on the main clause to complete its meaning). Coordination allows a writer to give equal weight to the two ideas that are being combined, and subordination enables a writer to emphasize one idea over the other. Take a look at the following sentences: Original sentences: Tracy stopped to help the injured man. She would be late for work. To illustrate that these two ideas are related, we can rewrite them as a single sentence using the subordinating conjunction even though. Revised sentence: Even though Tracy would be late for work, she stopped to help the injured man. In the revised version, we now have an independent clause (she stopped to help the injured man) that stands as a complete sentence and a dependent clause (even though Tracy would be late for work) that is subordinate to the main clause. Notice that the revised sentence emphasizes the fact that Tracy stopped to help the injured man, rather than the fact she would be late for work. We could also write the sentence this way: Revised sentence: Tracy stopped to help the injured man even though she would be late for work. The meaning remains the same in both sentences, with the subordinating conjunction even though introducing the dependent clause.
Tip
To punctuate sentences correctly, look at the position of the main clause and the subordinate clause. If a subordinate clause precedes the main clause, use a comma. If the subordinate clause follows the main cause, no punctuation is required.
Subordinating
Conjunctions
A subordinating conjunction is a word that joins a subordinate (dependent) clause to a main (independent) clause. Review the following chart of some common subordinating conjunctions and examples of how they are used:
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Function Subordinating Conjunction Concession although, while, though, whereas, even though Condition if, unless, until Manner Place Reason Time as if, as, though where, wherever because, since, so that, in order that after, before, while, once, when
Example Sarah completed her report even though she had to stay late to get it done. Until we know what is causing the problem, we will not be able to fix it. Everyone in the conference room stopped talking at once, as though they had been stunned into silence. Rita is in San Jose where she has several important client meetings. Because the air conditioning was turned up so high, everyone in the office wore sweaters. After the meeting had finished, we all went to lunch.
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Take a look at the excerpt from Joshuas essay and identify some areas in which he might use subordination.
Now look at Joshuas revised essay and compare your answers. You will probably notice that there are many different ways to subordinate sentences.
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Exercise 2
Combine each sentence pair into a single sentence using a subordinating conjunction and then copy the combined sentence onto your own sheet of paper.
1. Jake
is
going
to
Mexico.
There
are
beautiful
beaches
in
Mexico.
2. A
snowstorm
disrupted
traffic
all
over
the
east
coast.
There
will
be
long
delivery
delays
this
week.
3. My
neighbor
had
his
television
volume
turned
up
too
high.
I
banged
on
his
door
and
asked
him
to
keep
the
noise
down.
4. Jessica
prepared
the
potato
salad
and
the
sauted
vegetables.
Ashley
marinated
the
chicken.
5. Romeo
poisons
himself.
Juliet
awakes
to
find
Romeo
dead
and
stabs
herself
with
a
dagger.
Exercise 3
Copy the paragraph from Joshuas essay onto your own sheet of paper. Then edit using the techniques you have learned in this section. Join the underlined sentences using coordination or subordination. Check your revised sentences for punctuation.
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Key Takeaways
Coordination and subordination join two sentences with related ideas. Coordination joins sentences with related and equal ideas, whereas subordination joins sentences with related but unequal ideas. Sentences can be coordinated using either a coordinating conjunction and a comma or a conjunctive adverb and a semicolon. Subordinate sentences are characterized by the use of a subordinate conjunction. In a subordinate sentence, a comma is used to separate the main clause from the dependent clause if the dependent clause is placed at the beginning of the sentence.
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6.3 Parallelism
Learning Objectives
1. Identify
sentences
that
are
parallel
and
not
parallel.
2. Identify
ways
to
create
parallelism
in
writing.
3. Write
and
revise
sentences
using
parallelism.
Earlier in this chapter, we learned that increasing sentence variety adds interest to a piece of writing and makes the reading process more enjoyable for others. Using a mixture of sentence lengths and patterns throughout an essay is an important writing technique. However, it is equally important to avoid introducing variation within individual sentences. A strong sentence is composed of balanced parts that all have the same structure. In this section, we will examine how to create a balanced sentence structure by using parallelism.
Using
Parallelism
Parallelism is the use of similar structure in related words, clauses, or phrases. It creates a sense of rhythm and balance within a sentence. As readers, we often correct faulty parallelisma lack of parallel structureintuitively because an unbalanced sentence sounds awkward and poorly constructed. Read the following sentences aloud: Faulty parallelism: Kelly had to iron, do the washing, and shopping before her parents arrived. Faulty parallelism: Driving a car requires coordination, patience, and to have good eyesight. Faulty parallelism: Ali prefers jeans to wearing a suit. All of these sentences contain faulty parallelism. Although they are factually correct, the construction is clunky and confusing. In the first example, three different verb forms are used. In the second and third examples, the writer begins each sentence by using a noun (coordination, jeans), but ends with a phrase (to have good eyesight, wearing a suit). Now read the same three sentences that have correct parallelism. Correct parallelism: Kelly had to do the ironing, washing, and shopping before her parents arrived. Correct parallelism: Driving a car requires coordination, patience, and good eyesight. Correct parallelism: Ali prefers wearing jeans to wearing a suit. When these sentences are written using a parallel structure, they sound more aesthetically pleasing because they are balanced. Repetition of grammatical construction also minimizes the
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amount of work the reader has to do to decode the sentence. This enables the reader to focus on the main idea in the sentence and not on how the sentence is put together.
Tip
A simple way to check for parallelism in your writing is to make sure you have paired nouns with nouns, verbs with verbs, prepositional phrases with prepositional phrases, and so on. Underline each element in a sentence and check that the corresponding element uses the same grammatical form.
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Exercise 1
On your own sheet of paper, revise each of the following sentences to create parallel structure using coordinating conjunctions.
1. Mr.
Holloway
enjoys
reading
and
to
play
his
guitar
at
weekends.
2. The
doctor
told
Mrs.
Franklin
that
she
should
either
eat
less
or
should
exercise
more.
3. Breaking
out
of
the
prison
compound,
the
escapees
moved
carefully,
quietly,
and
were
quick
on
their
feet.
4. I
have
read
the
book,
but
I
have
not
watched
the
movie
version.
5. Deal
with
a
full
inbox
first
thing
in
the
morning,
or
by
setting
aside
short
periods
of
time
in
which
to
answer
e-mail
queries.
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Exercise 2
On your own sheet of paper, revise each of the following sentences to create parallel structure using than or as.
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. I
would
rather
work
at
a
second
job
to
pay
for
a
new
car
than
a
loan.
How
you
look
in
the
workplace
is
just
as
important
as
your
behavior.
The
firefighter
spoke
more
of
his
childhood
than
he
talked
about
his
job.
Indian
cuisine
is
far
tastier
than
the
food
of
Great
Britain.
Jims
opponent
was
as
tall
as
Jim
and
he
carried
far
more
weight.
Correlative conjunctions should follow the same grammatical structure to create a parallel sentence. Take a look at the following example: Faulty parallelism: We can neither wait for something to happen nor can we take evasive action. Correct parallelism: We can neither wait for something to happen nor take evasive action. When using a correlative conjunction, the words, phrases, or clauses following each part should be parallel. In the first sentence, the construction of the second part of the sentence does not match the construction of the first part. In the second sentence, omitting needless words and matching verb constructions create a parallel structure. Sometimes, rearranging a sentence corrects faulty parallelism. Faulty parallelism: It was both a long movie and poorly written. Correct parallelism: The movie was both long and poorly written.
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Tip
To see examples of parallelism in use, read some of the great historical speeches by rhetoricians such as Abraham Lincoln and Martin Luther King Jr. Notice how they use parallel structures to emphasize important points and to create a smooth, easily understandable oration. Here is a link to text, audio, video, and the music of Martin Luther Kings speech I Have a Dream: http://www.mlkonline.net/dream.html.
Writing at Work
Speechwriters use parallelism not only within sentences but also throughout paragraphs and beyond. Repeating particular key phrases throughout a speech is an effective way of tying a paragraph together as a cohesive whole and creating a sense of importance. This technique can be adapted to any piece of writing, but it may be especially useful for creating a proposal or other type of persuasive workplace document. Note that the spelling and grammar checker on most word processors will not draw attention to faulty parallelism. When proofreading a document, read it aloud and listen for sentences that sound awkward or poorly phrased.
Exercise 3
On your own sheet of paper, revise each of the following sentences to create parallel structure using correlative conjunctions.
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. The
cyclist
owns
both
a
mountain
bike
and
has
a
racing
bike.
The
movie
not
only
contained
lots
of
action,
but
also
it
offered
an
important
lesson.
My
current
job
is
neither
exciting
nor
is
it
meaningful.
Jason
would
rather
listen
to
his
father
than
be
taking
advice
from
me.
We
are
neither
interested
in
buying
a
vacuum
cleaner
nor
do
we
want
to
utilize
your
carpet
cleaning
service.
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Exercise 4
Read through the following excerpt from Alexs essay and revise any instances of faulty parallelism. Rewrite the sentences to create a parallel structure.
Key Takeaways
Parallelism creates a sense of rhythm and balance in writing by using the same grammatical structure to express equal ideas. Faulty parallelism occurs when elements of a sentence are not balanced, causing the sentence to sound clunky and awkward. Parallelism may be created by connecting two clauses or making a list using coordinating conjunctions; by comparing two items using than or as; or by connecting two parts of a sentence using correlative conjunctions.
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Learning Objectives
1. Use
the
skills
you
have
learned
in
the
chapter.
2. Work
collaboratively
with
other
students.
3. Work
with
a
variety
of
academic
and
on-the-job,
real-world
examples.
Exercises
1. Childrens stories are deliberately written in short, simple sentences to avoid confusion. Most sentences are constructed using the standard subject-verb-object format. Choose a childrens story that is suitable for eight- to ten-year-olds. Rewrite a chapter of the story so that it appeals to a slightly older age group, by editing for sentence variety. Experiment with the techniques you learned in Section 6.1 "Sentence Variety", including the three different ways to vary sentence structure at the beginning of a sentence and the three different ways to connect ideas between sentences. Compare the revised chapter with the original version and consider how sentence variety can be used to target a particular audience. Collaboration Please share with a classmate and compare your answers. 2. Compile a selection of real-life writing samples from the workplace or around the home. You might like to choose one of the following: e-mail, junk mail, personal letter, company report, social networking page, local newspaper, bulletin-board posting, or public notice. Choose two samples that lack sentence variety. Highlight areas of each writing sample that you would edit for sentence variety and explain why. Replace any recognizable name with a pseudonym, or a fictitious name. Collaboration Please share with a classmate and compare your answers.
3. Group
activity.
Choose
a
well-known
speech,
such
as
Martin
Luther
Kings
I
Have
a
Dream
speech,
Winston
Churchills
Blood,
Toil,
Tears,
and
Sweat
speech,
or
Barack
Obamas
inaugural
address.
Make
a
copy
of
the
speech
and,
as
a
group,
underline
examples
of
parallelism.
Discuss
the
effects
of
using
parallelism
and
consider
whether
it
is
always
used
to
achieve
the
same
result
or
whether
the
writer
manipulates
parallelism
to
create
a
variety
of
responses
among
his
or
her
audience.
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4. Group activity. Working in a small group, select a workplace document or academic essay. Examine each paragraph and identify examples of sentence variety, coordination and subordination, and parallelism. Then, choose one particular paragraph and discuss the following questions:
o o o o
Does the writer use sentence variety effectively? Does the writer connect his or her ideas effectively? Does the writer use subordination and coordination correctly? Does the writer use parallelism to emphasize his or her points?
As a group, identify the weaker areas of the paragraph and rewrite them. Focus on sentence structure and sentence variation. Use coordinating conjunctions and subordinating conjunctions to join sentences. 5. Choose a college essay or a recent piece of writing from your work or everyday life. Use the techniques you have learned throughout this chapter to edit your writing for sentence variety, appropriate coordination and subordination, and parallelism. When you have finished, compare the two versions and write a brief analysis of how sentence variety, coordination and subordination, and parallelism help refine a piece of writing. Collaboration Please share with a classmate and compare your answers.
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Learning Objective
1. Use
prewriting
strategies
to
choose
a
topic
and
narrow
the
focus.
If you think that a blank sheet of paper or a blinking cursor on the computer screen is a scary sight, you are not alone. Many writers, students, and employees find that beginning to write can be intimidating. When faced with a blank page, however, experienced writers remind themselves that writing, like other everyday activities, is a process. Every process, from writing to cooking, bike riding, and learning to use a new cell phone, will get significantly easier with practice. Just as you need a recipe, ingredients, and proper tools to cook a delicious meal, you also need a plan, resources, and adequate time to create a good written composition. In other words, writing is a process that requires following steps and using strategies to accomplish your goals. These are the five steps in the writing process:
1. 2. 3. 4. 5. Prewriting
Outlining
the
structure
of
ideas
Writing
a
rough
draft
Revising
Editing
Effective writing can be simply described as good ideas that are expressed well and arranged in the proper order. This chapter will give you the chance to work on all these important aspects of writing. Although many more prewriting strategies exist, this chapter covers six: using experience and observations, freewriting, asking questions, brainstorming, mapping, and searching the Internet. Using the strategies in this chapter can help you overcome the fear of the blank page and confidently begin the writing process.
Prewriting
Prewriting is the stage of the writing process during which you transfer your abstract thoughts into more concrete ideas in ink on paper (or in type on a computer screen). Although prewriting techniques can be helpful in all stages of the writing process, the following four strategies are best used when initially deciding on a topic:
1. Using
experience
and
observations
2. Reading
3. Freewriting
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4. Asking questions
At this stage in the writing process, it is OK if you choose a general topic. Later you will learn more prewriting strategies that will narrow the focus of the topic.
Choosing
a
Topic
In addition to understanding that writing is a process, writers also understand that choosing a good general topic for an assignment is an essential step. Sometimes your instructor will give you an idea to begin an assignment, and other times your instructor will ask you to come up with a topic on your own. A good topic not only covers what an assignment will be about but also fits the assignments purpose and its audience. In this chapter, you will follow a writer named Mariah as she prepares a piece of writing. You will also be planning one of your own. The first important step is for you to tell yourself why you are writing (to inform, to explain, or some other purpose) and for whom you are writing. Write your purpose and your audience on your own sheet of paper, and keep the paper close by as you read and complete exercises in this chapter. My purpose: ____________________________________________ My audience: ____________________________________________
Tip
Have you seen an attention-grabbing story on your local news channel? Many current issues appear on television, in magazines, and on the Internet. These can all provide inspiration for your writing.
Reading
Reading plays a vital role in all the stages of the writing process, but it first figures in the development of ideas and topics. Different kinds of documents can help you choose a topic and also develop that topic. For example, a magazine advertising the latest research on the threat of global warming may catch your eye in the supermarket. This cover may interest you, and you may consider global warming as a topic. Or maybe a novels courtroom drama sparks your curiosity of a particular lawsuit or legal controversy.
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After you choose a topic, critical reading is essential to the development of a topic. While reading almost any document, you evaluate the authors point of view by thinking about his main idea and his support. When you judge the authors argument, you discover more about not only the authors opinion but also your own. If this step already seems daunting, remember that even the best writers need to use prewriting strategies to generate ideas.
Tip
The steps in the writing process may seem time consuming at first, but following these steps will save you time in the future. The more you plan in the beginning by reading and using prewriting strategies, the less time you may spend writing and editing later because your ideas will develop more swiftly. Prewriting strategies depend on your critical reading skills. Reading prewriting exercises (and outlines and drafts later in the writing process) will further develop your topic and ideas. As you continue to follow the writing process, you will see how Mariah uses critical reading skills to assess her own prewriting exercises.
Freewriting
Freewriting is an exercise in which you write freely about any topic for a set amount of time (usually three to five minutes). During the time limit, you may jot down any thoughts that come to your mind. Try not to worry about grammar, spelling, or punctuation. Instead, write as quickly as you can without stopping. If you get stuck, just copy the same word or phrase over and over until you come up with a new thought. Writing often comes easier when you have a personal connection with the topic you have chosen. Remember, to generate ideas in your freewriting, you may also think about readings that you have enjoyed or that have challenged your thinking. Doing this may lead your thoughts in interesting directions. Quickly recording your thoughts on paper will help you discover what you have to say about a topic. When writing quickly, try not to doubt or question your ideas. Allow yourself to write freely and unselfconsciously. Once you start writing with few limitations, you may find you have more to say than you first realized. Your flow of thoughts can lead you to discover even more ideas about the topic. Freewriting may even lead you to discover another topic that excites you even more. Look at Mariahs example. The instructor allowed the members of the class to choose their own topics, and Mariah thought about her experiences as a communications major. She used this freewriting exercise to help her generate more concrete ideas from her own experience.
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Tip
Some prewriting strategies can be used together. For example, you could use experience and observations to come up with a topic related to your course studies. Then you could use freewriting to describe your topic in more detail and figure out what you have to say about it.
Exercise 1
Freewrite about one event you have recently experienced. With this event in mind, write without stopping for five minutes. After you finish, read over what you wrote. Does anything stand out to you as a good general topic to write about?
Asking
Questions
Who? What? Where? When? Why? How? In everyday situations, you pose these kinds of questions to get more information. Who will be my partner for the project? When is the next
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meeting? Why is my car making that odd noise? Even the title of this chapter begins with the question How do I begin? You seek the answers to these questions to gain knowledge, to better understand your daily experiences, and to plan for the future. Asking these types of questions will also help you with the writing process. As you choose your topic, answering these questions can help you revisit the ideas you already have and generate new ways to think about your topic. You may also discover aspects of the topic that are unfamiliar to you and that you would like to learn more about. All these idea-gathering techniques will help you plan for future work on your assignment. When Mariah reread her freewriting notes, she found she had rambled and her thoughts were disjointed. She realized that the topic that interested her most was the one she started with, the media. She then decided to explore that topic by asking herself questions about it. Her purpose was to refine media into a topic she felt comfortable writing about. To see how asking questions can help you choose a topic, take a look at the following chart that Mariah completed to record her questions and answers. She asked herself the questions that reporters and journalists use to gather information for their stories. The questions are often called the 5WH questions, after their initial letters.
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Tip
Prewriting is very purpose driven; it does not follow a set of hard-and-fast rules. The purpose of prewriting is to find and explore ideas so that you will be prepared to write. A prewriting technique like asking questions can help you both find a topic and explore it. The key to effective prewriting is to use the techniques that work best for your thinking process. Freewriting may not seem to fit your thinking process, but keep an open mind. It may work better than you think. Perhaps brainstorming a list of topics might better fit your personal style. Mariah found freewriting and asking questions to be fruitful strategies to use. In your own prewriting, use the 5WH questions in any way that benefits your planning.
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Exercise 2
Choose a general topic idea from the prewriting you completed in Note 7.9 "Exercise 1". Then read each question and use your own paper to answer the 5WH questions. As with Mariah when she explored her writing topic for more detail, it is OK if you do not know all the answers. If you do not know an answer, use your own opinion to speculate, or guess. You may also use factual information from books or articles you previously read on your topic. Later in the chapter, you will read about additional ways (like searching the Internet) to answer your questions and explore your guesses. 5WH Questions 1. Who? _____________________________________________________ 2. What? _____________________________________________________ 3. Where? _____________________________________________________ 4. When? _____________________________________________________ 5. Why? _____________________________________________________ 6. How? _____________________________________________________ Now that you have completed some of the prewriting exercises, you may feel less anxious about starting a paper from scratch. With some ideas down on paper (or saved on a computer), writers are often more comfortable continuing the writing process. After identifying a good general topic, you, too, are ready to continue the process.
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Write your general topic on your own sheet of paper, under where you recorded your purpose and audience. Choose it from among the topics you listed or explored during the prewriting you have done so far. Make sure it is one you feel comfortable with and feel capable of writing about. My general topic: ____________________________________________
Tip
You may find that you need to adjust your topic as you move through the writing stages (and as you complete the exercises in this chapter). If the topic you have chosen is not working, you can repeat the prewriting activities until you find a better one.
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Brainstorming
Brainstorming is similar to list making. You can make a list on your own or in a group with your classmates. Start with a blank sheet of paper (or a blank computer document) and write your general topic across the top. Underneath your topic, make a list of more specific ideas. Think of your general topic as a broad category and the list items as things that fit in that category. Often you will find that one item can lead to the next, creating a flow of ideas that can help you narrow your focus to a more specific paper topic. The following is Mariahs brainstorming list:
From this list, Mariah could narrow her focus to a particular technology under the broad category of mass media.
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Writing at Work
Imagine you have to write an e-mail to your current boss explaining your prior work experience, but you do not know where to start. Before you begin the e-mail, you can use the brainstorming technique to generate a list of employers, duties, and responsibilities that fall under the general topic work experience.
Idea
Mapping
Idea mapping allows you to visualize your ideas on paper using circles, lines, and arrows. This technique is also known as clustering because ideas are broken down and clustered, or grouped together. Many writers like this method because the shapes show how the ideas relate or connect, and writers can find a focused topic from the connections mapped. Using idea mapping, you might discover interesting connections between topics that you had not thought of before. To create an idea map, start with your general topic in a circle in the center of a blank sheet of paper. Then write specific ideas around it and use lines or arrows to connect them together. Add and cluster as many ideas as you can think of. In addition to brainstorming, Mariah tried idea mapping. Review the following idea map that Mariah created:
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Notice Mariahs largest circle contains her general topic, mass media. Then, the general topic branches into two subtopics written in two smaller circles: television and radio. The subtopic television branches into even more specific topics: cable and DVDs. From there, Mariah drew more circles and wrote more specific ideas: high definition and digital recording from cable and Blu-ray from DVDs. The radio topic led Mariah to draw connections between music, downloads versus CDs, and, finally, piracy. From this idea map, Mariah saw she could consider narrowing the focus of her mass media topic to the more specific topic of music piracy.
Tip
Look back at the chart you completed in Note 7.12 "Exercise 2". Did you guess at any of the answers? Searching the Internet may help you find answers to your questions and confirm your guesses. Be choosy about the websites you use. Make sure they are reliable sources for the kind of information you seek. When you search the Internet, type some key words from your broad topic or words from your narrowed focus into your browsers search engine (many good general and specialized search engines are available for you to try). Then look over the results for relevant and interesting articles. Results from an Internet search show writers the following information:
Who
is
talking
about
the
topic
How
the
topic
is
being
discussed
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What specific points are currently being discussed about the topic
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If the search engine results are not what you are looking for, revise your key words and search again. Some search engines also offer suggestions for related searches that may give you better results. Mariah typed the words music piracy from her idea map into the search engine Google. Figure 7.3 Useful Search Engine Results
Not all the results online search engines return will be useful or reliable. Give careful consideration to the reliability of an online source before selecting a topic based on it. Remember that factual information can be verified in other sources, both online and in print. If you have doubts about any information you find, either do not use it or identify it as potentially unreliable. The results from Mariahs search included websites from university publications, personal blogs, online news sources, and lots of legal cases sponsored by the recording industry. Reading legal jargon made Mariah uncomfortable with the results, so she decided to look further. Reviewing her map, she realized that she was more interested in consumer aspects of mass media, so she refocused her search to media technology and the sometimes confusing array of expensive products that fill electronics stores. Now, Mariah considers a paper topic on the products that have fed the mass media boom in everyday lives.
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Exercise 3
In Note 7.12 "Exercise 2", you chose a possible topic and explored it by answering questions about it using the 5WH questions. However, this topic may still be too broad. Here, in Note 7.21 "Exercise 3", choose and complete one of the prewriting strategies to narrow the focus. Use either brainstorming, idea mapping, or searching the Internet. Collaboration Please share with a classmate and compare your answers. Share what you found and what interests you about the possible topic(s). Prewriting strategies are a vital first step in the writing process. First, they help you first choose a broad topic and then they help you narrow the focus of the topic to a more specific idea. An effective topic ensures that you are ready for the next step.
Topic Checklist
Developing a Good Topic The following checklist can help you decide if your narrowed topic is a good topic for your assignment.
Am I interested in this topic? Would my audience be interested? Do I have prior knowledge or experience with this topic? If so, would I be comfortable exploring this topic and sharing my experiences? Do I want to learn more about this topic? Is this topic specific? Does it fit the length of the assignment?
With your narrowed focus in mind, answer the bulleted questions in the checklist for developing a good topic. If you can answer yes to all the questions, write your topic on the line. If you answer no to any of the questions, think about another topic or adjust the one you have and try the prewriting strategies again. My narrowed topic: ____________________________________________
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Key Takeaways
All writers rely on steps and strategies to begin the writing process. The steps in the writing process are prewriting, outlining, writing a rough draft, revising, and editing. Prewriting is the transfer of ideas from abstract thoughts into words, phrases, and sentences on paper. A good topic interests the writer, appeals to the audience, and fits the purpose of the assignment. Writers often choose a general topic first and then narrow the focus to a more specific topic.
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7.2 Outlining
Learning Objectives
1. Identify
the
steps
in
constructing
an
outline.
2. Construct
a
topic
outline
and
a
sentence
outline.
Your prewriting activities and readings have helped you gather information for your assignment. The more you sort through the pieces of information you found, the more you will begin to see the connections between them. Patterns and gaps may begin to stand out. But only when you start to organize your ideas will you be able to translate your raw insights into a form that will communicate meaning to your audience.
Tip
Longer papers require more reading and planning than shorter papers do. Most writers discover that the more they know about a topic, the more they can write about it with intelligence and interest.
Organizing
Ideas
When you write, you need to organize your ideas in an order that makes sense. The writing you complete in all your courses exposes how analytically and critically your mind works. In some courses, the only direct contact you may have with your instructor is through the assignments you write for the course. You can make a good impression by spending time ordering your ideas. Order refers to your choice of what to present first, second, third, and so on in your writing. The order you pick closely relates to your purpose for writing that particular assignment. For example, when telling a story, it may be important to first describe the background for the action. Or you may need to first describe a 3-D movie projector or a television studio to help readers visualize the setting and scene. You may want to group your support effectively to convince readers that your point of view on an issue is well reasoned and worthy of belief. In longer pieces of writing, you may organize different parts in different ways so that your purpose stands out clearly and all parts of the paper work together to consistently develop your main point.
as a skeleton for the paragraphs you write. Later, when you draft paragraphs in the next stage of the writing process, you will add support to create flesh and muscle for your assignment. When you write, your goal is not only to complete an assignment but also to write for a specific purposeperhaps to inform, to explain, to persuade, or for a combination of these purposes. Your purpose for writing should always be in the back of your mind, because it will help you decide which pieces of information belong together and how you will order them. In other words, choose the order that will most effectively fit your purpose and support your main point. Table 7.1 "Order versus Purpose" shows the connection between order and purpose. Table 7.1 Order versus Purpose
Order
Chronological
Order
Purpose
To
explain
the
history
of
an
event
or
a
topic
To
tell
a
story
or
relate
an
experience
To
explain
how
to
do
or
make
something
To
explain
the
steps
in
a
process
To
help
readers
visualize
something
as
you
want
them
to
see
it
To
create
a
main
impression
using
the
senses
(sight,
touch,
taste,
smell,
and
sound)
To
persuade
or
convince
To
rank
items
by
their
importance,
benefit,
or
significance
Spatial Order
Order of Importance
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For a longer piece of writing, the main idea should be broader than the main idea for a shorter piece of writing. Be sure to frame a main idea that is appropriate for the length of the assignment. Ask yourself, How many pages will it take for me to explain and explore this main idea in detail? Be reasonable with your estimate. Then expand or trim it to fit the required length. The big idea, or controlling idea, you want to present in an essay is expressed in a thesis statement. A thesis statement is often one sentence long, and it states your point of view. The thesis statement is not the topic of the piece of writing but rather what you have to say about that topic and what is important to tell readers.
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Table 7.2 "Topics and Thesis Statements" compares topics and thesis statements.
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The first thesis statement you write will be a preliminary thesis statement, or a working thesis statement. You will need it when you begin to outline your assignment as a way to organize it. As you continue to develop the arrangement, you can limit your working thesis statement if it is too broad or expand it if it proves too narrow for what you want to say.
Exercise 1
Using the topic you selected in Section 7.1 "Apply Prewriting Models", develop a working thesis statement that states your controlling idea for the piece of writing you are doing. On a sheet of paper, write your working thesis statement.
Tip
You will make several attempts before you devise a working thesis statement that you think is effective. Each draft of the thesis statement will bring you closer to the wording that expresses your meaning exactly.
Writing
an
Outline
For an essay question on a test or a brief oral presentation in class, all you may need to prepare is a short, informal outline in which you jot down key ideas in the order you will present them. This kind of outline reminds you to stay focused in a stressful situation and to include all the good ideas that help you explain or prove your point. For a longer assignment, like an essay or a research paper, many college instructors require students to submit a formal outline before writing a major paper as a way to be sure you are on the right track and are working in an organized manner. A formal outline is a detailed guide that shows how all your supporting ideas relate to each other. It helps you distinguish between ideas
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that are of equal importance and ones that are of lesser importance. You build your paper based on the framework created by the outline.
Tip
Instructors may also require you to submit an outline with your final draft to check the direction of the assignment and the logic of your final draft. If you are required to submit an outline with the final draft of a paper, remember to revise the outline to reflect any changes you made while writing the paper. There are two types of formal outlines: the topic outline and the sentence outline. You format both types of formal outlines in the same way.
Place your introduction and thesis statement at the beginning, under roman numeral I. Use roman numerals (II, III, IV, V, etc.) to identify main points that develop the thesis statement. Use capital letters (A, B, C, D, etc.) to divide your main points into parts. Use arabic numerals (1, 2, 3, 4, 5, etc.) if you need to subdivide any As, Bs, or Cs into smaller parts. End with the final roman numeral expressing your idea for your conclusion.
Here is what the skeleton of a traditional formal outline looks like. The indention helps clarify how the ideas are related. 1. Introduction Thesis statement 2. Main point 1 becomes the topic sentence of body paragraph 1 1. Supporting detail becomes a support sentence of body paragraph 1
1. Subpoint
2. Subpoint
2. Supporting detail
1. Subpoint
2. Subpoint
3. Supporting detail
1. Subpoint
2. Subpoint
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Tip
In an outline, any supporting detail can be developed with subpoints. For simplicity, the model shows them only under the first main point.
Tip
Formal outlines are often quite rigid in their organization. As many instructors will specify, you cannot subdivide one point if it is only one part. For example, for every roman numeral I, there must be a For every A, there must be a B. For every arabic numeral 1, there must be a 2. See for yourself on the sample outlines that follow.
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Checklist
Writing an Effective Topic Outline This checklist can help you write an effective topic outline for your assignment. It will also help you discover where you may need to do additional reading or prewriting.
Do I have a controlling idea that guides the development of the entire piece of writing? Do I have three or more main points that I want to make in this piece of writing? Does each main point connect to my controlling idea? Is my outline in the best orderchronological order, spatial order, or order of importancefor me to present my main points? Will this order help me get my main point across? Do I have supporting details that will help me inform, explain, or prove my main points? Do I need to add more support? If so, where? Do I need to make any adjustments in my working thesis statement before I consider it the final version?
Writing at Work
Word processing programs generally have an automatic numbering feature that can be used to prepare outlines. This feature automatically sets indents and lets you use the tab key to arrange information just as you would in an outline. Although in business this style might be acceptable, in college your instructor might have different requirements. Teach yourself how to customize the levels of outline numbering in your word-processing program to fit your instructors preferences.
Exercise 2
Using the working thesis statement you wrote in Note 7.32 "Exercise 1" and the reading you did in Section 7.1 "Apply Prewriting Models", construct a topic outline for your essay. Be sure to observe correct outline form, including correct indentions and the use of Roman and arabic numerals and capital letters. Collaboration Please share with a classmate and compare your outline. Point out areas of interest from their outline and what you would like to learn more about.
Here is the sentence outline that Mariah constructed for the essay she is developing.
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Tip
The information compiled under each roman numeral will become a paragraph in your final paper. In the previous example, the outline follows the standard five-paragraph essay arrangement, but longer essays will require more paragraphs and thus more roman numerals. If you think that a paragraph might become too long or stringy, add an additional paragraph to your outline, renumbering the main points appropriately.
Writing at Work
PowerPoint presentations, used both in schools and in the workplace, are organized in a way very similar to formal outlines. PowerPoint presentations often contain information in the form of talking points that the presenter develops with more details and examples than are contained on the PowerPoint slide.
Exercise 3
Expand the topic outline you prepared in Note 7.41 "Exercise 2" to make it a sentence outline. In this outline, be sure to include multiple supporting points for your main topic even if your topic outline does not contain them. Be sure to observe correct outline form, including correct indentions and the use of Roman and arabic numerals and capital letters.
Key Takeaways
Writers must put their ideas in order so the assignment makes sense. The most common orders are chronological order, spatial order, and order of importance. After gathering and evaluating the information you found for your essay, the next step is to write a working, or preliminary, thesis statement. The working thesis statement expresses the main idea that you want to develop in the entire piece of writing. It can be modified as you continue the writing process. Effective writers prepare a formal outline to organize their main ideas and supporting details in the order they will be presented. A topic outline uses words and phrases to express the ideas. A sentence outline uses complete sentences to express the ideas. The writers thesis statement begins the outline, and the outline ends with suggestions for the concluding paragraph.
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7.3 Drafting
Learning Objectives
1. Identify
drafting
strategies
that
improve
writing.
2. Use
drafting
strategies
to
prepare
the
first
draft
of
an
essay.
Drafting is the stage of the writing process in which you develop a complete first version of a piece of writing. Even professional writers admit that an empty page scares them because they feel they need to come up with something fresh and original every time they open a blank document on their computers. Because you have completed the first two steps in the writing process, you have already recovered from empty page syndrome. You have hours of prewriting and planning already done. You know what will go on that blank page: what you wrote in your outline.
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Begin writing with the part you know the most about. You can start with the third paragraph in your outline if ideas come easily to mind. You can start with the second paragraph or the first paragraph, too. Although paragraphs may vary in length, keep in mind that short paragraphs may contain insufficient support. Readers may also think the writing is abrupt. Long paragraphs may be wordy and may lose your readers interest. As a guideline, try to write paragraphs longer than one sentence but shorter than the length of an entire double-spaced page. Write one paragraph at a time and then stop. As long as you complete the assignment on time, you may choose how many paragraphs you complete in one sitting. Pace yourself. On the other hand, try not to procrastinate. Writers should always meet their deadlines. Take short breaks to refresh your mind. This tip might be most useful if you are writing a multipage report or essay. Still, if you are antsy or cannot concentrate, take a break to let your mind rest. But do not let breaks extend too long. If you spend too much time away from your essay, you may have trouble starting again. You may forget key points or lose momentum. Try setting an alarm to limit your break, and when the time is up, return to your desk to write. Be reasonable with your goals. If you decide to take ten-minute breaks, try to stick to that goal. If you told yourself that you need more facts, then commit to finding them. Holding yourself to your own goals will create successful writing assignments. Keep your audience and purpose in mind as you write. These aspects of writing are just as important when you are writing a single paragraph for your essay as when you are considering the direction of the entire essay.
Of all of these considerations, keeping your purpose and your audience at the front of your mind is the most important key to writing success. If your purpose is to persuade, for example, you will present your facts and details in the most logical and convincing way you can. Your purpose will guide your mind as you compose your sentences. Your audience will guide word choice. Are you writing for experts, for a general audience, for other college students, or for people who know very little about your topic? Keep asking yourself what your readers, with their background and experience, need to be told in order to understand your ideas. How can you best express your ideas so they are totally clear and your communication is effective?
Tip
You may want to identify your purpose and audience on an index card that you clip to your paper (or keep next to your computer). On that card, you may want to write notes to yourselfperhaps about what that audience might not know or what it needs to knowso that you will be sure to address those issues when you write. It may be a good idea to also state exactly what you want to explain to that audience, or to inform them of, or to persuade them about.
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Writing at Work
Many of the documents you produce at work target a particular audience for a particular purpose. You may find that it is highly advantageous to know as much as you can about your target audience and to prepare your message to reach that audience, even if the audience is a coworker or your boss. Menu language is a common example. Descriptions like organic romaine and free-range chicken are intended to appeal to a certain type of customer though perhaps not to the same customer who craves a thick steak. Similarly, mail-order companies research the demographics of the people who buy their merchandise. Successful vendors customize product descriptions in catalogs to appeal to their buyers tastes. For example, the product descriptions in a skateboarder catalog will differ from the descriptions in a clothing catalog for mature adults.
Exercise 1
Using the topic for the essay that you outlined in Section 7.2 "Outlining", describe your purpose and your audience as specifically as you can. Use your own sheet of paper to record your responses. Then keep these responses near you during future stages of the writing process. My purpose: ____________________________________________ ____________________________________________ ____________________________________________ My audience: ____________________________________________ ____________________________________________ ____________________________________________
Writing at Work
Workplace writing in certain environments is done by teams of writers who collaborate on the planning, writing, and revising of documents, such as long reports, technical manuals, and the results of scientific research. Collaborators do not need to be in the same room, the same building, or even the same city. Many collaborations are conducted over the Internet.
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In a perfect collaboration, each contributor has the right to add, edit, and delete text. Strong communication skills, in addition to strong writing skills, are important in this kind of writing situation because disagreements over style, content, process, emphasis, and other issues may arise. The collaborative software, or document management systems, that groups use to work on common projects is sometimes called groupware or workgroup support systems. The reviewing tool on some word-processing programs also gives you access to a collaborative tool that many smaller workgroups use when they exchange documents. You can also use it to leave comments to yourself.
Tip
If you invest some time now to investigate how the reviewing tool in your word processor works, you will be able to use it with confidence during the revision stage of the writing process. Then, when you start to revise, set your reviewing tool to track any changes you make, so you will be able to tinker with text and commit only those final changes you want to keep.
An introduction that piques the audiences interest, tells what the essay is about, and motivates readers to keep reading. A thesis statement that presents the main point, or controlling idea, of the entire piece of writing. A topic sentence in each paragraph that states the main idea of the paragraph and implies how that main idea connects to the thesis statement. Supporting sentences in each paragraph that develop or explain the topic sentence. These can be specific facts, examples, anecdotes, or other details that elaborate on the topic sentence. A conclusion that reinforces the thesis statement and leaves the audience with a feeling of completion.
These elements follow the standard five-paragraph essay format, which you probably first encountered in high school. This basic format is valid for most essays you will write in college, even much longer ones. For now, however, Mariah focuses on writing the three body paragraphs from her outline. Chapter 8 "Writing Essays: From Start to Finish" covers writing introductions and conclusions, and you will read Mariahs introduction and conclusion in Chapter 8 "Writing Essays: From Start to Finish".
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Tip
When you begin to draft your paragraphs, you should follow your outline fairly closely. After all, you spent valuable time developing those ideas. However, as you begin to express your ideas in complete sentences, it might strike you that the topic sentence might work better at the end of the paragraph or in the middle. Try it. Writing a draft, by its nature, is a good time for experimentation. The topic sentence can be the first, middle, or final sentence in a paragraph. The assignments audience and purpose will often determine where a topic sentence belongs. When the purpose of the assignment is to persuade, for example, the topic sentence should be the first sentence in a paragraph. In a persuasive essay, the writers point of view should be clearly expressed at the beginning of each paragraph. Choosing where to position the topic sentence depends not only on your audience and purpose but also on the essays arrangement, or order. When you organize information according to order of importance, the topic sentence may be the final sentence in a paragraph. All the supporting sentences build up to the topic sentence. Chronological order may also position the topic sentence as the final sentence because the controlling idea of the paragraph may make the most sense at the end of a sequence. When you organize information according to spatial order, a topic sentence may appear as the middle sentence in a paragraph. An essay arranged by spatial order often contains paragraphs that begin with descriptions. A reader may first need a visual in his or her mind before understanding the development of the paragraph. When the topic sentence is in the middle, it unites the details that come before it with the ones that come after it.
Tip
As you read critically throughout the writing process, keep topic sentences in mind. You may discover topic sentences that are not always located at the beginning of a paragraph. For example, fiction writers customarily use topic ideas, either expressed or implied, to move readers through their texts. In nonfiction writing, such as popular magazines, topic sentences are often used when the author thinks it is appropriate (based on the audience and the purpose, of course). A single topic sentence might even control the development of a number of paragraphs. For more information on topic sentences, please see Chapter 5 "Writing Paragraphs: Separating Ideas and Shaping Content".
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Developing topic sentences and thinking about their placement in a paragraph will prepare you to write the rest of the paragraph.
Paragraphs
The paragraph is the main structural component of an essay as well as other forms of writing. Each paragraph of an essay adds another related main idea to support the writers thesis, or controlling idea. Each related main idea is supported and developed with facts, examples, and other details that explain it. By exploring and refining one main idea at a time, writers build a strong case for their thesis. Paragraph Length How long should a paragraph be? One answer to this important question may be long enoughlong enough for you to address your points and explain your main idea. To grab attention or to present succinct supporting ideas, a paragraph can be fairly short and consist of two to three sentences. A paragraph in a complex essay about some abstract point in philosophy or archaeology can be three-quarters of a page or more in length. As long as the writer maintains close focus on the topic and does not ramble, a long paragraph is acceptable in college-level writing. In general, try to keep the paragraphs longer than one sentence but shorter than one full page of double-spaced text.
Tip
Journalistic style often calls for brief two- or three-sentence paragraphs because of how people read the news, both online and in print. Blogs and other online information sources often adopt this paragraphing style, too. Readers often skim the first paragraphs of a great many articles before settling on the handful of stories they want to read in detail. You may find that a particular paragraph you write may be longer than one that will hold your audiences interest. In such cases, you should divide the paragraph into two or more shorter paragraphs, adding a topic statement or some kind of transitional word or phrase at the start of the new paragraph. Transition words or phrases show the connection between the two ideas. In all cases, however, be guided by what you instructor wants and expects to find in your draft. Many instructors will expect you to develop a mature college-level style as you progress through the semesters assignments.
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Exercise 2
To build your sense of appropriate paragraph length, use the Internet to find examples of the following items. Copy them into a file, identify your sources, and present them to your instructor with your annotations, or notes.
A news article written in short paragraphs. Take notes on, or annotate, your selection with your observations about the effect of combining paragraphs that develop the same topic idea. Explain how effective those paragraphs would be. A long paragraph from a scholarly work that you identify through an academic search engine. Annotate it with your observations about the authors paragraphing style.
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Here are the notes that Mariah wrote to herself to characterize her purpose and audience.
Mariah chose to begin by writing a quick introduction based on her thesis statement. She knew that she would want to improve her introduction significantly when she revised. Right now, she just wanted to give herself a starting point. You will read her introduction again in Section 7.4 "Revising and Editing" when she revises it.
Tip
Remember Mariahs other options. She could have started directly with any of the body paragraphs. You will learn more about writing attention-getting introductions and effective conclusions in Chapter 8 "Writing Essays: From Start to Finish". With her thesis statement and her purpose and audience notes in front of her, Mariah then looked at her sentence outline. She chose to use that outline because it includes the topic sentences. The following is the portion of her outline for the first body paragraph. The roman numeral II identifies the topic sentence for the paragraph, capital letters indicate supporting details, and arabic numerals label subpoints.
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Mariah then began to expand the ideas in her outline into a paragraph. Notice how the outline helped her guarantee that all her sentences in the body of the paragraph develop the topic sentence.
Tip
If you write your first draft on the computer, consider creating a new file folder for each course with a set of subfolders inside the course folders for each assignment you are given. Label the folders clearly with the course names, and label each assignment folder and word processing document with a title that you will easily recognize. The assignment name is a good choice for the document. Then use that subfolder to store all the drafts you create. When you start each new draft, do not just write over the last one. Instead, save the draft with a new tag after the title draft 1, draft 2, and so onso that you will have a complete history of drafts in case your instructor wishes you to submit them.
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In your documents, observe any formatting requirementsfor margins, headers, placement of page numbers, and other layout mattersthat your instructor requires.
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Exercise 3
Study how Mariah made the transition from her sentence outline to her first draft. First, copy her outline onto your own sheet of paper. Leave a few spaces between each part of the outline. Then copy sentences from Mariahs paragraph to align each sentence with its corresponding entry in her outline.
Tip
If you decide to take a break between finishing your first body paragraph and starting the next one, do not start writing immediately when you return to your work. Put yourself back in context and in the mood by rereading what you have already written. This is what Mariah did. If she had stopped writing in the middle of writing the paragraph, she could have jotted down some quick notes to herself about what she would write next. Preceding each body paragraph that Mariah wrote is the appropriate section of her sentence outline. Notice how she expanded roman numeral III from her outline into a first draft of the second body paragraph. As you read, ask yourself how closely she stayed on purpose and how well she paid attention to the needs of her audience.
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Mariah then began her third and final body paragraph using roman numeral IV from her outline.
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Exercise 4
Reread body paragraphs two and three of the essay that Mariah is writing. Then answer the questions on your own sheet of paper.
1. In
body
paragraph
two,
Mariah
decided
to
develop
her
paragraph
as
a
nonfiction
narrative.
Do
you
agree
with
her
decision?
Explain.
How
else
could
she
have
chosen
to
develop
the
paragraph?
Why
is
that
better?
2. Compare
the
writing
styles
of
paragraphs
two
and
three.
What
evidence
do
you
have
that
Mariah
was
getting
tired
or
running
out
of
steam?
What
advice
would
you
give
her?
Why?
3. Choose
one
of
these
two
body
paragraphs.
Write
a
version
of
your
own
that
you
think
better
fits
Mariahs
audience
and
purpose.
Writing
a
Title
A writers best choice for a title is one that alludes to the main point of the entire essay. Like the headline in a newspaper or the big, bold title in a magazine, an essays title gives the audience a first peek at the content. If readers like the title, they are likely to keep reading. Following her outline carefully, Mariah crafted each paragraph of her essay. Moving step by step in the writing process, Mariah finished the draft and even included a brief concluding paragraph (you will read her conclusion in Chapter 8 "Writing Essays: From Start to Finish"). She then decided, as the final touch for her writing session, to add an engaging title.
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Key Takeaways
Make the writing process work for you. Use any and all of the strategies that help you move forward in the writing process. Always be aware of your purpose for writing and the needs of your audience. Cater to those needs in every sensible way. Remember to include all the key structural parts of an essay: a thesis statement that is part of your introductory paragraph, three or more body paragraphs as described in your outline, and a concluding paragraph. Then add an engaging title to draw in readers. Write paragraphs of an appropriate length for your writing assignment. Paragraphs in college- level writing can be a page long, as long as they cover the main topics in your outline. Use your topic outline or your sentence outline to guide the development of your paragraphs and the elaboration of your ideas. Each main idea, indicated by a roman numeral in your outline, becomes the topic of a new paragraph. Develop it with the supporting details and the subpoints of those details that you included in your outline. Generally speaking, write your introduction and conclusion last, after you have fleshed out the body paragraphs.
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Learning Objectives
1. Identify
major
areas
of
concern
in
the
draft
essay
during
revising
and
editing.
2. Use
peer
reviews
and
editing
checklists
to
assist
revising
and
editing.
3. Revise
and
edit
the
first
draft
of
your
essay
and
produce
a
final
draft.
Revising and editing are the two tasks you undertake to significantly improve your essay. Both are very important elements of the writing process. You may think that a completed first draft means little improvement is needed. However, even experienced writers need to improve their drafts and rely on peers during revising and editing. You may know that athletes miss catches, fumble balls, or overshoot goals. Dancers forget steps, turn too slowly, or miss beats. For both athletes and dancers, the more they practice, the stronger their performance will become. Web designers seek better images, a more clever design, or a more appealing background for their web pages. Writing has the same capacity to profit from improvement and revision.
When you revise, you take a second look at your ideas. You might add, cut, move, or change information in order to make your ideas clearer, more accurate, more interesting, or more convincing. When you edit, you take a second look at how you expressed your ideas. You add or change words. You fix any problems in grammar, punctuation, and sentence structure. You improve your writing style. You make your essay into a polished, mature piece of writing, the end product of your best efforts.
Tip
How do you get the best out of your revisions and editing? Here are some strategies that writers have developed to look at their first drafts from a fresh perspective. Try them over the course of this semester; then keep using the ones that bring results.
Take a break. You are proud of what you wrote, but you might be too close to it to make changes. Set aside your writing for a few hours or even a day until you can look at it objectively. Ask someone you trust for feedback and constructive criticism. Pretend you are one of your readers. Are you satisfied or dissatisfied? Why? Use the resources that your college provides. Find out where your schools writing lab is located and ask about the assistance they provide online and in person.
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Many people hear the words critic, critical, and criticism and pick up only negative vibes that provoke feelings that make them blush, grumble, or shout. However, as a writer and a thinker, you need to learn to be critical of yourself in a positive way and have high expectations for your work. You also need to train your eye and trust your ability to fix what needs fixing. For this, you need to teach yourself where to look.
Tip
Reading your writing aloud will often help you find problems with unity and coherence. Listen for the clarity and flow of your ideas. Identify places where you find yourself confused, and write a note to yourself about possible fixes.
Creating
Unity
Sometimes writers get caught up in the moment and cannot resist a good digression. Even though you might enjoy such detours when you chat with friends, unplanned digressions usually harm a piece of writing. Mariah stayed close to her outline when she drafted the three body paragraphs of her essay she tentatively titled Digital Technology: The Newest and the Best at What Price? But a recent shopping trip for an HDTV upset her enough that she digressed from the main topic of her third paragraph and included comments about the sales staff at the electronics store she visited. When she revised her essay, she deleted the off-topic sentences that affected the unity of the paragraph. Read the following paragraph twice, the first time without Mariahs changes, and the second time with them.
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Exercise 1
1. Answer the following two questions about Mariahs paragraph:
1. Do
you
agree
with
Mariahs
decision
to
make
the
deletions
she
made?
Did
she
cut
too
much,
too
little,
or
just
enough?
Explain.
2. Is
the
explanation
of
what
screen
resolution
means
a
digression?
Or
is
it
audience
friendly
and
essential
to
understanding
the
paragraph?
Explain.
Tip
When you reread your writing to find revisions to make, look for each type of problem in a separate sweep. Read it straight through once to locate any problems with unity. Read it straight through a second time to find problems with coherence. You may follow this same practice during many stages of the writing process.
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Writing at Work
Many companies hire copyeditors and proofreaders to help them produce the cleanest possible final drafts of large writing projects. Copyeditors are responsible for suggesting revisions and style changes; proofreaders check documents for any errors in capitalization, spelling, and punctuation that have crept in. Many times, these tasks are done on a freelance basis, with one freelancer working for a variety of clients.
Creating
Coherence
Careful writers use transitions to clarify how the ideas in their sentences and paragraphs are related. These words and phrases help the writing flow smoothly. Adding transitions is not the only way to improve coherence, but they are often useful and give a mature feel to your essays. Table 7.3 "Common Transitional Words and Phrases" groups many common transitions according to their purpose.
Table
7.3
Common
Transitional
Words
and
Phrases Transitions
That
Show
Sequence
or
Time
after
before
later
afterward
before
long
meanwhile
as
soon
as
finally
next
at
first
first,
second,
third
soon
at
last
in
the
first
place
then
Transitions
That
Show
Position
above
across
at
the
bottom
at
the
top
behind
below
beside
beyond
inside
near
next
to
opposite
to
the
left,
to
the
right,
to
the
under
where
side
Transitions
That
Show
a
Conclusion
indeed
hence
in
conclusion
in
the
final
analysis
therefore
thus
Transitions
That
Continue
a
Line
of
Thought
consequently
furthermore
additionally
because
besides
the
fact
following
this
idea
further
in
addition
in
the
same
way
moreover
looking
further
considering,
it
is
clear
that
Transitions
That
Change
a
Line
of
Thought
but
yet
however
nevertheless
on
the
contrary
on
the
other
hand
Transitions
That
Show
Importance
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above all best especially in fact more important most important most worst Transitions That Introduce the Final Thoughts in a Paragraph or Essay finally last in conclusion most of all least of all last of all All-Purpose Transitions to Open Paragraphs or to Connect Ideas Inside Paragraphs admittedly at this point certainly granted it is true generally speaking in general in this situation no doubt no one denies obviously of course to be sure undoubtedly unquestionably Transitions that Introduce Examples for instance for example Transitions That Clarify the Order of Events or Steps first, second, third generally, furthermore, in the first place, also, finally last in the first place, furthermore, in the first place, likewise, finally lastly
After Maria revised for unity, she next examined her paragraph about televisions to check for coherence. She looked for places where she needed to add a transition or perhaps reword the text to make the flow of ideas clear. In the version that follows, she has already deleted the sentences that were off topic.
Tip
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Exercise 2
1. Answer the following questions about Mariahs revised paragraph.
1. Do
you
agree
with
the
transitions
and
other
changes
that
Mariah
made
to
her
paragraph?
Which
would
you
keep
and
which
were
unnecessary?
Explain.
2. What
transition
words
or
phrases
did
Mariah
add
to
her
paragraph?
Why
did
she
choose
each
one?
3. What
effect
does
adding
additional
sentences
have
on
the
coherence
of
the
paragraph?
Explain.
When
you
read
both
versions
aloud,
which
version
has
a
more
logical
flow
of
ideas?
Explain.
2. Now
return
to
the
first
draft
of
the
essay
you
wrote
in
Section
7
"Writing
Your
Own
First
Draft"
and
revise
it
for
coherence.
Add
transition
words
and
phrases
where
they
are
needed,
and
make
any
other
changes
that
are
needed
to
improve
the
flow
and
connection
between
ideas.
Identifying
Wordiness
Sometimes writers use too many words when fewer words will appeal more to their audience and better fit their purpose. Here are some common examples of wordiness to look for in your draft. Eliminating wordiness helps all readers, because it makes your ideas clear, direct, and straightforward.
Sentences that begin with There is or There are . Wordy: There are two major experiments that the Biology Department sponsors. Revised: The Biology Department sponsors two major experiments.
Sentences with unnecessary modifiers. Wordy: Two extremely famous and well-known consumer advocates spoke eloquently in favor of the proposed important legislation. Revised: Two well-known consumer advocates spoke in favor of the proposed legislation.
Sentences with deadwood phrases that add little to the meaning. Be judicious when you use phrases such as in terms of, with a mind to, on the subject of, as to whether or not, more or less, as far asis concerned, and similar expressions. You can usually find a more straightforward way to state your point. Wordy: As a world leader in the field of green technology, the company plans to focus its efforts in the area of geothermal energy. A report as to whether or not to use geysers as an energy source is in the process of preparation. Revised: As a world leader in green technology, the company plans to focus on geothermal energy. A report about using geysers as an energy source is in preparation.
Sentences in the passive voice or with forms of the verbto be. Sentences with passivevoice verbs often create confusion, because the subject of the sentence does not perform an action. Sentences are clearer when the subject of the sentence performs the action and is followed by a strong verb. Use strong active-voice verbs in place of forms of to be, which can lead to wordiness. Avoid passive voice when you can. Wordy: It might perhaps be said that using a GPS device is something that is a benefit to drivers who have a poor sense of direction.
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Revised: Using a GPS device benefits drivers who have a poor sense of direction.
Sentences with constructions that can be shortened. Wordy: The e-book reader, which is a recent invention, may become as commonplace as the cell phone. My over-sixty uncle bought an e-book reader, and his wife bought an e-book reader, too. Revised: The e-book reader, a recent invention, may become as commonplace as the cell phone. My over-sixty uncle and his wife both bought e-book readers.
Exercise 3
Now return once more to the first draft of the essay you have been revising. Check it for unnecessary words. Try making your sentences as concise as they can be.
Avoid slang. Find alternatives to bummer, kewl, and rad. Avoid language that is overly casual. Write about men and women rather than girls and guys unless you are trying to create a specific effect. A formal tone calls for formal language. Avoid contractions. Use do not in place of dont, I am in place of Im, have not in place of havent, and so on. Contractions are considered casual speech. Avoid clichs. Overused expressions such as green with envy, face the music, better late than never, and similar expressions are empty of meaning and may not appeal to your audience. Be careful when you use words that sound alike but have different meanings. Some examples are allusion/illusion, complement/compliment, council/counsel, concurrent/consecutive, founder/flounder, and historic/historical. When in doubt, check a dictionary. Choose words with the connotations you want. Choosing a word for its connotations is as important in formal essay writing as it is in all kinds of writing. Compare the positive connotations of the word proud and the negative connotations of arrogant and conceited. Use specific words rather than overly general words. Find synonyms for thing, people, nice, good, bad, interesting, and other vague words. Or use specific details to make your exact meaning clear.
Now read the revisions Mariah made to make her third paragraph clearer and more concise. She has already incorporated the changes she made to improve unity and coherence.
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Exercise 4
1. Answer the following questions about Mariahs revised paragraph:
1. Read
the
unrevised
and
the
revised
paragraphs
aloud.
Explain
in
your
own
words
how
changes
in
word
choice
have
affected
Mariahs
writing.
2. Do
you
agree
with
the
changes
that
Mariah
made
to
her
paragraph?
Which
changes
would
you
keep
and
which
were
unnecessary?
Explain.
What
other
changes
would
you
have
made?
3. What
effect
does
removing
contractions
and
the
pronoun
you
have
on
the
tone
of
the
paragraph?
How
would
you
characterize
the
tone
now?
Why?
2. Now
return
once
more
to
your
essay
in
progress.
Read
carefully
for
problems
with
word
choice.
Be
sure
that
your
draft
is
written
in
formal
language
and
that
your
word
choice
is
specific
and
appropriate.
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4. These three points struck me as your strongest: 1. Point: ____________________________________________ Why: ____________________________________________ 2. Point: ____________________________________________ Why: ____________________________________________ 3. Point: ____________________________________________ Why: ____________________________________________ 5. These places in your essay are not clear to me: 1. Where: ____________________________________________ Needs improvement because__________________________________________ 2. Where: ____________________________________________ Needs improvement because ____________________________________________ 3. Where: ____________________________________________ Needs improvement because ____________________________________________
6. The
one
additional
change
you
could
make
that
would
improve
this
essay
significantly
is
____________________________________________.
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Writing at Work
One of the reasons why word-processing programs build in a reviewing feature is that workgroups have become a common feature in many businesses. Writing is often collaborative, and the members of a workgroup and their supervisors often critique group members work and offer feedback that will lead to a better final product.
Exercise 5
Exchange essays with a classmate and complete a peer review of each others draft in progress. Remember to give positive feedback and to be courteous and polite in your responses. Focus on providing one positive comment and one question for more information to the author.
Exercise 6
Work with two partners. Go back to Note 7.81 "Exercise 4" in this lesson and compare your responses to Activity A, about Mariahs paragraph, with your partners. Recall Mariahs purpose
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for writing and her audience. Then, working individually, list where you agree and where you disagree about revision needs.
Tip
Editing often takes time. Budgeting time into the writing process allows you to complete additional edits after revising. Editing and proofreading your writing helps you create a finished work that represents your best efforts. Here are a few more tips to remember about your readers:
Readers do not notice correct spelling, but they do notice misspellings. Readers look past your sentences to get to your ideasunless the sentences are awkward, poorly constructed, and frustrating to read. Readers notice when every sentence has the same rhythm as every other sentence, with no variety. Readers do not cheer when you use there, their, and theyre correctly, but they notice when you do not. Readers will notice the care with which you handled your assignment and your attention to detail in the delivery of an error-free document..
The first section of this book offers a useful review of grammar, mechanics, and usage. Use it to help you eliminate major errors in your writing and refine your understanding of the conventions of language. Do not hesitate to ask for help, too, from peer tutors in your academic department or in the colleges writing lab. In the meantime, use the checklist to help you edit your writing.
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Checklist
Editing Your Writing Grammar
Are some sentences actually sentence fragments? Are some sentences run-on sentences? How can I correct them? Do some sentences need conjunctions between independent clauses? Does every verb agree with its subject? Is every verb in the correct tense? Are tense forms, especially for irregular verbs, written correctly? Have I used subject, object, and possessive personal pronouns correctly? Have I used who and whom correctly? Is the antecedent of every pronoun clear? Do all personal pronouns agree with their antecedents? Have I used the correct comparative and superlative forms of adjectives and adverbs? Is it clear which word a participial phrase modifies, or is it a dangling modifier?
Sentence Structure
Are all my sentences simple sentences, or do I vary my sentence structure? Have I chosen the best coordinating or subordinating conjunctions to join clauses? Have I created long, overpacked sentences that should be shortened for clarity? Do I see any mistakes in parallel structure?
Punctuation
Does every sentence end with the correct end punctuation? Can I justify the use of every exclamation point? Have I used apostrophes correctly to write all singular and plural possessive forms? Have I used quotation marks correctly?
Can I find any spelling errors? How can I correct them? Have I used capital letters where they are needed? Have I written abbreviations, where allowed, correctly? Can I find any errors in the use of commonly confused words, such as to/too/two?
Tip
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grammar checker often queries constructions that are perfectly correct. The program does not understand your meaning; it makes its check against a general set of formulas that might not apply in each instance. If you use a grammar checker, accept the suggestions that make sense, but consider why the suggestions came up.
Tip
Proofreading requires patience; it is very easy to read past a mistake. Set your paper aside for at least a few hours, if not a day or more, so your mind will rest. Some professional proofreaders read a text backward so they can concentrate on spelling and punctuation. Another helpful technique is to slowly read a paper aloud, paying attention to every word, letter, and punctuation mark. If you need additional proofreading help, ask a reliable friend, a classmate, or a peer tutor to make a final pass on your paper to look for anything you missed.
Formatting
Remember to use proper format when creating your finished assignment. Sometimes an instructor, a department, or a college will require students to follow specific instructions on titles, margins, page numbers, or the location of the writers name. These requirements may be more detailed and rigid for research projects and term papers, which often observe the American Psychological Association (APA) or Modern Language Association (MLA) style guides, especially when citations of sources are included. To ensure the format is correct and follows any specific instructions, make a final check before you submit an assignment.
Exercise 7
With the help of the checklist, edit and proofread your essay.
Key Takeaways
Revising and editing are the stages of the writing process in which you improve your work before producing a final draft. During revising, you add, cut, move, or change information in order to improve content. During editing, you take a second look at the words and sentences you used to express your ideas and fix any problems in grammar, punctuation, and sentence structure. Unity in writing means that all the ideas in each paragraph and in the entire essay clearly belong together and are arranged in an order that makes logical sense. Coherence in writing means that the writers wording clearly indicates how one idea leads to another within a paragraph and between paragraphs. Transitional words and phrases effectively make writing more coherent. Writing should be clear and concise, with no unnecessary words.
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Effective formal writing uses specific, appropriate words and avoids slang, contractions, clichs, and overly general words. Peer reviews, done properly, can give writers objective feedback about their writing. It is the writers responsibility to evaluate the results of peer reviews and incorporate only useful feedback. Remember to budget time for careful editing and proofreading. Use all available resources, including editing checklists, peer editing, and your institutions writing lab, to improve your editing skills.
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Learning Objectives
1. Use
the
skills
you
have
learned
in
the
chapter.
2. Work
collaboratively
with
other
students.
3. Work
with
a
variety
of
academic
and
on-the-job,
real-world
examples.
Exercises
1. In
this
chapter,
you
have
thought
and
read
about
the
topic
of
mass
media.
Starting
with
the
title
The
Future
of
Information:
How
It
Will
Be
Created,
Transmitted,
and
Consumed,
narrow
the
focus
of
the
topic
until
it
is
suitable
for
a
two-
to
three-page
paper.
Then
narrow
your
topic
with
the
help
of
brainstorming,
idea
mapping,
and
searching
the
Internet
until
you
select
a
final
topic
to
explore.
Keep
a
journal
or
diary
in
which
you
record
and
comment
on
everything
you
did
to
choose
a
final
topic.
Then
record
what
you
will
do
next
to
explore
the
idea
and
create
a
thesis
statement.
2. Write a thesis statement and a formal sentence outline for an essay about the writing process. Include separate paragraphs for prewriting, drafting, and revising and editing. Your audience will be a general audience of educated adults who are unfamiliar with how writing is taught at the college level. Your purpose is to explain the stages of the writing process so that readers will understand its benefits. Collaboration Please share with a classmate and compare your answers.
3. Pieces
of
writing
in
a
variety
of
real-life
and
work-related
situations
would
benefit
from
revising
and
editing.
Consider
the
following
list
of
real-life
and
work-related
pieces
of
writing:
e-mails,
greeting
card
messages,
junk
mail,
late-night
television
commercials,
social
networking
pages,
local
newspapers,
bulletin-board
postings,
and
public
notices.
Find
and
submit
at
least
two
examples
of
writing
that
needs
revision.
Explain
what
changes
you
would
make.
Replace
any
recognizable
names
with
pseudonyms.
4. Group
activity.
At
work,
an
employer
might
someday
ask
you
to
contribute
to
the
research
base
for
an
essay
such
as
the
one
Mariah
wrote
or
the
one
you
wrote
while
working
through
this
chapter.
Choosing
either
her
topic
or
your
own,
compile
a
list
of
at
least
five
sources.
Then,
working
in
a
group
of
four
students,
bring
in
printouts
or
PDF
files
of
Internet
sources
or
paper
copies
of
non-Internet
sources
for
the
other
group
members
to
examine.
In
a
group
report,
rate
the
reliability
of
each
others
sources.
5. Group
activity.
Working
in
a
peer-review
group
of
four,
go
to
Section
7.3
"Drafting"
and
reread
the
draft
of
the
first
two
body
paragraphs
of
Mariahs
essay,
Digital
Technology:
The
Newest
and
the
Best
at
What
Price?
Review
those
two
paragraphs
using
the
same
level
of
inspection
given
to
the
essays
third
paragraph
in
Section
7.4
"Revising
and
Editing".
Suggest
and
agree
on
changes
to
improve
unity
and
coherence,
eliminate
unneeded
words,
and
refine
word
choice.
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Your purpose is to help Mariah produce two effective paragraphs for a formal college-level essay about her topic.
Learning Objectives
1. Develop
a
strong,
clear
thesis
statement
with
the
proper
elements.
2. Revise
your
thesis
statement.
Have you ever known a person who was not very good at telling stories? You probably had trouble following his train of thought as he jumped around from point to point, either being too brief in places that needed further explanation or providing too many details on a meaningless element. Maybe he told the end of the story first, then moved to the beginning and later added details to the middle. His ideas were probably scattered, and the story did not flow very well. When the story was over, you probably had many questions. Just as a personal anecdote can be a disorganized mess, an essay can fall into the same trap of being out of order and confusing. That is why writers need a thesis statement to provide a specific focus for their essay and to organize what they are about to discuss in the body. Just like a topic sentence summarizes a single paragraph, the thesis statement summarizes an entire essay. It tells the reader the point you want to make in your essay, while the essay itself supports that point. It is like a signpost that signals the essays destination. You should form your thesis before you begin to organize an essay, but you may find that it needs revision as the essay develops.
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body. It forecasts the content of the essay and suggests how you will organize your information. Remember that a thesis statement does not summarize an issue but rather dissects it.
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Tip
Even in a personal essay that allows the use of first person, your thesis should not contain phrases such as in my opinion or I believe. These statements reduce your credibility and weaken your argument. Your opinion is more convincing when you use a firm attitude.
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Exercise 1
On a separate sheet of paper, write a thesis statement for each of the following topics. Remember to make each statement specific, precise, demonstrable, forceful and confident. Topics
Texting while driving The legal drinking age in the United States Steroid use among professional athletes Abortion Racism
1. The societal and personal struggles of Troy Maxon in the play Fences symbolize the challenge of black males who lived through segregation and integration in the United States. 2. Closing all American borders for a period of five years is one solution that will tackle illegal immigration. 3. Shakespeares use of dramatic irony in Romeo and Juliet spoils the outcome for the audience and weakens the plot. 4. J. D. Salingers character in Catcher in the Rye, Holden Caulfield, is a confused rebel who voices his disgust with phonies, yet in an effort to protect himself, he acts like a phony on many occasions. 5. Compared to an absolute divorce, no-fault divorce is less expensive, promotes fairer settlements, and reflects a more realistic view of the causes for marital breakdown. 6. Exposing children from an early age to the dangers of drug abuse is a sure method of preventing future drug addicts. 7. In todays crumbling job market, a high school diploma is not significant enough education to land a stable, lucrative job.
Tip
You can find thesis statements in many places, such as in the news; in the opinions of friends, coworkers or teachers; and even in songs you hear on the radio. Become aware of thesis
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statements in everyday life by paying attention to peoples opinions and their reasons for those opinions. Pay attention to your own everyday thesis statements as well, as these can become material for future essays. Now that you have read about the contents of a good thesis statement and have seen examples, take a look at the pitfalls to avoid when composing your own thesis:
A thesis is weak when it is simply a declaration of your subject or a description of what you will discuss in your essay. Weak thesis statement: My paper will explain why imagination is more important than knowledge.
A thesis is weak when it makes an unreasonable or outrageous claim or insults the opposing side. Weak thesis statement: Religious radicals across America are trying to legislate their Puritanical beliefs by banning required high school books.
A thesis is weak when it contains an obvious fact or something that no one can disagree with or provides a dead end. Weak thesis statement: Advertising companies use sex to sell their products.
A thesis is weak when the statement is too broad. Weak thesis statement: The life of Abraham Lincoln was long and challenging.
Exercise 2
Read the following thesis statements. On a separate piece of paper, identify each as weak or strong. For those that are weak, list the reasons why. Then revise the weak statements so that they conform to the requirements of a strong thesis.
1. The
subject
of
this
paper
is
my
experience
with
ferrets
as
pets.
2. The
government
must
expand
its
funding
for
research
on
renewable
energy
resources
in
order
to
prepare
for
the
impending
end
of
oil.
3. Edgar
Allan
Poe
was
a
poet
who
lived
in
Baltimore
during
the
nineteenth
century.
4. In
this
essay,
I
will
give
you
lots
of
reasons
why
slot
machines
should
not
be
legalized
in
Baltimore.
5. Despite
his
promises
during
his
campaign,
President
Kennedy
took
few
executive
measures
to
support
civil
rights
legislation.
6. Because
many
childrens
toys
have
potential
safety
hazards
that
could
lead
to
injury,
it
is
clear
that
not
all
childrens
toys
are
safe.
7. My
experience
with
young
children
has
taught
me
that
I
want
to
be
a
disciplinary
parent
because
I
believe
that
a
child
without
discipline
can
be
a
parents
worst
nightmare.
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Writing at Work
Often in your career, you will need to ask your boss for something through an e-mail. Just as a thesis statement organizes an essay, it can also organize your e-mail request. While your e-mail will be shorter than an essay, using a thesis statement in your first paragraph quickly lets your boss know what you are asking for, why it is necessary, and what the benefits are. In short body paragraphs, you can provide the essential information needed to expand upon your request.
Tip
The best way to revise your thesis statement is to ask questions about it and then examine the answers to those questions. By challenging your own ideas and forming definite reasons for those ideas, you grow closer to a more precise point of view, which you can then incorporate into your thesis statement.
2. Clarify ideas that need explanation by asking yourself questions that narrow your thesis. Working thesis: The welfare system is a joke. Revised thesis: The welfare system keeps a socioeconomic class from gaining employment by alluring members of that class with unearned income, instead of programs to improve their education and skill sets. A joke means many things to many people. Readers bring all sorts of backgrounds and perspectives to the reading process and would need clarification for a word so vague. This expression may also be too informal for the selected audience. By asking questions, the writer can devise a more precise and appropriate explanation for joke. The writer should ask himself or herself questions similar to the 5WH questions. (See Chapter 7 "The Writing Process: How Do I Begin?" for more information on the 5WH questions.) By incorporating the answers to these questions into a thesis statement, the writer more accurately defines his or her stance, which will better guide the writing of the essay. 3. Replace any linking verbs with action verbs. Linking verbs are forms of the verb to be, a verb that simply states that a situation exists. Working thesis: Kansas City schoolteachers are not paid enough. Revised thesis: The Kansas City legislature cannot afford to pay its educators, resulting in job cuts and resignations in a district that sorely needs highly qualified and dedicated teachers. The linking verb in this working thesis statement is the word are. Linking verbs often make thesis statements weak because they do not express action. Rather, they connect words and phrases to the second half of the sentence. Readers might wonder, Why are they not paid enough? But this statement does not compel them to ask many more questions. The writer should ask himself or herself questions in order to replace the linking verb with an action verb, thus forming a stronger thesis statement, one that takes a more definitive stance on the issue:
o o o o
Who is not paying the teachers enough? What is considered enough? What is the problem? What are the results
4. Omit any general claims that are hard to support. Working thesis: Todays teenage girls are too sexualized. Revised thesis: Teenage girls who are captivated by the sexual images on MTV are conditioned to believe that a womans worth depends on her sensuality, a feeling that harms their self-esteem and behavior.
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It is true that some young women in todays society are more sexualized than in the past, but that is not true for all girls. Many girls have strict parents, dress appropriately, and do not engage in sexual activity while in middle school and high school. The writer of this thesis should ask the following questions:
o o o o o
Which teenage girls? What constitutes too sexualized? Why are they behaving that way? Where does this behavior show up? What are the repercussions?
Exercise 3
In the first section of Chapter 7 "The Writing Process: How Do I Begin?", you determined your purpose for writing and your audience. You then completed a freewriting exercise about an event you recently experienced and chose a general topic to write about. Using that general topic, you then narrowed it down by answering the 5WH questions. After you answered these questions, you chose one of the three methods of prewriting and gathered possible supporting points for your working thesis statement. Now, on a separate sheet of paper, write down your working thesis statement. Identify any weaknesses in this sentence and revise the statement to reflect the elements of a strong thesis statement. Make sure it is specific, precise, arguable, demonstrable, forceful, and confident. Collaboration Please share with a classmate and compare your answers.
Writing at Work
In your career you may have to write a project proposal that focuses on a particular problem in your company, such as reinforcing the tardiness policy. The proposal would aim to fix the problem; using a thesis statement would clearly state the boundaries of the problem and tell the goals of the project. After writing the proposal, you may find that the thesis needs revision to reflect exactly what is expressed in the body. Using the techniques from this chapter would apply to revising that thesis.
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Key Takeaways
Proper essays require a thesis statement to provide a specific focus and suggest how the essay will be organized. A thesis statement is your interpretation of the subject, not the topic itself. A strong thesis is specific, precise, forceful, confident, and is able to be demonstrated. A strong thesis challenges readers with a point of view that can be debated and can be supported with evidence. A weak thesis is simply a declaration of your topic or contains an obvious fact that cannot be argued. Depending on your topic, it may or may not be appropriate to use first person point of view. Revise your thesis by ensuring all words are specific, all ideas are exact, and all verbs express action.
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Learning Objectives
1. Select
primary
support
related
to
your
thesis.
2. Support
your
topic
sentences.
If your thesis gives the reader a roadmap to your essay, then body paragraphs should closely follow that map. The reader should be able to predict what follows your introductory paragraph by simply reading the thesis statement. The body paragraphs present the evidence you have gathered to confirm your thesis. Before you begin to support your thesis in the body, you must find information from a variety of sources that support and give credit to what you are trying to prove.
Tip
Remember that a worthy argument is backed by examples. In order to construct a valid argument, good writers conduct lots of background research and take careful notes. They also talk to people knowledgeable about a topic in order to understand its implications before writing about it.
Be
specific.
The
main
points
you
make
about
your
thesis
and
the
examples
you
use
to
expand
on
those
points
need
to
be
specific.
Use
specific
examples
to
provide
the
evidence
and
to
build
upon
your
general
ideas.
These
types
of
examples
give
your
reader
something
narrow
to
focus
on,
and
if
used
properly,
they
leave
little
doubt
about
your
claim.
General
examples,
while
they
convey
the
necessary
information,
are
not
nearly
as
compelling
or
useful
in
writing
because
they
are
too
obvious
and
typical.
Be
relevant
to
the
thesis.
Primary
support
is
considered
strong
when
it
relates
directly
to
the
thesis.
Primary
support
should
show,
explain,
or
prove
your
main
argument
without
delving
into
irrelevant
details.
When
faced
with
lots
of
information
that
could
be
used
to
prove
your
thesis,
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you may think you need to include it all in your body paragraphs. But effective writers resist the temptation to lose focus. Choose your examples wisely by making sure they directly connect to your thesis. Be detailed. Remember that your thesis, while specific, should not be very detailed. The body paragraphs are where you develop the discussion that a thorough essay requires. Using detailed support shows readers that you have considered all the facts and chosen only the most precise details to enhance your point of view.
Exercise 1
Choose one of the following working thesis statements. On a separate sheet of paper, write for at least five minutes using one of the prewriting techniques you learned in Chapter 7 "The Writing Process: How Do I Begin?".
1. 2. 3. 4. Unleashed
dogs
on
city
streets
are
a
dangerous
nuisance.
Students
cheat
for
many
different
reasons.
Drug
use
among
teens
and
young
adults
is
a
problem.
The
most
important
change
that
should
occur
at
my
college
or
university
is
____________________________________________.
Select
the
Most
Effective
Primary
Supporting
Points
for
a
Thesis
Statement
After you have prewritten about your working thesis statement, you may have generated a lot of information, which may be edited out later. Remember that your primary support must be relevant to your thesis. Remind yourself of your main argument, and delete any ideas that do not directly relate to it. Omitting unrelated ideas ensures that you will use only the most convincing information in your body paragraphs. Choose at least three of only the most compelling points. These will serve as the topic sentences for your body paragraphs.
Exercise 2
Refer to the previous exercise and select three of your most compelling reasons to support the thesis statement. Remember that the points you choose must be specific and relevant to the thesis. The statements you choose will be your primary support points, and you will later incorporate them into the topic sentences for the body paragraphs. Collaboration Please share with a classmate and compare your answers.
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When you support your thesis, you are revealing evidence. Evidence includes anything that can help support your stance. The following are the kinds of evidence you will encounter as you conduct your research:
1. Facts.
Facts
are
the
best
kind
of
evidence
to
use
because
they
often
cannot
be
disputed.
They
can
support
your
stance
by
providing
background
information
on
or
a
solid
foundation
for
your
point
of
view.
However,
some
facts
may
still
need
explanation.
For
example,
the
sentence
The
most
populated
state
in
the
United
States
is
California
is
a
pure
fact,
but
it
may
require
some
explanation
to
make
it
relevant
to
your
specific
argument.
2. Judgments.Judgments
are
conclusions
drawn
from
the
given
facts.
Judgments
are
more
credible
than
opinions
because
they
are
founded
upon
careful
reasoning
and
examination
of
a
topic.
3. Testimony.Testimony
consists
of
direct
quotations
from
either
an
eyewitness
or
an
expert
witness.
An
eyewitness
is
someone
who
has
direct
experience
with
a
subject;
he
adds
authenticity
to
an
argument
based
on
facts.
An
expert
witness
is
a
person
who
has
extensive
experience
with
a
topic.
This
person
studies
the
facts
and
provides
commentary
based
on
either
facts
or
judgments,
or
both.
An
expert
witness
adds
authority
and
credibility
to
an
argument.
4. Personal
observation.
Personal
observation
is
similar
to
testimony,
but
personal
observation
consists
of
your
testimony.
It
reflects
what
you
know
to
be
true
because
you
have
experiences
and
have
formed
either
opinions
or
judgments
about
them.
For
instance,
if
you
are
one
of
five
children
and
your
thesis
states
that
being
part
of
a
large
family
is
beneficial
to
a
childs
social
development,
you
could
use
your
own
experience
to
support
your
thesis.
Writing at Work
In any job where you devise a plan, you will need to support the steps that you lay out. This is an area in which you would incorporate primary support into your writing. Choosing only the most specific and relevant information to expand upon the steps will ensure that your plan appears well-thought-out and precise.
Tip
You can consult a vast pool of resources to gather support for your stance. Citing relevant information from reliable sources ensures that your reader will take you seriously and consider your assertions. Use any of the following sources for your essay: newspapers or news organization websites, magazines, encyclopedias, and scholarly journals, which are periodicals that address topics in a specialized field.
As you read in Chapter 7 "The Writing Process: How Do I Begin?", topic sentences indicate the location and main points of the basic arguments of your essay. These sentences are vital to writing your body paragraphs because they always refer back to and support your thesis statement. Topic sentences are linked to the ideas you have introduced in your thesis, thus reminding readers what your essay is about. A paragraph without a clearly identified topic sentence may be unclear and scattered, just like an essay without a thesis statement.
Tip
Unless your teacher instructs otherwise, you should include at least three body paragraphs in your essay. A five-paragraph essay, including the introduction and conclusion, is commonly the standard for exams and essay assignments. Consider the following the thesis statement:
The following topic sentence is a primary support point for the thesis. The topic sentence states exactly what the controlling idea of the paragraph is. Later, you will see the writer immediately provide support for the sentence.
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Exercise 3
In Note 8.19 "Exercise 2", you chose three of your most convincing points to support the thesis statement you selected from the list. Take each point and incorporate it into a topic sentence for each body paragraph. Supporting point 1: ____________________________________________ Topic sentence: ____________________________________________ Supporting point 2: ____________________________________________ Topic sentence: ____________________________________________ Supporting point 3: ____________________________________________ Topic sentence: ____________________________________________ Collaboration Please share with a classmate and compare your answers.
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The following paragraph contains supporting detail sentences for the primary support sentence (the topic sentence), which is underlined.
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Exercise 4
Using the three topic sentences you composed for the thesis statement in Note 8.18 "Exercise 1", draft at least three supporting details for each point. Thesis statement: ____________________________________________ Primary supporting point 1: ____________________________________________ Supporting details: ____________________________________________ Primary supporting point 2: ____________________________________________ Supporting details: ____________________________________________ Primary supporting point 3: ____________________________________________ Supporting details: ____________________________________________
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Tip
You have the option of writing your topic sentences in one of three ways. You can state it at the beginning of the body paragraph, or at the end of the paragraph, or you do not have to write it at all. This is called an implied topic sentence. An implied topic sentence lets readers form the main idea for themselves. For beginning writers, it is best to not use implied topic sentences because it makes it harder to focus your writing. Your instructor may also want to clearly identify the sentences that support your thesis. For more information on the placement of thesis statements and implied topic statements, see Chapter 7 "The Writing Process: How Do I Begin?".
Tip
Print out the first draft of your essay and use a highlighter to mark your topic sentences in the body paragraphs. Make sure they are clearly stated and accurately present your paragraphs, as well as accurately reflect your thesis. If your topic sentence contains information that does not exist in the rest of the paragraph, rewrite it to more accurately match the rest of the paragraph.
Key Takeaways
Your body paragraphs should closely follow the path set forth by your thesis statement. Strong body paragraphs contain evidence that supports your thesis. Primary support comprises the most important points you use to support your thesis. Strong primary support is specific, detailed, and relevant to the thesis. Prewriting helps you determine your most compelling primary support. Evidence includes facts, judgments, testimony, and personal observation. Reliable sources may include newspapers, magazines, academic journals, books, encyclopedias, and firsthand testimony. A topic sentence presents one point of your thesis statement while the information in the rest of the paragraph supports that point. A body paragraph comprises a topic sentence plus supporting details.
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Learning Objectives
1. 2. 3. 4. Understand
how
and
why
organizational
techniques
help
writers
and
readers
stay
focused.
Assess
how
and
when
to
use
chronological
order
to
organize
an
essay.
Recognize
how
and
when
to
use
order
of
importance
to
organize
an
essay.
Determine
how
and
when
to
use
spatial
order
to
organize
an
essay.
The method of organization you choose for your essay is just as important as its content. Without a clear organizational pattern, your reader could become confused and lose interest. The way you structure your essay helps your readers draw connections between the body and the thesis, and the structure also keeps you focused as you plan and write the essay. Choosing your organizational pattern before you outline ensures that each body paragraph works to support and develop your thesis. This section covers three ways to organize body paragraphs:
1. Chronological
order
2. Order
of
importance
3. Spatial
order
When you begin to draft your essay, your ideas may seem to flow from your mind in a seemingly random manner. Your readers, who bring to the table different backgrounds, viewpoints, and ideas, need you to clearly organize these ideas in order to help process and accept them. A solid organizational pattern gives your ideas a path that you can follow as you develop your draft. Knowing how you will organize your paragraphs allows you to better express and analyze your thoughts. Planning the structure of your essay before you choose supporting evidence helps you conduct more effective and targeted research.
Chronological
Order
In Chapter 7 "The Writing Process: How Do I Begin?", you learned that chronological arrangement has the following purposes:
To explain the history of an event or a topic To tell a story or relate an experience To explain how to do or to make something To explain the steps in a process
Chronological order is mostly used in expository writing, which is a form of writing that narrates, describes, informs, or explains a process. When using chronological order, arrange the events in the order that they actually happened, or will happen if you are giving instructions. This
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method requires you to use words such as first, second, then, after that, later, and finally. These transition words guide you and your reader through the paper as you expand your thesis. For example, if you are writing an essay about the history of the airline industry, you would begin with its conception and detail the essential timeline events up until present day. You would follow the chain of events using words such as first, then, next, and so on.
Writing at Work
At some point in your career you may have to file a complaint with your human resources department. Using chronological order is a useful tool in describing the events that led up to your filing the grievance. You would logically lay out the events in the order that they occurred using the key transition words. The more logical your complaint, the more likely you will be well received and helped.
Exercise 1
Choose an accomplishment you have achieved in your life. The important moment could be in sports, schooling, or extracurricular activities. On your own sheet of paper, list the steps you took to reach your goal. Try to be as specific as possible with the steps you took. Pay attention to using transition words to focus your writing. Keep in mind that chronological order is most appropriate for the following purposes:
Writing essays containing heavy research Writing essays with the aim of listing, explaining, or narrating Writing essays that analyze literary works such as poems, plays, or books
Tip
When using chronological order, your introduction should indicate the information you will cover and in what order, and the introduction should also establish the relevance of the information. Your body paragraphs should then provide clear divisions or steps in chronology. You can divide your paragraphs by time (such as decades, wars, or other historical events) or by the same structure of the work you are examining (such as a line-by-line explication of a poem).
Exercise 2
On a separate sheet of paper, write a paragraph that describes a process you are familiar with and can do well. Assume that your reader is unfamiliar with the procedure. Remember to use the chronological key words, such as first, second, then, and finally.
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Order
of
Importance
Recall from Chapter 7 "The Writing Process: How Do I Begin?" that order of importance is best used for the following purposes:
Persuading and convincing Ranking items by their importance, benefit, or significance Illustrating a situation, problem, or solution
Most essays move from the least to the most important point, and the paragraphs are arranged in an effort to build the essays strength. Sometimes, however, it is necessary to begin with your most important supporting point, such as in an essay that contains a thesis that is highly debatable. When writing a persuasive essay, it is best to begin with the most important point because it immediately captivates your readers and compels them to continue reading. For example, if you were supporting your thesis that homework is detrimental to the education of high school students, you would want to present your most convincing argument first, and then move on to the less important points for your case. Some key transitional words you should use with this method of organization are most importantly, almost as importantly, just as importantly, and finally.
Writing at Work
During your career, you may be required to work on a team that devises a strategy for a specific goal of your company, such as increasing profits. When planning your strategy you should organize your steps in order of importance. This demonstrates the ability to prioritize and plan. Using the order of importance technique also shows that you can create a resolution with logical steps for accomplishing a common goal.
Exercise 3
On a separate sheet of paper, write a paragraph that discusses a passion of yours. Your passion could be music, a particular sport, filmmaking, and so on. Your paragraph should be built upon the reasons why you feel so strongly. Briefly discuss your reasons in the order of least to greatest importance.
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Spatial
Order
As stated in Chapter 7 "The Writing Process: How Do I Begin?", spatial order is best used for the following purposes:
Helping readers visualize something as you want them to see it Evoking a scene using the senses (sight, touch, taste, smell, and sound) Writing a descriptive essay
Spatial order means that you explain or describe objects as they are arranged around you in your space, for example in a bedroom. As the writer, you create a picture for your reader, and their perspective is the viewpoint from which you describe what is around you. The view must move in an orderly, logical progression, giving the reader clear directional signals to follow from place to place. The key to using this method is to choose a specific starting point and then guide the reader to follow your eye as it moves in an orderly trajectory from your starting point. Pay attention to the following students description of her bedroom and how she guides the reader through the viewing process, foot by foot.
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The paragraph incorporates two objectives you have learned in this chapter: using an implied topic sentence and applying spatial order. Often in a descriptive essay, the two work together. The following are possible transition words to include when using spatial order:
Just to the left or just to the right Behind Between On the left or on the right Across from A little further down To the south, to the east, and so on A few yards away Turning left or turning right
Exercise 4
On a separate sheet of paper, write a paragraph using spatial order that describes your commute to work, school, or another location you visit often. Collaboration Please share with a classmate and compare your answers.
Key Takeaways
The way you organize your body paragraphs ensures you and your readers stay focused on and draw connections to, your thesis statement. A strong organizational pattern allows you to articulate, analyze, and clarify your thoughts. Planning the organizational structure for your essay before you begin to search for supporting evidence helps you conduct more effective and directed research. Chronological order is most commonly used in expository writing. It is useful for explaining the history of your subject, for telling a story, or for explaining a process. Order of importance is most appropriate in a persuasion paper as well as for essays in which you rank things, people, or events by their significance. Spatial order describes things as they are arranged in space and is best for helping readers visualize something as you want them to see it; it creates a dominant impression.
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Learning Objectives
1. Recognize
the
importance
of
strong
introductory
and
concluding
paragraphs.
2. Learn
to
engage
the
reader
immediately
with
the
introductory
paragraph.
3. Practice
concluding
your
essays
in
a
more
memorable
way.
Picture your introduction as a storefront window: You have a certain amount of space to attract your customers (readers) to your goods (subject) and bring them inside your store (discussion). Once you have enticed them with something intriguing, you then point them in a specific direction and try to make the sale (convince them to accept your thesis). Your introduction is an invitation to your readers to consider what you have to say and then to follow your train of thought as you expand upon your thesis statement. An introduction serves the following purposes:
1. Establishes
your
voice
and
tone,
or
your
attitude,
toward
the
subject
2. Introduces
the
general
topic
of
the
essay
3. States
the
thesis
that
will
be
supported
in
the
body
paragraphs
First impressions are crucial and can leave lasting effects in your readers mind, which is why the introduction is so important to your essay. If your introductory paragraph is dull or disjointed, your reader probably will not have much interest in continuing with the essay.
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Exercise 1
On a separate sheet of paper, jot down a few general remarks that you can make about the topic for which you formed a thesis in Section 8.1 "Developing a Strong, Clear Thesis Statement". Immediately capturing your readers interest increases the chances of having them read what you are about to discuss. You can garner curiosity for your essay in a number of ways. Try to get your readers personally involved by doing any of the following:
Appealing to their emotions Using logic Beginning with a provocative question or opinion Opening with a startling statistic or surprising fact Raising a question or series of questions Presenting an explanation or rationalization for your essay Opening with a relevant quotation or incident Opening with a striking image Including a personal anecdote
Tip
Remember that your diction, or word choice, while always important, is most crucial in your introductory paragraph. Boring diction could extinguish any desire a person might have to read through your discussion. Choose words that create images or express action. For more information on diction, see Chapter 3 "Working with Words: Which Word Is Right?". In Chapter 7 "The Writing Process: How Do I Begin?", you followed Mariah as she moved through the writing process. In this chapter, Mariah writes her introduction and conclusion for the same essay. Mariah incorporates some of the introductory elements into her introductory paragraph, which she previously outlined in Chapter 7 "The Writing Process: How Do I Begin?". Her thesis statement is underlined.
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Tip
If you have trouble coming up with a provocative statement for your opening, it is a good idea to use a relevant, attention-grabbing quote about your topic. Use a search engine to find statements made by historical or significant figures about your subject.
Writing at Work
In your job field, you may be required to write a speech for an event, such as an awards banquet or a dedication ceremony. The introduction of a speech is similar to an essay because you have a limited amount of space to attract your audiences attention. Using the same techniques, such as a provocative quote or an interesting statistic, is an effective way to engage your listeners. Using the funnel approach also introduces your audience to your topic and then presents your main idea in a logical manner.
Exercise 2
Reread each sentence in Mariahs introductory paragraph. Indicate which techniques she used and comment on how each sentence is designed to attract her readers interest.
Writing
a
Conclusion
It is not unusual to want to rush when you approach your conclusion, and even experienced writers may fade. But what good writers remember is that it is vital to put just as much attention into the conclusion as in the rest of the essay. After all, a hasty ending can undermine an otherwise strong essay.
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A conclusion that does not correspond to the rest of your essay, has loose ends, or is unorganized can unsettle your readers and raise doubts about the entire essay. However, if you have worked hard to write the introduction and body, your conclusion can often be the most logical part to compose.
Tip
When closing your essay, do not expressly state that you are drawing to a close. Relying on statements such as in conclusion, it is clear that, as you can see, or in summation is unnecessary and can be considered trite.
Tip
It is wise to avoid doing any of the following in your conclusion:
Introducing new material Contradicting your thesis Changing your thesis Using apologies or disclaimers
Introducing new material in your conclusion has an unsettling effect on your reader. When you raise new points, you make your reader want more information, which you could not possibly provide in the limited space of your final paragraph.
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Contradicting or changing your thesis statement causes your readers to think that you do not actually have a conviction about your topic. After all, you have spent several paragraphs adhering to a singular point of view. When you change sides or open up your point of view in the conclusion, your reader becomes less inclined to believe your original argument. By apologizing for your opinion or stating that you know it is tough to digest, you are in fact admitting that even you know what you have discussed is irrelevant or unconvincing. You do not want your readers to feel this way. Effective writers stand by their thesis statement and do not stray from it.
Exercise 3
On a separate sheet of a paper, restate your thesis from Note 8.52 "Exercise 2" of this section and then make some general concluding remarks. Next, compose a final emphatic statement. Finally, incorporate what you have written into a strong conclusion paragraph for your essay. Collaboration Please share with a classmate and compare your answers Mariah incorporates some of these pointers into her conclusion. She has paraphrased her thesis statement in the first sentence.
Tip
Make sure your essay is balanced by not having an excessively long or short introduction or conclusion. Check that they match each other in length as closely as possible, and try to mirror the formula you used in each. Parallelism strengthens the message of your essay.
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Writing at Work
On the job you will sometimes give oral presentations based on research you have conducted. A concluding statement to an oral report contains the same elements as a written conclusion. You should wrap up your presentation by restating the purpose of the presentation, reviewing its main points, and emphasizing the importance of the material you presented. A strong conclusion will leave a lasting impression on your audience.
Key Takeaways
A strong opening captures your readers interest and introduces them to your topic before you present your thesis statement. An introduction should restate your thesis, review your main points, and emphasize the importance of the topic. The funnel technique to writing the introduction begins with generalities and gradually narrows your focus until you present your thesis. A good introduction engages peoples emotions or logic, questions or explains the subject, or provides a striking image or quotation. Carefully chosen diction in both the introduction and conclusion prevents any confusing or boring ideas. A conclusion that does not connect to the rest of the essay can diminish the effect of your paper. The conclusion should remain true to your thesis statement. It is best to avoid changing your tone or your main idea and avoid introducing any new material. Closing with a final emphatic statement provides closure for your readers and makes your essay more memorable.
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Exercises
1. On
a
separate
sheet
of
paper,
choose
one
of
the
examples
of
a
proper
thesis
statement
from
this
chapter
(one
that
interests
you)
and
form
three
supporting
points
for
that
statement.
After
you
have
formed
your
three
points,
write
a
topic
sentence
for
each
body
paragraph.
Make
sure
that
your
topic
sentences
can
be
backed
up
with
examples
and
details.
2. Group
activity.
Choose
one
of
the
topics
from
Note
8.5
"Exercise
1"
in
Section
8.1
"Developing
a
Strong,
Clear
Thesis
Statement"
and
form
a
yes-or-no
question
about
that
topic.
Then,
take
a
survey
of
the
people
in
your
class
to
find
out
how
they
feel
about
the
subject.
Using
the
majority
vote,
ask
those
people
to
write
on
slips
of
paper
the
reasons
for
their
opinion.
Using
the
data
you
collect,
form
a
thesis
statement
based
on
your
classmates
perspectives
on
the
topic
and
their
reasons.
3. On
a
separate
sheet
of
a
paper,
write
an
introduction
for
an
essay
based
on
the
thesis
statement
from
the
group
activity
using
the
techniques
for
introductory
paragraphs
that
you
learned
in
this
chapter.
4. Start
a
journal
in
which
you
record
spoken
thesis
statements.
Start
listening
closely
to
the
opinions
expressed
by
your
teachers,
classmates,
friends,
and
family
members.
Ask
them
to
provide
at
least
three
reasons
for
their
opinion
and
record
them
in
the
journal.
Use
this
as
material
for
future
essays.
5. Open
a
magazine
and
read
a
lengthy
article.
See
if
you
can
pinpoint
the
thesis
statement
as
well
as
the
topic
sentence
for
each
paragraph
and
its
supporting
details.
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Getting Started
Introductory Exercises
1. Take
a
moment
to
write
three
words
that
describe
your
success
in
writing.
2. Make
a
list
of
words
that
you
associate
with
writing.
Compare
your
list
with
those
of
your
classmates.
3. Briefly
describe
your
experience
writing
and
include
one
link
to
something
you
like
to
read
in
your
post.
Something we often hear in business is, Get it in writing. This advice is meant to prevent misunderstandings based on what one person thought the other person said. But does written communicationgetting it in writingalways prevent misunderstandings? According to a Washington Post news story, a written agreement would have been helpful to an airline customer named Mike. A victim of an airport mishap, Mike was given vouchers for $7,500 worth of free travel. However, in accordance with the airlines standard policy, the vouchers were due to expire in twelve months. When Mike saw that he and his wife would not be able to do enough flying to use the entire amount before the expiration date, he called the airline and asked for an extension. He was told the airline would extend the deadline, but later discovered they were willing to do so at only 50 percent of the vouchers value. An airline spokesman told the newspaper, If [Mike] can produce a letter stating that we would give the full value of the vouchers, he should produce it. [1] Yet, as we will see in this chapter, putting something in writing is not always a foolproof way to ensure accuracy and understanding. A written communication is only as accurate as the writers knowledge of the subject and audience, and understanding depends on how well the writer captures the readers attention.
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This chapter addresses the written word in a business context. We will also briefly consider the symbols, design, font, timing, and related nonverbal expressions you make when composing a page or document. Our discussions will focus on effective communication of your thoughts and ideas through writing that is clear, concise, and efficient. [1] Oldenburg, D. (2005, April 12). Old adage holds: Get it in writing. Washington Post, p. C10. Retrieved from http://www.washingtonpost.com/wp-dyn/articles/A45309-2005Apr11.html
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Learning Objective
1. Explain
how
written
communication
is
similar
to
oral
communication,
and
how
it
is
different.
The written word often stands in place of the spoken word. People often say it was good to hear from you when they receive an e-mail or a letter, when in fact they didnt hear the message, they read it. Still, if they know you well, they may mentally hear your voice in your written words. Writing a message to friends or colleagues can be as natural as talking to them. Yet when we are asked to write something, we often feel anxious and view writing as a more effortful, exacting process than talking would be. Oral and written forms of communication are similar in many ways. They both rely on the basic communication process, which consists of eight essential elements: source, receiver, message, channel, receiver, feedback, environment, context, and interference. Table 9.1 "Eight Essential Elements of Communication" summarizes these elements and provides examples of how each element might be applied in oral and written communication.
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Jay asks Heather to participate in a conference call at 3:15. The channel is the telephone. Heather says yes.
Jays e-mail asks Heather to participate in a conference call at 3:15. The channel is e-mail.
Heather replies with an e- mail saying yes. Heather is at her desk when she receives Jays e-mail.
7. Context
Heather is traveling by train on a business trip when she receives Jays phone call. Heather expects Jay to send an e-mail with the call-in information for the call. Jay expects to do so, and does. Heather calls in at 3:15, but she has missed the call because she forgot that she is in a different time zone from Jay.
8. Interference
Also known as noise, interference is anything that blocks or distorts the communication process.
Heather expects Jay to dial and connect the call. Jay expects Heather to check her e-mail for the call-in information so that she can join the call. Heather waits for a phone call from Jay at 3:15, but he doesnt call.
As you can see from the applications in this example, at least two different kinds of interference have the potential to ruin a conference call, and the interference can exist regardless of whether the communication to plan the call is oral or written. Try switching the Context and Interference examples from Oral to Written, and you will see that mismatched expectations and time zone confusion can happen by phone or by e-mail. While this example has an unfavorable outcome, it points out a way in which oral and written communication processes are similar.
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Another way in which oral and written forms of communication are similar is that they can be divided into verbal and nonverbal categories. Verbal communication involves the words you say, and nonverbal communication involves how you say themyour tone of voice, your facial expression, body language, and so forth. Written communication also involves verbal and nonverbal dimensions. The words you choose are the verbal dimension. How you portray or display them is the nonverbal dimension, which can include the medium (e-mail or a printed document), the typeface or font, or the appearance of your signature on a letter. In this sense, oral and written communication are similar in their approach even as they are quite different in their application. The written word allows for a dynamic communication process between source and receiver, but is often asynchronous, meaning that it occurs at different times. When we communicate face-toface, we get immediate feedback, but our written words stand in place of that interpersonal interaction and we lack that immediate response. Since we are often not physically present when someone reads what we have written, it is important that we anticipate the readers needs, interpretation, and likely response to our written messages. Suppose you are asked to write a message telling clients about a new product or service your company is about to offer. If you were speaking to one of them in a relaxed setting over coffee, what would you say? What words would you choose to describe the product or service, and how it may fulfill the clients needs? As the business communicator, you must focus on the words you use and how you use them. Short, simple sentences, in themselves composed of words, also communicate a business style. In your previous English classes you may have learned to write eloquently, but in a business context, your goal is clear, direct communication. One strategy to achieve this goal is to write with the same words and phrases you use when you talk. However, since written communication lacks the immediate feedback that is present in an oral conversation, you need to choose words and phrases even more carefully to promote accuracy, clarity, and understanding.
Key Takeaway
Written communication involves the same eight basic elements as oral communication, but it is often asynchronous.
Exercises
1. Review
the
oral
and
written
applications
in
Table
9.1
"Eight
Essential
Elements
of
Communication"
and
construct
a
different
scenario
for
each.
What
could
Jay
and
Heather
do
differently
to
make
the
conference
call
a
success?
2. Visit
a
business
Web
site
that
has
an
About
Us
page.
Read
the
About
Us
message
and
write
a
summary
in
your
own
words
of
what
it
tells
you
about
the
company.
Compare
your
results
with
those
of
your
classmates.
3. You
are
your
own
company.
What
words
describe
you?
Design
a
logo,
create
a
name,
and
present
your
descriptive
words
in
a
way
that
gets
attention.
Share
and
compare
with
classmates.
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Learning Objective
1. Explain
how
reading,
writing,
and
critical
thinking
contribute
to
becoming
a
good
writer.
You may think that some people are simply born better writers than others, but in fact writing is a reflection of experience and effort. If you think about your successes as a writer, you may come up with a couple of favorite books, authors, or teachers that inspired you to express yourself. You may also recall a sense of frustration with your previous writing experiences. It is normal and natural to experience a sense of frustration at the perceived inability to express oneself. The emphasis here is on your perception of yourself as a writer as one aspect of how you communicate. Most people use oral communication for much of their self-expression, from daily interactions to formal business meetings. You have a lifetime of experience in that arena that you can leverage to your benefit in your writing. Reading out loud what you have written is a positive technique well address later in more depth. Martin Luther King Jr.s statement, Violence is the language of the unheard emphasizes the importance of finding ones voice, of being able to express ones ideas. Violence comes in many forms, but is often associated with frustration born of the lack of opportunity to communicate. You may read Kings words and think of the Civil Rights movement of the 1960s, or perhaps of the violence of the 9/11 terrorist attacks, or of wars happening in the world today. Public demonstrations and fighting are expressions of voice, from individual to collective. Finding your voice, and learning to listen to others, is part of learning to communicate. You are your own best ally when it comes to your writing. Keeping a positive frame of mind about your journey as a writer is not a clich or simple, hollow advice. Your attitude toward writing can and does influence your written products. Even if writing has been a challenge for you, the fact that you are reading this sentence means you perceive the importance of this essential skill. This text and our discussions will help you improve your writing, and your positive attitude is part of your success strategy. There is no underestimating the power of effort when combined with inspiration and motivation. The catch then is to get inspired and motivated. Thats not all it takes, but it is a great place to start. You were not born with a key pad in front of you, but when you want to share something with friends and text them, the words (or abbreviations) come almost naturally. So you recognize you have the skills necessary to begin the process of improving and harnessing your writing abilities for business success. It will take time and effort, and the proverbial journey starts with a single step, but dont lose sight of the fact that your skillful ability to craft words will make a significant difference in your career.
Reading
Reading is one step many writers point to as an integral step in learning to write effectively. You may like Harry Potter books or be a Twilight fan, but if you want to write effectively in business, you need to read business-related documents. These can include letters, reports, business
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proposals, and business plans. You may find these where you work or in your schools writing center, business department, or library; there are also many Web sites that provide sample business documents of all kinds. Your reading should also include publications in the industry where you work or plan to work, such as Aviation Week, InfoWorld, Journal of Hospitality, International Real Estate Digest, or Womens Wear Daily, to name just a few. You can also gain an advantage by reading publications in fields other than your chosen one; often reading outside your niche can enhance your versatility and help you learn how other people express similar concepts. Finally, dont neglect general media like the business section of your local newspaper, and national publications like the Wall Street Journal, Fast Company, and the Harvard Business Review. Reading is one of the most useful lifelong habits you can practice to boost your business communication skills. In the real world when you are under a deadline and production is paramount, youll be rushed and may lack the time to do adequate background reading for a particular assignment. For now, take advantage of your business communication course by exploring common business documents you may be called on to write, contribute to, or play a role in drafting. Some documents have a degree of formula to them, and your familiarity with them will reduce your preparation and production time while increasing your effectiveness. As you read similar documents, take notes on what you observe. As you read several sales letters, you may observe several patterns that can serve you well later on when its your turn. These patterns are often called conventions, or conventional language patterns for a specific genre.
Writing
Never lose sight of one key measure of the effectiveness of your writing: the degree to which it fulfills readers expectations. If you are in a law office, you know the purpose of a court brief is to convince the judge that certain points of law apply to the given case. If you are at a newspaper, you know that an editorial opinion article is supposed to convince readers of the merits of a certain viewpoint, whereas a news article is supposed to report facts without bias. If you are writing ad copy, the goal is to motivate consumers to make a purchase decision. In each case, you are writing to a specific purpose, and a great place to start when considering what to write is to answer the following question: what are the readers expectations? When you are a junior member of the team, you may be given clerical tasks like filling in forms, populating a database, or coordinating appointments. Or you may be assigned to do research that involves reading, interviewing, and note taking. Dont underestimate these facets of the writing process; instead, embrace the fact that writing for business often involves tasks that a novelist might not even recognize as writing. Your contribution is quite important and in itself is an onthe-job learning opportunity that shouldnt be taken for granted. When given a writing assignment, it is important to make sure you understand what you are being asked to do. You may read the directions and try to put them in your own words to make sense of the assignment. Be careful, however, not to lose sight of what the directions say versus what you think they say. Just as an audiences expectations should be part of your consideration of how, what, and why to write, the instructions given by your instructor, or in a work situation by your supervisor, establish expectations. Just as you might ask a mentor more about a business
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writing assignment at work, you need to use the resources available to you to maximize your learning opportunity. Ask the professor to clarify any points you find confusing, or perceive more than one way to interpret, in order to better meet the expectations. Before you write an opening paragraph, or even the first sentence, it is important to consider the overall goal of the assignment. The word assignment can apply equally to a written product for class or for your employer. You might make a list of the main points and see how those points may become the topic sentences in a series of paragraphs. You may also give considerable thought to whether your word choice, your tone, your language, and what you want to say is in line with your understanding of your audience. We briefly introduced the writing process previously, and will visit it in depth later in our discussion, but for now writing should about exploring your options. Authors rarely have a finished product in mind when they start, but once you know what your goal is and how to reach it, you writing process will become easier and more effective.
Critical
Thinking
Critical thinking means becoming aware of your thinking process. Its a human trait that allows us to step outside what we read or write and ask ourselves, Does this really make sense? Are there other, perhaps better, ways to explain this idea? Sometimes our thinking is very abstract and becomes clear only through the process of getting thoughts down in words. As a character in E. M. Forsters Aspects of the Novel said, How can I tell what I think till I see what I say? [1]
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Did you really write what you meant to, and will it be easily understood by the reader? Successful writing forms a relationship with the audience, reaching the reader on a deep level that can be dynamic and motivating. In contrast, when writing fails to meet the audiences expectations, you already know the consequences: theyll move on. Learning to write effectively involves reading, writing, critical thinking, and hard work. You may have seen The Wizard of Oz and recall the scene when Dorothy discovers what is behind the curtain. Up until that moment, she believed the Wizards powers were needed to change her situation, but now she discovers that the power is her own. Like Dorothy, you can discover that the power to write successfully rests in your hands. Excellent business writing can be inspiring, and it is important to not lose that sense of inspiration as we deconstruct the process of writing to its elemental components. You may be amazed by the performance of Tony Hawk on a skateboard ramp, Mia Hamm on the soccer field, or Michael Phelps in the water. Those who demonstrate excellence often make it look easy, but nothing could be further from the truth. Effort, targeted practice, and persistence will win the day every time. When it comes to writing, you need to learn to recognize clear and concise writing while looking behind the curtain at how it is created. This is not to say we are going to lose the magic associated with the best writers in the field. Instead, well appreciate what we are reading as we examine how it was written and how the writer achieved success.
Key Takeaway
Success in writing comes from good habits: reading, writing (especially targeted practice), and critical thinking.
Exercises
1. Interview
one
person
whose
job
involves
writing.
This
can
include
writing
e-mails,
reports,
proposals,
invoices,
or
any
other
form
of
business
document.
Where
did
this
person
learn
to
write?
What
would
they
include
as
essential
steps
to
learning
to
write
for
success
in
business?
Share
your
results
with
a
classmate.
2. For
five
consecutive
days,
read
the
business
section
of
your
local
newspaper
or
another
daily
paper.
Write
a
one-page
summary
of
the
news
that
makes
the
most
impression
on
you.
Review
your
summaries
and
compare
them
with
those
of
your
classmates.
3. Practice
filling
out
an
online
form
that
requires
writing
sentences,
such
as
a
job
application
for
a
company
that
receives
applications
online.
How
does
this
kind
of
writing
compare
with
the
writing
you
have
done
for
other
courses
in
the
past?
Discuss
your
thoughts
with
your
classmates.
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Learning Objectives
1. Identify
six
basic
qualities
that
characterize
good
business
writing.
2. Identify
and
explain
the
rhetorical
elements
and
cognate
strategies
that
contribute
to
good
writing.
One common concern is to simply address the question, what is good writing? As we progress through our study of written business communication well try to answer it. But recognize that while the question may be simple, the answer is complex. Edward P. Bailey [1] offers several key points to remember. Good business writing
Lets examine these qualities in more depth. Baileys first point is one that generates a fair amount of debate. What are the rules? Do the rules depend on audience expectations or industry standards, what your English teacher taught you, or are they reflected in the amazing writing of authors you might point to as positive examples? The answer is all of the above, with a point of clarification. You may find it necessary to balance audience expectations with industry standards for a document, and may need to find a balance or compromise. Bailey [2] points to common sense as one basic criterion of good writing, but common sense is a product of experience. When searching for balance, reader understanding is the deciding factor. The correct use of a semicolon may not be what is needed to make a sentence work. Your reading audience should carry extra attention in everything you write because, without them, you wont have many more writing assignments. When we say that good writing follows the rules, we dont mean that a writer cannot be creative. Just as an art student needs to know how to draw a scene in correct perspective before he can break the rules by bending perspective, so a writer needs to know the rules of language. Being well versed in how to use words correctly, form sentences with proper grammar, and build logical paragraphs are skills the writer can use no matter what the assignment. Even though some business settings may call for conservative writing, there are other areas where creativity is not only allowed but mandated. Imagine working for an advertising agency or a software development firm; in such situations success comes from expressing new, untried ideas. By following the rules of language and correct writing, a writer can express those creative ideas in a form that comes through clearly and promotes understanding.
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Similarly, writing that is easy to read is not the same as dumbed down or simplistic writing. What is easy to read? For a young audience, you may need to use straightforward, simple terms, but to ignore their use of the language is to create an artificial and unnecessary barrier. An example referring to Miley Cyrus may work with one reading audience and fall flat with another. Profession-specific terms can serve a valuable purpose as we write about precise concepts. Not everyone will understand all the terms in a profession, but if your audience is largely literate in the terms of the field, using industry terms will help you establish a relationship with your readers. The truly excellent writer is one who can explain complex ideas in a way that the reader can understand. Sometimes ease of reading can come from the writers choice of a brilliant illustrative example to get a point across. In other situations, it can be the writers incorporation of definitions into the text so that the meaning of unfamiliar words is clear. It may also be a matter of choosing dynamic, specific verbs that make it clear what is happening and who is carrying out the action. Baileys third point concerns the interest of the reader. Will they want to read it? This question should guide much of what you write. We increasingly gain information from our environment through visual, auditory, and multimedia channels, from YouTube to streaming audio, and to watching the news online. Some argue that this has led to a decreased attention span for reading, meaning that writers need to appeal to readers with short, punchy sentences and catchy phrases. However, there are still plenty of people who love to immerse themselves in reading an interesting article, proposal, or marketing piece. Perhaps the most universally useful strategy in capturing your readers attention is to state how your writing can meet the readers needs. If your document provides information to answer a question, solve a problem, or explain how to increase profits or cut costs, you may want to state this in the beginning. By opening with a whats in it for me strategy, you give your audience a reason to be interested in what youve written.
meets the readers expectations, is clear and concise, is efficient and effective.
To meet the readers expectations, the writer needs to understand who the intended reader is. In some business situations, you are writing just to one person: your boss, a coworker in another department, or an individual customer or vendor. If you know the person well, it may be as easy for you to write to him or her as it is to write a note to your parent or roommate. If you dont
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know the person, you can at least make some reasonable assumptions about his or her expectations, based on the position he or she holds and its relation to your job. In other situations, you may be writing a document to be read by a group or team, an entire department, or even a large number of total strangers. How can you anticipate their expectations and tailor your writing accordingly? Naturally you want to learn as much as you can about your likely audience. How much you can learn and what kinds of information will vary with the situation. If you are writing Web site content, for example, you may never meet the people who will visit the site, but you can predict why they would be drawn to the site and what they would expect to read there. Beyond learning about your audience, your clear understanding of the writing assignment and its purpose will help you to meet reader expectations. Our addition of the fifth point concerning clear and concise writing reflects the increasing tendency in business writing to eliminate error. Errors can include those associated with production, from writing to editing, and reader response. Your twin goals of clear and concise writing point to a central goal across communication: fidelity. This concept involves our goal of accurately communicating all the intended information with a minimum of signal or message breakdown or misinterpretation. Designing your documents, including writing and presentation, to reduce message breakdown is an important part of effective business communication. This leads our discussion to efficiency. There are only twenty-four hours in a day and we are increasingly asked to do more with less, with shorter deadlines almost guaranteed. As a writer, how do you meet ever-increasing expectations? Each writing assignment requires a clear understanding of the goals and desired results, and when either of these two aspects is unclear, the efficiency of your writing can be compromised. Rewrites require time that you may not have, but will have to make if the assignment was not done correctly the first time. As we have discussed previously, making a habit of reading similar documents prior to beginning your process of writing can help establish a mental template of your desired product. If you can see in your minds eye what you want to write, and have the perspective of similar documents combined with audiences needs, you can write more efficiently. Your written documents are products and will be required on a schedule that impacts your coworkers and business. Your ability to produce effective documents efficiently is a skill set that will contribute to your success. Our sixth point reinforces this idea with an emphasis on effectiveness. What is effective writing? It is writing that succeeds in accomplishing its purpose. Understanding the purpose, goals, and desired results of your writing assignment will help you achieve this success. Your employer may want an introductory sales letter to result in an increase in sales leads, or potential contacts for follow-up leading to sales. Your audience may not see the document from that perspective, but will instead read with the mindset of, How does this help me solve X problem? If you meet both goals, your writing is approaching effectiveness. Here, effectiveness is qualified with the word approaching to point out that writing is both a process and a product, and your writing will continually require effort and attention to revision and improvement.
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Clear understanding
Conciseness
Key points
Arrangement
Ethos
Credibility
Character, trust
Expectation
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An
announcement
will
be
made
to
the
company
later
in
the
week,
but
I
wanted
to
tell
you
personally
that
as
of
the
first
of
next
month,
I
will
be
leaving
my
position
to
accept
a
three-year
assignment
in
our
Singapore
office.
As
soon
as
further
details
about
the
management
of
your
account
are
available,
I
will
share
them
with
you.
In
tomorrows
conference
call
Sean
wants
to
introduce
the
new
team
members,
outline
the
schedule
and
budget
for
the
project,
and
clarify
each
persons
responsibilities
in
meeting
our
goals.
Our
department
has
matrix
structure.
We
have
three
product
development
groups,
one
for
each
category
of
product.
We
also
have
a
manufacturing
group,
a
finance
group,
and
a
sales
group;
different
group
members
are
assigned
to
each
of
the
three
product
categories.
Within
the
matrix,
our
structure
is
flat,
meaning
that
we
have
no
group
leaders.
Everyone
reports
to
Beth,
the
department
manager.
Having
known
and
worked
with
Jesse
for
more
than
five
years,
I
can
highly
recommend
him
to
take
my
place
as
your
advisor.
In
addition
to
having
superb
qualifications,
Jesse
is
known
for
his
dedication,
honesty,
and
caring
attitude.
He
will
always
go
the
extra
mile
for
his
clients.
As
is
typical
in
our
industry,
we
ship
all
merchandise
FOB
our
warehouse.
Prices
are
exclusive
of
any
federal,
state,
or
local
taxes.
Payment
terms
are
net
30
days
from
date
of
invoice.
According
to
an
article
in
Business
Week
dated
October
15,
2009,
Doosan
is
one
of
the
largest
business
conglomerates
in
South
Korea.
I
really
dont
have
words
to
express
how
grateful
I
am
for
all
the
support
youve
extended
to
me
and
my
family
in
this
hour
of
need.
You
guys
are
the
best.
It
was
unconscionable
for
a
member
of
our
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Relevance
Engagement
Relationship
organization to shout an interruption while the president was speaking. What needs to happen nowand let me be clear about thisis an immediate apology. Faithful soldiers pledge never to leave a fallen comrade on the battlefield.
Key Takeaway
Good writing is characterized by correctness, ease of reading, and attractiveness; it also meets reader expectations and is clear, concise, efficient, and effective. Rhetorical elements (logos, ethos, and pathos) and cognate strategies (clarity, conciseness, arrangement, credibility, expectation, reference, tone, emphasis, and engagement) are goals that are achieved in good business writing.
Exercises
1. Choose
a
piece
of
business
writing
that
attracts
your
interest.
What
made
you
want
to
read
it?
Share
your
thoughts
with
your
classmates.
2. Choose
a
piece
of
business
writing
and
evaluate
it
according
to
the
qualities
of
good
writing
presented
in
this
section.
Do
you
think
the
writing
qualifies
as
good?
Why
or
why
not?
Discuss
your
opinion
with
your
classmates.
3. Identify
the
ethos,
pathos,
and
logos
in
a
document.
Share
and
compare
with
classmates.
[1] Bailey, E. (2008). Writing and speaking. New York, NY: McGraw-Hill. [2] Bailey, E. (2008). Writing and speaking. New York, NY: McGraw-Hill. [3] Kostelnick, C., & Roberts, D. (1998). Designing visual language: Strategies for professional communicators (p. 14). Needham Heights, MA: Allyn & Bacon.
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Learning Objectives
1. Describe
and
identify
three
styles
of
writing.
2. Demonstrate
the
appropriate
use
of
colloquial,
casual,
and
formal
writing
in
at
least
one
document
of
each
style.
One way to examine written communication is from a structural perspective. Words are a series of symbols that communicate meaning, strung together in specific patterns that are combined to communicate complex and compound meanings. Nouns, verbs, adjectives, adverbs, prepositions, and articles are the building blocks you will use when composing written documents. Misspellings of individual words or grammatical errors involving misplacement or incorrect word choices in a sentence, can create confusion, lose meaning, and have a negative impact on the reception of your document. Errors themselves are not inherently bad, but failure to recognize and fix them will reflect on you, your company, and limit your success. Self-correction is part of the writing process. Another way to examine written communication is from a goals perspective, where specific documents address stated (or unstated) goals and have rules, customs, and formats that are anticipated and expected. Violations of these rules, customs, or formatswhether intentional or unintentionalcan also have a negative impact on the way your document is received. Colloquial, casual, and formal writing are three common styles that carry their own particular sets of expectations. Which style you use will depend on your audience, and often whether your communication is going to be read only by those in your company (internal communications) or by those outside the organization, such as vendors, customers or clients (external communications). As a general rule, external communications tend to be more formal, just as corporate letterhead and business cardsdesigned for presentation to the outside worldare more formal than the e-mail and text messages that are used for everyday writing within the organization. Style also depends on the purpose of the document and its audience. If your writing assignment is for Web page content, clear and concise use of the written word is essential. If your writing assignment is a feature interest article for an online magazine, you may have the luxury of additional space and word count combined with graphics, pictures, embedded video or audio clips, and links to related topics. If your writing assignment involves an introductory letter represented on a printed page delivered in an envelope to a potential customer, you wont have the interactivity to enhance your writing, placing an additional burden on your writing and how you represent it.
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Colloquial
Colloquial language is an informal, conversational style of writing. It differs from standard business English in that it often makes use of colorful expressions, slang, and regional phrases. As a result, it can be difficult to understand for an English learner or a person from a different region of the country. Sometimes colloquialism takes the form of a word difference; for example, the difference between a Coke, a tonic, a pop, and a soda pop primarily depends on where you live. It can also take the form of a saying, as Roy Wilder Jr. discusses in his book You All Spoken Here: Southern Talk at Its Down-Home Best. [1] Colloquial sayings like He could mess up a rainstorm or He couldnt hit the ground if he fell communicate the person is inept in a colorful, but not universal way. In the Pacific Northwest someone might mosey, or walk slowly, over to the caf, or bakery, to pick up a maple bara confection known as a Long John doughnut to people in other parts of the United States. Colloquial language can be reflected in texting: ok fwiw i did my part n put it in where you asked but my ? is if the group does not participate do i still get credit for my part of what i did n also how much do we all have to do i mean i put in my opinion of the items in order do i also have to reply to the other team members or what? Thxs We may be able to grasp the meaning of the message, and understand some of the abbreviations and codes, but when it comes to business, this style of colloquial text writing is generally suitable only for one-on-one internal communications between coworkers who know each other well (and those who do not judge each other on spelling or grammar). For external communications, and even for group communications within the organization, it is not normally suitable, as some of the codes are not standard, and may even be unfamiliar to the larger audience. Colloquial writing may be permissible, and even preferable, in some business contexts. For example, a marketing letter describing a folksy product such as a wood stove or an old-fashioned popcorn popper might use a colloquial style to create a feeling of relaxing at home with loved ones. Still, it is important to consider how colloquial language will appear to the audience. Will the meaning of your chosen words be clear to a reader who is from a different part of the country? Will a folksy tone sound like you are talking down to your audience, assuming that they are not intelligent or educated enough to appreciate standard English? A final point to remember is that colloquial style is not an excuse for using expressions that are sexist, racist, profane, or otherwise offensive.
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Casual
Casual language involves everyday words and expressions in a familiar group context, such as conversations with family or close friends. The emphasis is on the communication interaction itself, and less about the hierarchy, power, control, or social rank of the individuals communicating. When you are at home, at times you probably dress in casual clothing that you wouldnt wear in publicpajamas or underwear, for example. Casual communication is the written equivalent of this kind of casual attire. Have you ever had a family member say something to you that a stranger or coworker would never say? Or have you said something to a family member that you would never say in front of your boss? In both cases, casual language is being used. When you write for business, a casual style is usually out of place. Instead, a respectful, professional tone represents you well in your absence.
Formal
In business writing, the appropriate style will have a degree of formality. Formal language is communication that focuses on professional expression with attention to roles, protocol, and appearance. It is characterized by its vocabulary and syntax, or the grammatical arrangement of words in a sentence. That is, writers using a formal style tend to use a more sophisticated vocabularya greater variety of words, and more words with multiple syllablesnot for the purpose of throwing big words around, but to enhance the formal mood of the document. They also tend to use more complex syntax, resulting in sentences that are longer and contain more subordinate clauses. The appropriate style for a particular business document may be very formal, or less so. If your supervisor writes you an e-mail and you reply, the exchange may be informal in that it is fluid and relaxed, without much forethought or fanfare, but it will still reflect the formality of the business environment. Chances are you will be careful to use an informative subject line, a salutation (Hi [supervisors name] is typical in e-mails), a word of thanks for whatever information or suggestion she provided you, and an indication that you stand ready to help further if need be. You will probably also check your grammar and spelling before you click send. A formal document such as a proposal or an annual report will involve a great deal of planning and preparation, and its style may not be fluid or relaxed. Instead, it may use distinct language to emphasize the prestige and professionalism of your company. Lets say you are going to write a marketing letter that will be printed on company letterhead and mailed to a hundred sales prospects. Naturally you want to represent your company in a positive light. In a letter of this nature you might write a sentence like The Widget 300 is our premium offering in the line; we have designed it for ease of movement and efficiency of use, with your success foremost in our mind. But in an e-mail or a tweet, you might use an informal sentence instead, reading W300good stapler.
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Writing for business often involves choosing the appropriate level of formality for the company and industry, the particular document and situation, and the audience.
Key Takeaway
The best style for a document may be colloquial, casual, informal, or formal, depending on the audience and the situation.
Exercises
1. Refer
back
to
the
e-mail
or
text
message
example
in
this
section.
Would
you
send
that
message
to
your
professor?
Why
or
why
not?
What
normative
expectations
concerning
professor-student
communication
are
there
and
where
did
you
learn
them?
Discuss
your
thoughts
with
your
classmates.
2. Select
a
business
document
and
describe
its
style.
Is
it
formal,
informal,
or
colloquial?
Can
you
rewrite
it
in
a
different
style?
Share
your
results
with
a
classmate.
3. List
three
words
or
phrases
that
you
would
say
to
your
friends.
List
three
words
or
phrases
that
communicate
similar
meanings
that
you
would
say
to
an
authority
figure.
Share
and
compare
with
classmates.
4. When
is
it
appropriate
to
write
in
a
casual
tone?
In
a
formal
tone?
Write
a
one-
to
two-page
essay
on
this
topic
and
discuss
it
with
a
classmate.
5. How
does
the
intended
audience
influence
the
choice
of
words
and
use
of
language
in
a
document?
Think
of
a
specific
topic
and
two
specific
kinds
of
audiences.
Then
write
a
short
example
(250500
words)
of
how
this
topic
might
be
presented
to
each
of
the
two
audiences.
[1] Wilde, J., Jr. (2003). You all spoken here: Southern talk at its down-home best. Athens: University of Georgia Press.
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Learning Objectives
1. Understand
the
rules
that
govern
written
language.
2. Understand
the
legal
implications
of
business
writing.
You may not recall when or where you learned all about nouns, verbs, adjectives, adverbs, prepositions, articles, and phrases, but if you understand this sentence well take for granted that you have a firm grasp of the basics. But even professional writers and editors, who have spent a lifetime navigating the ins and outs of crafting correct sentences, have to use reference books to look up answers to questions of grammar and usage that arise in the course of their work. Lets examine how the simple collection of symbols called a word can be such a puzzle.
also learned the social protocol of when to use it and when not to. When you write, your words represent you in your absence. The context may change from reader to reader, and your goal as an effective business communicator is to get your message across (and some feedback) regardless of the situation. The better you know your audience and context, the better you can anticipate and incorporate the rules of how, what, and when to use specific words and terms. And here lies a paradox. You may think that, ideally, the best writing is writing that is universally appealing and understood. Yet the more you design a specific message to a specific audience or context, the less universal the message becomes. Actually, this is neither a good or bad thing in itself. In fact, if you didnt target your messages, they wouldnt be nearly as effective. By understanding this relationship of a universal or specific appeal to an audience or context, you can look beyond vocabulary and syntax and focus on the reader. When considering a communication assignment like a sales letter, knowing the intended audience gives you insight to the explicit and implicit rules. All words are governed by rules, and the rules are vastly different from one language and culture to another. A famous example is the decision by Chevrolet to give the name Nova to one of its cars. In English, nova is recognized as coming from Latin meaning new; for those who have studied astronomy, it also refers to a type of star. When the Chevy Nova was introduced in Latin America, however, it was immediately ridiculed as the car that doesnt go. Why? Because no va literally means doesnt go in Spanish. By investigating sample names in a range of markets, you can quickly learn the rules surrounding words and their multiple meaning, much as you learned about subjects and objects, verbs and nouns, adjectives and adverbs when you were learning language. Long before you knew formal grammar terms, you observed how others communicate and learned by trial and error. In business, error equals inefficiency, loss of resources, and is to be avoided. For Chevrolet, a little market research in Latin America would have gone a long way.
reference points while illustrating the new, interesting, or unusual. Promoting understanding and limiting misinterpretations are key goals of the effective business communicator. Your letter introducing a new product or service relies, to an extent, on your preconceived notions of the intended audience and their preconceived notions of your organization and its products or services. By referencing common ground, you form a connection between the known and the unknown, the familiar and the new. People are more likely to be open to a new product or service if they can reasonably relate it to one they are familiar with, or with which they have had good experience in the past. Your initial measure of success is effective communication, and your long term success may be measured in the sale or new contract for services.
as fact again, and from the other companys perspective, your sentences may be considered libel or defamation. Libel is the written form of defamation, or a false statement that damages a reputation. If a false statement of fact that concerns and harms the person defamed is publishedincluding publication in a digital or online environmentthe author of that statement may be sued for libel. If the person defamed is a public figure, they must prove malice or the intention to do harm, but if the victim is a private person, libel applies even if the offense cannot be proven to be malicious. Under the First Amendment you have a right to express your opinion, but the words you use and how you use them, including the context, are relevant to their interpretation as opinion versus fact. Always be careful to qualify what you write and to do no harm.
Key Takeaway
Words are governed by rules and shape our reality. Writers have a legal responsibility to avoid plagiarism and libel.
Exercises
1. Define
the
word
chair.
Describe
what
a
table
is.
Draw
a
window.
Share,
compare,
and
contrast
results
with
classmates
2. Define
love.
Describe
desire.
Draw
patience.
3. Identify
a
target
audience
and
indicate
at
least
three
words
that
you
perceive
would
be
appropriate
and
effective
for
that
audience.
Identify
a
second
audience
(distinct
from
the
first)
and
indicate
three
words
that
you
perceive
would
be
appropriate
and
effective.
How
are
the
audiences
and
their
words
similar
or
different?
Compare
your
results
with
those
of
your
classmates.
4. Create
a
sales
letter
for
an
audience
that
comes
from
a
culture
other
than
your
own.
Identify
the
culture
and
articulate
how
your
message
is
tailored
to
your
perception
of
your
intended
audience.
Share
and
compare
with
classmates.
5. Do
an
online
search
on
online
libel
cases
and
see
what
you
find.
Discuss
your
results
with
your
classmates.
6. In
other
examples
beyond
the
grammar
rules
that
guide
our
use
of
words,
consider
the
online
environment.
Conduct
a
search
on
the
word
netiquette
and
share
your
findings.
[1] Aristotle. (1941). De anima. In R. McKeon (Ed.), The basic works of Aristotle (J. A. Smith, Trans.). New York, NY: Random House. [2] Russell, B. (1962). The problems of philosophy (28th ed., p. 9). Oxford, UK: Oxford University Press. (Original work published 1912) [3] United States Copyright Office (1998). Executive summary: Digital millennium copyright act. Washington, DC: U.S. Government Printing Office. Retrieved from http://www.copyright.gov/reports/studies/dmca/dmca_executive.html
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to
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[4] Tahmincioglu, E. (2009, October 11). Your boss wants you on Twitter: Companies recognizing value of having workers promote products. MSNBC Careers. Retrieved from http://www.msnbc.msn.com/id/33090717/ns/business-careers
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Learning Objective
1. Describe
some
common
barriers
to
written
communication
and
how
to
overcome
them.
In almost any career or area of business, written communication is a key to success. Effective writing can prevent wasted time, wasted effort, aggravation, and frustration. The way we communicate with others both inside of our business and on the outside goes a long way toward shaping the organizations image. If people feel they are listened to and able to get answers from the firm and its representatives, their opinion will be favorable. Skillful writing and an understanding of how people respond to words are central to accomplishing this goal. How do we display skillful writing and a good understanding of how people respond to words? Following are some suggestions.
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people from different generations. The combinations are endless, as are the possibilities for bypassing. While you might think you understand, requesting feedback and asking for confirmation and clarification can help ensure that you get the target meaning. Sullivan also notes that in stressful situations we often think in terms of either/or relationships, failing to recognize the stress itself. This kind of thinking can contribute to source/receiver error. In business, he notes that managers often incorrectly assume communication is easier than it is, and fail to anticipate miscommunication. [3] As writers, we need to keep in mind that words are simply a means of communication, and that meanings are in people, not the words themselves. Knowing which words your audience understands and anticipating how they will interpret them will help you prevent bypassing.
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Key Takeaway
To overcome barriers to communication, pay attention to details; strive to understand the target meaning; consider your nonverbal expressions; and review, reflect, and revise.
Exercises
1. Review
the
example
of
a
students
e-mail
to
a
professor
in
this
section,
and
rewrite
it
to
communicate
the
message
more
clearly.
2. Write
a
paragraph
of
150200
words
on
a
subject
of
your
choice.
Experiment
with
different
formats
and
fonts
to
display
it
and,
if
you
wish,
print
it.
Compare
your
results
with
those
of
your
classmates.
3. How
does
the
purpose
of
a
document
define
its
format
and
content?
Think
of
a
specific
kind
of
document
with
a
specific
purpose
and
audience.
Then
create
a
format
or
template
suitable
to
that
document,
purpose,
and
audience.
Show
your
template
to
the
class
or
post
it
on
a
class
bulletin
board.
4. Write
one
message
of
at
least
three
sentences
with
at
least
three
descriptive
terms
and
present
it
to
at
least
three
people.
Record
notes
about
how
they
understand
the
message,
and
to
what
degree
their
interpretations
are
the
same
of
different.
Share
and
compare
with
classmates.
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[1] Sullivan, J., Kameda, N., & Nobu, T. (1991). Bypassing in managerial communication. Business Horizons, 34(1), 7180. [2] Sullivan, J., Kameda, N., & Nobu, T. (1991). Bypassing in managerial communication. Business Horizons, 34(1), 7180. [3] Sullivan, J., Kameda, N., & Nobu, T. (1991). Bypassing in managerial communication. Business Horizons, 34(1), 7180.
[1] Sullivan, J., Kameda, N., & Nobu, T. (1991). Bypassing in managerial communication. Business Horizons, 34(1), 7180.
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Getting Started
Introductory Exercises
1. Identify
a
career
you
are
interested
in
pursuing
and
do
an
online
search
for
information
about
it,
taking
note
of
the
number
of
results
returned
and
a
couple
of
the
top
ten
sources.
Compare
your
results
with
those
of
your
classmates.
2. Visit
your
college
or
university
library.
Familiarize
yourself
with
the
resources
available
to
business
writers
and
choose
one
resource
that
you
find
especially
valuable.
Write
a
short
summary
of
the
resource
to
share
with
your
classmates,
explaining
why
you
chose
this
resource.
3. In
a
business
setting,
describe
some
circumstances
where
it
would
it
be
appropriate
to
send
a
message
by
instant
messaging,
or
by
e-mail,
or
in
a
printed
memo.
Ask
some
colleagues
or
coworker
what
they
consider
the
best
option
and
why,
and
share
the
results
with
the
class.
No matter who you are, you were not born speaking English (or any other language), and were certainly not born writing. You learned to speak and to write and, like all humans, your skill in speaking and writing can continue to improve and adapt across your lifetime. The awareness of this simple fact should encourage you. If your writing has been well received in the past, congratulations. It may be that your skill in producing college-level essays has served you well. Still, the need for learning to produce clear, concise business writing may be a new skill for you. Even seasoned professional business communicators find it a challenge to present complex and dynamic relationships in a way that the audience can grasp at a glance, on a first read, or with minimal effort. If your writing has not been as well received in the past as you would like, this chapter will help you see the process from a perspective where attention to specific steps can lead to overall success. In addition to your previous experiences, you will necessarily draw on the writing of others as you prepare for your writing effort. If you have ever fallen asleep on your textbook, you know that trying to absorb many pages of reading in a single session is not the best strategy for studying. In the same way, as you prepare to write a business document, you know that using the first search result listed on Google or Yahoo! is not the best strategy for success. You may be tempted to gather only the information that is most readily available, or that which confirms your viewpoint, but you will sell yourself short and may produce an inferior piece of writing.
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Instead, you need to determine the purpose of your writing project; search for information, facts, and statistics to support your purpose; and remain aware of information that contradicts the message you are aiming to convey. Think of it as an exercise program. If you only do the easy exercises, and nothing else, you may develop a single muscle group, but will never gain real strength. What kinds of skills, or strengths, will you need in order to write well enough to succeed in your career? Solid research skills combined with effective preparation for writing involve a range of skill sets that require time and practice. The degree to which you make the extra effort will pay dividends throughout your career.
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Learning Objectives
1. Explain
why
preparation
is
important
in
business
writing.
2. Think
critically
and
employ
strategies
to
overcome
common
fears
of
writing.
How do I prepare myself for writing? is a common question and one that has no single correct answer. When do you do your best work? Whatever your work or task may be, it doesnt have to be writing. Some people work best in the morning, others only after their daily dose of coffee. Still others burn the midnight oil and work well late into the night while their colleagues lose their productive edge as the sun sets. To thine own self be true, is a great idea when you have the freedom to choose when you work, but increasingly our lives are governed by schedules and deadlines that we do not control. You may have a deadline that requires you to work late at night when you recognize that you are far more productive early in the morning. If you can, consider one important step to writing success: know when you are most productive. If you cannot choose your timing, then dedication and perseverance are required. The job must be completed and the show must go on. Your effort demonstrates self-control and forbearance (as opposed to impatience and procrastination) and implies professionalism. To be productive, you have to be alert, ready to work, and can accomplish tasks with relative ease. You will no doubt recognize that sometimes tasks take a lot longer, the solution is much harder to find, and you may find work more frustrating at other times. If you have the option, try to adjust your schedule so the writing tasks before you can be tackled at times when you are most productive, where you ability to concentrate is best, and when you are your most productive. If you dont have the option, focus clearly on the task before you. Every individual is different, and what works for one person may be ineffective for someone else. One thing that professional writers agree on, however, is that you dont need to be in the right mood to writeand that, in fact, if you wait for the right mood to strike, you will probably never get started at all. Ernest Hemingway, who wrote some of the most famous novels of the twentieth century as well as hundreds of essays, articles, and short stories, advised writers to work every day. No matter what has happened the day or night before, get up and bite on the nail. [1] In order for your work to be productive, you will need to focus your attention on your writing. The stereotype of the writer tucked away in an attic room or a cabin in the woods, lost in the imaginary world created by the words as they flow onto the page, is only a stereotype. Our busy lives involve constant interruption. In a distraction-prone business environment, much of your writing will be done while colleagues are talking on the phone, having face-to-face conversations as they walk by, and possibly stopping at your desk to say hello or ask a question. Your phone may ring or you may have incoming instant messages (IMs) that need to be answered quickly. These unavoidable interruptions make it even more important to develop a habit of concentrating when you write.
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The mind has been likened to a brace of wild horses; if you have ever worked with horses, you know they each have a mind of their own. Taken individually they can be somewhat manageable, but together they can prove to be quite a challenge. Our minds can multitask and perform several tasks simultaneously, but we can also get easily distracted. We can get sidetracked and lose valuable time away from our designated task. Our ability to concentrate is central to our ability to write effectively, whether we work alone or as part of a team. In many business situations, you may not be writing solo but instead collaborating on a document with various coworkers, vendors, or customers. The ability to concentrate is perhaps even more important in these group writing situations. [2] In this discussion, well consider the writing process from a singular perspective, where you are personally responsible for planning, researching, and producing a product of writing. In other areas of this text we also consider the collaborative process, its strengths and weaknesses, and how to negotiate and navigate the group writing process.
Thinking
Critically
As you approach your writing project, it is important to practice the habit of thinking critically. Critical thinking can be defined as self-directed, self-disciplined, self-monitored, and selfcorrective thinking. [3] It is the difference between watching television in a daze versus analyzing a movie with attention to its use of lighting, camera angles, and music to influence the audience. One activity requires very little mental effort, while the other requires attention to detail, the ability to compare and contrast, and sharp senses to receive all the stimuli. As a habit of mind, critical thinking requires established standards and attention to their use, effective communication, problem solving, and a willingness to acknowledge and address our own tendency for confirmation bias, egocentrism, and sociocentrism. Well use the phrase habit of mind because clear, critical thinking is a habit that requires effort and persistence. People do not start an exercise program, a food and nutrition program, or a stop-smoking program with 100 percent success the first time. In the same way, it is easy to fall back into lazy mental short cuts, such as If it costs a lot, it must be good, when in fact the statement may very well be false. You wont know until you gather information that supports (or contradicts) the assertion. As we discuss getting into the right frame of mind for writing, keep in mind that the same recommendations apply to reading and research. If you only pay attention to information that reinforces your existing beliefs and ignore or discredit information that contradicts your beliefs, you are guilty of confirmation bias. [4] As you read, research, and prepare for writing, make an effort to gather information from a range of reliable sources, whether or not this information leads to conclusions you didnt expect. Remember that those who read your writing will be aware of, or have access to, this universe of data as well and will have their own confirmation bias. Reading and writing from an audience-centered view means acknowledging your confirmation bias and moving beyond it to consider multiple frames of references, points of view, and perspectives as you read, research, and write.
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Egocentrism and sociocentrism are related concepts to confirmation bias. Egocentrism can be defined as the use of self-centered standards to determine what to believe and what to reject. Similarly, sociocentrism involves the use of society-centered standards. [5] Both ways of thinking create an us versus them relationship that can undermine your credibility and alienate readers who dont share your viewpoint. This leads to confirmation bias and groupthink, resulting in false conclusions with little or no factual support for a belief. If a person believes the earth is flat and never questions that belief, it serves as an example of egocentric thinking. The person believes it is true even though he has never questioned why he believes it. If the person decides to look for information but only finds information that supports his pre-existing belief, ignoring or discrediting information that contradicts that belief, he is guilty of confirmation bias. If he believes the earth is flat because everyone in his group or community believes it, even though he himself has never questioned or confirmed the belief, he is guilty of sociocentrism. In each case, the false thinking strategy leads to poor conclusions. Watch out for your tendency to read, write, and believe that which reflects only what you think you know without solid research and clear, critical thinking.
Lets take each reason in turn. Negative orientation means the writer has a pre-existing negative association or view of the task or activity. We tend to like people who like us, [6] tend to pursue activities where we perceive rewards and appreciation for our efforts, and are more likely to engage in activities where we perceive we are successful. Conversely, we tend to not like people who we perceive as not like us, tend to ignore or avoid activities where we perceive we are not appreciated or are not rewarded, and are less likely to engage in activities where we perceive we
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are not successful. For some writers, previous experiences have led to a pre-existing association with writing. That association may be positive if they have been encouraged, affirmed, or rewarded as they demonstrated measurable gain. That association may also be negative if efforts have been met with discouraging feedback, a lack of affirmation, or negative reinforcement. Effective business writing is a highly valued skill, and regardless of the degree to which writing will be a significant aspect of your designated job duties, your ability to do it well will be a boost to your career. If you have a negative orientation toward writing, admitting this fact is an important first step. Next, we need to actively seek ways to develop your skills in ways that will demonstrate measurable gain and lead to positive affirmation. Not everyone develops in the same way on the same schedule, and measurable gain means that from one writing assignment to the next you can demonstrate positive progress. In an academic setting, measurable gain is one of your clear goals as a writer. In a business or industry setting, you may lack the time to revise and improve, meaning that you will need to get it right the first time. Take advantage of the academic setting to set positive, realistic goals to improve your writing. Surround yourself with resources, including people who will help you reach your goal. If your college or university has a writing center, take advantage of it. If it does not, seek out assistance from those whose writing has been effective and well received. It is a given that you do not want to fail. Risk of failure is a common fear across public speaking and writing situations, producing predictable behavioral patterns we can recognize, address, and resolve. In public speaking, our minds may go blank at the start of a presentation as we confront our fear of failure. In writing, we may experience a form of blankness often referred to as writers blockthe overwhelming feeling of not knowing what to write or where to startand sit helplessly waiting for our situation to change. But we have the power to change our circumstances and to overcome our risk of failure. You may be familiar with the concept of a rough draft, but it may compete in your mind with a desire for perfection. Writing is a dynamic process, a reflection of the communication process itself. It wont be perfect the first time you attempt it. Awareness that your rough draft serves a purpose, but doesnt represent your final product, should serve in the same way a rehearsal for a speech serves a speaker. You get a second (or third) chance to get it right. Use this process to reduce your fear of failure and let go of your perfectionist tendencies, if only for a moment. Your desire for perfection will serve you well when it comes to polishing your finished document, but everything has its time and place. Learning where and when to place your effort is part of writing preparation. Finally, we often fear the unknown. It is part of being human, and is reflected across all contexts, including public speaking and writing. If you have never given a speech before, your first time on stage can be quite an ordeal. If you have never written a formal business report, your fear of the unknown is understandable. How can you address this fear? Make the unknown known. If we take the mystery out of the process and product, we can see it for its essential components, its organizational pattern, and start to see how our product may look before we even start to produce it. In many organizations, you can ask your supervisor or coworkers for copies of similar documents to the one you have been assigned, even if the content is quite different. If this is not an option, simply consider the way most documents in your company are writteneven
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something as basic as an interoffice e-mail will provide some clues. Your goal is to become familiar with the type of document and to examine several successful examples. Once you see a couple of reports, you will have a better feel for what you have to produce and the unknown will be far less mysterious.
Key Takeaway
There are several reasons why people fear writing, but there are also several strategies to reduce or eliminate those fears.
Exercises
1. How
would
you
describe
your
orientation
to
writing?
Where
does
this
orientation
come
from?
Discuss
your
thoughts
with
a
classmate.
2. If
you
could
identify
one
aspect
of
your
writing
you
would
like
to
improve,
what
would
it
be
and
why?
Write
a
one-
two-page
essay
on
this
subject.
3. What
kinds
of
writing
do
you
like?
Dislike?
Explain
why
and
provide
an
example
of
each.
Share
and
compare
with
the
class.
4. Who
is
your
favorite
author?
What
do
you
like
about
her
or
his
writing?
Discuss
your
opinion
with
a
classmate.
[1] Hemingway, E. (1999). Ernest Hemingway on writing (L. W. Phillips, Ed.). New York, NY: Simon & Schuster Adult Publishing Group. [2] Nickerson, R. S., Perkins, D. N., & Smith, E. E. (1985). The teaching of thinking. Hillsdale, NJ: Lawrence Erbaum Associates. [3] Paul, R., & Elder, L. (2007). The miniature guide to critical thinking: Concepts and tools. Dillon Beach, CA: The Foundation for Critical Thinking Press. [4] Gilovich, T. (1993). How we know what isnt so: The fallibility of human reason in everyday life. New York, NY: The Free Press.
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Learning Objectives
1. Understand
who,
what,
where,
when,
why,
and
how
as
features
of
writing
purpose.
2. Describe
the
planning
process
and
essential
elements
of
a
business
document.
John Thill and Courtland Bovee, [1] two leading authors in the field of business communication, have created a checklist for planning business messages. The following twelve-item checklist, adapted here, serves as a useful reminder of the importance of preparation in the writing process:
1. Determine
your
general
purpose:
are
you
trying
to
inform,
persuade,
entertain,
facilitate
interaction,
or
motivate
a
reader?
2. Determine
your
specific
purpose
(the
desired
outcome).
3. Make
sure
your
purpose
is
realistic.
4. Make
sure
your
timing
is
appropriate.
5. Make
sure
your
sources
are
credible.
6. Make
sure
the
message
reflects
positively
on
your
business.
7. Determine
audience
size.
8. Determine
audience
composition.
9. Determine
audience
knowledge
and
awareness
of
topic.
10. Anticipate
probable
responses.
11. Select
the
correct
channel.
12. Make
sure
the
information
provided
is
accurate,
ethical,
and
pertinent.
Throughout this chapter we will examine these various steps in greater detail.
Some elements may receive more attention than others, and they do not necessarily have to be addressed in the order you see here. Depending on the nature of your project, as a writer you will have a degree of input over how you organize them. Note that the last item, Why, is designated as optional. This is because business writing sometimes needs to report facts and data objectively, without making any interpretation or pointing to any cause-effect relationship. In other business situations, of course, identifying why something happened or why a certain decision is advantageous will be the essence of the communication. In addition to its general purpose (e.g., to inform, persuade, entertain, or motivate), every piece of writing also has at least one specific purpose, which is the intended outcome; the result that will happen once your written communication has been read. For example, imagine that you are an employee in a small citys housing authority and have been asked to draft a letter to city residents about radon. Radon is a naturally occurring radioactive gas that has been classified by the United States Environmental Protection Agency as a health hazard. In the course of a routine test, radon was detected in minimal levels in an apartment building operated by the housing authority. It presents a relatively low level of risk, but because the incident was reported in the local newspaper, the mayor has asked the housing authority director to be proactive in informing all the city residents of the situation. The general purpose of your letter is to inform, and the specific purpose is to have a written record of informing all city residents about how much radon was found, when, and where; where they can get more information on radon; and the date, time, and place of the meeting. Residents may read the information and attend or they may not even read the letter. But once the letter has been written, signed, and distributed, your general and specific purposes have been accomplished. Now imagine that you begin to plan your letter by applying the above list of elements. Recall that the letter informs residents on three counts: (1) the radon finding, (2) where to get information about radon, and (3) the upcoming meeting. For each of these pieces of information, the elements may look like the following: 1. Radon Finding
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o o o
Who:
The
manager
of
the
apartment
building
(give
name)
What:
Discovered
a
radon
concentration
of
4.1
picocuries
per
liter
(pCi/L)
and
reported
it
to
the
housing
authority
director,
who
informed
the
city
health
inspector,
environmental
compliance
office,
and
mayor
When:
During
the
week
of
December
15
Where:
In
the
basement
of
the
apartment
building
located
at
(give
address)
How:
In
the
course
of
performing
a
routine
annual
test
with
a
commercially
available
do-it-yourself
radon
test
kit
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Who: According to the city health inspector and environmental compliance officer What: Radon is a naturally occurring radioactive gas that results from the breakdown of uranium in soil; a radon test level above 4.0 pCi/L may be cause for concern When: Radon levels fluctuate from time to time, so further testing will be done; in past years, test results were below 4.0 pCi/L Where: More information is available from the U.S. Environmental Protection Agency or the state radon office How: By phone, mail, or on the Internet (provide full contact information for both sources) Why: To become better informed and avoid misunderstandings about radon, its health risks, and the meaning of radon test results Who: All city residents are welcome What: Attend an informational meeting where the mayor, director of the housing authority, city health inspector, and city environmental compliance officer will speak and answer questions When: Monday, January 7, at 7 p.m. Where: City hall community room Why: To become better informed and avoid misunderstandings about radon, its health risks, and the meaning of radon test results
o o o
Once you have laid out these elements of your informative letter, you have an outline from which it will be easy to write the actual letter. Your effort serves as a written record of correspondence informing them that radon was detected, which may be one of the specific or primary purposes. A secondary purpose may be to increase attendance at the town hall meeting, but you will need feedback from that event to determine the effectiveness of your effort. Now imagine that instead of being a housing authority employee, you are a city resident who receives that informative letter, and you happen to operate a business as a certified radon mitigation contractor. You may decide to build on this information and develop a persuasive message. You may draft a letter to the homeowners and landlords in the neighborhood near the building in question. To make your message persuasive, you may focus on the perception that radiation is inherently dangerous and that no amount of radon has been declared safe. You may cite external authorities that indicate radon is a contributing factor to several health ailments, and even appeal to emotions with phrases like protect your children and peace of mind. Your letter will probably encourage readers to check with the state radon office to verify that you are a certified contractor, describe the services you provide, and indicate that friendly payment terms can be arranged.
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The next item on the checklist is to make sure the message reflects positively on your business. In our hypothetical case, the business is city government. The letter should acknowledge that city officials and employees are servants of the taxpayers. We are here to serve you should be expressed, if not in so many words, in the tone of the letter. The next three items on the checklist are associated with the audience profile: audience size, composition, knowledge, and awareness of the topic. Since your letter is being sent to all city residents, you likely have a database from which you can easily tell how many readers constitute your audience. What about audience composition? What else do you know about the citys residents? What percentage of households includes children? What is the education level of most of the residents? Are there many residents whose first language is not English; if so, should your letter be translated into any other languages? What is the range of income levels in the city? How well informed are city residents about radon? Has radon been an issue in any other buildings in the city in recent years? The answers to these questions will help determine how detailed the information in your letter should be. Finally, anticipate probable responses. Although the letter is intended to inform, could it be misinterpreted as an attempt to cover up an unacceptable condition in city housing? If the local newspaper were to reprint the letter, would the mayor be upset? Is there someone in public relations who will be doing media interviews at the same time the letter goes out? Will the release of information be coordinated, and if so by whom? One additional point that deserves mention is the notion of decision makers. Even if your overall goal is to inform or persuade, the basic mission is to simply communicate. Establishing a connection is a fundamental aspect of the communication audience, and if you can correctly target key decision makers you increase your odds for making the connection with those you intend to inform or persuade. Who will open the mail, or e-mail? Who will act upon it? The better you can answer those questions, the more precise you can be in your writing efforts. In some ways this is similar to asking your professor to write a letter of recommendation for you, but to address it to to whom it may concern. If you can provide a primary contact name for the letter of recommendation it will increase its probable impact on the evaluation process. If your goal is to get a scholarship or a job offer, you want to take the necessary steps to increase your positive impact on the audience.
Communication
Channels
Purpose is closely associated with channel. We need to consider the purpose when choosing a channel. From source to receiver, message to channel, feedback to context, environment, and interference, all eight components play a role in the dynamic process. While writing often focuses on an understanding of the receiver (as weve discussed) and defining the purpose of the message, the channelor the how in the communication processdeserves special mention. So far, we have discussed a simple and traditional channel of written communication: the hardcopy letter mailed in a standard business envelope and sent by postal mail. But in todays
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business environment, this channel is becoming increasingly rare as electronic channels become more widely available and accepted. When is it appropriate to send an instant message (IM) or text message versus a conventional email or fax? What is the difference between a letter and a memo? Between a report and a proposal? Writing itself is the communication medium, but each of these specific channels has its own strengths, weaknesses, and understood expectations that are summarized in Table 10.1 "Written Communication Channels". Table 10.1 Written Communication Channels
Channel
IM
or
Text
Message
Strengths
Very
fast
Good
for
rapid
exchanges
of
small
amounts
of
information
Inexpensive
Weaknesses
Informal
Not
suitable
for
large
amounts
of
information
Abbreviations
lead
to
misunderstandings
Expectations
Quick
response
When
to
Choose
Informal
use
among
peers
at
similar
levels
within
an
organization
You
need
a
fast,
inexpensive
connection
with
a
colleague
over
a
small
issue
and
limited
amount
of
information
When
to
Choose
You
need
to
communicate
but
time
is
not
the
most
important
consideration
You
need
to
send
attachments
(provided
their
file
size
is
not
too
big)
Channel E-mail
Strengths Fast Good for relatively fast exchanges of information Subject line allows compilation of many messages on one subject or project Easy to distribute to multiple recipients
Weaknesses May hit send prematurely May be overlooked or deleted without being read Reply to all error Forward error Large attachments may cause the e-mail to be caught in recipients
Expectations Normally a response is expected within 24 hours, although norms vary by situation and organizational culture
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spam filter Receiving issues (e.g., the receiving machine may be out of paper or toner) Long distance telephone charges apply Transitional telephone- based technology losing popularity to online information exchange Memos sent through e- mails can get deleted without review Attachments can get removed by spam filters May get filed or thrown away unread Cost and time involved in printing, stuffing, sealing, affixing postage, and travel through the postal system Normally, a long (multiple page) fax is not expected
Fax
You want to send a document whose format must remain intact as presented, such as a medical prescription or a signed work order Allows use of letterhead to represent your company
Memo
Official but less formal than a letter Clearly shows who sent it, when, and to whom
Normally used internally in an organization to communicate directives from management on policy and procedure, or documentation
Letter
You need to inform, persuade, deliver bad news or negative message, and document the communication
Report
inform Proposal
amounts of data to inform an internal or external audience You need to persuade an audience with complex arguments and data
By choosing the correct channel for a message, you can save yourself many headaches and increase the likelihood that your writing will be read, understood, and acted upon in the manner you intended. Our discussion of communication channels would not be complete without mentioning the issues of privacy and security in electronic communications. The American Management Association [2] estimates that about two thirds of employers monitor their employees electronic communications or Internet use. When you call and leave a voice message for a friend or colleague at work, do you know where your message is stored? There was a time when the message may have been stored on an analog cassette in an answering machine, or even on a small pink handwritten note which a secretary deposited in your friends in-box. Today the where is irrelevant, as the in-box is digital and can be accessed from almost anywhere on the planet. That also means the message you left, with the representation of your voice, can be forwarded via e-mail as an attachment to anyone. Any time you send an IM, text, or e-mail or leave a voice message, your message is stored on more than one server, and it can be intercepted or forwarded to persons other than the intended receiver. Are you ready for your message to be broadcast to the world? Do your words represent you and your business in a positive light? Newsweek columnist Jennifer Ordoez raises this question when she writes, For desk jockeys everywhere, it has become as routine as a tour of the office-supply closet: the consent form attesting that you understand and accept that any e-mails you write, Internet sites you visit or business you conduct on your employers computer network are subject to inspection. [3] As you use MySpace, update your Facebook page, get LinkedIn, Twitter, text, and IM, you leave an electronic trail of bread crumbs that merge personal and professional spheres, opening up significant issues of privacy. In our discussion we address research for specific business document production, and all the electronic research conducted is subject to review. While the case law is evolving as the technology we use to interface expands, it is wise to consider that anything you write or record can and will be stored for later retrieval by people for whom your message was not initially intended. In terms of writing preparation, you should review any electronic communication before you send it. Spelling and grammatical errors will negatively impact your credibility. With written documents we often take time and care to get it right the first time, but the speed of IM, text, or e-mail often deletes this important review cycle of written works. Just because the document you prepare in IM is only one sentence long doesnt mean it cant be misunderstood or expose you to
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liability. Take time when preparing your written messages, regardless of their intended presentation, and review your work before you click send.
Key Takeaway
Choose the most effective channel for your document and consider the possible ramifications of what you have written before you send it.
Exercises
1. Write
a
one-page
letter
to
a
new
customer
introducing
a
new
product
or
service.
Compare
your
result
to
the
letters
your
classmates
wrote.
What
do
the
letters
have
in
common?
How
do
they
differ
from
one
another?
2. Write
a
memo
that
addresses
a
new
norm
or
protocol,
such
as
the
need
to
register
with
a
new
company
that
will
be
handling
all
the
organizations
business-related
travel,
with
specific
expectations
including
what
information
is
needed,
when,
and
to
whom.
3. Make
a
list
of
the
written
communication
that
you
read,
skim,
or
produce
in
a
one
day.
Please
share
your
results
with
the
class.
[1] Thill, J. V., & Bovee, C. L. (2004). Business communication today (8th ed.). Upper Saddle River, NJ: Prentice Hall. [2] American Management Association. (2007). Electronic monitoring & surveillance survey: Over half of all employers combined fire workers for e-mail & Internet abuse. Retrieved from http://press.amanet.org/press-releases/177/2007-electronic-monitoring-surveillance-survey [3] Ordoez, J. (2008, July 14). The technologist: They cant hide their pryin eyes. Retrieved from http://www.newsweek.com/id/143737
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Learning Objectives
1. Compare
and
contrast
ways
of
knowing
your
reading
audience.
2. Conduct
research
and
investigation
to
gather
information.
Clearly, not every piece of business writing requires research or investigation. If you receive an e-mail asking for the correct spelling of your bosss name and her official title, you will probably be able to answer without having to look anything up. But what if the sender of the e-mail wants to know who in your company is the decision maker for purchasing a certain supply item? Unless you work for a very small company, you will likely have to look through the organizational chart, and possibly make a phone call or two, before you are able to write an email answering this question. Thereyou have just done the research for a piece of business writing. Even if you need to write something much more complex than an e-mail, such as a report or proposal, research does not have to be all about long hours at a library. Instead, start by consulting with business colleagues who have written similar documents and ask what worked, what didnt work, what was well received by management and the target audience. Your efforts will need to meet similar needs. Your document will not stand alone but will exist within a larger agenda. How does your proposed document fit within this agenda at your place of work, within the larger community, or with the target audience? Its worth noting that the word investigation contains the word invest. You will need to invest your time and effort to understand the purpose and goal of your proposed document. Before you go to the library, look over the information sources you already have in hand. Do you regularly read a magazine that relates to the topic? Was there an article in the newspaper you read that might work? Is there a book, CD-ROM or mp3 that has information you can use? Think of what you want the audience to know and how you could show it to them. Perhaps a famous quote or a line from a poem may make an important contribution to your document. You might even know someone that has experience in the area you want to research, someone who has been involved with skydiving locally for his or her whole life. Consider how you are going to tell and show your audience what your document is all about. Once you have an assignment or topic, know your general and specific purposes, and have good idea of your readers expectations, its time to gather information. Your best sources may be all around you, within your business or organization. Information may come from reports from the marketing department or even from a trusted and well-versed colleague, but you will still need to do your homework. After you have written several similar documents for your organization, you may have your collection of sample documents, but dont be tempted to take shortcuts and repurpose existing documents to meet a tight deadline. Creating an original work specifically tailored to the issue and audience at hand is the best approach to establish credibility, produce a more effective document, and make sure no important aspect of your topic is left out.
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Do employees wash their hands thoroughly before and after contact with each animal? Are hand-washing facilities kept clean and supplied with soap and paper towels? When cleaning the animals cages, do employees wear appropriate protection such as gloves? What is the procedure for disposing of animal waste, and do all employees know and follow the procedure? When an animal is being transferred from one cage to another, are there enough staff members present to provide backup assistance in case the animal becomes unruly? What should an employee do if he or she is bitten or scratched? What if an animal exhibits signs of being ill? Have there been any recent incidents that raised concerns about safety?
Once you have posed and answered questions like these, it should be easier to narrow down the information so that the result is a reasonably brief, easy to read memo that will get employees attention and persuade them to adopt safe work practices.
Staying
Organized
Once you open up a Web browser such as Google and type in a search parameter like newsletter production, you will have a wealth of information to look at. Much of it may be irrelevant, but even the information that fits with your project will be so much that you will be challenged to keep track of it. Perhaps the most vital strategy for staying organized while doing online research is to open a blank page in your word processor and title it Sources. Each time you find a Web page that contains what you believe may be useful and relevant information, copy the URL and paste it on this Sources page. Under the URL, copy and paste a paragraph or two as an example of the information you found on this Web page. Err on the side of listing too many sources; if in doubt about a source, list it for the time beingyou can always discard it later. Having these source URLs and snippets of information all in one place will save you a great deal of time and many headaches later on. As you explore various Web sites of companies that provide newsletter production services, you will no doubt encounter new questions that your president did not answer in the original conversation:
Does the newsletter need to be printed on paper and mailed? Or would an e-mail newsletter be acceptable, or even preferable? Does your firm want the newsletter vendor to write all of the content customized to your firm, provide a menu of pre-existing articles for your firm to choose from, or let your firm provide someor even allof the content? What are the advantages and disadvantages of these various options?
You also realize that in order to get any cost estimates, even when the above questions are settled, you will need to know the desired length of the newsletter (in pages or in words), and how many recipients are on your firms mailing list. At this point in your research and investigation, it may make sense to give your president an informal interim report, summarizing what you have found out and what additional questions need to be answered. Having a well-organized list of the information you have assembled, the new questions that have arisen, and the sources where you found your information will allow you to continue researching effectively as soon as you have gotten answers and more specific direction from your president.
Key Takeaway
To make a writing project manageable, narrow your topic, focus on key points, plan your investigation for information, and stay organized as you go along.
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Exercises
1. Think
of
a
time
when
someone
asked
you
to
gather
information
to
make
a
decision,
whether
for
work,
school,
or
in
your
personal
life.
How
specific
was
the
request?
What
did
you
need
to
know
before
you
could
determine
how
much
and
what
kind
of
information
to
gather?
Discuss
your
answer
with
those
of
your
classmates.
2. Make
a
list
of
all
the
ways
you
procrastinate,
noting
how
much
time
is
associated
with
each
activity
or
distraction.
Share
and
compare
your
results
with
a
classmate.
3. You
are
the
manager.
Write
an
e-mail
requesting
an
employee
to
gather
specific
information
on
a
topic.
Give
clear
directions
and
due
date(s).
Please
share
your
results
with
the
class.
4. How
do
you
prepare
yourself
for
a
writing
project?
How
do
others?
What
strategies
work
best
for
you?
Survey
ten
colleagues
or
coworkers
and
compare
your
results
with
your
classmates.
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Learning Objective
1. Understand
how
to
be
ethical,
avoid
plagiarism,
and
use
reputable
sources
in
your
writing.
Unlike writing for personal or academic purposes, your business writing will help determine how well your performance is evaluated in your job. Whether you are writing for colleagues within your workplace or outside vendors or customers, you will want to build a solid, well-earned favorable reputation for yourself with your writing. Your goal is to maintain and enhance your credibility, and that of your organization, at all times. Make sure as you start your investigation that you always question the credibility of the information. Sources may have no reviews by peers or editor, and the information may be misleading, biased, or even false. Be a wise information consumer.
Business
Ethics
Many employers have a corporate code of ethics; even if your employer does not, it goes without saying that there are laws governing how the company can and cannot conduct business. Some of these laws apply to business writing. As an example, it would be not only unethical but also illegal to send out a promotional letter announcing a special sale on an item that ordinarily costs $500, offering it for $100, if in fact you have only one of this item in inventory. When a retailer does this, the unannounced purpose of the letter is to draw customers into the store, apologize for running out of the sale item, and urge them to buy a similar item for $400. Known as bait and switch, this is a form of fraud and is punishable by law. Lets return to our previous newsletter scenario to examine some less clear-cut issues of business ethics. Suppose that, as you confer with your president and continue your research on newsletter vendors, you remember that you have a cousin who recently graduated from college with a journalism degree. You decide to talk to her about your project. In the course of the conversation, you learn that she now has a job working for a newsletter vendor. She is very excited to hear about your firms plans and asks you to make her company look good in your report. You are now in a situation that involves at least two ethical questions:
1. Did
you
breach
your
firms
confidentiality
by
telling
your
cousin
about
the
plan
to
start
sending
a
monthly
newsletter?
2. Is
there
any
ethical
way
you
can
comply
with
your
cousins
request
to
show
her
company
in
an
especially
favorable
light?
On the question of confidentiality, the answer may depend on whether you signed a confidentiality agreement as a condition of your employment at the accounting firm, or whether
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your president specifically told you to keep the newsletter plan confidential. If neither of these safeguards existed, then your conversation with your cousin would be an innocent, unintentional and coincidental sharing of information in which she turned out to have a vested interest. As for representing her company in an especially favorable lightyou are ethically obligated to describe all the candidate vendors according to whatever criteria your president asked to see. The fact that your cousin works for a certain vendor may be an asset or a liability in your firms view, but it would probably be best to inform them of it and let them make that judgment. As another example of ethics in presenting material, lets return to the skydiving scenario we mentioned earlier. Because you are writing a promotional letter whose goal is to increase enrollment in your skydiving instruction, you may be tempted to avoid mentioning information that could be perceived as negative. If issues of personal health condition or accident rates in skydiving appear to discourage rather than encourage your audience to consider skydiving, you may be tempted to omit them. But in so doing, you are not presenting an accurate picture and may mislead your audience. Even if your purpose is to persuade, deleting the opposing points presents a one-sided presentation. The audience will naturally consider not only what you tell them but also what you are not telling them, and will raise questions. Instead, consider your responsibility as a writer to present information you understand to be complete, honest, and ethical. Lying by omission can also expose your organization to liability. Instead of making a claim that skydiving is completely safe, you may want to state that your school complies with the safety guidelines of the United States Parachute Association. You might also state how many jumps your school has completed in the past year without an accident.
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whether you copy material verbatim, paraphrase its wording, or even merely take its ideasif you do any of these thingswithout giving credit to the source. This does not mean you are forbidden to quote from your sources. Its entirely likely that in the course of research you may find a perfect turn of phrase or a way of communicating ideas that fits your needs perfectly. Using it in your writing is fine, provided that you credit the source fully enough that your readers can find it on their own. If you fail to take careful notes, or the sentence is present in your writing but later fails to get accurate attribution, it can have a negative impact on you and your organization. That is why it is important that when you find an element you would like to incorporate in your document, in the same moment as you copy and paste or make a note of it in your research file, you need to note the source in a complete enough form to find it again. Giving credit where credit is due will build your credibility and enhance your document. Moreover, when your writing is authentically yours, your audience will catch your enthusiasm, and you will feel more confident in the material you produce. Just as you have a responsibility in business to be honest in selling your product of service and avoid cheating your customers, so you have a responsibility in business writing to be honest in presenting your idea, and the ideas of others, and to avoid cheating your readers with plagiarized material.
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Metasearch engines
At the end of this chapter, under Additional Resources, you will find a list of many Web sites that may be useful for business research.
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A clearly articulated purpose and goal A question, problem, or issue to address Information, data, and evidence that is clearly relevant to the stated purpose and goals Inferences or interpretations that lead to conclusions based on the presented information, data, and evidence A frame of reference or point of view that is clearly articulated Assumptions, concepts, and ideas that are clearly articulated
An additional question that is central to your assessment of your sources is how credible the source is. This question is difficult to address even with years of training and expertise. You may have heard of academic fields called disciplines, but may not have heard of each fields professors called disciples. Believers, keepers of wisdom, and teachers of tomorrows teachers have long played a valuable role establishing, maintaining, and perpetuating credibility. Academics have long cultivated an understood acceptance of the role of objective, impartial use of the scientific method to determine validity and reliability. But as research is increasingly dependent on funding, and funding often brings specific points of view and agendas with it, pure research can beand has beencompromised. You can no longer simply assume that studies show something without awareness of who conducted the study, how was it conducted, and who funded the effort. This may sound like a lot of investigation and present quite a challenge, but again it is worth the effort. Information literacy is an essential skill set in the process of writing. As you learn to spot key signs of information that will not serve to enhance your credibility and contribute to your document, you can increase your effectiveness as you research and analyze your resources. For
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example, if you were researching electronic monitoring in the workplace, you might come upon a site owned by a company that sells workplace electronic monitoring systems. The site might give many statistics illustrating what percentage of employers use electronic monitoring, what percentage of employees use the Internet for nonwork purposes during work hours, what percentage of employees use company e-mail for personal messages, and so on. But the sources of these percentage figures may not be credited. As an intelligent researcher, you need to ask yourself, did the company that owns the site perform its own research to get these numbers? Most likely it did notso why are the sources not cited? Moreover, such a site would be unlikely to mention any court rulings about electronic monitoring being unnecessarily invasive of employees privacy. Less biased sources of information would be the American Management Association, the U.S. Department of Labor, and other not-for-profit organizations that study workplace issues. The Internet also encompasses thousands of interactive sites where readers can ask and answer questions. Some sites, like Askville by Amazon.com, WikiAnswers, and Yahoo! Answers, are open to almost any topic. Others, like ParentingQuestions and WebMD, deal with specific topics. Chat rooms on bridal Web sites allow couples who are planning a wedding to share advice and compare prices for gowns, florists, caterers, and so on. Reader comment sites like Newsvine facilitate discussions about current events. Customer reviews are available for just about everything imaginable, from hotels and restaurants to personal care products, home improvement products, and sports equipment. The writers of these customer reviews, the chat room participants, and the people who ask and answer questions on many of these interactive sites are not experts, nor do they pretend to be. Some may have extreme opinions that are not based in reality. Then, too, it is always possible for a vendor to plant favorable customer reviews on the Internet to make its product look good. Although the terms of use which everyone registering for interactive sites must agree to usually forbid the posting of advertisements, profanity, or personal attacks, some sites do a better job than others in monitoring and deleting such material. Nevertheless, if your business writing project involves finding out how the average person feels about an issue in the news, or whether a new type of home exercise device really works as advertised, these comment and customer review sites can be very useful indeed. It may seem like its hard work to assess your sources, to make sure your information is accurate and truthful, but the effort is worth it. Business and industry rely on reputation and trust (just as we individuals do) in order to maintain healthy relationships. Your document, regardless of how small it may appear in the larger picture, is an important part of that reputation and interaction.
Key Takeaway
Evaluating your sources is a key element of the preparation process in business writing. To avoid plagiarism, always record your sources so that you can credit them in your writing.
Exercises
1. Before
the
Internet
improved
information
access,
how
did
people
find
information?
Are
the
strategies
they
used
still
valid
and
how
might
they
serve
you
as
a
business
writer?
Interview
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3.
4. 5. 6. 7.
several people who are old enough to have done research in the old days and report your findings. Visit the Web site of the United States Copyright Office at http://www.copyright.gov. Find something on the Web site that you did not know before reviewing it and share it with your classmates. On the United States Copyright Office Web site at http://www.copyright.gov view the multimedia presentation for students and teachers, Taking the Mystery out of Copyright. Download the Copyright Basics document and discuss it with your class. Look over the syllabus for your business communication course and assess the writing assignments you will be completing. Is all the information you are going to need for these assignments available in electronic form? Why or why not? Does the fact that Internet search results are often associated with advertising influence your research and investigation? Why or why not? Discuss with a classmate. Find an example of a bogus or less than credible Web site. Indicate why you perceive it to be untrustworthy, and share it with your classmates. Visit the parody Web site The Onion at http://www.theonion.com and find one story that you think has plausible or believable elements. Share your findings with the class.
[1] Adapted from Paul, R., & Elder, L. (2007). The miniature guide to critical thinking: Concepts and tools. Dillon Beach, CA: The Foundation for Critical Thinking Press.
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Learning Objective
1. Demonstrate
your
ability
to
manage
your
time
and
successfully
conduct
research
and
investigation
for
a
writing
assignment.
Once you become immersed in your sources, it can be easy to get carried away in the pursuit of information and lose sight of why you are doing all this research and investigation. As a responsible writer, you will need to plan not only how you will begin your information gathering, but also how you will bring it to a conclusion.
across the region. Your task has considerably expanded and involves more research, but given the opportunity this assignment presents, you are excited at the challenge. As you begin to research, plan, and design the document, you will touch on the process of compiling information. If you are aware of each step, your task can be accomplished effectively and efficiently. Sensitivity refers to your capacity to respond to stimulation, being excited, responsive or susceptible to new information. This starts with a self-inventory of your current or past interests and activities. If you are intrigued by a topic or area of interest, your enthusiasm will carry through to your document and make it more stimulating for your reading audience. You may not have considered, or even noticed elements or ideas associated with your topic, but now that you have begun the process of investigation, you see them everywhere. For example, have you ever heard someone say a word or phrase that you never heard before, but now that you are familiar with it, you hear it everywhere? This same principle applies to your sensitivity to ideas related to your topic. Youll notice information and it will help you as you develop your awareness of your topic and the many directions you could take the speech. Cognitive psychologist use the term priming to refer to this excited state of awareness. [3] Exposure involves your condition of being presented views, ideas, or experiences made known to you through direct experience. If you are going to select a topic on flying but have never flown before, your level of exposure may be low. Your level of awareness may be high, however, in terms of the importance of security on airplanes after reading about, watching on television, or hearing on the radio stories after the events of September 11, 2001. You may decide to expose yourself to more information through a range of sources as you investigate the topic of airline security. And the more you become exposed to the issues, processes, and goals of your topic, the more likely you are to see areas of interest, new ideas that might fit in your speech, and form patterns of awareness you did not perceive earlier. We have previously discussed at length the importance of selection as a stage in the perceptual process, and selective exposure is one way you gain awareness. You may want to revisit this chapter as you develop your topic or choose where to look for information or decide what kinds of information to expose yourself to as you research your topic. Assimilation and accommodation refer to the processes by which you assimilate (or integrate) new ideas into your thinking patterns and accommodate (or adopt, adapt, or filter out) new sources of information as they relate to your goal. You may have had preconceived notions or ideas about airline security before you began your investigation, but new information has changed the way you view your topic. You might also find issues (e.g., right to privacy) that may be points of conflict with your beliefs as you review information. This stage is important to the overall process of developing your topic, and it takes time. You need time to be able to contemplate, review, and reflect on how the new information fits or fails to connect clearly to your chosen topic. Incubation is the process by which you cause an idea or ideas to develop in your mind. This might not happen all at once, and you might spend time thinking about the new information, directions, or ways you might develop or focus your topic. Consider the meaning of the word as it relates to chickens and eggs. An egg may be produced, but it needs time and a warm environment to develop. You might have an idea, but you need to create an environment for it to
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develop. This might involve further investigation and exploration, or it may involve removing yourself from active research to digest or incubate what you have already learned. You may feel stuck on an idea or perceive an inability to move on in the development of your ideas or topic, and giving it a rest may be the best course of action. You may also find that just when you least expect it, an idea, fully formed, flashes in your mind and you think, Why didnt I see that before? Before the idea escapes you, write it down and make sure you can refer to it later. Incorporation refers to the process by which you bring the information into a whole or complete topic. By now you have investigated, chosen some information over others, and have started to see how the pieces will come together. Your perceptions of how the elements come together will form the basis for your development of the organization of your document. It will contribute to the logos, or logic, of your thought and its representation in your document, and help you produce a coherent, organized message that your audience can follow clearly. Production involves the act of creating your document from the elements you have gathered. You may start to consider what comes first, what goes last, and how you will link your ideas and examples together. You may find that you need additional information and need to go back to your notes that you have taken to find the source quickly and easily. You may also start to communicate with friends, sharing some of the elements or even practicing the first drafts of your document, learning where the connections are clear and where they need work. Revision is the process by which you look over again in order to correct or improve your message. You will notice elements that need further investigation, development, or additional examples and visual aids as you produce your document. This is an important step to the overall production of your message, much like revising an essay for an English course. The first time you said, thought, or wrote something it may have made sense to you, but upon reflection and after trying an idea out, you need it to be revised in order to work effectively as part of your document. You may revisit the place in which you started (and start all speeches) by reconsidering the rhetorical situation and see if what you have produces is in line with the expectations of the audience. Your awareness of the content, audience, and purpose of the rhetorical situation will guide you through the revision process and contribute to the production of a more effective document. Once you have gathered what you think is enough materialor, perhaps, once your eyes begin to glaze overtake a step back and return to the general and specific purpose of the document you set out to write. Look again at the basic elements (i.e., who, what, when, etc.) and fill in the answers based on what you have found. It is not unusual at this stage to have some holes in the information that require more research to fill. You may also realize that your research findings have disproved part or even all of your original agenda, making it necessary to change your message significantly. Leave enough time before your deadline so that you can sketch out a detailed outline and rough draft of your document and leave it alone for at least a day. When you look at it again, it will probably be clear which additional details need more support, and you can perform targeted research to fill in those gaps.
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Key Takeaway
Be mindful of your result and your time frame as you conduct your research and investigation. Allow enough time to let the writing rest before you return to it and make revisions.
Exercises
1. Choose
a
topic
related
to
a
career
that
interests
you
and
think
about
how
you
would
research
that
topic
on
the
Internet.
Set
a
timer
for
fifteen
minutes.
Ready,
set,
go!
At
the
end
of
fifteen
minutes,
review
the
sources
you
have
recorded
in
your
list
and
think
about
the
information
you
have
found.
How
well
did
you
use
your
limited
time?
Could
you
do
better
next
time?
Try
it
again.
2. Complete
an
Internet
search
of
your
name
and
report
your
findings
to
the
class.
3. Complete
an
Internet
search
of
your
favorite
product
or
service
and
report
your
findings
to
the
class.
4. Youve
been
assigned
to
a
marketing
team
tasked
to
engage
an
audience
just
like
you.
Make
a
list
of
what
services
or
products
your
target
audience
would
find
attractive.
Pick
one
and
develop
a
slogan
that
is
sure
to
get
attention.
Share
your
results
with
the
class.
[1] Andrews, P. H., Andrews, J., & Williams, G. (1999). Public speaking: Connecting you and your audience. Boston, MA: Houghton Mifflin Company. [2] Andrews, P. H., Andrews, J., & Williams, G. (1999). Public speaking: Connecting you and your audience. Boston, MA: Houghton Mifflin Company. [3] Yaniv, I., & Meyer, D. (1987). Activation and metacognition of inaccessible stored information: potential bases for incubation effects in problem loving. Journal of Experimental Psychology: Learning, Memory, and Cognition, 13, 187205.
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Learning Objectives
1. Understand
different
types
of
reading
and
analyzing
that
business
documents
encounter.
2. Demonstrate
how
to
write
for
skimming
and
for
analytical
reading
in
at
least
one
written
document
of
each
kind.
When you read, do you read each and every word? Do you skim over the document and try to identify key terms and themes? Do you focus on numbers and statistics, or ignore the text and go straight to the pictures or embedded video? Because people read in many diverse ways, you as a writer will want to consider how your audience may read and analyze your document. Ever since Benjamin Franklin said that time is money, [1] business managers have placed a high value on getting work done quickly. Many times, as a result, a document will be skimmed rather than read in detail. This is true whether the communication is a one-paragraph e-mail or a twenty-page proposal. If you anticipate that your document will be skimmed, it behooves you to make your main points stand out for the reader. In an e-mail, use a subject line that tells the reader the gist of your message before he or she opens it. For example, the subject line 3 p.m. meeting postponed to 4 p.m. conveys the most important piece of information; in the body of the e-mail you may explain that Wednesdays status meeting for the XYZ project needs to be postponed to 4 p.m. because of a conflict with an offsite luncheon meeting involving several XYZ project team members. If you used the subject line Wednesday meeting instead, recipients might glance at their in-box, think, Oh, I already know Im supposed to attend that meeting, and not read the body of the message. As a result, they will not find out that the meeting is postponed. For a longer piece of writing such as a report or proposal, here are some techniques you can use to help the reader grasp key points.
Present a quick overview, or executive summary, at the beginning of the document. Use boldface headings as signposts for the main sections and their subsections. Where possible, make your headings informative; for example, a heading like Problem Began in 1992 is more informative than one that says Background. Within each section, begin each paragraph with a topic sentence that indicates what the paragraph discusses. When you have a list of points, questions, or considerations, format them with bullets rather than listing them in sentences. The bottom line, generally understood to mean the total cost of a given expenditure or project, can also refer to the conclusions that the information in the report leads to. As the expression indicates, these conclusions should be clearly presented at the end of the document, which is the place where the time-pressed reader will often turn immediately after reading the first page.
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Imagine how unhappy you would be if you submitted a report and your audience came away with a message completely different from what you had intended. For example, suppose your manager is considering adopting a specific new billing system in your office and has asked you to report on the pros and cons of this system. You worked hard, gathered plenty of information, and wrote a detailed report which, in your opinion, gave strong support for adopting the new system. However, the first few pages of your report described systems other than the one under consideration. Next, you presented the reasons not to implement the new system. Throughout the report, embedded in the body of several different paragraphs, you mentioned the advantages offered by the new system; but they were not grouped together so that you could emphasize them with a heading or other signpost for the reader. At the end of the report, you reviewed the current billing system and stated that few problems were encountered with it. When you delivered your report, the manager and colleagues who received it missed your most important information and decided not to consider the new system any further. Worse, your manager later criticized you for spending too much time on the report, saying it was not very informative. Situations like this can be avoided if you provide a clear organizational framework to draw your readers attention to your main points. Analyzing is distinct from reading. When you read, you attempt to grasp the authors meaning via words and symbols, and you may come away with a general emotional feeling about what the writer has written instead of an arsenal of facts. When you analyze a document, you pay more attention to how the author assembled the information to present a coherent message. Business writing often involves communication via words and symbols in ways that meet audience expectations; in many cases, the audience needs to be able to analyze the content, and reading is secondary. For this reason, a solid organizational pattern will greatly enhance your documents effectiveness.
Key Takeaway
Logical organization is important to promote reader understanding and analysis.
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Exercises
1. Take
a
news
article
and
mark
it
up
to
reveal
its
organizational
structure.
Does
it
have
an
informative
opening
paragraph?
Does
each
additional
paragraph
begin
with
a
topic
sentence?
Does
it
use
subheadings?
Is
there
a
conclusion
that
follows
logically
from
the
information
presented?
2. Find
an
article
that
you
do
not
like
and
review
it.
State
specific
reasons
why
you
dislike
it
and
share
your
opinion
with
your
classmates.
3. Find
an
article
that
you
do
like
and
review
it.
State
specific
reasons
why
you
like
it
and
share
your
opinion
with
your
classmates.
4. Youve
been
assigned
to
a
sales
team
that
has
not
been
performing
at
optimal
levels.
Develop
an
incentive
program
to
improve
the
teams
performance.
Present
your
idea
to
the
class.
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The U.S. Department of Labors Occupational Safety and Health Administration (OSHA) sets the standards and conducts inspections to ensure safety and prevent accidents in the workplace. http://www.osha.gov The Society for Human Resource Management is a key source of news and information on HR topics. http://www.shrm.org/Pages/default.aspx The Chicago Board of Trade, the worlds oldest futures and options exchange, trades treasury bonds, corn, soybean, wheat, gold, silver, and other commodities. http://www.cbot.com Yahoo! Finance is a useful site for tracking the Dow, S&P 500, and other major stock indices in the United States and abroad; it also has areas for financial news, investing, and personal finance. http://finance.yahoo.com The Occupational Outlook Handbook, published every two years by the U.S. Bureau of Labor Statistics, describes hundreds of different types of jobs, the training and education each job requires, the typical earnings in that job, and more. http://www.bls.gov/OCO CareerBuilder.com, which describes itself as the largest online job search site, offers a vast online and print network to help job seekers connect with employers. http://www.careerbuilder.com According to its Web site, Fast Company sets the agenda, charting the evolution of business through a unique focus on the most creative individuals sparking change in the marketplace. http://www.fastcompany.com LinkedIn, which has been described as the professional counterpart to social networking sites such as Facebook and MySpace, is an interconnected network of experienced professionals from around the world, representing 170 industries and 200 countries. http://www.linkedin.com Intuit, maker of QuickBooks, Quicken, TurboTax, and other accounting software, provides a small business information center on its Web site. What would you expect to find here that is different from the resources a noncommercial source would offer? http://smallbusiness.intuit.com
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Chapter
11
Writing
Although I usually think I know what Im going to be writing about, what Im going to say, most of the time it doesnt happen that way at all. At some point I get misled down a garden path, I get surprised by an idea that I hadnt anticipated getting, which is a little bit like being in a laboratory. Lewis Thomas
Getting Started
Introductory Exercises
1. Match each statement in the left column with the most appropriate mode of communication in the right column, and note why.
___
1.
Need
the
sales
figures
for
the
last
month
available
in
three
days
___
2.
Inform
department
employees
of
face-to-face
(F2F)
meeting
next
month
___
3.
International
client
requests
price
quote
___
4.
Assigned
to
investigate
partnership
with
supplier
to
codevelop
a
new
product
___
5.
Need
to
inform
employee
of
a
discrepancy
in
their
expense
report
___
6.
Need
to
facilitate
meeting
with
two
department
managers
from
two
distinct
time
zones.
___
7.
Need
to
follow
up
with
customer
post
sale
___
8.
Need
to
contact
new
prospective
customer
A.
Text
message
or
instant
message
(IM)
B.
E-mail
C.
Fax
D.
Report
E.
Proposal
F.
Face-to-face
(F2F)
meeting,
interpersonal
interaction
G.
F2F
meeting,
group
or
team
H.
Meeting
(mediated),
teleconference
or
videoconference
There are no right or wrong answers to this matching exercise, but there are strengths and weaknesses associated with each mode. Does the information need to be received as soon as possible? Will the document require time and preparation? Will the result be comprehensive and require visual representation of data, trends, and their relationships(s)? Associate each statement
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with what you consider the most appropriate model of communication and note why. Discuss your responses with your classmates.
e.g.
i.e.
4. its or its
its
Its
5. lay or lie
9.
than
or
then
This
years
losses
were
worse
_______
last
years.
10.
that
or
_______
type
of
which
marketing
data
did
you
need?
There
are
several
kinds
of
data
_______
could
be
useful.
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11. there their, The report is or theyre _________, in the top file drawer. __________ planning to attend the sales meeting in Pittsburgh. Customers need _______ drive slower if they want to save gas.
there
Theyre to
Their
After
sales
meeting,
you
should
visit
customers
in
the
Pittsburgh
area
_______.
too
In fact, the _______ of two you should make some customer visits together. He would be the best disinterested person to make a decision, since he isnt biased and is relatively _______ in the outcome. __________ truck is Whose that? __________ will go to Who the interview? My office is bigger than _______ cubicle. your
15 your or youre
The sales manager tried to speak dynamically, but the sales reps were simply _______ in what he had to say. __________ going to pay for the repairs? To __________ should we address the thank- you note? _______ going to learn how to avoid making these common mistakes in English.
uninterested
If all the world is a stage then you, as a business writer, must be the script writer, correct? Actually, those who employ you, specify your job duties, manage the business, and designate which problems you are to solve are more like the script writers, directors, and producers. So what role does that leave you as a business writer? Actor. You may not be seen on stage by the suppliers you write, the departments you inform with your reports, or the customers you serve, but your writing represents you and your organization. As an actor must learn his or her lines, you too must learn the role of a business writer within the context of your business or organization. It may well be that you are allowed a degree of improvisation and creativity when you interpret your role, or it could be the case that many of the written documents you will produce follow a standard template, much like a script, that designates your lines before the writing process begins. Knowing your place on stage and how it relates to your business is an important aspect of business writing best not ignored.
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This chapter focuses on several strategies for success when it comes to the creative process of writing, and your awareness of these skills will prove invaluable as your responsibility increases and your ability to shape documents develops. Never lose sight of the fact that each document exists with a universe of relationships and interaction; it does not stand alone. Also remember that what you write today, particularly if you publish it on the Internet, will be there for years to come. Always consider how your words will represent you and your organization when you are not there to clarify, defend, or correct them. Your audience will have expectations of you, as will your employer, and as an effective business writer you know that one key to success is meeting these expectations. Creative writing for exposition, narration, and self-expression is an important part of writing, but in the business context you have a role, job duties, and responsibilities both internal and external to your organization. Your mastery of clear and concise writing will directly affect the interpretation, and misinterpretation, of your message. Your goal remains to reduce misunderstandings through the effective and efficient use of words in business documents, and the well-known mandate to Omit needless words [1] stands true. Up to this point you have been preparing to write, but now the moment has come for performance.
[1] Strunk, W., Jr., & White, E. B. (1979). The elements of style (3rd ed.). New York, NY: Macmillian.
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11.1 Organization
Learning Objectives
1. Understand
how
to
develop
and
organize
content
in
patterns
that
are
appropriate
for
your
document
and
audience.
2. Demonstrate
your
ability
to
order,
outline,
and
emphasize
main
points
in
one
or
more
written
assignments.
3. Demonstrate
how
to
compose
logically
organized
paragraphs,
sentences,
and
transitions
in
one
or
more
written
assignments.
The purpose of business writing is to communicate facts and ideas. In order to accomplish that purpose, each document has key components that need to be present in order for your reading audience to understand the message. These elements may seem simple to the point that you may question how any writer could neglect them. But if you take note of how often miscommunication and misunderstanding happen, particularly in written communications, you will realize that it happens all the time. Omission or neglect may be intentional, but it is often unintentional; the writer assumes (wrongly) that the reader will easily understand a concept, idea, or the meaning of the message. From background to language, culture to education, there are many variables that come into play and make effective communication a challenge. The degree to which you address these basic elements will increase the effectiveness of your documents. Each document must address the following:
If you have these elements in mind as you prepare your document, it will be easier to decide what to write and in what order. They will also be useful when you are reviewing your document before delivering it. If your draft omits any one of these elements or addresses it in an unclear fashion, you will know what you need to do to fix it. Another way to approach organizing your document is with the classical proofs known as ethos, logos, and pathos. Ethos, or your credibility, will come through with your choice of sources and authority on the subject(s). Your logos, or the logic of your thoughts represented across the document, will allow the reader to come to understand the relationships among who, what, where, when, and so forth. If your readers cannot follow your logic they will lose interest, fail to understand your message, and possibly not even read it at all. Finally, your pathos, or passion and enthusiasm, will be reflected in your design and word choices. If your document fails to convey enthusiasm for the subject, how can you expect the reader to be interested? Every document, indeed every communication, represents aspects of these classical elements.
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This statement is key to the success of your document. If your audience has to work to find out what exactly you are talking about, or what your stated purpose or goal is, they will be less likely to read, be influenced, or recall what you have written. By stating your point clearly in your introduction, and then referring back to it in the body of the document and at the end, you will help your readers to understand and remember your message.
Organizing
Principles
Once you know the basic elements of your message, you need to decide in what order to present them to your audience. A central organizing principle will help you determine a logical order for your information. One common organizing principle is chronology, or time: the writer tells what happened first, then what happened next, then what is happening now, and, finally, what is expected to happen in the future. Another common organizing principle is comparison: the writer describes one product, an argument on one side of an issue, or one possible course of action; and then compares it with another product, argument, or course of action. As an example, lets imagine that you are a business writer within the transportation industry and you have been assigned to write a series of informative pieces about an international initiative called the TransAmerica Transportation System Study. Just as the First Transcontinental Railroad once unified the United States from east to west, which was further reinforced by the Interstate Highway System, the proposed TransAmerica Transportation System will facilitate integrating the markets of Mexico, the United States, and Canada from north to south. Rail transportation has long been an integral part of the transportation and distribution system for goods across the Americas, and its role will be important in this new system. In deciding how to organize your report, you have several challenges and many possibilities of different organizing principles to use. Part of your introduction will involve a historical perspective, and a discussion of the events that led from the First Transcontinental Railroad to the TransAmerica Transportation System proposal. Other aspects will include comparing the old railroad and highway systems to the new ones, and the transformative effect this will have on business and industry. You will need to acknowledge the complex relationships and challenges that collaboration has overcome, and highlight the common benefits. You will be called on to
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write informative documents as part of a public relations initiative, persuasive essays to underscore the benefits for those who prefer the status quo, and even write speeches for celebrations and awards. Table 11.1 "Organizing Principles" lists seventeen different organizing principles and how they might be applied to various pieces you would write about the TransAmerican Transportation System. The left column provides the name of the organizing principle. The center column explains the process of organizing a document according to each principle, and the third column provides an example. Table 11.1 Organizing Principles
Organizing
Principle
1.
Time
(Chronological)
Explanation
of
Process
Structuring
your
document
by
time
shows
a
series
of
events
or
steps
in
a
process,
which
typically
has
a
beginning,
middle,
and
end.
Once
upon
a
time
stories
follow
a
chronological
pattern.
Example
Before the First Transcontinental Railroad, the events that led to its construction, and its impact on early America. Additional examples may include the national highway projects and the development of reliable air freight. Now we can consider the TransAmerica Transportation System and the similar and distinct events that led us to today. A comparison of pre and postFirst Transcontinental Railroad America, showing how health and life expectancy improved with the increased access to goods and services. Another example could be drawn from air freight, noting that organ donation in one part of the country can now save a life in another state or on the opposite coast. In a similar way, the TransAmerica Transportation System will improve the lives of the citizens of Mexico, the United States, and Canada. A contrast of pre and postFirst Transcontinental Railroad America showing how much time it took to
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2. Comparison
Structuring your document by comparison focuses on the similarities and/or differences between points or concepts.
3. Contrast
Structuring your document by using contrasting points highlights the differences between items and
concepts.
communicate via letter, or how long it took to move out West. Just in time delivery and the modern highway system and trucking may serve as an example for contrast. The TransAmerica Transportation System will reduce customs clearing time while increasing border security along the distribution network.
Structuring your document by cause and effect structuring establishes a relationship between two events or situations, making the connection clear.
Structuring your document by problem and solution means you state the problem and detail how it was solved. This approach is effective for persuasive speeches.
The movement of people and goods out West grew considerably from 1750 to 1850. With the availability of a new and faster way to go West, people generally supported its construction. Both the modern highway and air transportation systems may serve as examples, noting how people, goods, and services can be delivered in drastically reduced time frames. Citizens of all three countries involved have increasingly been involved in trade, and movement across common borders through the TransAmerica Transportation System will enable the movement of goods and services with great efficiency. Manufacturers were producing better goods for less money at the start of the Industrial Revolution, but they lacked a fast and effective method of getting their goods to growing markets. The First Transcontinental Railroad gave them speed, economy, and access to new markets. Highways and air routes have dramatically increased this trend. In a similar way, this new system is the next evolutionary step in the integration and growth of our common marketplaces.
6. Classification (Categorical)
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7. Biographical
industry.
Structuring
your
document
by
biography
means
examining
specific
people
as
they
relate
to
the
central
topic.
1804: Lewis and Clark travel 4,000 miles in over two years across America 1862: President Lincoln signs the Pacific Railroad Act 1876: The Transcontinental Express from New York arrives in San Francisco with a record- breaking time of 83 hours and 39 minutes 2009: President Obama can cross America by plane in less than 5 hours So why shouldnt the ratio of time from import to consumer be reduced?
8.
Space
(Spatial)
Structuring
your
document
by
space
A
train
uses
a
heat
source
to
heat
involves
the
parts
of
something
and
how
water,
create
steam,
and
turn
a
turbine,
they
fit
to
form
the
whole.
which
moves
a
lever,
causing
a
wheel
to
move
on
a
track.
A
package
picked
up
from
an
office
in
New
York
in
the
morning
is
delivered
to
another
in
Los
Angeles
in
the
afternoon.
From
a
Pacific
port
in
Northern
Mexico
to
a
market
in
Chicago
or
Canada,
this
system
unifies
the
movement
of
goods
and
services.
9.
Ascending
and
Structuring
your
document
by
ascending
A
day
in
the
life
of
a
traveler
in
1800.
Descending
or
descending
order
involves
focusing
Incremental
developments
in
on
quantity
and
quality.
One
good
story
transportation
to
the
present,
(quality)
leads
to
the
larger
picture,
or
expressed
through
statistics,
graphs,
the
reverse.
maps,
and
charts.
A
day
in
the
life
of
a
traveler
in
1960,
1980,
or
even
2000,
with
visual
examples
of
changes
and
trends
may
also
contribute
to
the
document.
A
day
in
the
life
of
a
traveler
in
2009
compared
to
the
relatively
slow
movement
of
goods
and
services,
constrained
by
an
antiquated
transportation
network
that
negatively
impacts
efficiency.
10.
Psychological
It is also called Monroes Motivated When
families
in
the
year
1800
went
out
West,
they
rarely
returned
to
see
Sequence. [2] family
and
friends.
The
country
as
a
whole
was
an
extension
of
this
Structuring your document on the psychological aspects of the audience distended
family,
separated
by
time
and
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11. Elimination
involves focusing on their inherent needs and wants. See Maslow [3] and Schutz. [4] The author calls attention to a need, then focuses on the satisfaction of the need, visualization of the solution, and ends with a proposed or historical action. Useful for a persuasive message.
distance. The railroad, the highways, and air travel brought families and the country together. In the same way, common markets already exist across the three countries, but remain separated by time, distance, and an antiquated system scheduled for significant improvement.
Structuring your document using the The First Transcontinental Railroad process of elimination involves outlining helped pave the way for the all the possibilities. destruction of the Native American
way of life in 1870. After examining treaties, relocation and reservations, loss of the buffalo, disease, and war, the railroad can be accurately considered the catalyst for the end of an era. From the lessons of history we can learn to protect and preserve our distinct cultures, languages, and sovereign territories as we integrate a common transportation system for our mutual benefit and security.
Structuring
your
document
by
example
involves
providing
vivid,
specific
examples
(as
opposed
to
abstract
representations
of
data)
to
support
main
points.
12. Example
Just
as
it
once
took
weeks,
even
months,
for
a
simple
letter
to
move
from
coast
to
coast,
goods
and
services
have
had
a
long
and
arduous
process
from
importation
to
market.
For
example,
the
popular
Christmas
toy
X,
imported
to
Mexico
from
China
in
September,
may
well
not
be
on
store
shelves
by
December
25
under
the
old
system.
Now
it
can
move
from
importation
to
market
in
under
two
weeks.
13.
Process
and
Structuring
your
document
by
process
From
conception
to
design,
Procedure
and
procedure
is
similar
to
the
time
manufacturing
to
packaging,
to
(chronological)
organizational
pattern
transportation
and
inspection,
to
sales
with
the
distinction
of
steps
or
phases
and
sales
support,
lets
examine
how
that
lead
to
a
complete
end
goal.
This
is
the
new
transportation
system
often
referred
to
as
the
how-to
facilitates
increased
efficiency
in
organizational
pattern.
delivery
to
market
and
product
support.
14.
Point
Pattern
Structuring
your
document
in
a
series
of
The
TransAmerica
Transportation
points
allows
for
the
presentation
of
System
offers
several
advantages:
diverse
assertions
to
be
aligned
in
a
security,
speed,
efficiency,
and
cost
cohesive
argument
with
clear
support.
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15. Definition
Structuring your document with a guiding definition allows for a clear introduction of terms and concepts while reducing the likelihood of misinterpretation. Structuring your document around a testimony, or first person account of an experience, can be an effective way to make an abstract concept clearer to an audience.
16. Testimonial
Structuring your document by focusing on the following: 1. Thanking dignitaries and representatives 2. The importance of the event 3. The relationship of the event to the audience 4. Thanking the audience for participation in the event, ceremony, or celebration
The TransAmerica Transportation System can be defined by its purpose, its integrated components, and its impact on the secure movement of goods and services across common borders. According to Ms. X, owner of InterCountry Trading Company, it previously took 12 weeks to import, clear, and deliver a product from Mexico to the United States, and an additional four weeks to take delivery in Canada. Now the process takes less than two weeks. Thanking the representatives, builders, and everyone involved with the construction of the TransAmerica Transportation System. The railroad will unite America, and bring us closer in terms of trade, communication, and family. Thank you for participating in todays dedication.
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Outlines
Chances are you have learned the basic principles of outlining in English writing courses: an outline is a framework that organizes main ideas and subordinate ideas in a hierarchical series of roman numerals and alphabetical letters. The right column of Table 11.2 "Outline 1" presents a generic outline in a classical style. In the left column, the three main structural elements of an informative document are tied to the outline. Your task is to fill in the right column outline with the actual ideas and points you are making in your writing project. Feel free to adapt and tailor it to your needs, depending on the specifics of your report, letter, or other document. Table 11.2 Outline 1
Introduction
Main
Idea
I. Main idea: Point 1
Subpoint 1 Body
A.1 specific information 1 A.2 specific information 2 II. Main idea: Point 2 Subpoint 1 B.1 specific information 1 B.2 specific information 2 III. Main idea: Point 3 Subpoint 1 C.1 specific information 1 C.2 specific information 2
Summary:
Main
points
13
Body
Conclusion
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Table 11.3 "Outline 2" presents an alternate outline form that may be more suitable for brief documents like letters and e-mails. You can use this format as a model or modify it as needed. Table 11.3 Outline 2
1
Introduction
General
purpose,
statement,
or
thesis
statement
2
Body
Point
1:
Point
2:
Point
3:
3
Conclusion
Summarize
main
points
Paragraphs
Paragraphs are how we package information in business communication, and the more efficient the package, the easier the meaning can be delivered. You may wish to think of each paragraph as a small essay within a larger information platform, defined by a guiding thesis and an organizing principle. The standard five-paragraph essay format used on college term papers is mirrored in individual paragraphs. Often college essays have minimum or maximum word counts, but paragraphs hardly ever have established limits. Each paragraph focuses on one central idea. It can be as long or as short as it needs to be to get the message across, but remember your audience and avoid long, drawn-out paragraphs that may lose your readers attention. Just as a document generally has an introduction, body, and conclusion, so does a paragraph. Each paragraph has one idea, thought, or purpose that is stated in an introductory sentence. This is followed by one or more supporting sentences and concluded with a summary statement and transition or link to the next idea, or paragraph. Lets address each in turn:
The topic sentence states the main thesis, purpose, or topic of the paragraph; it defines the subject matter to be addressed in that paragraph. Body sentences support the topic sentence and relate clearly to the subject matter of the paragraph and overall document. They may use an organizing principle similar to that of the document itself (chronology, contrast, spatial) or introduce a related organizing principle (point by point, process or procedure). The conclusion sentence brings the paragraph to a close; it may do this in any of several ways. It may reinforce the paragraphs main point, summarize the relationships among the body sentences, and/or serve as a transition to the next paragraph.
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Effective
Sentences
We have talked about the organization of documents and paragraphs, but what about the organization of sentences? You have probably learned in English courses that each sentence needs to have a subject and a verb; most sentences also have an object. There are four basic types of sentences: declarative, imperative, interrogative, and exclamatory. Here are some examples:
Declarative You are invited to join us for lunch. Imperative Please join us for lunch. Interrogative Would you like to join us for lunch? Exclamatory Im so glad you can join us!
Declarative sentences make a statement, whereas interrogative sentences ask a question. Imperative sentences convey a command, and exclamatory sentences express a strong emotion. Interrogative and exclamatory sentences are easy to identify by their final punctuation, a question mark and an exclamation point, respectively. In business writing, declarative and imperative sentences are more frequently used. There are also compound and complex sentences, which may use two or more of the four basic types in combination:
1. 2. 3. 4. Simple
sentence.
Sales
have
increased.
Compound
sentence.
Sales
have
increased
and
profits
continue
to
grow.
Complex
sentence.
Sales
have
increased
and
we
have
the
sales
staff
to
thank
for
it.
Compound
complex
sentence.
Although
the
economy
has
been
in
recession,
sales
have
increased,
and
we
have
sales
staff
to
thank
for
it.
In our simple sentence, sales serves as the subject and have increased serves as the verb. The sentence can stand alone because it has the two basic parts that constitute a sentence. In our compound sentence we have two independent clauses that could stand alone; they are joined by the conjunction and. In our complex sentence, we have an independent clause, which can stand on its own, combined with a fragment (not a sentence) or dependent clause which, if it were not joined to the independent clause, would not make any sense. The fragment and we have the sales staff to thank on its own would have us asking for what? as the subject is absent. Complex compound sentences combine a mix of independent and dependent clauses, and at least one of the clauses must be dependent. The ability to write complete, correct sentences is like any other skillit comes with practice. The more writing you do, as you make an effort to use correct grammar, the easier it will become. Reading audiences, particularly in a business context, will not waste their time on poor writing and will move on. Your challenge as an effective business writer is to know what you are going to write and then to make it come across, via words, symbols, and images, in a clear and concise manner.
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Sentences should avoid being vague and focus on specific content. Each sentence should convey a complete thought; a vague sentence fails to meet this criteria. The reader is left wondering what the sentence was supposed to convey.
Vague We can facilitate solutions in pursuit of success by leveraging our core strengths. Specific By using our knowledge, experience, and capabilities, we can achieve the production targets for the coming quarter.
Effective sentences also limit the range and scope of each complete thought, avoiding needless complexity. Sometimes writers mistakenly equate long, complex sentences with excellence and skill. Clear, concise, and often brief sentences serve to communicate ideas and concepts in effective and efficient ways that complex, hard-to-follow sentences do not.
Complex. Air transportation features speed of delivery in ways few other forms of transportation can match, including tractor-trailer and rail, and is readily available to the individual consumer and the corporate client alike. Clear. Air transportation is accessible and faster than railroad or trucking.
Effective sentences are complete, containing a subject and a verb. Incomplete sentencesalso known as sentence fragmentsdemonstrate a failure to pay attention to detail. They often invite misunderstanding, which is the opposite of our goal in business communication.
Fragments Although air transportation is fast. Costs more than trucking. Complete Although air transportation is fast, it costs more than trucking.
Effective business writing avoids bureaucratic language and phrase that are the hallmark of decoration. Decoration is a reflection of ritual, and ritual has its role. If you are the governor of a state, and want to make a resolution declaring today as HIV/AIDS Awareness Day, you are allowed to start the document with Whereas because of its ritual importance. Similarly, if you are writing a legal document, tradition calls for certain standard phrases such as know all men by these presents. However, in standard business writing, it is best to refrain from using bureaucratic phrases and ritualistic words that decorate and distract the reader from your clear, essential meaning. If the customer, client, or supplier does not understand the message the first time, each follow-up attempt to clarify the meaning through interaction is a cost. Table 11.4 "Bureaucratic Phrases and Standard Alternatives" presents a few examples of common bureaucratic phrases and standard English alternatives. Table 11.4 Bureaucratic Phrases and Standard Alternatives
Bureaucratic
Phrase
At
the
present
time
Concerning
the
matter
of
Despite
the
fact
that
Due
to
the
fact
that
Implement
an
investigation
of
Inasmuch
as
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English
Alternatives
Now,
today
Regarding,
about
Although,
while,
even
though
Because,
since,
as
Find
out,
investigate
Because,
since,
as
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It has been suggested It is believed that It is the opinion of the author Until such time as With the exception of
[name of person or organization] has suggested, said, or stated [name of person or organization] believes, thinks, or says that I believe, I think, in my opinion Until, when Except, apart from
In oral communication, repetition can be an effective strategy to reinforce a message, but in written communication it adds needless length to a document and impairs clarity.
Redundant In this day and age air transportation by air carrier is the clear winner over alternative modes of conveyance for speed and meeting tight deadlines. Clear Today air transportation is faster than other methods.
When a writer states that something is a true fact, a group achieved a consensus of opinion, or that the final outcome was declared, the word choices reflect an unnecessary redundancy. A fact, consensus, or outcome need not be qualified with words that state similar concepts. If it is fact, it is true. A consensus, by definition, is formed in a group from diverse opinions. An outcome is the final result, so adding the word final repeats the fact unnecessarily. In business writing we seek clear and concise writing that speaks for itself with little or no misinterpretation. The more complex a sentence becomes, the easier it is to lose track of its meaning. When we consider that it may read by someone for whom English is a second language, the complex sentence becomes even more problematic. If we consider its translation, we add another layer of complexity that can lead to miscommunication. Finally, effective sentences follow the KISS formula for success: Keep It SimpleSimplify!
Transitions
If you were going to build a house, you would need a strong foundation. Could you put the beams to hold your roof in place without anything to keep them in place? Of course not; they would fall down right away. In the same way, the columns or beams are like the main ideas of your document. They need to have connections to each other so that they become interdependent and stay where you want them so that your house, or your writing, doesnt come crashing down. Transitions involve words or visual devices that help the audience follow the authors ideas, connect the main points to each other, and see the relationships youve created in the information you are presenting. They are often described as bridges between ideas, thought or concepts, providing some sense of where youve been and where you are going with your document. Transitions guide the audience in the progression from one significant idea, concept, or point to the next. They can also show the relationships between the main point and the support you are using to illustrate your point, provide examples for it, or refer to outside sources. Table 11.5
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"Types of Transitions in Writing" is a summary of fourteen different types of transitions. Consider them as you contemplate how to bring together your information and make notes on your outline. Table 11.5 Types of Transitions in Writing
Type
1.
Internal
Previews
Definition
An
internal
preview
is
a
brief
statement
referring
to
a
point
you
are
going
to
make.
It
can
forecast
or
foreshadow
a
main
point
in
your
document.
A
signpost
alerts
the
audience
you
are
moving
from
one
topic
to
the
next.
Sign
posts
or
signal
words
draw
attention
to
themselves
and
focus
the
audiences
attention.
An
internal
summary
briefly
covers
information
or
alludes
to
information
introduced
previously.
It
can
remind
an
audience
of
a
previous
point
and
reinforce
information
covered
in
your
document.
A
sequence
transition
outlines
a
hierarchical
order
or
series
of
steps
in
your
document.
It
can
illustrate
order
or
steps
in
a
logical
process.
A
time
transition
focuses
on
the
chronological
aspects
of
your
order.
Particularly
useful
in
an
article
utilizing
a
story,
this
transition
can
illustrate
for
the
audience
progression
of
time.
Examples
If
we
look
ahead
to,
next
well
examine,
now
we
can
focus
our
attention
on,
first
well
look
at,
then
well
examine
2. Signposts
Stop and consider, we can now address, turning from/to, another, this reminds me of, I would like to emphasize
3. Internal Summaries
As I have said, as we have seen, as mentioned earlier, in any event, in conclusion, in other words, in short, on the whole, therefore, to summarize, as a result, as has been noted previously, Firstsecondthird, furthermore, next, last, still, also, and then, besides, finally
4. Sequence
5. Time
6. Addition
7. Similarity
8. Comparison
9. Contrast
Before,
earlier,
immediately,
in
the
meantime,
in
the
past,
lately,
later,
meanwhile,
now,
presently,
shortly,
simultaneously,
since,
so
far,
soon
as
long
as,
as
soon
as,
at
last,
at
length,
at
that
time,
then,
until,
afterward
An
addition
or
additive
transition
Additionally,
not
to
mention,
in
addition
to,
contributes
to
a
previous
point.
This
furthermore,
either,
neither,
besides,
on,
in
transition
can
build
on
a
previous
fact,
as
a
matter
of
fact,
actually,
not
only,
point
and
extend
the
discussion.
but
also,
as
well
as
A
transition
by
similarity
draws
a
In
the
same
way,
by
the
same
token,
equally,
parallel
between
two
ideas,
concepts
similarly,
just
as
we
have
seen,
in
the
same
or
examples.
It
can
indicate
a
common
vein
area
between
points
for
the
audience.
A
transition
by
comparison
draws
a
Like,
in
relation
to,
bigger
than,
the
fastest,
distinction
between
two
ideas,
larger
than,
than
any
other,
is
bigger
than,
concepts
or
examples.
It
can
indicate
a
both,
eitheror,
likewise
common
or
divergent
area
between
points
for
the
audience.
A
transition
by
contrast
draws
a
But,
neithernor,
however
on
the
other
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distinction of difference, opposition, or irregularity between two ideas, concepts or examples. This transition can indicate a key distinction between points for the audience. Type Definition 10. Cause and A transition by cause and effect or Effect, Result result illustrates a relationship between two ideas, concepts or examples and may focus on the outcome or result. It can illustrate a relationship between points for the audience. 11. Examples A transition by example illustrates a connection between a point and an example or examples. You may find visual aids work well with this type of transition. 12. Place A place transition refers to a location, often in a spatially organized essay, of one point of emphasis to another. Again, visual aids work well when discussing physical location with the reading audience. 13. A clarification transition restates or Clarification further develops a main idea or point. It can also serve as a signal to a key point. 14. A concession transition indicates Concession knowledge of contrary information. It can address a perception the audience may hold and allow for clarification.
hand, although, despite, even though, in contrast, in spite of, on the contrary conversely, unlike, while instead, nevertheless, nonetheless, regardless, still, though, yet, although Examples As a result, because, consequently, for this purpose, accordingly, so, then, therefore, thereupon, thus, to this end, for this reason, as a result, because , therefore, consequently, as a consequence, and the outcome was In fact, as we can see, after all, even, for example, for instance, of course, specifically, such as, in the following example, to illustrate my point opposite to, there, to the left, to the right, above, adjacent to, elsewhere, far, farther on, below, beyond, closer to, here, near, nearby, next to
To clarify, that is, I mean, in other words, to put it another way that is to say, to rephrase it, in order to explain, this means We can see that while, although it is true that, granted that, while it may appear that, naturally, of course, I can see that, I admit that while
Key Takeaway
Organization is the key to clear writing. Organize your document using key elements, an organizing principle, and an outline. Organize your paragraphs and sentences so that your audience can understand them, and use transitions to move from one point to the next.
Exercises
1. What
functions
does
organization
serve
in
a
document?
Can
they
be
positive
or
negative?
Explain
and
discuss
with
a
classmate.
2. Create
an
outline
from
a
sample
article
or
document.
Do
you
notice
an
organizational
pattern?
Explain
and
discuss
with
a
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3. Which of the following sentences are good examples of correct and clear business English? For sentences needing improvement, describe what is wrong and write a sentence that corrects the problem. Discuss your answers with your classmates.
1. Marlys
has
been
chosen
to
receive
a
promotion
next
month.
2. Because
her
work
is
exemplary.
3. At
such
time
as
it
becomes
feasible,
it
is
the
intention
of
our
department
to
facilitate
a
lunch
meeting
to
congratulate
Marlys
4. As
a
result
of
budget
allocation
analysis
and
examination
of
our
financial
condition,
it
is
indicated
that
salary
compensation
for
Marlys
can
be
increased
to
a
limited
degree.
5. When
will
Marlyss
promotion
be
official?
6. I
am
so
envious!
7. Among
those
receiving
promotions,
Marlys,
Bob,
Germaine,
Terry,
and
Akiko.
8. The
president
asked
all
those
receiving
promotions
come
to
the
meeting.
9. Please
attend
a
meeting
for
all
employees
who
will
be
promoted
next
month.
10. Marlys
intends
to
use
her
new
position
to
mentor
employees
joining
the
firm,
which
will
encourage
commitment
and
good
work
habits.
4. Find
an
example
of
a
poor
sentence
or
a
spelling
or
grammar
error
that
was
published
online
or
in
print
and
share
your
finding
with
the
class.
[1] Beebe, S. [Steven], & Beebe, S. [Susan]. (1997). Public speaking: An audience-centered approach (3rd ed., pp. 121122). Boston, MA: Allyn & Bacon. [2] Ayres, J., & Miller, J. (1994). Effective public speaking (4th ed., p. 274). Madison, WI: Brown & Benchmark. [3] Maslow, A. (1970). Motivation and personality (2nd ed.). New York, NY: Harper & Row. [4] Schutz, W. (1966). The interpersonal underworld. Palo Alto, CA: Science and Behavior Books.
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Learning Objective
1. Demonstrate
your
ability
to
prepare
and
present
information
using
a
writing
style
that
will
increase
understanding,
retention,
and
motivation
to
act.
You are invited to a business dinner at an expensive restaurant that has been the top-rated dining establishment in your town for decades. You are aware of the restaurants dress code, which forbids casual attire such as jeans, T-shirts, and sneakers. What will you wear? If you want to fit in with the other guests and make a favorable impression on your hosts, you will choose a good quality suit or dress (and appropriately dressy shoes and accessories). You will avoid calling undue attention to yourself with clothing that is overly formalan evening gown or a tuxedo, for exampleor that would distract from the business purpose of the occasion by being overly revealing or provocative. You may feel that your freedom to express yourself by dressing as you please is being restricted, or you may appreciate the opportunity to look your best. Either way, adhering to these style conventions will serve you well in a business context. The same is true in business writing. Unlike some other kinds of writing such as poetry or fiction, business writing is not an opportunity for self-expression. Instead it calls for a fairly conservative and unadorned style. Writing style, also known as voice or tone, is the manner in which a writer addresses the reader. It involves qualities of writing such as vocabulary and figures of speech, phrasing, rhythm, sentence structure, and paragraph length. Developing an appropriate business writing style will reflect well on you and increase your success in any career.
Formal
Please
note
the
attached
delivery
data
for
July
2009.
Informal
Heres
the
delivery
data
for
last
month.
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While it is generally agreed that bureaucratic forms can obscure meaning, there is a debate on the use of formal versus informal styles in business communication. Formal styles often require more detail, adhere to rules of etiquette, and avoid shortcuts like contractions and folksy expressions. Informal styles reflect everyday speech patterns and may include contractions and colloquial expressions. Many managers prefer not to see contractions in a formal business context. Others will point out that a comma preceding the last item in a series (known as the serial comma) is the standard, not the exception. Some will make a general recommendation that you should always keep it professional. Here lies the heart of the debate: what is professional writing in a business context? If you answered it depends, you are correct. Keep in mind that audiences have expectations and your job is to meet them. Some business audiences prefer a fairly formal tone. If you include contractions or use a style that is too casual, you may lose their interest and attention; you may also give them a negative impression of your level of expertise. If, however, you are writing for an audience that expects informal language, you may lose their interest and attention by writing too formally; your writing may also come across as arrogant or pompous. It is not that one style is better than the other, but simply that styles of writing vary across a range of options. Business writing may need to meet legal standards and include references, as we see in the bureaucratic example above, but that is generally not the norm for communications within an organization. The skilled business writer will know his or her audience and will adapt the message to best facilitate communication. Choosing the right style can make a significant impact on how your writing is received. You may hear reference to a conversational tone in writing as one option in business communication. A conversational tone, as the name implies, resembles oral communication in style, tone, and word choice. It can be appropriate for some audiences, and may serve you well in specific contexts, but it can easily come across as less than professional. If you use expressions that imply a relationship or a special awareness of information such as you know, or as we discussed, without explaining the necessary background, your writing may be seen as overly familiar, intimate, or even secretive. Trust is the foundation for all communication interactions and a careless word or phrase can impair trust. If you want to use humor, think carefully about how your audience will interpret it. Humor is a fragile form of communication that requires an awareness of irony, of juxtaposition, or a shared sense of attitudes, beliefs, and values. Different people find humor in different situations, and what is funny to one person may be dull, or even hurtful, to someone else. Although there are business situations such as an interview or a performance self-evaluation where you need to state your accomplishments, in general business writing it is best to avoid self-referential comments that allude to your previous successes. These can come across as selfish or arrogant. Instead, be generous in giving credit where credit is due. Take every opportunity to thank your colleagues for their efforts and to acknowledge those who contributed good ideas. Jargon is a vocabulary that has been developed by people in a particular group, discipline, or industry, and it can be a useful shorthand as long as the audience knows its meaning. For
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example, when writing for bank customers, you could refer to ATM transactions and feel confident that your readers would know what you meant. It would be unnecessary and inappropriate to write Automated Teller Machine transactions. Similarly, if you were working in a hospital, you would probably use many medical terms in your interactions with other medical professionals. However, if you were a hospital employee writing to a patient, using medical jargon would be inappropriate, as it would not contribute to the patients understanding. Finally, in a business context, remember that conversational style is not an excuse to use poor grammar, disrespectful or offensive slang, or profanity. Communication serves as the bridge between minds and your written words will represent you in your absence. One strategy when trying to use a conversation tone is to ask yourself, Would I say it in this way to their face? A follow-up question to consider is, Would I say it in this way in front of everyone? Your professional use of language is one the hallmark skills in business, and the degree to which you master its use will reflect itself in your success. Take care, take time, and make sure what you write communicates a professional tone that positively represents you and your organization.
Adding
Emphasis
There are times when you will want to add emphasis to a word, phrase, or statistic so that it stands out from the surrounding text. The use of visual aids in your writing can be an excellent option, and can reinforce the written discussion. For example, if you write that sales are up 4 percent over this time last year, the number alone may not get the attention it deserves. If, however, near the text section you feature a bar graph demonstrating the sales growth figures, the representation of the information in textual and graphical way may reinforce its importance. As you look across the top of your word processing program you may notice bold, italics, underline, highlights, your choice of colors, and a host of interesting fonts. Although it can be entertaining to experiment with these visual effects, do not use them just for the sake of decoration. Consistency and branding are important features of your firms public image, so you will want the visual aspects of your writing to support that image. Still, when you need to highlight an important fact or emphasize a key question in a report, your readers will appreciate your use of visual effects to draw their attention. Consider the following examples:
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Emphasis can be influenced by your choice of font. Serif fonts, such as Times New Roman and Garamond, have decorative ends that make the font easy to read. Sans serif fonts, like Arial, lack these visual cues and often serve better as headers. You can also vary the emphasis according to where you place information within a sentence:
Maximum emphasis. Sales have increased across the United States because of our latest promotion efforts in our largest and most successful market. Medium emphasis. Because of our latest promotion efforts in our largest and most successful market, sales have increased across the United States. Minimum emphasis. The United States, which has experienced a sales increase, is our largest and most successful market.
The information at end of the sentence is what people often recall, and is therefore normally considered the location of maximum emphasis. The second best position for recall is the beginning of the sentence, while the middle of the sentence is the area with the least recall. If you want to highlight a point, place it at the beginning or end of the sentence, and if you want to deemphasize a point, the middle is your best option. [2]
A All sales orders are processed daily by Mackenzie. B Mackenzie processes all sales orders daily.
Most readers prefer sentence B, but why? Youll recall that all sentences have a subject and a verb, but you may not have paid much attention to their functions. Lets look at how the subject and verb function in these two sentences. In sentence A, the subject is Mackenzie, and the subject is the doer of the action expressed by the verb (processes). In sentence A, the subject is sales orders, and the subject is the receiver of the action expressed by the verb (are processed). Sentence A is written in active voicea sentence structure in which the subject carries out the action. Sentence B is written in passive voicea sentence structure in which the subject receives the action.
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Active sentences tend to be shorter, more precise, and easier to understand. This is especially true because passive sentences can be written in ways that do not tell the reader who the doer of the action is. For example, All sales orders are processed daily is a complete and correct sentence in passive voice. Active voice is the clear choice for a variety of contexts, but not all. When you want to deemphasize the doer of the action, you may write, Ten late arrivals were recorded this month and not even mention who was late. The passive form doesnt place blame or credit, so it can be more diplomatic in some contexts. Passive voice allows the writer to avoid personal references or personal pronouns (he, she, they) to create a more objective tone. There are also situations where the doer of the action is unknown, as in graffiti was painted on the side of our building last night. Overall, business communication resources tend to recommend active voice as the preferred style. Still, the styles themselves are not the problem or challenge, but it is how we use them that matters. A skilled business writer will see both styles as options within a range of choices and learn to distinguish when each style is most appropriate to facilitate communication.
except effect
e.g.
i.e.
4. its or its
its
Its
5. lay or lie
lay pressurize
lie
pressure
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6. pressure or
the liquid nitrogen tanks. Its the basic _________ of farming: no water, no food. _______ of what we do, gas prices are unlikely to go back down.
_______ him to resign. principle Regardless The _______ reason for the trip is to attend the sales meeting. _______ of your beliefs, please try to listen with an open mind. principal
9. than or then This years losses were than worse _______ last years. 10. that or _______ type of Which which marketing data did you need? There are several kinds that of data _______ could be useful. The report is there _________, in the top file drawer. __________ planning Theyre to attend the sales meeting in Pittsburgh. Customers need to _______ drive slower if they want to save gas. two
If we can cut our costs, _______ it might be possible to break even. Karen misplaced the which report, _______ caused a delay in making a decision.
__________
strategic
advantage
depends
on
a
wide
distribution
network.
Their
After
sales
meeting,
you
should
visit
customers
in
the
Pittsburgh
area
_______.
too
In fact, the _______ of you should make some customer visits together. He would be the best person to make a decision, since he isnt biased and is relatively _______ in the outcome. __________ truck is that? __________ will go to the interview?
disinterested
The
sales
manager
tried
to
speak
dynamically,
but
the
sales
reps
were
simply
_______
in
what
he
had
to
say.
Whose
__________
going
to
pay
for
the
repairs?
Who
To
__________
should
we
address
the
thank- you
note?
uninterested
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Everything you access via an employers system is subject to inspection. Everything you write or record reflects you and your business or organization, even if it is stored in a Google or Yahoo! account. Respect personal space by not forwarding every e-mail you think is funny. Use a concise but relevant and informative phrase for the subject line. E-mail the receiver before sending large attachments, as they may exceed the limit of the receivers in-box. Attach your intended attachments.
Key Takeaway
An appropriate business writing style can be formal or informal, depending on the context, but it should always reflect favorably on the writer and the organization.
Exercises
1. Select
at
least
three
examples
of
writing
from
different
kinds
of
sources,
such
as
a
government
Web
site,
a
textbook,
a
popular
magazine,
and
a
novel.
According
to
the
style
characteristics
discussed
in
this
section,
how
would
you
characterize
the
style
of
each?
Select
a
paragraph
to
rewrite
in
a
different
stylefor
example,
if
the
style
is
formal,
make
it
informal;
if
the
selection
is
written
in
active
voice,
make
it
passive.
Discuss
your
results
with
your
classmates.
2. What
are
some
qualities
of
a
good
business
writing
style?
What
makes
certain
styles
more
appropriate
for
business
than
others?
Discuss
your
thoughts
with
a
classmate.
3. Find
an
example
of
formal
writing
and
write
an
informal
version.
Please
share
with
your
classmates.
4. Find
an
example
of
informal
writing
and
write
a
formal
version.
Please
share
with
your
classmates
5. You
are
assigned
to
a
work
team
that
has
to
come
up
with
a
formal
declaration
and
an
informal
explanation
for
the
declaration.
The
declaration
could
be
a
memo
indicating
that
your
business
will
be
observing
a
holiday
(each
team
should
have
a
different
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6. How would you characterize your writing style? Do you need to make modifications to make your style suitable for business writing? Write a one- to two-page essay on this subject.
[1] Bailey, E. P. (2008). Plain English at work: A guide to business writing and speaking. New York, NY: McGraw-Hill. [2] McLean, S. (2003). The basics of speech communication. Boston, MA: Allyn & Bacon.
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Learning Objectives
1. Demonstrate
how
to
form
a
clear
argument
with
appropriate
support
to
persuade
your
audience.
2. Recognize
and
understand
inherent
weaknesses
in
fallacies.
According to the famous satirist Jonathan Swift, Argument is the worst sort of conversation. You may be inclined to agree. When people argue, they are engaged in conflict and its usually not pretty. It sometimes appears that way because people resort to fallacious arguments or false statements, or they simply do not treat each other with respect. They get defensive, try to prove their own points, and fail to listen to each other. But this should not be what happens in written argument. Instead, when you make an argument in your writing, you will want to present your position with logical points, supporting each point with appropriate sources. You will want to give your audience every reason to perceive you as ethical and trustworthy. Your audience will expect you to treat them with respect, and to present your argument in a way that does not make them defensive. Contribute to your credibility by building sound arguments and using strategic arguments with skill and planning. In this section we will briefly discuss the classic form of an argument, a more modern interpretation, and finally seven basic arguments you may choose to use. Imagine that these are tools in your toolbox and that you want to know how each is effectively used. Know that the people who try to persuade youfrom telemarketers to politiciansusually have these tools at hand. Lets start with a classical rhetorical strategy. It asks the rhetorician, speaker, or author to frame arguments in the following steps: Table 11.7
1.
Exordium
2.
Narration
3.
Proposition
4. Confirmation Offers the audience evidence to support your argument 5. Refutation 6. Peroration Introduces to the audience and then discounts or refutes the counterarguments or objections Your conclusion of your argument
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This is a standard pattern in rhetoric and you will probably see it in both speech and English courses. The pattern is useful to guide you in preparing your document and can serve as a valuable checklist to insure you are prepared. While this formal pattern has distinct advantages, you may not see it used exactly as indicated here on a daily basis. What may be more familiar to you is Stephen Toulmins rhetorical strategy, which focuses on three main elements (see Table 11.8 "Toulmins Three-Part Rhetorical Strategy"). [1] Table 11.8 Toulmins Three-Part Rhetorical Strategy
Element
1.
Claim
2.
Data
Description
Your
statement
of
belief
or
truth
Your
supporting
reasons
for
the
claim
Example
It
is
important
to
spay
or
neuter
your
pet.
Millions
of
unwanted
pets
are
euthanized
every
year.
Pets that are spayed or neutered do not You create the connection between the 3. Warrant reproduce, preventing the production of claim and the supporting reasons unwanted animals.
Toulmins rhetorical strategy is useful in that it makes the claim explicit, clearly illustrates the relationship between the claim and the data, and allows the reader to follow the writers reasoning. You may have a good idea or point, but your audience will want to know how you arrived at that claim or viewpoint. The warrant addresses the inherent and often unsaid question, Why is this data so important to your topic? In so doing, it helps you to illustrate relationships between information for your audience.
Richard Fulkerson notes that a single strategy is sufficient to make an argument some of the time, but it is often better to combine several strategies to make an effective argument. [2] He organized the argumentative strategies in this way to compare the differences, highlight the similarities, and allow for their discussion. This model, often called by its acronym GASCAP, is a useful strategy to summarize six key arguments and is easy to remember. Here we have adapted it, adding one argument that is often used in todays speeches and presentations, the
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argument by testimony. Table 11.9 "GASCAP/T Strategies" presents each argument, provides a definition of the strategy and an example, and examines ways to evaluate each approach. Table 11.9 GASCAP/T Strategies
Claim
Argument
by
G
Generalization
Whatever
is
true
of
a
good
example
or
sample
will
be
true
of
everything
like
it
or
the
population
it
came
from.
A
Analogy
Two
situations,
things
or
ideas
are
alike
in
observable
ways
and
will
tend
to
be
alike
in
many
other
ways
S
Sign
Statistics,
facts,
or
cases
indicate
meaning,
much
like
a
stop
sign
means
stop.
C
Cause
Example
If
you
can
vote,
drive,
and
die
for
your
country,
you
should
also
be
allowed
to
buy
alcohol.
Evaluation
STAR
System:
For
it
to
be
reliable,
we
need
a
(S)
sufficient
number
of
(T)
typical,
(A)
accurate,
and
(R)
reliable
examples.
Alcohol is a drug. So is tobacco. They alter perceptions, have an impact physiological and psychological systems, and are federally regulated substances. Motor vehicle accidents involving alcohol occur at significant rates among adults of all ages in the United States.
A Authority
P Principle
Watch
for
adverbs
that
end
in
ly,
as
they
qualify,
or
lessen
the
relationship
between
the
examples.
Words
like
probably,
maybe,
could,
may,
or
usually
all
weaken
the
relationship.
Evaluate
the
relationship
between
the
sign
and
look
for
correlation,
where
the
presenter
says
what
the
facts
mean.
Does
the
sign
say
that?
Does
it
say
more?
What
is
not
said?
Is
it
relevant?
The
U.S.
insurance
industry
Watch
out
for
after
the
fact,
has
been
significantly
therefore
because
of
the
fact
involved
in
state
and
(post
hoc,
ergo
propter
hoc)
national
legislation
requiring
thinking.
There
might
not
be
a
proof
of
insurance,
changes
clear
connection,
and
it
might
in
graduated
drivers
not
be
the
whole
picture.
licenses,
and
the
national
Mothers
Against
Drunk
Driving
change
in
the
drinking
age
might
have
also
been
involved
from
age
18
to
age
21.
with
each
example
of
legislation.
According
to
the
National
Is
the
source
legitimate
and
is
Transportation
Safety
their
information
trustworthy?
Board,
older
drivers
are
Institutes,
boards,
and
people
increasingly
involved
in
often
have
agendas
and
motor
vehicle
accidents.
distinct
points
of
view.
The
change
in
the
drinking
Is
the
principle
being
invoked
age
was
never
put
to
a
vote.
generally
accepted?
Is
the
Its
not
about
alcohol,
its
claim,
data
or
warrant
actually
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T Testimony
Personal experience
Ive lost friends from age 18 to 67 to alcohol. It impacts all ages, and its effects are cumulative. Let me tell you about two friends in particular.
related to the principle stated? Are there common exceptions to the principle? What are the practical consequences of following the principle in this case? Is the testimony authentic? Is it relevant? Is it representative of others experiences? Use the STAR system to help evaluate the use of testimony.
Evidence
Now that weve clearly outlined several argument strategies, how do you support your position with evidence or warrants? If your premise or the background from which you start is valid, and your claim is clear and clearly related, the audience will naturally turn their attention to prove it. This is where the relevance of evidence becomes particularly important. Here are three guidelines to consider in order to insure your evidence passes the so what? test of relevance in relation to your claim. Make sure your evidence has the following traits:
1. Supportive.
Examples
are
clearly
representative,
statistics
are
accurate,
testimony
is
authoritative,
and
information
is
reliable.
2. Relevant.
Examples
clearly
relate
to
the
claim
or
topic,
and
you
are
not
comparing
apples
to
oranges.
3. Effective.
Examples
are
clearly
the
best
available
to
support
the
claim,
quality
is
preferred
to
quantity,
there
are
only
a
few
well-chosen
statistics,
facts,
or
data.
Appealing
to
Emotions
While weve highlighted several points to consider when selecting information to support your claim, know that Aristotle strongly preferred an argument based in logic over emotion. Can the same be said for your audience, and to what degree is emotion and your appeal to it in your audience a part of modern life? Emotions are a psychological and physical reaction, such as fear or anger, to stimuli that we experience as a feeling. Our feelings or emotions directly impact our own point of view and readiness to communicate, but also influence how, why, and when we say things. Emotions influence not only how you say or what you say, but also how you hear or what you hear. At times, emotions can be challenging to control. Emotions will move your audience, and possibly even move you, to change or act in certain ways.
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Aristotle thought the best and most preferable way to persuade an audience was through the use of logic, free of emotion. He also recognized that people are often motivated, even manipulated, by the exploitation of their emotions. In a business context, we still engage in this debate, demanding to know the facts separate from personal opinion or agenda, but see the use of emotional appeal to sell products. Marketing experts are famous for creating a need or associating an emotion with a brand or label in order to sell it. You will speak the language of your audience in your document, and may choose to appeal to emotion, but you need to consider how the strategy works, as it may be considered a tool that has two edges. If we think of the appeal to emotion as a knife, we can see it has two edges. One edge can cut your audience, and the other can cut you. If you advance an appeal to emotion in your document on spaying and neutering pets, and discuss the millions of unwanted pets that are killed each year, you may elicit an emotional response. If you use this approach repeatedly, your audience may grow weary of this approach, and it will lose its effectiveness. If you change your topic to the use of animals in research, the same strategy may apply, but repeated attempts to elicit an emotional response may backfire (i.e., in essence cutting you) and produce a negative response called emotional resistance. Emotional resistance involves getting tired, often to the point of rejection, of hearing messages that attempt to elicit an emotional response. Emotional appeals can wear out the audiences capacity to receive the message. As Aristotle outlined, ethos (credibility), logos (logic), and pathos (passion, enthusiasm, and emotional response) constitute the building blocks of any document. Its up to you to create a balanced document, where you may appeal to emotion, but choose to use it judiciously. On a related point, the use of an emotional appeal may also impair your ability to write persuasively or effectively. For example, if you choose to present an article about suicide to persuade people against committing it and you start showing a photo of your brother or sister that you lost to suicide, your emotional response may cloud your judgment and get in the way of your thinking. Never use a personal story, or even a story of someone you do not know, if the inclusion of that story causes you to lose control. While its important to discuss relevant topics, you need to assess your relationship to the message. Your documents should not be an exercise in therapy. Otherwise, you will sacrifice ethos and credibility, even your effectiveness, if you lose it because you are really not ready to discuss the issue.
Recognizing
Fallacies
Fallacy is another way of saying false logic. Fallacies or rhetorical tricks deceive your audience with their style, drama, or pattern, but add little to your document in terms of substance. They are best avoided because they can actually detract from your effectiveness. There are several techniques or tricks that allow the writer to rely on style without offering substantive argument, to obscure the central message, or twist the facts to their own gain. Table 11.10 "Fallacies" examines the eight classical fallacies. Learn to recognize them so they cant be used against you, and learn to avoid using them with your audience.
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2. Straw Man
7. Non Sequitur or It Does Not Follow 8. Post Hoc Ergo Propter Hoc or After This, Therefore because of This
Claiming the truth of the very matter in question, as if it were already an obvious conclusion. The proposition is used to prove itself. Assumes the very thing it aims to prove. Related to begging the question. Appeals to a common belief of some people, often prejudicial, and states everyone holds this belief. Also called the bandwagon fallacy, as people jump on the bandwagon of a perceived popular view. Argument against the man instead of his message. Stating that someones argument is wrong solely because of something about the person rather than about the argument itself. The conclusion does not follow from the premises. They are not related. It is also called a coincidental correlation.
Most people would prefer to get rid of a few bad apples and keep our streets safe.
Our representative is a drunk and philanderer. How can we trust him on the issues of safety and family?
Since the liberal 1960s, weve seen an increase in convicts who got let off death row. Violent death rates went down once they started publicizing executions.
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weve discussed. His main points reiterate many of the points across this chapter and should be kept in mind as you prepare, and present, your persuasive message. [3] Do not
use false, fabricated, misrepresented, distorted, or irrelevant evidence to support arguments or claims; intentionally use unsupported, misleading, or illogical reasoning; represent yourself as informed or an expert on a subject when you are not; use irrelevant appeals to divert attention from the issue at hand; ask your audience to link your idea or proposal to emotion-laden values, motives, or goals to which it is actually not related; deceive your audience by concealing your real purpose, your self-interest, the group you represent, or your position as an advocate of a viewpoint; distort, hide, or misrepresent the number, scope, intensity, or undesirable features of consequences or effects; use emotional appeals that lack a supporting basis of evidence or reasoning; oversimplify complex, gradation-laden situations into simplistic, two-valued, either-or, polar views or choices; pretend certainty where tentativeness and degrees of probability would be more accurate; advocate something that you yourself do not believe in.
Aristotle said the mark of a good person, well spoken, was a clear command of the faculty of observing in any given case the available means of persuasion. He discussed the idea of perceiving the various points of view related to a topic and their thoughtful consideration. While its important to be able to perceive the complexity of a case, you are not asked to be a lawyer and defend a client. In your message to persuade, consider honesty and integrity as you assemble your arguments. Your audience will appreciate your thoughtful consideration of more than one view and your understanding of the complexity of the issue, thus building your ethos, or credibility, as you present your document. Be careful not to stretch the facts, or assemble them only to prove your point; instead, prove the argument on its own merits. Deception, coercion, intentional bias, manipulation and bribery should have no place in your message to persuade.
Key Takeaway
The art of argument in writing involves presenting supportive, relevant, effective evidence for each point and doing it in a respectful and ethical manner.
Exercises
1. Select
a
piece
of
persuasive
writing
such
as
a
newspaper
op-ed
essay,
a
magazine
article,
or
a
blog
post.
Examine
the
argument,
the
main
points,
and
how
the
writer
supports
them.
Which
strategies
from
the
foregoing
section
does
the
writer
use?
Does
the
writer
use
any
fallacies
or
violate
any
ethical
principles?
Discuss
your
results
with
your
classmates.
2. Find
one
slogan
or
logo
that
you
perceive
as
persuasive
and
share
it
with
your
classmates.
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3. Find an example of a piece of writing that appears to want to be persuasive, but doesnt get the job done. Write a brief review and share it with classmates. 4. In what ways might the choice of how to organize a document involve ethics? Explain your response and discuss it with your class.
[1] Toulmin, S. (1958). The uses of argument. New York, NY: Cambridge University Press. [2] Fulkerson, R. (1996). The Toulmin model of argument and the teaching of composition. In E. Barbara, P. Resch, & D. Tenney (Eds.), Argument revisited: argument redefined: negotiating meaning the composition classroom (pp. 4572). Thousand Oaks, CA: Sage. [3] Johannesen, R. (1996). Ethics in human communication (4th ed.). Prospect Heights, IL: Waveland Press.
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Learning Objectives
1. Understand
the
difference
between
paraphrasing
or
summarizing
and
plagiarism.
2. Demonstrate
how
to
give
proper
credit
to
sources
that
are
quoted
verbatim,
and
sources
whose
ideas
are
paraphrased
or
summarized.
3. Demonstrate
your
ability
to
paraphrase
in
one
or
more
written
assignments.
Even if you are writing on a subject you know well, you will usually get additional information from other sources. How you represent others ideas, concepts, and words is critical to your credibility and the effectiveness of your document. Lets say you are reading a section of a document and find a point that relates well to your current writing assignment. How do you represent what you have read in your work? You have several choices. One choice is simply to reproduce the quote verbatim, or word for word, making sure that you have copied all words and punctuation accurately. In this case, you will put quotation marks around the quoted passage (or, if it is more than about fifty words long, inset it with wider margins than the body of your document) and give credit to the source. The format you use for your source citation will vary according to the discipline or industry of your audience; common formats include APA (American Psychological Association), MLA (Modern Language Association), and CMS (Chicago Manual of Style). Another common strategy in business writing is to paraphrase, or rewrite the information in your own words. You will relate the main point, but need to take care not to copy the original. You will give credit where credit is due, but your citation will be more informal, such as A Wall Street Journal article dated July 8, 2009, described some of the disagreements among G-8 nations about climate change. Here are several steps that can help you paraphrase a passage while respecting its original author:
1. Read
the
passage
out
loud,
paying
attention
to
the
complete
thought
rather
than
the
individual
words.
2. Explain
the
concept
in
your
own
words
to
a
friend
or
colleague,
out
loud,
face-to-face.
3. Write
the
concept
in
your
own
words,
and
add
one
or
more
illustrative
examples
of
the
concept
that
are
meaningful
to
you.
4. Reread
the
original
passage
and
see
how
your
version
compares
with
it
in
terms
of
grammar,
word
choice,
example,
and
conveyance
of
meaning.
5. If
your
writing
parrots
the
original
passage
or
merely
substitutes
synonyms
for
words
in
the
original,
return
to
step
one
and
start
over,
remembering
that
your
goal
is
to
express
the
central
concepts,
not
to
translate
one
word
into
another.
6. When
you
are
satisfied
that
your
expression
of
the
concept
can
stand
on
its
own
merit,
include
it
in
your
document
and
cite
the
original
author
as
the
source
of
the
idea.
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information in the field under consideration, or a section on background to serve a similar purpose. Suppose you are reporting on a business situation and it occurs to you that one of Shakespeares plays has a plot that resembles your situation. You may wish to summarize the Shakespeare play in a few sentences before drawing parallels between it and your current situation. This may help readers to remember and understand your report. Regardless of how or where you incorporate a summary within your document, give attention to its original context and retain its essential meaning free of distortion in the new context of your writing. Because summarizing is an act of reductionism, some of the original richness in detail that surrounds the original will be necessarily lost. Think of a photograph you have taken in the past that featured several people you know. Using a software program that allows you to modify and manipulate the image, draw a box around only one face. Delete the rest of the contents of the photo so only the information in the box remains. Part of the photo is intact, and one person has become the focal point for the image, but the context has been lost. In the same way, if you focus on one statistic, one quote, or one idea and fail to capture its background you will take the information out of context. Context is one of the eight components of communication, and without it, the process breaks down. While you cannot retain all the definition and detail of the original context in a brief summary, effort to represent the essential point within its context is essential or you risk distortion of the original meaning. Unlike quoting or paraphrasing, summarizing is something you canand willalso do to the material you have written. You may start your document with a summary of the background that gives the document purpose. Formal business reports often begin with an executive summary, and scientific articles usually begin with an abstract; both of these serve as a brief preview of the information in the full document. You may write a brief internal summary after each main discussion point in a lengthy document; this will serve to remind your reader of the discussion to date and to establish the context for the upcoming point. Finally, a summary is a very common, and often effective, way to conclude a document. Ending your writing with a summary helps your reader to remember your main points. Plagiarism is neither paraphrasing nor summarizing information from other works. Plagiarism is representing anothers work as your own. Professional standards, which are upheld in all fields from architecture to banking to zoology, all involve the elements of authenticity and credibility. Credit is given where credit is due, authorities in the field are appropriately cited or referenced, and original writing is expected to be exactly that. Patch writing, or the verbatim cut-and-paste insertion of fragments, snippets, or small sections of other publications into your own writing without crediting the sources, is plagiarism. Wholesale copying of other works is also plagiarism. Both destroy your professional credibility, and fail to uphold common professional standards. Colleges and universities have policies against plagiarism, and within business and industry, the negative impact on credibility and careers often exceeds any academic punishment. There is no shame in quoting someone elses work while giving credit, nor in paraphrasing a point correctly or summarizing the research results of a study you did not perform; but there are significant consequences to representing others ideas as your own.
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Aside from the fear of punishment, a skilled business writer should recognize that intellectual theft is wrong. You may be tempted to borrow a sentence; however, know your document will be represented in many ways across time, and more than one career has been destroyed by plagiarism discovered years after the fact. The accomplished business writer should take as a compliment the correct citation and reference of their work. The novice business writer should learn by example but refrain from cut and paste strategies to complete a document. In a world where most modern documents are accessible in some form online, the ability to cross-reference information with a couple of key strokes makes plagiarism a self-defeating solution when better alternatives exist. Quote and give credit, link to related documents with permission, paraphrase and summarize with citation, but do not plagiarize.
Key Takeaway
There is nothing wrong with quoting, paraphrasing, and summarizing with credit to your original source, but presenting someone elses work as if it were your own is plagiarism.
Exercises
1. Select
a
piece
of
writing
such
as
an
essay
from
a
Web
site,
a
book
chapter,
or
a
newspaper
or
magazine
article.
Write
a
paraphrase
of
a
portion
of
it.
Write
a
brief
summary
of
the
entire
piece.
Note
the
difference
between
the
two
techniques.
Giving
credit
to
the
original
piece,
discuss
your
paraphrase
and
summary
with
your
classmates.
2. Find
an
example
of
an
advertisement
you
perceive
as
particularly
effective
and
write
a
one- sentence
summary.
Share
the
advertisement
and
your
one-sentence
summary
with
the
class.
3. Find
an
example
of
an
advertisement
you
perceive
as
particularly
ineffective
and
write
a
one- sentence
summary.
Share
the
advertisement
and
your
one
sentence
review
with
the
class.
4. Find
a
case
where
plagiarism
or
misrepresentation
had
consequences
in
the
business
world.
Share
your
findings
and
discuss
with
classmates.
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Getting Started
Introductory Exercises
1. Find
an
article
you
read
online
and
review
it,
noting
at
least
one
area
that
would
benefit
from
revision.
Please
share
your
results
with
classmates.
2. Exchange
draft
revisions
of
a
document
prepared
for
a
class
or
work
assignment
with
a
classmate
or
colleague.
Note
at
least
one
strength
and
one
area
for
improvement,
Provide
feedback
to
the
writer.
One of the hardest tests to pass is the one of peer review. In the academic environment, professors conduct research, learn lessons, and share their findings by contributing articles for professional journals. Each academic journal article undergoes peer review, or evaluation by colleagues in the same field as the professor who wrote the article. These evaluations, often conducted by leaders in each field, do not only consider the value of the writers findings. They also evaluate the mechanics of the document (spelling and grammar) and its presentation, organization, and design. The first time a scholar submits an article for peer review, he or she can expect rejections and liberal use of the red pen. You may not experience such a rigorous and vigorous review of your writing, but in many ways the world of business is equally challenging. Academic publications ultimately value solid findings that contribute to the field or discipline. Business writing ultimately values writing that produces results or outcomes in environments where you do not have the luxury of controlling the variables, designing the context, or limiting the scope of your inquiry. Your business document will be evaluated by people you never met or even anticipated would read it, and errors will have a negative impact on its performance. In every career, industry, and profession, todays business climate is a results-oriented environment. Regardless of what you write, there exists the possibility, even probability, that misunderstandings and miscommunications can and will occur. Although you will not always have control over the importance of the ideas you are assigned to communicate in your writing, there is one thing you can control: errors. If you avoid mistakes, both in the document itself and
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in the way your audience interprets your message, your document will have its best chance of success. To this end a thorough revision is an important part of your writing process. As you review and evaluate documents, those written by you and others, you will need to keep in mind the three goals of being correct, clear, and concise. Next you will have to focus on effectiveness and efficiency, recognizing that in a climate of increasing demands and limited resources like time, you need to get it right the first time. The environment of a business writer can be stressful, but it can also be rewarding. Recognition from your peerssuppliers, internal department colleagues, or customerscan make it all worthwhile. Still, the reward in terms of acknowledgement may come in the form of silence. When your document clearly meets expectations and accomplishes its goal, the outcome may be the absence of error or misinterpretation, a rare occasion that often goes unheralded. As a business writer you need to value your work and note what works. When it does, take pride in your hard work in effort. You may not always be celebrated for your error-free documents that communicate concepts and ideas clearly, but know that they are successful, and their success is your success.
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Learning Objectives
1. Discuss
the
process
of
revision
2. List
three
general
elements
of
every
document
that
require
revision
Just when you think the production of your document is done, the revision process begins. Runners often refer to the wall, where the limits of physical exertion are met and exhaustion is imminent. The writing process requires effort, from overcoming writers block to the intense concentration composing a document often involves. It is only natural to have a sense of relief when your document is drafted from beginning to end. This relief is false confidence, though. Your document is not complete, and in its current state it could, in fact, do more harm than good. Errors, omissions, and unclear phrases may lurk within your document, waiting to reflect poorly on you when it reaches your audience. Now is not time to let your guard down, prematurely celebrate, or to mentally move on to the next assignment. Think of the revision process as one that hardens and strengthens your document, even though it may require the sacrifice of some hard-earned writing. General revision requires attention to content, organization, style, and readability. These four main categories should give you a template from which to begin to explore details in depth. A cursory review of these elements in and of itself is insufficient for even the briefest review. Across this chapter we will explore ways to expand your revision efforts to cover the common areas of weakness and error. You may need to take some time away from your document to approach it again with a fresh perspective. Writers often juggle multiple projects that are at different stages of development. This allows the writer to leave one document and return to another without losing valuable production time. Overall, your goal is similar to what it was during your writing preparation and production: a clear mind.
Evaluate
Content
Content is only one aspect of your document. Lets say you were assigned a report on the sales trends for a specific product in a relatively new market. You could produce a one-page chart comparing last years results to current figures and call it a day, but would it clearly and concisely deliver content that is useful and correct? Are you supposed to highlight trends? Are you supposed to spotlight factors that contributed to the increase or decrease? Are you supposed to include projections for next year? Our list of questions could continue, but for now lets focus on content and its relationship to the directions. Have you included the content that corresponds to the given assignment, left any information out that may be necessary to fulfill the expectations, or have you gone beyond the assignment directions? Content will address the central questions of who, what, where, when, why and how within the range and parameters of the assignment.
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Evaluate
Organization
Organization is another key aspect of any document. Standard formats that include an introduction, body, and conclusion may be part of your document, but did you decide on a direct or indirect approach? Can you tell? A direct approach will announce the main point or purpose at the beginning, while an indirect approach will present an introduction before the main point. Your document may use any of a wide variety of organizing principles, such as chronological, spatial, compare/contrast. Is your organizing principle clear to the reader? Beyond the overall organization, pay special attention to transitions. Readers often have difficulty following a document if the writer makes the common error of failing to make one point relevant to the next, or to illustrate the relationships between the points. Finally, your conclusion should mirror your introduction and not introduce new material.
Evaluate
Style
Style is created through content and organization, but also involves word choice and grammatical structures. Is your document written in an informal or formal tone, or does it present a blend, a mix, or an awkward mismatch? Does it provide a coherent and unifying voice with a professional tone? If you are collaborating on the project with other writers or contributors, pay special attention to unifying the document across the different authors styles of writing. Even if they were all to write in a professional, formal style, the document may lack a consistent voice. Read it out loudcan you tell who is writing what? If so, that is a clear clue that you need to do more revising in terms of style.
Evaluate
Readability
Readability refers to the readers ability to read and comprehend the document. A variety of tools are available to make an estimate of a documents reading level, often correlated to a school grade level. If this chapter has a reading level of 11.8, it would be appropriate for most readers in the eleventh grade. But just because you are in grade thirteen, eighteen, or twenty-one doesnt mean that your audience, in their everyday use of language, reads at a postsecondary level. As a business writer, your goal is to make your writing clear and concise, not complex and challenging. You can often use the Tools menu of your word processing program to determine the approximate reading level of your document. The program will evaluate the number of characters per word, add in the number of words per sentence, and come up with a rating. It may also note the percentage of passive sentences, and other information that will allow you to evaluate readability. Like any computer-generated rating, it should serve you as one point of evaluation, but not the only point. Your concerted effort to choose words you perceive as appropriate for the audience will serve you better than any computer evaluation of your writing.
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Key Takeaway
The four main categoriescontent, organization, style, and readabilityprovide a template for general revision.
Exercises
1. Select
a
document,
such
as
an
article
from
a
Web
site,
newspaper,
magazine,
or
a
piece
of
writing
you
have
completed
for
a
course.
Evaluate
the
document
according
to
the
four
main
categories
described
in
this
section.
Could
the
document
benefit
from
revision
in
any
of
these
areas?
Discuss
your
findings
with
your
classmates.
2. Interview
a
coworker
or
colleague
and
specifically
ask
how
much
time
and
attention
they
dedicate
to
the
revision
process
of
their
written
work.
Compare
your
results
with
classmates.
3. Find
a
particularly
good
example
of
writing
according
to
the
above
criteria.
Review
it
and
share
it
with
your
classmates.
4. Find
a
particularly
bad
example
of
writing
according
to
the
above
criteria.
Review
it
and
share
it
with
your
classmates.
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Learning Objective
1. List
six
specific
elements
of
every
document
to
check
for
revision
When revising your document, it can be helpful to focus on specific points. When you consider each point in turn, you will be able to break down the revision process into manageable steps. When you have examined each point, you can be confident that you have avoided many possible areas for errors. Specific revision requires attention to the following:
Format
Format is an important part of the revision process. Format involves the design expectations of author and audience. If a letter format normally designates a date at the top, or the senders address on the left side of the page before the salutation, the information should be in the correct location. Formatting that is messy or fails to conform to the company style will reflect poorly on you before the reader even starts to read it. By presenting a document that is properly formatted according to the expectations of your organization and your readers, you will start off making a good impression.
Facts
Another key part of the revision process is checking your facts. Did you know that news organizations and magazines employ professional fact-checkers? These workers are responsible for examining every article before it gets published and consulting original sources to make sure the information in the article is accurate. This can involve making phone calls to the people who were interviewed for the articlefor example, Mr. Diaz, our report states that you are thirtynine years old. Our article will be published on the fifteenth. Will that be your correct age on that date? Fact checking also involves looking facts up in encyclopedias, directories, atlases, and other standard reference works; and, increasingly, in online sources.
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While you cant be expected to have the skills of a professional fact-checker, you do need to reread your writing with a critical eye to the information in it. Inaccurate content can expose you and your organization to liability, and will create far more work than a simple revision of a document. So, when you revise a document, ask yourself the following:
Does my writing contain any statistics or references that need to be verified? Where can I get reliable information to verify it?
It is often useful to do independent verificationthat is, look up the fact in a different source from the one where you first got it. For example, perhaps a colleague gave you a list of closing averages for the Dow Jones Industrial on certain dates. You still have the list, so you can make sure your document agrees with the numbers your colleague provided. But what if your colleague made a mistake? The Web sites of the Wall Street Journal and other major newspapers list closings for the Dow, so it is reasonably easy for you to look up the numbers and verify them independently.
Names
There is no more embarrassing error in business writing than to misspell someones name. To the writer, and to some readers, spelling a name Michelle instead of Michele may seem like a minor matter, but to Michele herself it will make a big difference. Attribution is one way we often involve a persons name, and giving credit where credit is due is essential. There are many other reasons for including someones name, but regardless of your reasons for choosing to focus on them, you need to make sure the spelling is correct. Incorrect spelling of names is a quick way to undermine your credibility; it can also have a negative impact on your organizations reputation, and in some cases it may even have legal ramifications.
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Spelling
Correct spelling is another element essential for your credibility, and errors will be glaringly obvious to many readers. The negative impact on your reputation as a writer, and its perception that you lack attention to detail or do not value your work, will be hard to overcome. In addition to the negative personal consequences, spelling errors can become factual errors and destroy the value of content. This may lead you to click the spell check button in your word processing program, but computer spell-checking is not enough. Spell checkers have improved in the years since they were first invented, but they are not infallible. They can and do make mistakes. Typically, your incorrect word may in fact be a word, and therefore, according to the program, correct. For example, suppose you wrote, The major will attend the meeting when you meant to write The mayor will attend the meeting. The program would miss this error because major is a word, but your meaning would be twisted beyond recognition.
Punctuation
Punctuation marks are the traffic signals, signs, and indications that allow us to navigate the written word. They serve to warn us in advance when a transition is coming or the complete thought has come to an end. A period indicates the thought is complete, while a comma signals that additional elements or modifiers are coming. Correct signals will help your reader follow the thoughts through sentences and paragraphs, and enable you to communicate with maximum efficiency while reducing the probability of error. [1] Table 12.1 "Punctuation Marks" lists twelve punctuation marks that are commonly used in English in alphabetical order along with an example of each.
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- The question is a many-faceted one. ( ) To answer it (or at least to begin addressing it) we will need more information. Period . The answer is no. Period. Full stop. Question Mark ? Can I talk you into changing your mind? Quotation The manager told him, I will make sure Rene is available to Marks help you. Semicolon ; Theresa was late to the meeting; her computer had frozen and she was stuck at her desk until a tech rep came to fix it.
It may be daunting to realize that the number of possible punctuation errors is as extensive as the number of symbols and constructions available to the author. Software program may catch many punctuation errors, but again it is the committed writer that makes the difference. Here we will provide details on how to avoid mistakes with three of the most commonly used punctuation marks: the comma, the semicolon, and the apostrophe.
Commas
The comma is probably the most versatile of all punctuation marks. This means you as a writer can use your judgment in many cases as to whether you need a comma or not. It also means that the possible errors involving commas are many. Commas are necessary some of the time, but careless writers often place a comma in a sentence where it is simply not needed. Commas are used to separate two independent clauses joined by a conjunction like but, and, and or.
Example
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Example The advertising department is effective, but dont expect miracles in this business climate.
Commas are not used simply to join two independent clauses. This is known as the comma splice error, and the way to correct it is to insert a conjunction after the comma.
Examples
The
advertising
department
is
effective,
the
sales
department
needs
to
produce
more
results.
The
advertising
department
is
effective,
but
the
sales
department
needs
to
produce
more
results.
Commas are used for introductory phrases and to offset clauses that are not essential to the sentence. If the meaning would remain intact without the phrase, it is considered nonessential.
Examples
After
the
summary
of
this
years
sales,
the
sales
department
had
good
reason
to
celebrate.
The
sales
department,
last
years
winner
of
the
most
productive
award,
celebrated
their
stellar
sales
success
this
year.
The
sales
department
celebrated
their
stellar
sales
success
this
year.
Commas are used to offset words that help create unity across a sentence like however and therefore.
Examples
The
sales
department
discovered,
however,
that
the
forecast
for
next
year
is
challenging.
However,
the
sales
department
discovered
that
the
forecast
for
next
year
is
challenging.
Commas are often used to separate more than one adjective modifying a noun.
Example
The
sales
department
discovered
the
troublesome,
challenging
forecast
for
next
year.
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Examples John is from Ancud, Chile. Katy was born on August 2, 2002. Mackenzie McLean, D. V., is an excellent veterinarian. Lisa said, When writing, omit needless words.
Semicolons
Semicolons have two uses. First, they indicate relationships among groups of items in a series when the individual items are separated by commas. Second, a semicolon can be used to join two independent clauses; this is another way of avoiding the comma splice error mentioned above. Using a semicolon this way is often effective if the meaning of the two independent clauses is linked in some way, such as a cause-effect relationship.
Examples
Merchandise
on
order
includes
womens
wear
such
as
sweaters,
skirts,
and
blouses;
mens
wear
such
as
shirts,
jackets,
and
slacks;
and
outwear
such
as
coats,
parkas,
and
hats.
The
sales
campaign
was
successful;
without
its
contributions
our
bottom
line
would
have
been
dismal
indeed.
Apostrophes
The apostrophe, like the semicolon, has two uses: it replaces letters omitted in a contraction, and it often indicates the possessive. Because contractions are associated with an informal style, they may not be appropriate for some professional writing. The business writer willas alwaysevaluate the expectations and audience of the given assignment.
Examples
Its
great
news
that
sales
were
up.
It
is
also
good
news
that
weve
managed
to
reduce
our
advertising
costs.
When you indicate possession, pay attention to the placement of the apostrophe. Nouns commonly receive s when they are made possessive. But plurals that end in s receive a hanging apostrophe when they are made possessive, and the word it forms the possessive (its) with no apostrophe at all.
Attributed
to
Scott
McLean
Saylor
URL:
http://www.saylor.org/books/
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Examples Mackenzies sheep are ready to be sheared. The parents meeting is scheduled for Thursday. We are willing to adopt a dog that has already had its shots.
Grammar
Learning to use good, correct standard English grammar is more of a practice than an event, or even a process. Grammar involves the written construction of meaning from words and involves customs that evolve and adapt to usage over time. Because grammar is always evolving, none of us can sit back and rest assured that we know how to write with proper grammar. Instead, it is important to write and revise with close attention to grammar, keeping in mind that grammatical errors can undermine your credibility, reflect poorly on your employer, and cause misunderstandings. Jean Wyrick has provided a list of common errors in grammar to watch out for, which we have adapted here for easy reference. [2] In each case, the error is in italics and the [correct form] is italicized within square bracket.
Subject-Verb
Agreement
The subject and verb should agree on the number under consideration. In faulty writing, a singular subject is sometimes mismatched with a plural verb form, or vice versa.
Examples
Sales
have
not
been
consistent
and
they
doesnt
[do
not]
reflect
your
hard
work
and
effort.
The
president
appreciates
your
hard
work
and
wish
[wishes]
to
thank
you.
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Verb
Tense
Verb tense refers to the point in time where action occurs. The most common tenses are past, present, and future. There is nothing wrong with mixing tenses in a sentence if the action is intended to take place at different times. In faulty or careless writing, however, they are often mismatched illogically.
Examples
Sharon
was
under
pressure
to
finish
the
report,
so
she
uses
[used]
a
shortcut
to
paste
in
the
sales
figures.
The
sales
department
holds
a
status
meeting
every
week,
and
last
weeks
meeting
will
be
[was]
at
the
Garden
Inn.
Split
Infinitive
The infinitive form of verb is one without a reference to time, and in its standard form it includes the auxiliary word to, as in to write is to revise. It has been customary to keep the to next to the verb; to place an adverb between them is known as splitting the infinitive. Some modern writers do this all the time (for example, to boldly go), and since all grammar is essentially a set of customs that govern the written word, you will need to understand what the custom is where you work. If you are working with colleagues trained across the last fifty years, they may find split infinitives annoying. For this reason, its often best to avoid splitting an infinitive wherever you can do so without distorting the meaning of the sentence.
Examples
The
Marketing
Department
needs
assistance
to
accurately
understand
our
readers
[to
understand
our
readers
accurately].
David
pondered
how
to
best
revise
[how
best
to
revise]
the
sentence.
Double
Negative
A double negative uses two negatives to communicate a single idea, duplicating the negation. In some languages, such as Spanish, when the main action in the sentence is negative, it is correct to express the other elements in the sentence negatively as well. However, in English, this is incorrect. In addition to sounding wrong (you can often hear the error if you read the sentence out loud), a double negative in English causes an error in logic, because two negatives cancel each other out and yield a positive. In fact, the wording of ballot measures is often criticized for confusing voters with double negatives.
Attributed
to
Scott
McLean
Saylor
URL:
http://www.saylor.org/books/
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Examples John doesnt need no [any] assistance with his sales presentation. [Or John needs no assistance with his sales presentation.] Jeri could not find no [any] reason to approve the request. [Or Jeri could find no reason to approve the request.]
Irregular
Verbs
Most verbs represent the past with the addition of the suffix ed, as in ask becomes asked. Irregular verbs change a vowel or convert to another word when representing the past tense. Consider the irregular verb to go; the past tense is went, not goed.
Examples
The
need
arised
[arose]
to
seek
additional
funding.
Katy
leaped
[leapt]
onto
the
stage
to
introduce
the
presentation.
Commas
in
a
Series
A comma is used to separate the items in a series, but in some writing styles the comma is omitted between the final two items of the series, where the conjunction joins the last and nextto-last items. The comma in this position is known as the serial comma. The serial comma is typically required in academic writing and typically omitted in journalism. Other writers omit the serial comma if the final two items in the series have a closer logical connection than the other items. In business writing, you may use it or omit it according to the prevailing style in your organization or industry. Know your audience and be aware of the rule.
Examples
Lisa
is
an
amazing
wife,
mother,
teacher,
gardener,
and
editor.
Lisa
is
an
amazing
wife,
mother
teacher,
gardener
and
editor.
Lisa
is
an
amazing
teacher,
editor,
gardener,
wife
and
mother.
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Faulty
Comparisons
When comparing two objects by degree, there should be no mention of est, as in biggest as all you can really say is that one is bigger than the other. If you are comparing three or more objects, then est will accurately communicate which is the biggest of them all.
Examples
Between
the
twins,
Mackenzie
is
the
fastest
[faster]
of
the
two.
Among
our
three
children,
Mackenzie
is
the
tallest.
Dangling
Modifiers
Modifiers describe a subject in a sentence or indicate how or when the subject carried out the action. If the subject is omitted, the modifier intended for the subject is left dangling or hanging out on its own without a clear relationship to the sentence. Who is doing the seeing in the first sentence?
Examples
Seeing
the
light
at
the
end
of
the
tunnel,
celebrations
were
in
order.
Seeing
the
light
at
the
end
of
the
tunnel,
we
decided
that
celebrations
were
in
order.
Misplaced
Modifiers
Modifiers that are misplaced are not lost, they are simply in the wrong place. Their unfortunate location is often far from the word or words they describe, making it easy for readers to misinterpret the sentence.
Examples
Trying
to
avoid
the
deer,
the
tree
hit
my
car.
My
car
hit
the
tree
when
I
tried
to
avoid
a
deer
in
the
road.
Key Takeaway
By revising for format, facts, names, spelling, punctuation, and grammar, you can increase your chances of correcting many common errors in your writing.
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Exercises
1. Select
a
news
article
from
a
news
Web
site,
newspaper,
or
magazine.
Find
as
many
facts
in
the
article
as
you
can
that
could
require
fact-checking.
Then
check
as
many
of
these
facts
as
you
can,
using
sources
available
to
you
in
the
library
and
on
the
Internet.
Did
you
find
any
errors
in
the
article?
Discuss
your
findings
with
your
classmates.
2. Find
an
example
of
an
assertion
without
attribution
and
share
it
with
classmates.
3. Find
an
example
of
an
error
in
a
published
document
and
share
it
with
classmates.
4. Interview
a
coworker
or
colleague
and
specifically
ask
them
to
share
a
story
where
an
error
got
past
them
during
the
revision
process
and
made
it
to
print
or
publication.
How
did
they
handle
it?
How
much
time
did
it
take
to
correct?
What
did
they
learn
from
the
experience?
Compare
your
results
with
classmates.
[1] Strunk, W., Jr., & White, E. B. (1979). The elements of style (3rd ed.). New York, NY: Macmillian. [2] Wyrick, J. (2008). Steps to writing well (10th ed.). Boston, MA: Thomson Wadsworth.
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Learning Objective
1. Discuss
and
demonstrate
the
use
of
twelve
points
to
consider
for
style
revisions.
You know the difference between cloudy and clear water, but can you tell when your writing is cloudy, when meaning is hidden in shadows, when the message you are trying to communicate is obscured by the style you use to present it? Water filtration involves removing particulates, harmful inorganic and organic materials, and clarifying the water. In the same way, the revision process requires filtration. You may come across word choices you thought were appropriate at the time or notice words you thought you wrote but are absent, and the revision process will start to produce results. Some words and sentence constructions will be harmful to the effective delivery and require attention. Some transitions fail to show the connections between thoughts and need to be changed. Another way of conceptualizing the revision process in general and the clarifying process specifically is the common reference to a diamond in the rough. Like muddy water, diamonds do not come to have significant value until they have had their rough edges removed, have received expert polish, and been evaluated for clarity. Your attention to this important process will bring the value quotient of your writing up as it begins to more accurately communicate intended meaning. As weve discussed before, now is not the time to lose momentum. Just the opposite, now is the time to make your writing shine. Here we will discuss several strategies to help clarify your writing style. If you have made wise word choices, the then next step to clarifying your document is to take it sentence by sentence. Each sentence should stand on its own, but each sentence is also interdependent on all other sentences in your document. These strategies will require significant attention to detail and an awareness of grammar that might not be your area of strength, but the more you practice them the more they will become good habits that will enhance your writing.
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In prose, and your expository writing classes, you may have learned that complex sentences can communicate emotions, settings, and scenes that evoke a sense of place and time with your reading audience. In business writing, our goals aim more toward precision and the elimination of error; a good business document wont read like a college essay. A professor may have advised you to avoid short, choppy writing. Are we asking you to do something along those lines? No. Choppy writing is hard to follow, but simple, clear writing does the job with a minimum of fuss and without decoration. In their best-selling book The Elements of Style, William Strunk Jr. and E. B. White [1] emphasize clarity as a central goal. However, the following is one of their rules: Do not break sentences in two. As effective business writers we would agree with this rule, and while it may seem to contradict the preceding paragraph, lets consider what they mean by that rule. They encourage writers to avoid sentence fragments by refraining from using a period where the sentence needs a comma. That means that an independent clause should be connected to a dependent clause when necessary, and as weve discussed previously, a comma and a conjunction are appropriate for the task. The sentence fragment cannot stand alone, so we would agree with the rule as written. But we would also qualify its use: when you have two long and awkward independent clauses that form an unwieldy sentence, it may indeed be better to divide the clauses into two independent sentences. Your skill as a business writer is required to balance the needs of the sentence to communicate meaning with your understanding of audience expectations, and clarity often involves concise sentences.
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Prepositional phrases are necessaryit would be difficult to write without thembut some add to the bottom line word count without adding much to the sentence. Bureaucratic writing often uses this technique in an attempt to make a sentence sound important, but the effort usually has the undesirable dual effects of obscuring meaning and sounding pompous.
Examples
The
1040
Form
will
in
all
certainty
serve
the
majority
of
our
customers.
The
1040
Form
will
certainly
serve
the
majority
of
our
customers.
The revision places an adverb in place of a long prepositional phrase and allows for a reduction in the word count while strengthening the sentence.
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Avoid
Fillers
Like, you know, like, you know what I mean, ahh, umm, and all the fillers you may use or hear in oral communication have, well, little or no place in the written representation of the spoken word. Review your writing for extra words that serve the written equivalent of like and omit them. They do not serve you as an author, and do not serve the reading audience.
Eliminate
Slang
Many college professors can give examples of e-mails they have received from students that use all the modern characteristics of instant message and text abbreviation combined with a complete disregard for any norms of grammar or spelling, resulting in nearly incomprehensible messages. If your goal is to be professional, and the audience expectations do not include the use of slang, then it is inappropriate to include it in your document. Eliminate slang as you would a jargon term that serves as a barrier to understanding meaning. Not everyone will understand your slang word no more than they would a highly specialized term, and it will defeat your purpose. Norms for capitalization and punctuation that are routinely abandoned in efficient text messages or tweets are necessary and required in professional documents. Finally, there is no place in reputable business writing for offensive slang or profanity.
Evaluate
Clichs
Clichs are words or phrases that through their overuse have lost their impact. That definition does not imply they have lost their meaning, and sometimes a well-placed clich can communicate a message effectively. Actions speak louder than words is a clich, but its five words speak volumes that many of your readers will recognize. This appeal to familiarity can be an effective strategy to communicate, but use it carefully. Excessive reliance on clichs will make your writing trite, while eliminating them altogether may not serve you well either. As an effective business writer, you will need to evaluate your use of clichs for their impact versus detraction from your message.
Obscured
Verbs
Business writing should be clear and concise. If the meaning is obscured, then revision is required. One common problem is the conversion of verbs into nouns with the addition of suffixes like: -ant,-ent, -ion, -tion, -sion, -ence, -ance, and ing. Instead of hiding meaning within the phrase through the consolidation of, consider whether to use the verb forms consolidated or consolidating. Similarly, instead of the inclusion of, consider using including, which will likely make the sentence more active and vigorous.
Key Takeaway
Revising for style can increase a documents clarity, conciseness, and professionalism.
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Exercises
1. Which of the following sentences are examples of good business writing in standard English? For the sentences needing improvement, make revisions as you see fit and explain what was wrong with the original sentence. Discuss your results with your classmates.
1. Caitlin
likes
gardening,
golfing,
hiking,
and
to
swim.
2. At
any
given
point
in
time,
well,
there
is
a
possibility
that
we
could,
like,
be
called
upon
for
help.
3. The
evaluation
of
writing
can
be
done
through
the
examination
and
modification
of
each
sentence.
4. While
in
the
meeting,
the
fire
alarm
rang.
5. Children
benefit
from
getting
enough
sleep,
eating
a
balanced
diet,
and
outdoor
playtime.
6. Yee
has
asked
us
to
maximize
the
departments
ka-ching
by
enhancing
the
bling-bling
of
our
merchandise;
if
we
fail
to
do
this
the
darn
president
may
put
the
kibosh
on
our
project.
7. Ortegas
memo
stated
in
no
uncertain
terms
that
all
employees
need
to
arrive
for
work
on
time
every
day.
8. Although
there
are
many
challenges
in
todays
market
and
stock
values
have
dropped
considerably
since
last
year,
but
we
can
hope
to
benefit
from
strategic
thinking
and
careful
decision
making.
9. If
you
are
unable
to
attend
the
meeting,
please
let
Steve
or
I
know
as
soon
as
possible.
10. One
of
the
shipping
containers
are
open.
2. Find
an
example
of
a
good
example
of
effective
business
writing,
review
it,
and
share
it
with
your
classmates.
3. Find
an
example
of
a
bad
example
of
effective
business
writing,
review
it,
and
share
it
with
your
classmates.
4. Revision
requires
attention
to
detail,
and
you
may
be
under
pressure
to
produce
quality
results
within
a
deadline.
How
do
you
communicate
your
need
for
time
for
the
revision
process
to
those
who
are
waiting
on
you
to
complete
the
document?
Share
and
discuss
your
responses
with
your
classmates.
[1] Strunk, W., Jr., & White, E. B. (1979). The elements of style (3rd ed.). New York, NY: Macmillian. [2] McLean, S. (2005). The basics of interpersonal communication. Boston, MA: Allyn & Bacon.
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Learning Objectives
1. Describe
five
elements
of
critical
analysis
to
use
in
evaluating
someone
elses
writing.
2. Demonstrate
how
to
deliver
an
evaluation
constructively
and
respectfully.
As an experienced business writer, you may be called upon to review others work. Having a clear understanding of the process will help you be efficient in your review, producing constructive advice that would benefit the essay while resisting change for changes sake.
First, review the instructions that were given to the writer. Make sure you understand the assignment and the target audience. What resources did the writer have access to, and how much time was allotted for completing the assignment? What purpose did the document need to fulfill, and what role will this document have in future business activities or decisions? Second, evaluate how well the document fulfills its stated goals. As a reader, do you see the goals carried out in the document? If you didnt know the writer and you were to find the document next year in a file where you were searching for information, would it provide you with the information it aims to convey? For example, suppose the document refers to the sales history of the past five years. Does the writer provide the sales history for the readers reference, or indicate where the reader can get this information? Evaluate the assertions made in the document. An assertion is a declaration, statement, or claim of fact. Suppose the writer indicates that the sales history for the past five years is a significant factor. Does the writer explain why this history is significant? Is the explanation logical and sufficient? Evaluate the facts cited in the document. Does the writer credit the sources of facts, statistics, and numbers? For example, suppose the writer mentions that the population of the United States is approximately three hundred million. Obviously, the writer did not count all U.S. residents to
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arrive at this number. Where did it come from? If you have access to sources where you can independently verify the accuracy of these details, look them up and note any discrepancies. Finally, check the document for proper format and for errors in spelling, punctuation, and grammar. Word processing spell checkers do not catch all errors.
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When evaluating the work of others, make sure you understand the assignment, evaluate how well the writing carries out the assignment, evaluate assertions, check facts, and watch for errors. Deliver your evaluation with tact and diplomacy.
Exercises
1. Select
a
piece
of
writing
from
a
Web
site,
book,
newspaper,
or
magazine.
Imagine
that
you
are
delivering
an
evaluation
to
the
author
of
the
piece.
Using
the
strategies
in
this
section,
write
a
tactful
and
diplomatic
critique.
Your
instructor
may
choose
to
make
this
a
class
exercise,
asking
students
to
exchange
papers
and
evaluate
each
others
writing.
2. Select
a
piece
of
writing
from
a
Web
site,
book,
newspaper,
or
magazine.
Imagine
that
you
are
editing
it
half
its
original
length.
Share
the
article
and
your
revised
copy
with
your
classmates.
3. What
responsibility
do
you
have
to
point
out
the
need
for
correction
in
a
document
when
the
author
or
team
leader
outranks
you
at
work?
Does
it
make
a
difference
if
you
anticipate
they
will
take
the
feedback
negatively?
How
do
you
reconcile
these
concerns
with
your
responsibility
to
the
organization?
Share
and
discuss
your
responses
with
your
classmates.
[1] McLean, S. (2005). The basics of interpersonal communication. Boston, MA: Allyn & Bacon.
Learning Objectives
1. Understand
the
difference
between
revising
and
proofreading,
and
how
to
use
proofreading
marks.
2. Describe
six
design
elements
for
evaluation.
In traditional publishing, proofreading and design are the final stages a book undergoes before it is published. If the earlier steps of research, organizing, writing, revising, and formatting have been done carefully, proofreading and design should go smoothly. Now is not the time to go
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back and revise a documents content, or to experiment with changes in format. Instead, the emphasis is on catching any typographical errors that have slipped through the revision process, and pouring the format into a design that will enhance the writers message.
Proofreading
By now you have completed a general and specific review of the document, with attention to detail. You may have made changes, and most word processing programs will allow you to track those changes across several versions and authors. If you work in an environment where a document exists as a hard copy during the revision process, you may use or see handwritten proofreading symbols. Professional proofreaders often use standard markings that serve to indicate where changes needed to be made on a physical document. Some of todays word processing programs incorporate many proofreading symbols in their menus. It is useful to be familiar with the various proofreading marks that were traditionally used to review and revise hard copy documents. Even if you never use the symbols in a document, your awareness of themand the points of emphasis under reviewwill serve you well. Do you need to insert a word, delete a word, capitalize a letter, or start a new paragraph? There are specific symbols for each of these actions because the review and revision process has common and consistent elements that need to be addressed.
Design
Evaluation
If you are asked to review a document, design an element that deserves consideration. While most of our attention has focused on words (i.e., sentence construction and common errors), design can have a strong impact on the representation and presentation of information.
Framing
Framing refers to how information is presented, including margins, line justifications, and template expectations. Just as frame creates a border around a painting, highlighting part of the image while hiding the margins, the frame of a page influences how information is received. Margins create space around the edge and help draw attention to the content. One-inch margins are standard, but differences in margin widths will depend on the assignment requirements. A brief letter, for example, may have margins as wide as two inches so that the body of the letter fills up the stationery in a more balanced fashion. Template expectations are distinct from audience expectation, though they are often related. Most software programs have templates for basic documents, including letters, reports, and rsums. Templates represent the normative expectations for a specific type of document. Templates have spaces that establish where a date should be indicated and where personal contact information should be represented. They also often allow you to fill in the blank, reflecting each documents basic expectations of where information is presented. For example, line justification involves where the text lines up on the page. Letters often have a left justify, lining up the text on the left side of the page while allowing the ends of each line on
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the right side to be ragged, or not aligned. This creates even spaces between words and gives the appearance of organization while promoting white space, the space on the page free of text. Balance between text (often black) and white space creates contrast and allows for areas of emphasis. Left justify often produces the appearance of balance, as the words are evenly spaced, while left and right justify can produce large gaps between words, making the sentences appear awkward and hard to read.
Typefaces
Typeface refers to design of symbols, including letters and numbers. [1] The creation of the face of the type, as in a typing machine or printing press, has long been both an art and a science. In past centuries, carvings of the face of the type in copperplate, where ink was applied and then pressed to paper, created intricate and intriguing images designed to communicate style, prestige, status, and formality with the communication of words and symbols. We no longer use copper or hot lead type, but the typeface still exists as a medium for communication in addition to the word itself. There are two general categories of typeface: serif and sans serif. Sans means without, so the emphasis here is on whether the face of the type has a serif or not. A serif is a small cross line, often perpendicular to the stroke of the letter, that is decorative but also serves the useful purpose of differentiating characters that could otherwise look similar (e.g., m and rn, d and cl, or 3 and 8). For this reason, serif typefaces, such as Times New Roman and Garamond, are often easier to read, especially when the font size is small. Sans serif fonts, such as Arial and Helvetica, lack the serif and can be harder to read in long text sequences. They are most commonly used for headings. However, when text is to be read electronically (on the screen of a computer or other device), serifs can tend to break up, so sans serif typefaces can be a better choice. The rule of thumb, or common wisdom, is to limit your document to two typefaces, contrasting sans serif (headings) with text (serif). Take care not to use a font that is hard to read, creating an unnecessary barrier for your reader. Also, use a font that conveys the tone of your professional message to enhance your effectiveness.
Paragraphs
Paragraphs are the basic organizational unit for presenting and emphasizing the key points in a document. Effective paragraphs can provide an effective emphasis strategy, but the placement within the page can also influence recall and impact. The first point presented is often the second in importance, the second point is the least important, and the third point in a series of three is often the most important. People generally recall the last point presented, and tend to forget or ignore the content in the middle of a sequence. Use this strategy to place your best point in the most appropriate location. A lengthy document that consists of paragraph after paragraph can become monotonous, making reading a chore and obscuring pieces of information that need to stand out. To give the document visual variety and to emphasize key information, consider the following strategies:
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Remember, however, that using all caps (all capitals) for body text (as opposed to headings) is often considered rude, like shouting, particularly in electronic communications.
Visual
Aids
If you have the luxury of including visual aids, such as graphics and pictures, in your document, take care to make sure that the verbal and visual messages complement each other. The visual should illustrate the text, and should be placed near the words so that the relationship is immediately clear. Sometimes during editing, a photograph will get pushed to the next page, leaving the relevant text behind and creating discontinuity. This creates a barrier for your reader, so avoid it if possible.
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Key Takeaway
Proofreading and design put the finishing touches on a completed document.
Exercises
1. Using proofreading marks, mark the errors in the following paragraph: I never wanted to bacome a writer, but when I decidedon a career in sales, I found out that being able to write was a skill that would help me. So much of my daily work involved Writing that I sometimes thought id fallen asleep and woken up in someone elses life. Messages, about actual sales, were the least of it. In order to attract customers, I have to send notes to people I already knew, asking them for sales leads. Then when I got a lead, Ild write to the contact asking for a few munutes of their time.If I got to meet with them or even have a phote conversation, my next task was to write them a thank you not. Oh, and the reports-I was always filing out reports; for my sales manager, tracking my progress with each customer and each lead. If someone had tell me how much writing sails would involve, I think I would of paid more attention to my writing courses en school.
2. With
a
writing
assignment
in
draft
form
from
your
class,
swap
with
a
classmate
and
review
the
spelling,
grammar,
and
punctuation,
using
proofreading
marks
where
applicable.
[1] Kostelnick, C., & Roberts, D. (1998). Designing visual language: Strategies for professional communicators. Needham Heights, MA: Allyn & Bacon.
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Getting Started
Introductory Exercises
1. Review
the
different
kinds
of
common
business
communication
writing
covered
by
the
main
headings
in
this
chapter.
Make
a
note
of
which
kinds
of
documents
you
have
produced
in
the
past
and
which
you
have
not.
For
example,
have
you
written
many
memos
but
not
a
business
report?
Share
and
compare
with
classmates.
2. Conduct
an
online
search
for
job
descriptions
associated
with
your
chosen
career
and
think
about
what
tasks
are
accomplished
in
a
typical
day
or
week.
If
possible,
also
talk
to
someone
who
is
employed
in
that
career.
Note
the
kinds
of
writing
skills
that
are
involved
in
carrying
out
job
duties
or
tasks.
Share
your
results
with
the
class.
Business communication in written form requires skill and expertise. From text messages to reports, how you represent yourself with the written word counts. Writing in an online environment requires tact and skill, and an awareness that what you write may be there forever. From memos to letters, from business proposals to press releases, your written business communication represents you and your company: your goal is to make it clear, concise, and professional.
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Learning Objectives
1. Discuss
the
role
of
text
messaging
in
business
communication.
2. Write
effective
e-mails
for
both
internal
and
external
communication.
3. Demonstrate
the
appropriate
use
of
netiquette.
Text messages and e-mails are part of our communication landscape, and skilled business communicators consider them a valuable tool to connect. Netiquette refers to etiquette, or protocols and norms for communication, on the Internet.
Texting
Whatever digital device you use, written communication in the form of brief messages, or texting, has become a common way to connect. It is useful for short exchanges, and is a convenient way to stay connected with others when talking on the phone would be cumbersome. Texting is not useful for long or complicated messages, and careful consideration should be given to the audience. It is often said that you can tell how old someone is by how he or she inputs a phone number on a cell phone. If the person uses his or her thumb while holding the digital device, that person may have been raised on video games and be adept at one-handed interfaces. If he holds the digital device with one hand and inputs the number with the other, he may be over thirty, or may be less comfortable with some technological devices. Of course, there is no actual correlation between input and age, but it is a useful example to use when considering who your audience is when writing a text message. If the person is a one-hander, and knows all the abbreviations common to texting, you may be able to use similar codes to communicate effectively. If the person is a twohander, you are better off using fewer words and spelling them out. Texting can be a great tool for connecting while on the go, but consider your audience and your company, and choose words, terms, or abbreviations that will deliver your message.
Know your recipient; ? % dsct may be an understandable way to ask a close associate what the proper discount is to offer a certain customer, but if you are writing a text to your boss, it might be wiser to write, what % discount does Murray get on $1K order? Anticipate unintentional misinterpretation. Texting often uses symbols and codes to represent thoughts, ideas, and emotions. Given the complexity of communication, and the useful but limited tool of texting, be aware of its limitation and prevent misinterpretation with brief messages.
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Contacting someone too frequently can border on harassment. Texting is a tool. Use it when appropriate but dont abuse it. Unplug yourself once in awhile. Do you feel constantly connected? Do you feel lost or out of it if you dont have your cell phone and cannot connect to people, even for fifteen minutes? Sometimes being unavailable for a time can be healthyeverything in moderation, including texting. Dont text and drive. Research shows that the likelihood of an accident increases dramatically if the driver is texting behind the wheel. [1] Being in an accident while conducting company business would reflect poorly on your judgment as well as on your employer.
E-mail
Electronic mail, usually called e-mail, is quite familiar to most students and workers. It may be used like text, or synchronous chat, and it can be delivered to a cell phone. In business, it has largely replaced print hard copy letters for external (outside the company) correspondence, as well as taking the place of memos for internal (within the company) communication. [2] E-mail can be very useful for messages that have slightly more content than a text message, but it is still best used for fairly brief messages. Many businesses use automated e-mails to acknowledge communications from the public, or to remind associates that periodic reports or payments are due. You may also be assigned to populate a form e-mail in which standard paragraphs are used but you choose from a menu of sentences to make the wording suitable for a particular transaction. E-mails may be informal in personal contexts, but business communication requires attention to detail, awareness that your e-mail reflects you and your company, and a professional tone so that it may be forwarded to any third party if needed. E-mail often serves to exchange information within organizations. Although e-mail may have an informal feel, remember that when used for business, it needs to convey professionalism and respect. Never write or send anything that you wouldnt want read in public or in front of your company president.
Proper
salutations
should
demonstrate
respect
and
avoid
mix-ups
in
case
a
message
is
accidentally
sent
to
the
wrong
recipient.
For
example,
use
a
salutation
like
Dear
Ms.
X
(external)
or
Hi
Barry
(internal).
Subject
lines
should
be
clear,
brief,
and
specific.
This
helps
the
recipient
understand
the
essence
of
the
message.
For
example,
Proposal
attached
or
Your
question
of
10/25.
Close
with
a
signature.
Identify
yourself
by
creating
a
signature
block
that
automatically
contains
your
name
and
business
contact
information.
Avoid
abbreviations.
An
e-mail
is
not
a
text
message,
and
the
audience
may
not
find
your
wit
cause
to
ROTFLOL
(roll
on
the
floor
laughing
out
loud).
Be
brief.
Omit
unnecessary
words.
Use
a
good
format.
Include
line
breaks
between
sentences
or
divide
your
message
into
brief
paragraphs
for
ease
of
reading.
A
good
e-mail
should
get
to
the
point
and
conclude
in
three
small
paragraphs
or
less.
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Reread, revise, and review. Catch and correct spelling and grammar mistakes before you press send. It will take more time and effort to undo the problems caused by a hasty, poorly written e-mail than to get it right the first time. Reply promptly. Watch out for an emotional responsenever reply in angerbut make a habit of replying to all e-mails within twenty-four hours, even if only to say that you will provide the requested information in forty-eight or seventy-two hours. Use Reply All sparingly. Do not send your reply to everyone who received the initial e-mail unless your message absolutely needs to be read by the entire group. Avoid using all caps. Capital letters are used on the Internet to communicate emphatic emotion or yelling and are considered rude. Test links. If you include a link, test it to make sure it is complete. E-mail ahead of time if you are going to attach large files (audio and visual files are often quite large) to prevent exceeding the recipients mailbox limit or triggering the spam filter. Give feedback or follow up. If you dont get a response in twenty-four hours, e-mail or call. Spam filters may have intercepted your message, so your recipient may never have received it.
Lets look at two examples of business e-mail. In Figure 13.1, we have an e-mail form. In Figure 13.2, we have a letter written specifically for the situation and audience. Figure 13.1
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Figure 13.2
Netiquette
We create personal pages, post messages, and interact via mediated technologies as a normal part of our careers, but how we conduct ourselves can leave a lasting image, literally. The photograph you posted on your MySpace page may have been seen by your potential employer, or that nasty remark in a post may come back to haunt you later. Some fifteen years ago, when the Internet was a new phenomenon, Virginia Shea laid out a series of ground rules for communication online that continue to serve us today.
Remember
the
human
on
the
other
side
of
the
electronic
communication.
Adhere
to
the
same
standards
of
behavior
online
that
you
follow
in
real
life.
Know
where
you
are
in
cyberspace.
Respect
other
peoples
time
and
bandwidth.
Make
yourself
look
good
online.
Share
expert
knowledge.
Keep
flame
wars
under
control.
Respect
other
peoples
privacy.
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Her rules speak for themselves and remind us that the golden rule (treat others as you would like to be treated) is relevant wherever there is human interaction.
Key Takeaways
A text message is a brief written message sent and received using a digital device. It is useful for informal, brief, time-sensitive communication. E-mail is useful for both internal and external business communications. The content and formatting of an e-mail message should reflect professionalism and follow the rules of netiquette. Social customs that exist in traditional, live, human interaction also influence the rules and customs by which we interact with each other in the online environment.
Exercises
1. Write
a
text
message
in
your
normal
use
of
language.
It
should
use
all
your
normal
abbreviations
(e.g.,
FWIW,
IMHO,
LOL),
even
if
not
everyone
understands
them.
2. Find
an
example
of
an
e-mail
that
you
wish
you
had
never
sent
or
received.
Rewrite
it
to
eliminate
the
characteristics
that
you
find
problematic.
Share
it
with
your
classmates.
3. Choose
at
least
three
e-mails
you
have
sent
or
received
that
are
good
examples
of
business
communication.
What
makes
them
good
examples?
Could
they
be
improved
in
any
way?
Share
your
suggestions
with
classmates.
4. When
is
e-mail
inappropriate?
Why?
5. Find
a
flame
war,
or
heated
discussion
in
an
online
forum
and
note
how
it
is
handled.
Compare
the
results
with
your
classmates.
6. In
your
experience,
how
do
people
behave
when
they
interact
online?
Share
your
observations
with
your
classmates.
[1] Houston Chronicle. (2009, September 23). Deadly distraction: Texting while driving, twice as risky as drunk driving, should be banned. Houston Chronicle (3 STAR R.O. ed.), p. B8. Retrieved from http://www.chron.com/CDA/archives/archive.mpl?id=2009_4791006 [2] Guffey, M. (2008). Essentials of business communication (7th ed.). Mason, OH: Thomson/Wadsworth. [3] Shea, V. (1994). Netiquette. San Francisco, CA: Albion Books.
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Learning Objectives
1. 2. 3. 4. Discuss
the
purpose
and
format
of
a
memo.
Understand
effective
strategies
for
business
memos.
Describe
the
fifteen
parts
of
a
standard
business
letter.
Access
sample
business
letters
and
write
a
sample
business
letter.
Memos
A memo (or memorandum, meaning reminder) is normally used for communicating policies, procedures, or related official business within an organization. It is often written from a one-toall perspective (like mass communication), broadcasting a message to an audience, rather than a one-on-one, interpersonal communication. It may also be used to update a team on activities for a given project, or to inform a specific group within a company of an event, action, or observance.
Memo
Purpose
A memos purpose is often to inform, but it occasionally includes an element of persuasion or a call to action. All organizations have informal and formal communication networks. The unofficial, informal communication network within an organization is often called the grapevine, and it is often characterized by rumor, gossip, and innuendo. On the grapevine, one person may hear that someone else is going to be laid off and start passing the news around. Rumors change and transform as they are passed from person to person, and before you know it, the word is that they are shutting down your entire department. One effective way to address informal, unofficial speculation is to spell out clearly for all employees what is going on with a particular issue. If budget cuts are a concern, then it may be wise to send a memo explaining the changes that are imminent. If a company wants employees to take action, they may also issue a memorandum. For example, on February 13, 2009, upper management at the Panasonic Corporation issued a declaration that all employees should buy at least $1,600 worth of Panasonic products. The company president noted that if everyone supported the company with purchases, it would benefit all. [1] While memos do not normally include a call to action that requires personal spending, they often represent the business or organizations interests. They may also include statements that align business and employee interest, and underscore common ground and benefit.
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Memo
Format
A memo has a header that clearly indicates who sent it and who the intended recipients are. Pay particular attention to the title of the individual(s) in this section. Date and subject lines are also present, followed by a message that contains a declaration, a discussion, and a summary. In a standard writing format, we might expect to see an introduction, a body, and a conclusion. All these are present in a memo, and each part has a clear purpose. The declaration in the opening uses a declarative sentence to announce the main topic. The discussion elaborates or lists major points associated with the topic, and the conclusion serves as a summary. Lets examine a sample memo. Figure 13.3
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organization, and if the memo is to be posted and distributed within the organization, the goal is clear and concise communication at all levels with no ambiguity.
Subject
Emphasis
The subject is normally declared in the subject line and should be clear and concise. If the memo is announcing the observance of a holiday, for example, the specific holiday should be named in the subject linefor example, use Thanksgiving weekend schedule rather than holiday observance.
Direct
Format
Some written business communication allows for a choice between direct and indirect formats, but memorandums are always direct. The purpose is clearly announced.
Objectivity
Memos are a place for just the facts, and should have an objective tone without personal bias, preference, or interest on display. Avoid subjectivity.
Letters
Letters are brief messages sent to recipients that are often outside the organization. [2] They are often printed on letterhead paper, and represent the business or organization in one or two pages. Shorter messages may include e-mails or memos, either hard copy or electronic, while reports tend to be three or more pages in length. While e-mail and text messages may be used more frequently today, the effective business letter remains a common form of written communication. It can serve to introduce you to a potential employer, announce a product or service, or even serve to communicate feelings and emotions. Well examine the basic outline of a letter and then focus on specific products or writing assignments. All writing assignments have expectations in terms of language and format. The audience or reader may have their own idea of what constitutes a specific type of letter, and your organization may have its own format and requirements. This chapter outlines common elements across letters, and attention should be directed to the expectations associated with your particular
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writing assignment. There are many types of letters, and many adaptations in terms of form and content, but in this chapter, we discuss the fifteen elements of a traditional block-style letter. Letters may serve to introduce your skills and qualifications to prospective employers, deliver important or specific information, or serve as documentation of an event or decision. Regardless of the type of letter you need to write, it can contain up to fifteen elements in five areas. While you may not use all the elements in every case or context, they are listed in Table 13.1 "Elements of a Business Letter". Table 13.1 Elements of a Business Letter
Content
1.
Return
Address
Guidelines
This
is
your
address
where
someone
could
send
a
reply.
If
your
letter
includes
a
letterhead
with
this
information,
either
in
the
header
(across
the
top
of
the
page)
or
the
footer
(along
the
bottom
of
the
page),
you
do
not
need
to
include
it
before
the
date.
The
date
should
be
placed
at
the
top,
right
or
left
justified,
five
lines
from
the
top
of
the
page
or
letterhead
logo.
Like
a
subject
line
in
an
e-mail,
this
is
where
you
indicate
what
the
letter
is
in
reference
to,
the
subject
or
purpose
of
the
document.
Sometimes
you
want
to
indicate
on
the
letter
itself
how
it
was
delivered.
This
can
make
it
clear
to
a
third
party
that
the
letter
was
delivered
via
a
specific
method,
such
as
certified
mail
(a
legal
requirement
for
some
types
of
documents).
This
is
where
you
can
indicate
if
the
letter
is
personal
or
confidential.
A
common
salutation
may
be
Dear
Mr.
(full
name).
But
if
you
are
unsure
about
titles
(i.e.,
Mrs.,
Ms.,
Dr.),
you
may
simply
write
the
recipients
name
(e.g.,
Dear
Cameron
Rai)
followed
by
a
colon.
A
comma
after
the
salutation
is
correct
for
personal
letters,
but
a
colon
should
be
used
in
business.
The
salutation
To
whom
it
may
concern
is
appropriate
for
letters
of
recommendation
or
other
letters
that
are
intended
to
be
read
by
any
and
all
individuals.
If
this
is
not
the
case
with
your
letter,
but
you
are
unsure
of
how
to
address
your
recipient,
make
every
effort
to
find
out
to
whom
the
letter
should
be
specifically
addressed.
For
many,
there
is
no
sweeter
sound
than
that
of
their
name,
and
to
spell
it
incorrectly
runs
the
risk
of
alienating
the
reader
before
your
letter
has
even
been
read.
Avoid
the
use
of
impersonal
salutations
like
Dear
Prospective
Customer,
as
the
lack
of
personalization
can
alienate
a
future
client.
This
is
your
opening
paragraph,
and
may
include
an
attention
statement,
a
reference
to
the
purpose
of
the
document,
or
an
introduction
of
the
person
or
topic
depending
on
the
type
of
letter.
An
emphatic
opening
involves
using
the
most
significant
or
important
element
of
the
letter
in
the
introduction.
Readers
tend
to
pay
attention
to
openings,
and
it
makes
sense
to
outline
the
expectations
for
the
reader
up
front.
Just
as
you
would
preview
your
topic
in
a
speech,
the
clear
opening
in
your
introductions
establishes
context
and
facilitates
comprehension.
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7. Introduction
8. Body
9. Conclusion
10. Close
If you have a list of points, a series of facts, or a number of questions, they belong in the body of your letter. You may choose organizational devices to draw attention, such as a bullet list, or simply number them. Readers may skip over information in the body of your letter, so make sure you emphasize the key points clearly. This is your core content, where you can outline and support several key points. Brevity is important, but so is clear support for main point(s). Specific, meaningful information needs to be clear, concise, and accurate. An emphatic closing mirrors your introduction with the added element of tying the main points together, clearly demonstrating their relationship. The conclusion can serve to remind the reader, but should not introduce new information. A clear summary sentence will strengthen your writing and enhance your effectiveness. If your letter requests or implies action, the conclusion needs to make clear what you expect to happen. It is usually courteous to conclude by thanking the recipient for his or her attention, and to invite them to contact you if you can be of help or if they have questions. This paragraph reiterates the main points and their relationship to each other, reinforcing the main point or purpose. Sincerely or Cordially are standard business closing statements. (Love, Yours Truly, and BFF are closing statements suitable for personal correspondence, but not for business.) Closing statements are normally placed one or two lines under the conclusion and include a hanging comma, as in Sincerely, Five lines after the close, you should type your name (required) and, on the line below it, your title (optional). If the letter was prepared, or word-processed, by someone other than the signatory (you), then inclusion of initials is common, as in MJD or abc. Just like an e-mail with an attachment, the letter sometimes has additional documents that are delivered with it. This line indicates what the reader can look for in terms of documents included with the letter, such as brochures, reports, or related business documents. The abbreviation CC once stood for carbon copies but now refers to courtesy copies. Just like a CC option in an e-mail, it indicates the relevant parties that will also receive a copy of the document. A formal business letter normally includes a logo or contact information for the organization in the header (top of page) or footer (bottom of page).
A sample letter is shown in Figure 13.5 "Sample Business Letter". Figure 13.5 Sample Business Letter
Always remember that letters represent you and your company in your absence. In order to communicate effectively and project a positive image,
be clear, concise, specific, and respectful; each word should contribute to your purpose; each paragraph should focus on one idea; the parts of the letter should form a complete message; the letter should be free of errors.
Key Takeaways
Memos are brief business documents usually used internally to inform or persuade employees concerning business decisions on policy, procedure, or actions. Letters are brief, print messages often used externally to inform or persuade customers, vendors, or the public. A letter has fifteen parts, each fulfilling a specific function.
Exercises
1. Find
a
memo
from
your
work
or
business,
or
borrow
one
from
someone
you
know.
Share
it
with
your
classmates,
observing
confidentiality
by
blocking
out
identifying
details
such
as
the
name
of
the
sender,
recipient,
and
company.
Compare
and
contrast.
2. Create
a
draft
letter
introducing
a
product
or
service
to
a
new
client.
Post
and
share
with
classmates.
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3. Write a memo informing your class that an upcoming holiday will be observed. Post and share with classmates. 4. Find a business letter (for example, an offer you received from a credit card company or a solicitation for a donation) and share it with your classmates. Look for common elements and points of difference. 5. Now that you have reviewed a sample letter, and learned about the five areas and fifteen basic parts of any business letter, write a business letter that informs a prospective client or customer of a new product or service.
[1] Lewis, L. (2009, February 13). Panasonic orders staff to buy 1,000 in products. Retrieved from http://business.timesonline.co.uk/tol/business/markets/japan/article5723942.ece [2] Bovee, C., & Thill, J. (2010). Business communication essentials: a skills-based approach to vital business English (4th ed.). Upper Saddle River, NJ: Prentice Hall.
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Learning Objectives
1. Describe
the
basic
elements
of
a
business
proposal.
2. Discuss
the
main
goals
of
a
business
proposal.
3. Identify
effective
strategies
to
use
in
a
business
proposal.
An effective business proposal informs and persuades efficiently. It features many of the common elements of a report, but its emphasis on persuasion guides the overall presentation. Lets say you work in a health care setting. What types of products or services might be put out to bid? If your organization is going to expand and needs to construct a new wing, it will probably be put out to bid. Everything from office furniture to bedpans could potentially be put out to bid, specifying a quantity, quality, and time of delivery required. Janitorial services may also be bid on each year, as well as food services, and even maintenance. Using the power of bidding to lower contract costs for goods and services is common practice. In order to be successful in business and industry, you should be familiar with the business proposal. Much like a report, with several common elements and persuasive speech, a business proposal makes the case for your product or service. Business proposals are documents designed to make a persuasive appeal to the audience to achieve a defined outcome, often proposing a solution to a problem.
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Traditional
Categories
You can be creative in many aspects of the business proposal, but follow the traditional categories. Businesses expect to see information in a specific order, much like a rsum or even a letter. Each aspect of your proposal has its place and it is to your advantage to respect that tradition and use the categories effectively to highlight your product or service. Every category is an opportunity to sell, and should reinforce your credibility, your passion, and the reason why your solution is simply the best. Table 13.2 Business Proposal Format
Cover
Page
Executive
Summary
Background
Title
page
with
name,
title,
date,
and
specific
reference
to
request
for
proposal
if
applicable.
Like
an
abstract
in
a
report,
this
is
a
one-
or
two-paragraph
summary
of
the
product
or
service
and
how
it
meets
the
requirements
and
exceeds
expectations.
Discuss
the
history
of
your
product,
service,
and/or
company
and
consider
focusing
on
the
relationship
between
you
and
the
potential
buyer
and/or
similar
companies.
The
idea.
Who,
what,
where,
when,
why,
and
how.
Make
it
clear
and
concise.
Dont
waste
words,
and
dont
exaggerate.
Use
clear,
well-supported
reasoning
to
demonstrate
your
product
or
service.
What
currently
exists
in
the
marketplace,
including
competing
products
or
services,
and
how
does
your
solution
compare?
How
will
the
potential
buyer
benefit
from
the
product
or
service?
Be
clear,
concise,
specific,
and
provide
a
comprehensive
list
of
immediate,
short,
and
long-term
benefits
to
the
company.
A
clear
presentation,
often
with
visual
aids,
of
the
process,
from
start
to
finish,
with
specific,
dated
benchmarks
noted.
Delivery
is
often
the
greatest
challenge
for
Web-based
serviceshow
will
people
learn
about
you?
If
you
are
bidding
on
a
gross
lot
of
food
service
supplies,
this
may
not
apply
to
you,
but
if
an
audience
is
required
for
success,
you
will
need
a
marketing
plan.
What
are
the
initial
costs,
when
can
revenue
be
anticipated,
when
will
there
be
a
return
on
investment
(if
applicable)?
Again,
the
proposal
may
involve
a
one-time
fixed
cost,
but
if
the
product
or
service
is
to
be
delivered
more
than
once,
and
extended
financial
plan
noting
costs
across
time
is
required.
Proposal
Timeline
Marketing Plan
Finance
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Conclusion
Like a speech or essay, restate your main points clearly. Tie them together with a common them and make your proposal memorable.
Professional
A professional document is a base requirement. If it is less than professional, you can count on its prompt dismissal. There should be no errors in spelling or grammar, and all information should be concise, accurate, and clearly referenced when appropriate. Information that pertains to credibility should be easy to find and clearly relevant, including contact information. If the document exists in a hard copy form, it should be printed on a letterhead. If the document is submitted in an electronic form, it should be in a file format that presents your document as you intended. Word processing files may have their formatting changed or adjusted based on factors you cannot controllike screen sizeand information can shift out of place, making it difficult to understand. In this case, a portable document format (PDF)a format for electronic documentsmay be used to preserve content location and avoid any inadvertent format changes when it is displayed. Effective, persuasive proposals are often brief, even limited to one page. The one-page proposal has been one of the keys to my business success, and it can be invaluable to you too. Few decision-makers can ever afford to read more than one page when deciding if they are interested in a deal or not. This is even more true for people of a different culture or language, said Adnan Khashoggi, a successful multibillionaire. [1] Clear and concise proposals serve the audience well and limit the range of information to prevent confusion.
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Unsolicited
Unsolicited proposals are the cold calls of business writing. They require a thorough understanding of the market, product and/or service, and their presentation is typically general rather than customer-specific. They can, however, be tailored to specific businesses with time and effort, and the demonstrated knowledge of specific needs or requirement can transform an otherwise generic, brochure-like proposal into an effective sales message. Getting your tailored message to your target audience, however, is often a significant challenge if it has not been directly or indirectly solicited. Unsolicited proposals are often regarded as marketing materials, intended more to stimulate interest for a follow-up contact than make direct sales. Sue Baugh and Robert Hamper encourage you to resist the temptation to shoot at every target and hope you hit at least one. [2] A targeted proposal is your most effective approach, but recognize the importance of gaining company, service, or brand awareness as well as its limitations.
Key Takeaway
Business proposals need to target a specific audience.
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Exercises
1. Click on this link to see a sample request for proposal from the American Institute of Public Accounts. http://www.aicpa.org/audcommctr/toolkitsnpo/SampleRFP_for_CPA_Services.htm
2. Prepare
a
business
proposal
in
no
more
than
two
pages.
Follow
the
guidelines
provided
in
the
sample
letter
for
CPA
services
on
the
American
Institute
of
Public
Accountants
Web
site.
Do
not
include
actual
contact
information.
Just
as
the
example
has
employees
named
after
colors,
your
(imaginary)
company
should
have
contact
information
that
does
not
directly
link
to
real
businesses
or
you
as
an
individual.
Do
not
respond
to
point
12.
3. Search
for
an
RFP
(request
for
proposal)
or
similar
call
to
bid,
and
post
it
to
your
class.
Compare
the
results
with
your
classmates,
focusing
on
what
is
required
to
apply
or
bid.
4. Identify
a
product
or
service
you
would
like
to
produce
or
offer.
List
three
companies
that
you
would
like
to
sell
your
product
or
service
to
and
learn
more
about
them.
Post
your
findings,
making
the
link
between
your
product
or
service
and
company
needs.
You
may
find
the
Web
site
on
creating
a
business
plan
(http://www.myownbusiness.org/s2/#3)
useful
when
completing
this
exercise.
[1] Riley, P. G. (2002). The one-page proposal: How to get your business pitch onto one persuasive page (p. 2). New York, NY: HarperCollins. [2] Baugh, L. S., & Hamper, R. J. (1995). Handbook for writing proposals (p. 3). New York, NY: McGraw-Hill.
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13.4 Report
Learning Objectives
1. Discuss
the
main
parts
of
a
report.
2. Understand
the
different
types
of
reports.
3. Write
a
basic
report.
What
Is
a
Report?
Reports are documents designed to record and convey information to the reader. Reports are part of any business or organization; from credit reports to police reports, they serve to document specific information for specific audiences, goals, or functions. The type of report is often identified by its primary purpose or function, as in an accident report, a laboratory report, a sales report, or even a book report. Reports are often analytical, or involve the rational analysis of information. Sometimes they simply report the facts with no analysis at all, but still need to communicate the information in a clear and concise format. Other reports summarize past events, present current data, and forecast future trends. While a report may have conclusions, propositions, or even a call to action, the demonstration of the analysis is the primary function. A sales report, for example, is not designed to make an individual sale. It is, however, supposed to report sales to date, and may forecast future sales based on previous trends. This chapter is designed to introduce you to the basics of report writing.
Types
of
Reports
Reports come in all sizes, but are typically longer than a page and somewhat shorter than a book. The type of report depends on its function. The function of the report is its essential purpose, often indicated in the thesis or purpose statement. The function will also influence the types of visual content or visual aids, representing words, numbers, and their relationships to the central purpose in graphic, representational ways that are easy for the reader to understand. The function may also contribute to parameters like report length (page or word count) or word choice and readability. Focusing on the content of your longer business documents is not only natural but necessary because doing so helps ensure complete, correct information. [1] Reports vary by function, and they also vary by style and tradition. Within your organization, there may be employer-specific expectations that need to be addressed to meet audience expectations. This chapter discusses reports in general terms, focusing on common elements and points of distinction, but reference to similar documents where you work or additional examination of specific sample reports may serve you well as you prepare your own report.
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11.
Instruction
Manuals
12.
Compliance
Report
Document
and
indicate
the
extent
to
which
a
product
or
service
is
within
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13. Cost-Benefit Analysis Report 14. Decision Report 15. Benchmark Report 16. Examination Report 17. Physical Description report 18. Literature Review
established compliance parameters or standards Communicate costs and benefits of products or services. Make recommendations to management and become tools to solve problems and make decisions Establish criteria and evaluate alternatives by measuring against the establish benchmark criteria Report or record data obtained from an examination of an item or conditions, including accidents and natural disasters Describe the physical characteristics of a machine, a device, or object Present summaries of the information available on a given subject
Pay attention to these essential elements when you consider your stakeholders, or those who have an interest in the report. That may include the person(s) the report is about, whom it is for, and the larger audience of the business, organization, or industry. Ask yourself who the key decision makers are who will read your report, who the experts or technicians will be, and how executives and workers may interpret your words and images. While there is no universal format for a report, there is a common order to the information. Each element supports the main purpose or function in its own way, playing an important role in the representation and transmission of information. Table 13.4 Ten Common Elements of a Report
Page
1.
Cover
Element
Title
and
image
Function
Like
the
cover
of
a
book,
sometimes
a
picture,
image,
or
logo
is
featured
Example
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Title only
Label, report, features title, author, affiliation, date, and sometimes for whom the report was prepared A list of the main parts of the report and their respective page numbers
Feasibility Study of Oil Recovery from the X Tarpit Sands Location Feasibility Study of Oil Recovery from the X Tarpit Sands Location Peak Oilman, X Energy Corporation Prepared for X Abstract1 Introduction2 Background3 This report presents the current status of the X tarpit sands, the study of oil recoverability, and the findings of the study with specific recommendations.
Informational abstract: highlight topic, methods, data, and results Descriptive abstract: (All of the above without statements of conclusion or recommendations)
6. Introduction
7. Body
Oil sands recovery processes include ways to extract and separate the bitumen from the clay, sand, and water that make up the tar sands. This study analyzes the feasibility of extraction and separation, including a comprehensive cost/benefits analysis, with specific recommendations. Background: History of oil extraction and separation from tarpit sands. Methodology: Specific analysis of the site based on accepted research methods. Results: Data from the feasibility study. Analysis and Recommendations: Analysis of the data and recommendations based on that analysis.
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8. Conclusion
This portion clearly indicates the main results and their relation to recommended action or outcome. This part Bibliography or Works Cited contains a list of citations. This may include Related supporting maps, analysis of materials soil samples, and field reports.
Key Takeaway
Informational and analytical reports require organization and a clear purpose.
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Exercises
1. Find
an
annual
report
for
a
business
you
would
like
to
learn
more
about.
Review
it
with
the
previous
reading
in
mind
and
provide
examples.
Share
and
compare
with
classmates.
2. Write
a
report
on
a
trend
in
business
that
youve
observed,
and
highlight
at
least
the
main
finding.
For
example,
from
the
rising
cost
of
textbooks
to
the
Flat
World
Knowledge
approach
to
course
content,
textbooks
are
a
significant
issue
for
students.
Draw
from
your
experience
as
you
bring
together
sources
of
information
to
illustrate
a
trend.
Share
and
compare
with
classmates.
[1] Bovee, C., & Thill, J. (2010). Business communication essentials: A skills-based approach to vital business English (4th ed.). Upper Saddle River, NJ: Prentice Hall.
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13.5 Rsum
Learning Objectives
1. Describe
the
differences
among
functional,
reverse
chronological,
combination,
targeted,
and
scannable
rsums.
2. Discuss
what
features
are
required
in
each
type
of
rsum.
3. Prepare
a
one-page
rsum.
A rsum is a document that summarizes your education, skills, talents, employment history, and experiences in a clear and concise format for potential employers. The rsum serves three distinct purposes that define its format, design, and presentation:
1. To
represent
your
professional
information
in
writing
2. To
demonstrate
the
relationship
between
your
professional
information
and
the
problem
or
challenge
the
potential
employer
hopes
to
solve
or
address,
often
represented
in
the
form
of
a
job
description
or
duties
3. To
get
you
an
interview
by
clearly
demonstrating
you
meet
the
minimum
qualifications
and
have
the
professional
background
help
the
organization
meet
its
goals
An online profile page is similar to a rsum in that it represents you, your background and qualifications, and adds participation to the publication. People network, link, and connect in new ways via online profiles or professional sites like LinkedIn. In many ways, your online profile is an online version of your rsum with connections and friends on public display. Your MySpace and Facebook pages are also often accessible to the public, so never post anything you wouldnt want your employer (current or future) to read, see, or hear. This chapter covers a traditional rsum, as well as the more popular scannable features, but the elements and tips could equally apply to your online profile.
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Contact
Information
This section is often located at the top of the document. The first element of the contact information is your name. You should use your full, legal name even if you go by your middle name or use a nickname. There will plenty of time later to clarify what you prefer to be called, but all your application documents, including those that relate to payroll, your social security number, drug screenings, background checks, fingerprint records, transcripts, certificates or degrees, should feature your legal name. Other necessary information includes your address, phone number(s), and e-mail address. If you maintain two addresses (e.g., a campus and a residential address), make it clear where you can be contacted by indicating the primary address. For business purposes, do not use an unprofessional e-mail address like sexiluvr93@hotmale.com or tutifruti@yafoo.com. Create a new e-mail account if needed with an address suitable for professional use. Figure 13.7 Sample Contact Information
Objective
This is one part of your rsum that is relatively simple to customize for an individual application. Your objective should reflect the audiences need to quickly understand how you will help the organization achieve its goals. Figure 13.8 Sample Objective
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Education
You need to list your education in reverse chronological order, with your most recent degree first. List the school, degree, and grade point average (GPA). If there is a difference between the GPA in your major courses and your overall GPA, you may want to list them separately to demonstrate your success in your chosen field. You may also want to highlight relevant coursework that directly relate to the position. Figure 13.9 Sample Education Field
Work
Experience
List in reverse chronological order your employment history, including the positions, companies, locations, dates, duties and skills demonstrated or acquired. You may choose to use active, descriptive sentences or bullet lists, but be consistent. Emphasize responsibilities that involved budgets, teamwork, supervision, and customer service when applying for positions in business and industry, but dont let emphasis become exaggeration. This document represents you in your absence, and if information is false, at a minimum you could lose your job. Figure 13.10 Sample Work Experience
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Table 13.5
Type
1.
Reverse
Chronological
2.
Functional
Types of Rsums
Function
Reverse
chronological
rsums
(also
called
reverse
time
order)
focus
on
work
history.
Functional
rsums
(also
called
competency-based
rsums)
focus
on
skills.
A
combination
rsum
lists
your
skills
and
experience
first,
then
employment
history
and
education.
A
targeted
rsum
is
a
custom
document
that
specifically
highlights
the
experience
and
skills
that
are
relevant
to
the
job.
A
scannable
rsum
is
specifically
formatted
to
be
read
by
a
scanner
and
converted
to
digital
information.
Advantage
Demonstrates
a
consistent
work
history
Disadvantage
It
may
be
difficult
to
highlight
skills
and
experience.
3. Combination
4. Targeted
Demonstrates skills that can clearly link to job functions or duties Highlights the skills you have that are relevant to the job and provides a reverse chronological work history Points out to the reader how your qualifications and experience clearly match the job duties Increasingly used to facilitate search and retrieval, and to reduce physical storage costs
It is often associated with people who have gaps in their employment history. Some employers prefer a reverse chronological order.
5. Scannable
Custom documents take additional time, preparation, analysis of the job announcement, and may not fit the established guidelines. Scanners may not read the rsum correctly.
You may choose to include references at the end of your rsum, though references upon request is common. You may also be tempted to extend your rsum to more than one page, but dont exceed that limit unless the additional page will feature specific, relevant information that represents several years of work that directly relates to the position. The person reading your rsum may be sifting through many applicants and will not spend time reading extra pages. Use the one-page format to put your best foot forward, remembering that you may never get a second chance to make a good first impression.
Follow
Directions
If a job description uses specific terms, refers to computer programs, skills, or previous experience, make sure you incorporate that language in your scannable rsum. You know that when given a class assignment, you are expected to follow directions; similarly, the employer is looking for specific skills and experience. By mirroring the employers language and submitting your application documents in accord with their instructions, you convey a spirit of cooperation and an understanding of how to follow instructions.
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A rsum will represent your skills, education, and experience in your absence. Businesses increasingly scan rsums into searchable databases.
Exercises
1. Find
a
job
announcement
with
specific
duties
that
represents
a
job
that
you
will
be
prepared
for
upon
graduation.
Choose
a
type
of
rsum
and
prepare
your
rsum
to
submit
to
the
employer
as
a
class
assignment.
Your
instructor
may
also
request
a
scannable
version
of
your
rsum.
2. Conduct
an
online
search
for
a
functional
or
chronological
rsum.
Please
post
and
share
with
your
classmates.
3. Conduct
an
online
search
for
job
advertisements
that
detail
positions
you
would
be
interested
in,
and
note
the
key
job
duties
and
position
requirements.
Please
post
one
example
and
share
with
your
classmates.
4. When
is
a
second
page
of
your
rsum
justified?
Explain.
5. Conduct
an
online
search
for
resources
to
help
you
prepare
your
own
rsum.
Please
post
one
link
and
a
brief
review
of
the
Web
site,
noting
what
features
you
found
useful
and
at
least
one
recommendation
for
improvement.
[1] Bennett, S. A. (2005). The elements of rsum style: Essential rules and eye-opening advice for writing rsums and cover letters that work. AMACOM. [2] Simons, W., & Curtis, R. (2004). The Rsum.com guide to writing unbeatable rsums. New York, NY: McGraw-Hill.
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Learning Objectives
1. Discuss
a
basic
sales
message
and
identify
its
central
purpose
2. Detail
the
main
parts
of
a
sales
message
and
understand
strategies
for
success
A sales message is the central persuasive message that intrigues, informs, persuades, calls to action, and closes the sale. Not every sales message will make a direct sale, but the goal remains. Whether your sales message is embedded in a letter, represented in a proposal, or broadcast across radio or television, the purpose stays the same. Sales messages are often discussed in terms of reason versus emotion. Every message has elements of ethos, or credibility; pathos, or passion and enthusiasm; and logos, or logic and reason. If your sales message focuses exclusively on reason with cold, hard facts and nothing but the facts, you may appeal to some audience, but certainly not the majority. Buyers make purchase decisions on emotion as well as reason, and even if they have researched all the relevant facts about competing products, the decision may still come down to impulse, emotion, and desire. If your sales message focuses exclusively on emotion, with little or no substance, it may not be taken seriously. Finally, if your sales message does not appear to have credibility, the message will be dismissed. In the case of the sales message, you need to meet the audiences needs that vary greatly. In general, appeals to emotion pique curiosity and get our attention, but some attention to reason and facts should also be included. That doesnt mean we need to spell out the technical manual on the product on the opening sale message, but basic information about design or features, in specific, concrete ways can help an audience make sense of your message and the product or service. Avoid using too many abstract terms or references, as not everyone will understand these. You want your sales message to do the work, not the audience.
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Table 13.6
Attention
Statement
Introduction
Body
Conclusion
Residual Message
Getting
Attention
Your sales message will compete with hundreds of other messages and you want it to stand out. [1] One effective way to do that is to make sure your attention statement(s) and introduction clearly state how the reader or listener will benefit.
Will the product or service save time or money? Will it make them look good? Will it entertain them? Will it satisfy them?
Regardless of the product or service, the audience is going to consider first what is in it for them. A benefit is what the buyer gains with the purchase and is central to your sales message. They may gain social status, popularity, sex appeal, or even reduce or eliminate something they dont want. Your sales message should clearly communicate the benefits of your product or service. [2]
you are more likely to hear no as a defensive response as the buyer tries not to make a mistake. Avoid confusion and keep it simple. 3. Know your audience. The more background research you can do on your buyer, the better you can anticipate their specific wants and needs and individualize your sales message to meet them. 4. Lead with emotion, follow with reason. Gain the audiences attention with drama, humor, or novelty and follow with specific facts that establish your credibility, provide more information about the product or service, and lead to your call to action to make the sale.
These four steps can help improve your sales message, and your sales. Invest your time in planning and preparation, and consider the audiences needs as you prepare your sales message. Figure 13.14 Sample E-mail Sales Message
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Key Takeaway
A sales message combines emotion and reason, and reinforces credibility, to create interest in a product or service that leads to a sale.
Exercises
1. Create
your
own
e-mail
sales
message
in
a
hundred
words
or
less.
Share
it
with
the
class.
2. Identify
one
sales
message
you
consider
to
be
effective.
Share
it
with
classmates
and
discuss
why
you
perceive
it
to
be
effective.
3. Please
consider
one
purchase
you
made
recently.
What
motivated
you
to
buy
and
why
did
you
choose
to
complete
the
purchase?
Share
the
results
with
your
classmates.
4. Are
you
more
motivated
by
emotion
or
reason?
Ask
ten
friends
that
question
and
post
your
results.
[1] Price, D. (2005, October 30). How to communicate your sales message so buyers take action now! Retrieved June 14, 2009, from ezinearticles.com: http://ezinearticles.com/?How-ToCommunicate-Your-Sales-Message-So-Buyers-Take-Action-Now!&id=89569 [2] Winston, W., & Granat, J. (1997). Persuasive advertising for entrepreneurs and small business owners: How to create more effective sales messages. New York, NY: Routledge.
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Learning Objectives
1. Identify
the
major
components
of
a
research
paper
written
using
American
Psychological
Association
(APA)
style.
2. Apply
general
APA
style
and
formatting
conventions
in
a
research
paper.
In this chapter, you will learn how to use APA style, the documentation and formatting style followed by the American Psychological Association, as well as MLA style, from the Modern Language Association. There are a few major formatting styles used in academic texts, including AMA, Chicago, and Turabian:
AMA (American Medical Association) for medicine, health, and biological sciences APA (American Psychological Association) for education, psychology, and the social sciences Chicagoa common style used in everyday publications like magazines, newspapers, and books MLA (Modern Language Association) for English, literature, arts, and humanities Turabiananother common style designed for its universal application across all subjects and disciplines
While all the formatting and citation styles have their own use and applications, in this chapter we focus our attention on the two styles you are most likely to use in your academic studies: APA and MLA. If you find that the rules of proper source documentation are difficult to keep straight, you are not alone. Writing a good research paper is, in and of itself, a major intellectual challenge. Having to follow detailed citation and formatting guidelines as well may seem like just one more task to add to an already-too-long list of requirements. Following these guidelines, however, serves several important purposes. First, it signals to your readers that your paper should be taken seriously as a students contribution to a given academic or professional field; it is the literary equivalent of wearing a tailored suit to a job interview. Second, it shows that you respect other peoples work enough to give them proper credit for it. Finally, it helps your reader find additional materials if he or she wishes to learn more about your topic. Furthermore, producing a letter-perfect APA-style paper need not be burdensome. Yes, it requires careful attention to detail. However, you can simplify the process if you keep these broad guidelines in mind:
Work
ahead
whenever
you
can.Chapter
10
"Writing
Preparation"
includes
tips
for
keeping
track
of
your
sources
early
in
the
research
process,
which
will
save
time
later
on.
Get
it
right
the
first
time.
Apply
APA
guidelines
as
you
write,
so
you
will
not
have
much
to
correct
during
the
editing
stage.
Again,
putting
in
a
little
extra
time
early
on
can
save
time
later.
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Use the resources available to you. In addition to the guidelines provided in this chapter, you may wish to consult the APA website at http://www.apa.org or the Purdue University Online Writing lab at http://owl.english.purdue.edu, which regularly updates its online style guidelines.
All these components must be saved in one document, not as separate documents.
Title
Page
The title page of your paper includes the following information:
Title of the paper Authors name Name of the institution with which the author is affiliated Header at the top of the page with the paper title (in capital letters) and the page number (If the title is lengthy, you may use a shortened form of it in the header.)
List the first three elements in the order given in the previous list, centered about one third of the way down from the top of the page. Use the headers and footers tool of your word-processing program to add the header, with the title text at the left and the page number in the upper-right corner. Your title page should look like the following example.
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Abstract
The next page of your paper provides an abstract, or brief summary of your findings. An abstract does not need to be provided in every paper, but an abstract should be used in papers that include a hypothesis. A good abstract is conciseabout one hundred to one hundred fifty wordsand is written in an objective, impersonal style. Your writing voice will not be as apparent here as in the body of your paper. When writing the abstract, take a just-the-facts approach, and summarize your research question and your findings in a few sentences. In Chapter 11 "Writing", you read a paper written by a student named Jorge, who researched the effectiveness of low-carbohydrate diets. Read Jorges abstract. Note how it sums up the major ideas in his paper without going into excessive detail.
Exercise 1
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Write an abstract summarizing your paper. Briefly introduce the topic, state your findings, and sum up what conclusions you can draw from your research. Use the word count feature of your word-processing program to make sure your abstract does not exceed one hundred fifty words.
Tip
Depending on your field of study, you may sometimes write research papers that present extensive primary research, such as your own experiment or survey. In your abstract, summarize your research question and your findings, and briefly indicate how your study relates to prior research in the field.
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Exercise 2
Begin formatting the final draft of your paper according to APA guidelines. You may work with an existing document or set up a new document if you choose. Include the following:
Your title page The abstract you created in Note 14.8 "Exercise 1" Correct headers and page numbers for your title page and abstract
Headings
APA style uses section headings to organize information, making it easy for the reader to follow the writers train of thought and to know immediately what major topics are covered. Depending on the length and complexity of the paper, its major sections may also be divided into subsections, sub-subsections, and so on. These smaller sections, in turn, use different heading styles to indicate different levels of information. In essence, you are using headings to create a hierarchy of information. The following heading styles used in APA formatting are listed in order of greatest to least importance:
1. Section
headings
use
centered,
boldface
type.
Headings
use
title
case,
with
important
words
in
the
heading
capitalized.
2. Subsection
headings
use
left-aligned,
boldface
type.
Headings
use
title
case.
3. The
third
level
uses
left-aligned,
indented,
boldface
type.
Headings
use
a
capital
letter
only
for
the
first
word,
and
they
end
in
a
period.
4. The
fourth
level
follows
the
same
style
used
for
the
previous
level,
but
the
headings
are
boldfaced
and
italicized.
5. The
fifth
level
follows
the
same
style
used
for
the
previous
level,
but
the
headings
are
italicized
and
not
boldfaced.
Visually, the hierarchy of information is organized as indicated in Table 14.1 "Section Headings". Table 14.1 Section Headings
Level
of
Information
Level
1
Level
2
Level
3
Level
4
Level
5
Text
Example
Heart
Disease
Lifestyle
Factors
That
Reduce
Heart
Disease
Risk
Exercising
regularly.
Aerobic
exercise.
Country
line
dancing.
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A college research paper may not use all the heading levels shown in Table 14.1 "Section Headings", but you are likely to encounter them in academic journal articles that use APA style. For a brief paper, you may find that level 1 headings suffice. Longer or more complex papers may need level 2 headings or other lower-level headings to organize information clearly. Use your outline to craft your major section headings and determine whether any subtopics are substantial enough to require additional levels of headings.
Exercise 3
Working with the document you developed in Note 14.11 "Exercise 2", begin setting up the heading structure of the final draft of your research paper according to APA guidelines. Include your title and at least two to three major section headings, and follow the formatting guidelines provided above. If your major sections should be broken into subsections, add those headings as well. Use your outline to help you. Because Jorge used only level 1 headings, his Exercise 3 would look like the following:
Level
of
Information
Level
1
Level
1
Level
1
Level
1
Text
Example
Purported
Benefits
of
Low-Carbohydrate
Diets
Research
on
Low-Carbohydrate
Diets
and
Weight
Loss
Other
Long-Term
Health
Outcomes
Conclusion
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This information may be included within the sentence or in a parenthetical reference at the end of the sentence, as in these examples. Epstein (2010) points out that junk food cannot be considered addictive in the same way that we think of psychoactive drugs as addictive (p. 137). Here, the writer names the source author when introducing the quote and provides the publication date in parentheses after the authors name. The page number appears in parentheses after the closing quotation marks and before the period that ends the sentence. Addiction researchers caution that junk food cannot be considered addictive in the same way that we think of psychoactive drugs as addictive (Epstein, 2010, p. 137). Here, the writer provides a parenthetical citation at the end of the sentence that includes the authors name, the year of publication, and the page number separated by commas. Again, the parenthetical citation is placed after the closing quotation marks and before the period at the end of the sentence. As noted in the book Junk Food, Junk Science (Epstein, 2010, p. 137), junk food cannot be considered addictive in the same way that we think of psychoactive drugs as addictive. Here, the writer chose to mention the source title in the sentence (an optional piece of information to include) and followed the title with a parenthetical citation. Note that the parenthetical citation is placed before the comma that signals the end of the introductory phrase. David Epsteins book Junk Food, Junk Science (2010) pointed out that junk food cannot be considered addictive in the same way that we think of psychoactive drugs as addictive (p. 137). Another variation is to introduce the author and the source title in your sentence and include the publication date and page number in parentheses within the sentence or at the end of the sentence. As long as you have included the essential information, you can choose the option that works best for that particular sentence and source. Citing a book with a single author is usually a straightforward task. Of course, your research may require that you cite many other types of sources, such as books or articles with more than one author or sources with no individual author listed. You may also need to cite sources available in both print and online and nonprint sources, such as websites and personal interviews. Chapter 14 "APA and MLA Documentation and Formatting", Section 14.2 "Citing and Referencing Techniques" and Section 14.3 "Creating a References Section" provide extensive guidelines for citing a variety of source types.
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Writing at Work
APA is just one of several different styles with its own guidelines for documentation, formatting, and language usage. Depending on your field of interest, you may be exposed to additional styles, such as the following:
MLA style. Determined by the Modern Languages Association and used for papers in literature, languages, and other disciplines in the humanities. Chicago style. Outlined in the Chicago Manual of Style and sometimes used for papers in the humanities and the sciences; many professional organizations use this style for publications as well. Associated Press (AP) style. Used by professional journalists.
References
List
The brief citations included in the body of your paper correspond to the more detailed citations provided at the end of the paper in the references section. In-text citations provide basic informationthe authors name, the publication date, and the page number if necessarywhile the references section provides more extensive bibliographical information. Again, this information allows your reader to follow up on the sources you cited and do additional reading about the topic if desired. The specific format of entries in the list of references varies slightly for different source types, but the entries generally include the following information:
The name(s) of the author(s) or institution that wrote the source The year of publication and, where applicable, the exact date of publication The full title of the source For books, the city of publication For articles or essays, the name of the periodical or book in which the article or essay appears For magazine and journal articles, the volume number, issue number, and pages where the article appears For sources on the web, the URL where the source is located
The references page is double spaced and lists entries in alphabetical order by the authors last name. If an entry continues for more than one line, the second line and each subsequent line are indented five spaces. Review the following example. (Chapter 14 "APA and MLA Documentation and Formatting", Section 14.3 "Creating a References Section" provides extensive guidelines for formatting reference entries for different types of sources.)
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Tip
In APA style, book and article titles are formatted in sentence case, not title case. Sentence case means that only the first word is capitalized, along with any proper nouns.
Key Takeaways
Following proper citation and formatting guidelines helps writers ensure that their work will be taken seriously, give proper credit to other authors for their work, and provide valuable information to readers. Working ahead and taking care to cite sources correctly the first time are ways writers can save time during the editing stage of writing a research paper. APA papers usually include an abstract that concisely summarizes the paper. APA papers use a specific headings structure to provide a clear hierarchy of information. In APA papers, in-text citations usually include the name(s) of the author(s) and the year of publication. In-text citations correspond to entries in the references section, which provide detailed bibliographical information about a source.
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Learning Objective
1. Apply
American
Psychological
Association
(APA)
style
formatting
guidelines
for
citations.
This section covers the nitty-gritty details of in-text citations. You will learn how to format citations for different types of source materials, whether you are citing brief quotations, paraphrasing ideas, or quoting longer passages. You will also learn techniques you can use to introduce quoted and paraphrased material effectively. Keep this section handy as a reference to consult while writing the body of your paper.
In Changs 2008 text Weight Training for Women, she asserts, Engaging in weight-bearing exercise is one of the single best things women can do to maintain good health (p. 49). The authors name, the date, and the title may appear in the body of the text. Include the page number in the parenthetical citation. Also, notice the use of the verb asserts to introduce the direct quotation. Engaging in weight-bearing exercise, Chang asserts, is one of the single best things women can do to maintain good health (2008, p. 49). You may begin a sentence with the direct quotation and add the authors name and a strong verb before continuing the quotation.
Tip
Although APA style guidelines do not require writers to provide page numbers for material that is not directly quoted, your instructor may wish you to do so when possible. Check with your instructor about his or her preferences.
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Exercise 1
Review the places in your paper where you cited, quoted, and paraphrased material from a source with a single author. Edit your citations to ensure that
each citation includes the authors name, the date of publication, and, where appropriate, a page reference; parenthetical citations are correctly formatted; longer quotations use the block-quotation format.
If you are quoting a passage that continues into a second paragraph, indent five spaces again in the first line of the second paragraph. Here is an example: In recent years, many writers within the fitness industry have emphasized the ways in which women can benefit from weight-bearing exercise, such as weightlifting, karate, dancing, stair climbing, hiking, and jogging. Chang (2008) found that engaging in weight-bearing exercise regularly significantly reduces womens risk of developing osteoporosis. Additionally, these exercises help women maintain muscle mass and overall strength, and many common forms of weight-bearing exercise, such as brisk walking or stair climbing, also provide noticeable cardiovascular benefits. It is important to note that swimming cannot be considered a weight-bearing exercise, since the water supports and cushions the swimmer. That doesnt mean swimming isnt great exercise, but it should be considered one part of an integrated fitness program. (p. 93)
Tip
Be wary of quoting from sources at length. Remember, your ideas should drive the paper, and quotations should be used to support and enhance your points. Make sure any lengthy quotations
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that you include serve a clear purpose. Generally, no more than 1015 percent of a paper should consist of quoted material.
Exercise 2
Review the citations in your paper once again. This time, look for places where you introduced source material using a signal phrase in your sentence.
1. Highlight
the
verbs
used
in
your
signal
phrases,
and
make
note
of
any
that
seem
to
be
overused
throughout
the
paper.
2. Identify
at
least
three
places
where
a
stronger
verb
could
be
used.
3. Make
the
edits
to
your
draft.
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Writing at Work
It is important to accurately represent a colleagues ideas or communications in the workplace. When writing professional or academic papers, be mindful of how the words you use to describe someones tone or ideas carry certain connotations. Do not say a source argues a particular point unless an argument is, in fact, presented. Use lively language, but avoid language that is emotionally charged. Doing so will ensure you have represented your colleagues words in an authentic and accurate way.
Print
Sources
This section covers books, articles, and other print sources with one or more authors.
that consumers frequently do not realize the potential harmful effects of some popular supplements (Rodriguez, 2009b).
Tip
If you have not yet created your references section, you may not be sure which source will appear first. See Chapter 14 "APA and MLA Documentation and Formatting", Section 14.3 "Creating a References Section" for guidelinesor assign each source a temporary code and highlight the in-text citations so you remember to double-check them later on.
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One survey, conducted among 350 smokers aged 18 to 30, included a detailed questionnaire about participants motivations for smoking (Henderson, Davidian, & Degler, 2010). Note that these examples follow the same ampersand conventions as sources with two authors. Again, use the ampersand only when listing authors names in parentheses. As Henderson et al. (2010) found, some young people, particularly young women, use smoking as a means of appetite suppression. Disturbingly, some young women use smoking as a means of appetite suppression (Henderson et al., 2010). Note how the phrase et al. is punctuated. No period comes after et, but al. gets a period because it is an abbreviation for a longer Latin word. In parenthetical references, include a comma after et al. but not before. Remember this rule by mentally translating the citation to English: Henderson and others, 2010.
Exercise 3
1. Review
the
places
in
your
paper
where
you
cited
material
from
a
source
with
multiple
authors
or
with
an
organization
as
the
author.
Edit
your
citations
to
ensure
that
each
citation
follows
APA
guidelines
for
the
inclusion
of
the
authors
names,
the
use
of
ampersands
and
et
al.,
the
date
of
publication,
and,
where
appropriate,
a
page
reference.
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2. Mark any additional citations within your paper that you are not sure how to format based on the guidelines provided so far. You will revisit these citations after reading the next few sections.
Use italics for titles of books or reports. Use quotation marks for titles of articles or chapters.
Living With Diabetes: Managing Your Health (2009) recommends regular exercise for patients with diabetes. Regular exercise can benefit patients with diabetes (Living with Diabetes, 2009). Rosenhan (1973) had mentally healthy study participants claim to be experiencing hallucinations so they would be admitted to psychiatric hospitals.
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Electronic
Sources
Whenever possible, cite electronic sources as you would print sources, using the author, the date, and where appropriate, a page number. For some types of electronic sourcesfor instance, many online articlesthis information is easily available. Other times, however, you will need to vary the format to reflect the differences in online media.
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Even if a source does not have numbered paragraphs, it is likely to have headings that organize the content. In your citation, name the section where your cited information appears, followed by a paragraph number. The American Lung Association (2010) noted, After smoking, radon exposure is the second most common cause of lung cancer (What Causes Lung Cancer? section, para. 2). This student cited the appropriate section heading within the website and then counted to find the specific paragraph where the cited information was located. If an online source has no listed author and no date, use the source title and the abbreviation n.d. in your parenthetical reference. It has been suggested that electromagnetic radiation from cellular telephones may pose a risk for developing certain cancers (Cell Phones and Cancer, n.d.).
Personal
Communication
For personal communications, such as interviews, letters, and e-mails, cite the name of the person involved, clarify that the material is from a personal communication, and provide the specific date the communication took place. Note that while in-text citations correspond to entries in the references section, personal communications are an exception to this rule. They are cited only in the body text of your paper. J. H. Yardley, M.D., believes that available information on the relationship between cell phone use and cancer is inconclusive (personal communication, May 1, 2009).
Writing at Work
At work, you may sometimes share information resources with your colleagues by photocopying an interesting article or forwarding the URL of a useful website. Your goal in these situations and in formal research citations is the same. The goal is to provide enough information to help your professional peers locate and follow up on potentially useful information. Provide as much specific information as possible to achieve that goal, and consult with your professor as to what specific style he or she may prefer.
Exercise 4
Revisit the problem citations you identified in Note 14.55 "Exercise 3"for instance, sources with no listed author or other oddities. Review the guidelines provided in this section and edit your citations for these kinds of sources according to APA guidelines.
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Key Takeaways
In APA papers, in-text citations include the name of the author(s) and the year of publication whenever possible. Page numbers are always included when citing quotations. It is optional to include page numbers when citing paraphrased material; however, this should be done when citing a specific portion of a work. When citing online sources, provide the same information used for print sources if it is available. When a source does not provide information that usually appears in a citation, in-text citations should provide readers with alternative information that would help them locate the source material. This may include the title of the source, section headings and paragraph numbers for websites, and so forth. When writing a paper, discuss with your professor what particular standards he or she would like you to follow.
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Learning Objective
1. Apply
American
Psychological
Association
(APA)
style
and
formatting
guidelines
for
a
references
section.
This section provides detailed information about how to create the references section of your paper. You will review basic formatting guidelines and learn how to format bibliographical entries for various types of sources. This section of Chapter 14 "APA and MLA Documentation and Formatting", like the previous section, is meant to be used as a reference tool while you write.
The name of the author(s) The year of publication and, where applicable, the exact date of publication The full title of the source For books, the city of publication For articles or essays, the name of the periodical or book in which the article or essay appears For magazine and journal articles, the volume number, issue number, and pages where the article appears For sources on the web, the URL where the source is located
See the following examples for how to format a book or journal article with a single author.
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The following box provides general guidelines for formatting the reference page. For the remainder of this chapter, you will learn about how to format bibliographical entries for different source types, including multiauthor and electronic sources.
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9. Use sentence case for all other titlesbooks, articles, web pages, and other source titles. Capitalize the first word of the title. Do not capitalize any other words in the title except for the following:
Proper
nouns
First
word
of
a
subtitle
First
word
after
a
colon
or
dash
10. Use
italics
for
book
and
journal
titles.
Do
not
use
italics,
underlining,
or
quotation
marks
for
titles
of
shorter
works,
such
as
articles.
o o o
Exercise 1
Set up the first page of your references section and begin adding entries, following the APA formatting guidelines provided in this section.
1. If
there
are
any
simple
entries
that
you
can
format
completely
using
the
general
guidelines,
do
so
at
this
time.
2. For
entries
you
are
unsure
of
how
to
format,
type
in
as
much
information
as
you
can,
and
highlight
the
entries
so
you
can
return
to
them
later.
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general guidelines. The following guidelines show how to format reference entries for these different situations.
Tip
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The previous example shows the format used for an edited book with one authorfor instance, a collection of a famous persons letters that has been edited. This type of source is different from an anthology, which is a collection of articles or essays by different authors. For citing works in anthologies, see the guidelines later in this section.
A
Translated
Book
Include the translators name after the title, and at the end of the citation, list the date the original work was published. Note that for the translators name, you list the initials before the last name. Freud, S. (1965). New introductory lectures on psycho-analysis (J. Strachey, Trans.). New York, NY: W. W. Norton. (Original work published 1933).
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Swedan, N. (2001). Womens sports medicine and rehabilitation. Gaithersburg, MD: Aspen Publishers. Swedan, N. (2003). The active womans health and fitness handbook. New York, NY: Perigee. If two books have multiple authors, and the first author is the same but the others are different, alphabetize by the second authors last name (or the third or fourth, if necessary). Carroll, D., & Aaronson, F. (2008). Managing type II diabetes. Chicago, IL: Southwick Press. Carroll, D., & Zuckerman, N. (2008). Gestational diabetes. Chicago, IL: Southwick Press.
A
Book-Length
Report
Format technical and research reports as you would format other book-length sources. If the organization that issued the report assigned it a number, include the number in parentheses after the title. (See also the guidelines provided for citing works produced by government agencies.) Jameson, R., & Dewey, J. (2009). Preliminary findings from an evaluation of the presidents physical fitness program in Pleasantville school district. Pleasantville, WA: Pleasantville Board of Education.
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Exercise 2
Revisit the references section you began to compile in Note 14.73 "Exercise 1". Use the guidelines provided to format any entries for book-length print sources that you were unable to finish earlier. Review how Jorge formatted these book-length print sources: Atkins, R. C. (2002). Dr. Atkins diet revolution. New York, NY: M. Evans and Company. Agatson, A. (2003). The South Beach diet. New York, NY: St. Martins Griffin.
Author or authors names Publication year Article title (in sentence case, without quotation marks or italics) Journal title (in title case and in italics) Volume number (in italics) Issue number (in parentheses) Page number(s) where the article appears
DeMarco, R. F. (2010). Palliative care and African American women living with HIV. Journal of Nursing Education, 49(5), 14.
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Publication information for the article Information about where the abstract was published (for instance, another journal or a collection of abstracts)
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Tremblay, M. S., Shields, M., Laviolette, M., Craig, C. L., Janssen, I., & Gorber, S. C. (2010). Fitness of Canadian children and youth: Results from the 20072009 Canadian Health Measures Survey. Health Reports, 21(1), 720.
Writing at Work
The idea of an eight-page article with sixteen authors may seem strange to youespecially if you are in the midst of writing a ten-page research paper on your own. More often than not, articles in scholarly journals list multiple authors. Sometimes, the authors actually did collaborate on writing and editing the published article. In other instances, some of the authors listed may have contributed to the research in some way while being only minimally involved in the process of writing the article. Whenever you collaborate with colleagues to produce a written product, follow your professions conventions for giving everyone proper credit for their contribution.
A
Magazine
Article
After the publication year, list the issue date. Otherwise, treat these as you would journal articles. List the volume and issue number if both are available.
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A
Newspaper
Article
Treat these as you would magazine and journal articles, with one important difference: precede the page number(s) with the abbreviation p. (for a single-page article) or pp. (for a multipage article). For articles whose pagination is not continuous, list all the pages included in the article. For example, an article that begins on page A1 and continues on pages A4 would have the page reference A1, A4. An article that begins on page A1 and continues on pages A4 and A5 would have the page reference A1, A4A5.
A
Review
After the title, indicate in brackets that the work is a review and state the name of the work being reviewed. (Note that even if the title of the review is the same as the title of the book being reviewed, as in the following example, you should treat it as an article title. Do not italicize it.)
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Exercise 3
Revisit the references section you began to compile in Note 14.73 "Exercise 1". Use the guidelines provided above to format any entries for periodicals and other shorter print sources that you were unable to finish earlier.
Electronic
Sources
Citing
Articles
from
Online
Periodicals:
URLs
and
Digital
Object
Identifiers
(DOIs)
Whenever you cite online sources, it is important to provide the most up-to-date information available to help readers locate the source. In some cases, this means providing an articles URL, or web address. (The letters URL stand for uniform resource locator.) Always provide the most complete URL possible. Provide a link to the specific article used, rather than a link to the publications homepage. As you know, web addresses are not always stable. If a website is updated or reorganized, the article you accessed in April may move to a different location in May. The URL you provided may become a dead link. For this reason, many online periodicals, especially scholarly publications, now rely on DOIs rather than URLs to keep track of articles. A DOI is a Digital Object Identifieran identification code provided for some online documents, typically articles in scholarly journals. Like a URL, its purpose is to help readers locate an article. However, a DOI is more stable than a URL, so it makes sense to include it in your reference entry when possible. Follow these guidelines:
If you are citing an online article with a DOI, list the DOI at the end of the reference entry. If the article appears in print as well as online, you do not need to provide the URL. However, include the words Electronic version after the title in brackets. In other respects, treat the article as you would a print article. Include the volume number and issue number if available. (Note, however, that these may not be available for some online periodicals).
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Note that if the article appears in a print version of the publication, you do not need to list the URL, but do indicate that you accessed the electronic version. Robbins, K. (2010, March/April). Natures bounty: A heady feast [Electronic version]. Psychology Today, 43(2), 58.
A
Newspaper
Article
Provide the URL of the article. McNeil, D. G. (2010, May 3). Maternal health: A new study challenges benefits of vitamin A for women and babies. The New York Times. Retrieved from http://www.nytimes.com/2010/05/04/health/04glob.html?ref=health
Tip
APA style does not require writers to provide the item number or accession number for articles retrieved from databases. You may choose to do so if the article is difficult to locate or the database is an obscure one. Check with your professor to see if this is something he or she would like you to include.
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An
Abstract
of
an
Article
Format these as you would an article citation, but add the word Abstract in brackets after the title. Bradley, U., Spence, M., Courtney, C. H., McKinley, M. C., Ennis, C. N., McCance, D. R.Hunter, S. J. (2009). Low-fat versus low-carbohydrate weight reduction diets: Effects on weight loss, insulin resistance, and cardiovascular risk: A randomized control trial [Abstract]. Diabetes, 58(12), 27412748. http://diabetes.diabetesjournals.org/content/early/2009/08/23/db00098.abstract
Name of the author(s), whether an individual or organization Date of publication (Use n.d. if no date is available.) Title of the document Address where you retrieved the document
If the document consists of more than one web page within the site, link to the homepage or the entry page for the document. American Heart Association. (2010). Heart attack, stroke, and cardiac arrest warning signs. Retrieved from http://www.americanheart.org/presenter.jhtml?identifier=3053
Data
Sets
If you cite raw data compiled by an organization, such as statistical data, provide the URL where you retrieved the information. Provide the name of the organization that sponsors the site.
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US Food and Drug Administration. (2009). Nationwide evaluation of X-ray trends: NEXT surveys performed [Data file]. Retrieved from http://www.fda.gov/RadiationEmittingProducts/RadiationSafety/NationwideEvaluationofX- RayTrendsNEXT/ucm116508.htm
Graphic
Data
When citing graphic datasuch as maps, pie charts, bar graphs, and so oninclude the name of the organization that compiled the information, along with the publication date. Briefly describe the contents in brackets. Provide the URL where you retrieved the information. (If the graphic is associated with a specific project or document, list it after your bracketed description of the contents.) US Food and Drug Administration. (2009). [Pie charts showing the percentage breakdown of the FDAs budget for fiscal year 2005]. 2005 FDA budget summary. Retrieved from mhttp://www.fda.gov/AboutFDA/ReportsManualsForms/Reports/BudgetReports/2005FDABudg etSummary/ucm117231.htm
An
Electronic
Book
Electronic books may include books available as text files online or audiobooks. If an electronic book is easily available in print, cite it as you would a print source. If it is unavailable in print (or extremely difficult to find), use the format in the example. (Use the words Available from in your citation if the book must be purchased or is not available directly.) Chisholm, L. (n.d.). Celtic tales. Retrieved from http://www.childrenslibrary.org/icdl/BookReader?bookid= chicelt_00150014&twoPage=false&route=text&size=0&fullscreen=false&pnum1=1&lang= English&ilang=English
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Hart, A. M. (1895). RestorativesCoffee, cocoa, chocolate. In Diet in sickness and in health (VI). Retrieved from http://www.archive.org/details/dietinsicknessin00hartrich
Computer
Software
For commonly used office software and programming languages, it is not necessary to provide a citation. Cite software only when you are using a specialized program, such as the nutrition tracking software in the following example. If you download software from a website, provide the version and the year if available. Internet Brands, Inc. (2009). FitDay PC (Version 2) [Software]. Available from http://www.fitday.com/Pc/PcHome.html?gcid=14
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Writing at Work
Because the content may not be carefully reviewed for accuracy, discussion forums and blogs should not be relied upon as a major source of information. However, it may be appropriate to cite these sources for some types of research. You may also participate in discussion forums or comment on blogs that address topics of personal or professional interest. Always keep in mind that when you post, you are making your thoughts publicand in many cases, available through search engines. Make sure any posts that can easily be associated with your name are appropriately professional, because a potential employer could view them.
A
Motion
Picture
Name the director or producer (or both), year of release, title, country of origin, and studio. Spurlock, M. (Director/producer), Morley, J. (Executive producer), & Winters. H. M. (Executive producer). (2004). Super size me. United States: Kathbur Pictures in association with Studio on Hudson.
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A
Recording
Name the primary contributors and list their role. Include the recording medium in brackets after the title. Then list the location and the label. Smith, L. W. (Speaker). (1999). Meditation and relaxation [CD]. New York, NY: Earth, Wind, & Sky Productions. Szkely, I. (Pianist), Budapest Symphony Orchestra (Performers), & Nmeth, G. (Conductor). (1988). Chopin piano concertos no. 1 and 2 [CD]. Hong Kong: Naxos.
A
Podcast
Provide as much information as possible about the writer, director, and producer; the date the podcast aired; its title; any organization or series with which it is associated; and where you retrieved the podcast. Kelsey, A. R. (Writer), Garcia, J. (Director), & Kim, S. C. (Producer). (2010, May 7). Lies food labels tell us. Savvy consumer podcasts [Audio podcast]. Retrieved from http://www.savvyconsumer.org/podcasts/050710
Exercise 4
Revisit the references section you began to compile in Note 14.73 "Exercise 1".
1. Use
the
APA
guidelines
provided
in
this
section
to
format
any
entries
for
electronic
sources
that
you
were
unable
to
finish
earlier.
2. If
your
sources
include
a
form
of
media
not
covered
in
the
APA
guidelines
here,
consult
with
a
writing
tutor
or
review
a
print
or
online
reference
book.
You
may
wish
to
visit
the
website
of
the
American
Psychological
Association
at
http://www.apa.org
or
the
Purdue
University
Online
Writing
lab
at
http://owl.english.purdue.edu,
which
regularly
updates
its
online
style
guidelines.
3. Give
your
paper
a
final
edit
to
check
the
references
section.
Key Takeaways
In APA papers, entries in the references section include as much of the following information as possible:
o o o
Print sources. Author(s), date of publication, title, publisher, page numbers (for shorter works), editors (if applicable), and periodical title (if applicable). Online sources (text-based). Author(s), date of publication, title, publisher or sponsoring organization, and DOI or URL (if applicable). Electronic sources (non-text-based). Provide details about the creator(s) of the work, title, associated company or series, and date the work was produced or broadcast. The specific details provided will vary depending on the medium and the information that is available.
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Electronic sources (text-based). If an electronic source is also widely available in print form, it is sometimes unnecessary to provide details about how to access the electronic version. Check the guidelines for the specific source type.
Learning Objectives
1. Identify
the
major
components
of
a
research
paper
written
using
MLA
style.
2. Apply
general
Modern
Language
Association
(MLA)
style
and
formatting
conventions
in
a
research
paper.
We have addressed American Psychological Association (APA) style, as well as the importance of giving credit where credit is due, so now lets turn our attention to the formatting and citation style of the Modern Language Association, known as MLA style. MLA style is often used in the liberal arts and humanities. Like APA style, it provides a uniform framework for consistency across a document in several areas. MLA style provides a format for the manuscript text and parenthetical citations, or in-text citations. It also provides the framework for the works cited area for references at the end of the essay. MLA style emphasizes brevity and clarity. As a student writer, it is to your advantage to be familiar with both major styles, and this section will outline the main points of MLA as well as offer specific examples of commonly used references. Remember that your writing represents you in your absence. The correct use of a citation style demonstrates your attention to detail and ability to produce a scholarly work in an acceptable style, and it can help prevent the appearance or accusations of plagiarism. If you are taking an English, art history, or music appreciation class, chances are that you will be asked to write an essay in MLA format. One common question goes something like Whats the difference? referring to APA and MLA style, and it deserves our consideration. The liberal arts and humanities often reflect works of creativity that come from individual and group effort, but they may adapt, change, or build on previous creative works. The inspiration to create something new, from a song to a music video, may contain elements of previous works. Drawing on your fellow artists and authors is part of the creative process, and so is giving credit where credit is due. A reader interested in your subject wants not only to read what you wrote but also to be aware of the works that you used to create it. Readers want to examine your sources to see if you know your subject, to see if you missed anything, or if you offer anything new and interesting. Your new or up-to-date sources may offer the reader additional insight on the subject being considered. It also demonstrates that you, as the author, are up-to-date on what is happening in the field or on the subject. Giving credit where it is due enhances your credibility, and the MLA style offers a clear format to use.
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Uncredited work that is incorporated into your own writing is considered plagiarism. In the professional world, plagiarism results in loss of credibility and often compensation, including future opportunities. In a classroom setting, plagiarism results in a range of sanctions, from loss of a grade to expulsion from a school or university. In both professional and academic settings, the penalties are severe. MLA offers artists and authors a systematic style of reference, again giving credit where credit is due, to protect MLA users from accusations of plagiarism. MLA style uses a citation in the body of the essay that links to the works cited page at the end. The in-text citation is offset with parentheses, clearly calling attention to itself for the reader. The reference to the author or title is like a signal to the reader that information was incorporated from a separate source. It also provides the reader with information to then turn to the works cited section of your essay (at the end) where they can find the complete reference. If you follow the MLA style, and indicate your source both in your essay and in the works cited section, you will prevent the possibility of plagiarism. If you follow the MLA guidelines, pay attention to detail, and clearly indicate your sources, then this approach to formatting and citation offers a proven way to demonstrate your respect for other authors and artists.
Before we transition to specifics, please consider one word of caution: consistency. If you are instructed to use the MLA style and need to indicate a date, you have options. For example, you could use an international or a US style:
International style: 18 May 1980 (day/month/year) US style: May 18, 1980 (month/day/year)
If you are going to the US style, be consistent in its use. Youll find you have the option on page 83 of the MLA Handbook for Writers of Research Papers, 7th edition. You have many options when writing in English as the language itself has several conventions, or acceptable ways of writing particular parts of speech or information. For example, on the next page our MLA Handbook addresses the question: Which convention is preferred in MLA style:
1. 2. 3. 4. twentieth
century
Twentieth
Century
20th
century
20th
Century
You are welcome to look in the MLA Handbook and see there is one preferred style or convention (you will also find the answer at end of this section marked by an asterisk [*]). Now
Attributed
to
Scott
McLean
Saylor
URL:
http://www.saylor.org/books/
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you may say to yourself that you wont write that term and it may be true, but you will come to a term or word that has more than one way it can be written. In that case, what convention is acceptable in MLA style? This is where the MLA Handbook serves as an invaluable resource. Again, your attention to detail and the professional presentation of your work are aspects of learning to write in an academic setting. Now lets transition from a general discussion on the advantages of MLA style to what we are required to do to write a standard academic essay. We will first examine a general to do list, then review a few do not suggestions, and finally take a tour through a sample of MLA features. Links to sample MLA papers are located at the end of this section.
Tip
Depending on your field of study, you may sometimes write research papers in either APA or MLA style. Recognize that each has its advantages and preferred use in fields and disciplines. Learn to write and reference in both styles with proficiency.
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As we can see in Table 14.2, we have experienced significant growth since 2008. This example demonstrates that the words that you write and the tables, figures, illustrations, or images that you include should be next to each other in your paper.
Parenthetical
Citations
You must cite your sources as you use them. In the same way that a table or figure should be located right next to the sentence that discusses it (see the previous example), parenthetical citations, or citations enclosed in parenthesis that appear in the text, are required. You need to cite all your information. If someone else wrote it, said it, drew it, demonstrated it, or otherwise expressed it, you need to cite it. The exception to this statement is common, widespread knowledge. For example, if you search online for MLA resources, and specifically MLA sample papers, you will find many similar discussions on MLA style. MLA is a style and cannot be copyrighted because it is a style, but the seventh edition of the MLA Handbook can be copyright protected. If you reference a specific page in that handbook, you need to indicate it. If you write about a general MLA style issue that is commonly covered or addressed in multiple sources, you do not. When in doubt, reference the specific resource you used to write your essay. Your in-text, or parenthetical, citations should do the following:
Clearly indicate the specific sources also referenced in the works cited Specifically identify the location of the information that you used Keep the citation clear and concise, always confirming its accuracy
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As a point of reference and comparison to our APA examples, lets examine the following three citations and the order of the information needed.
Citation
Type
Website
MLA
Style
Authors
Last
Name,
First
Name.
Title
of
the
website.
Publication
Date.
Name
of
Organization
(if
applicable).
Date
you
accessed
the
website.
<URL>.
Authors
Last
Name,
First
Name.
Title
of
Article.
Title
of
the
website.
Date
of
publication.
Organization
that
provides
the
website.
Date
you
accessed
the
website.
Authors
Last
Name,
First
Name.
Title
of
the
Book.
Place
of
Publication:
Publishing
Company,
Date
of
publication.
APA
Style
Authors
Last
Name,
First
Initial.
(Date
of
publication).
Title
of
document.
Retrieved
from
URL
Authors
Last
name,
First
Initial.
(Date
of
publication).
Title
of
article.
Title
of
Journal,
Volume(Issue).
Retrieved
from
URL
Authors
Last
Name,
First
Initial.
(Date
of
publication).
Title
of
the
book.
Place
of
Publication:
Publishing
Company.
Online article
Book
Note: The items listed include proper punctuation and capitalization according to the styles guidelines.
Exercise 1
In Chapter 14 "APA and MLA Documentation and Formatting", Section 14.1 "Formatting a Research Paper", you created a sample essay in APA style. After reviewing this section and exploring the resources linked at the end of the section (including California State University Sacramentos clear example of a paper in MLA format), please convert your paper to MLA style using the formatting and citation guidelines. You may find it helpful to use online applications that quickly, easily, and at no cost convert your citations to MLA format.
Exercise 2
Please convert the APA-style citations to MLA style. You may find that online applications can quickly, easily, and at no cost convert your citations to MLA format. There are several websites and applications available free (or as a free trial) that will allow you to input the information and will produce a correct citation in the style of your choice. Consider these two sites:
http://www.noodletools.com
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http://citationmachine.net
Hint: You may need access to the Internet to find any missing information required to correctly cite in MLA style. This demonstrates an important difference between APA and MLA stylethe information provided to the reader.
1
Sample
Student
Reference
List
in
APA
Style
Brent,
D.
A.,
Poling,
K.
D.,
&
Goldstein,
T.
R.
(2010).
Treating
depressed
and
suicidal
adolescents:
A
clinicians
guide.
New
York,
NY:
Guilford
Press.
MLA 2
Dewan, S. (2007, September 17). Using crayons to exorcise Katrina. The New York Times. Retrieved from http://www.nytimes.com/2007/09/17/arts/design/17ther.html
MLA 3
Freud, S. (1955). Beyond the pleasure principle. In The Complete Works of Sigmund Freud. (Vol. XVII, pp. 366). London, England: Hogarth.
MLA 4
Henley, D. (2007). Naming the enemy: An art therapy intervention for children with bipolar and comorbid disorders. Art Therapy: Journal of the American Art Therapy Association, 24(3), 104110.
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Hutson, M. (2008). Art therapy: The healing arts. Psychology Today. Retrieved from http://www.psychologytoday.com/articles/200705/art-therapy-the-healing-arts
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Isis, P. D., Bus, J., Siegel, C. A., & Ventura, Y. (2010). Empowering students through creativity: Art therapy in Miami-Dade County Public Schools. Art Therapy: Journal of the American Art Therapy Association, 27(2), 5661.
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Johnson, D. (1987). The role of the creative arts therapies in the diagnosis and treatment of psychological trauma. The Arts in Psychotherapy, 14, 713.
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Sample Student Reference List in APA Style Markel, R. (Producer). (2010). Im an artist [Motion picture]. United States: Red Pepper Films.
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Kelley, S. J. (1984). The use of art therapy with sexually abused children. Journal of Psychosocial Nursing and Mental Health, 22(12), 1228.
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Pifalo, T. (2008). Why art therapy? Darkness to light: Confronting child abuse with courage. Retrieved from http://www.darkness2light.org/KnowAbout/articles_art_therapy.asp
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Schimek, J. (1975). A critical re-examination of Freuds concept of unconscious mental representation. International Review of Psychoanalysis, 2, 171187.
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Thompson, T. (2008). Freedom from meltdowns: Dr. Thompsons solutions for children with autism. Baltimore, MD: Paul H. Brookes.
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Purdue Online Writing Lab includes sample pages and works cited. California State UniversitySacramentos Online Writing Lab has an excellent visual description and example of an MLA paper.
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SUNY offers an excellent, brief, side-by-side comparison of MLA and APA citations.
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* (a) is the correct answer to the question at the beginning of this section. The MLA Handbook prefers twentieth century.
Key Takeaways
MLA style is often used in the liberal arts and humanities. MLA style emphasizes brevity and clarity. A reader interested in your subject wants not only to read what you wrote but also to be informed of the works you used to create it. MLA style uses a citation in the body of the essay that refers to the works cited section at the end. If you follow MLA style, and indicate your source both in your essay and in the works cited section, you will prevent the possibility of plagiarism.
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Exercises
1. In
this
chapter,
you
learned
strategies
for
using
APA
and
MLA
style
documentation
and
formatting
in
a
research
paper.
Locate
a
source
that
uses
APA
or
MLA
style,
such
as
an
article
in
a
professional
journal
in
the
sciences
or
social
sciences.
Identify
these
key
components
of
an
APA
or
MLA
paper
in
your
example:
the
abstract,
section
heads,
in-text
citations,
and
references
list.
2. Check one of your assignments for correct APA or MLA formatting and citations. (You may wish to conduct this activity in two sessionsone to edit the body of the paper and one to edit the references section.) Check for the following:
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All components of an APA or MLA paper are included. The title page (or title block) and body of the paper are correctly formatted. In-text, or parenthetical, citations are complete and correctly formatted. Sources cited within the paper match the sources listed in the references or works cited section. The references or works cited section uses correct formatting and lists entries in alphabetical order.
3. As electronic media continually change, guidelines for citing electronic sources are continually updated. Identify three new or emerging forms of electronic media not listed in this textfor instance, virtual communities, such as Second Life, or social networking sites, such as LinkedIn, Facebook, and MySpace. Answer the following questions:
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Under what circumstances would this media be a useful source of information for a research paper? How might students use these sources to conduct research five or ten years from now? What information would a student need to provide if citing this source? Why? Develop brief guidelines for how to cite the emerging media source types you identified.
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