JoseBrito

Ms.Holt
Eng.1/Per.4
01/28/16
HumansInherentlyGoodorBad?
DennisPrageroncestated,Goodnessisaboutcharacter,integrity,honesty,generosity,
moralcourageandthelike.Morethananythingelse,itishowwetreatotherpeople.some
peoplethinkthatpeopleareborninherentlyevil,whileotherpeoplesaytheyareborninherently
good.
Peopleareinherentlygoodbynaturebecausetheyhaveabetterideaofwhatsrightthan
wrong,theyshowhowashamedtheyare,andtheyarewillingtosacrificewhateverisneeded.
Onereasonwhypeopleareinherentlygoodisbecausetheyhaveabetterideaofwhats
rightandwhatswrong.
AsGoldringmentionedin
LordoftheFlies
onpage(91),
whatarewe?
humans?oranimals:?orsavages?.Inthisexample,thereaderslearnthatsomeofusarebetter
tounderstandhumanitythanothers.Itisimportanttonotethisbecausethequoteshowshow
eventhoughweareinherentlygood,wecantellrightfromwrong.Tobuildonthis,wemaybe
abletoknowrightfromwrong,butitisalwayseasiertotaketheevilpath.
Theauthorpointsout
,
Yououghttobemyson,Iwouldteachyourightfromwrong.LeastIcandorightnowisto
washyourface.Areyouhungry?(pg1).BylookingatthequotereaderscanassumethatMrs.
LuellaBatesWashingtonJonesknewitwaswrongtoturnRogerinbecauseshesawabright
futureinhim.Itisclearthatsheknewthedifferencebetweenwhatsrightandwhatswrong.
Basedontheevidence,readersmaybeabletofullyunderstandagoodandabaddecisionsinceit
canchangeaperson.

Duetotothefactthatpeopleareinherentlygood,theystartfeelingashamedoftheir
negativeorbadactionsorwords.

Theliteraryworkstates,
IhavedonethingstoowhichI
wouldnottellyou,sonneithergod.Ifhedidntalreadyknow.(pg3)BylookingathowMrs.
LuellaWashingtonJoneswastryingtorelatetoRoger,readerscanassumesheistryingtoshow
Rogernottogodownanevilpath.ItisclearthatbynotturninginRogertothePolice,Mrs.
LuellawantstohelpRogerbeabetterpersonbycookingforhim,andnotturninghimin.
The
authorpointsout
,Thewomandidnotwatchtheboytoseeifhewasgoingtorunnow,nordid
shewatchherpurse,whichsheleftbehindheronthedaybed.Buttheboytookcaretositonthe
farsideoftheroomwherehethoughtshecouldeasilyseehimoutofthecornerofhereye,ifshe
wantedto.(pg.3)InthisexamplethereaderslearnthatRogerdoesnotwanttobemistrustedby
makingMrs.Luellathinkthathewantstotakeherpurse.ThisshowsreadersthatRogerhas
learnedtonotstealforhisowngreed.Readerscancometotheconclusionthatwhenpeoplesteal
theyfeelashamedoftheiractionsmakingthemabetterpersonatheart.
Additionallytheevidencethatproveshowpeopleareinherentlygoodisthattheymake
sacrificesforothers,whichissometimesbasedontheiropinions
.
Theliterarytextstates,
Will
youbuymyhair(pg.3).Bylookingatthisstatement,readerscanassumethatDellahadto
makesacrifices.ThisshowsreadersthatshewantstoexpressherlovetoJim.Inaddition,you
alsohavetomakesacrificesondifferentbeliefs.
Theauthorstates,
RepublicansandFree
Staterswerewagingwar(pg.1).Itisclearthatwhilewemaybeinherentlygood,wemust
makesacrificesforhavingdifferentbeliefsjustlikeTheSniperdidsincetheycouldnothave
thesameopinion.BylookingatTheSniperreaderscancomeassumethatweareinherently
good,butnoteveryoneasthesameopinionssincewearealldifferent.Basedontheevidence,

readersmaycometoabetterconclusionhowsacrificeshavetobemadetomakesomething
betterjustlikethesniperdidinTheSniper.
Althoughsomepeoplethinkthatpeopleareinherentlygood,othersmaynotagreesince
in
LordoftheFlies
therewaslittlekidsturningintosavagesandtheirprimordialinstinctopened
up.Ontheotherhandpeopleareborngoodthoughsincetheymustmakesacrificesforthe
greatergood,theyknowthedifferenceofwhatisrightandwhatiswrongandwefeelashamed
mostofthetimebecauseofouractions.Nonetheless,wehelpeachotherjustlikeIdid
once,whenIgaveamanwhowasplayinghisguitarinfrontofTargetsomemoney,sincethat
musthavebeenprobablytheonlywayheearnedmoney.

Rubricratingsubmittedon:2/5/2016,3:07:30PMbybholt@ggusd.net

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focused
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forthe
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loosely
relevant
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sustained
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conclusion
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elaboration
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language
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integrated,
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citations
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generalor
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Comments:
Yourtopicsentences,theevidenceyouchose,andmeanssentencesarestrong.

Continuetoworkonyourmatterssentenceandexplainingtothereaderwhyitisimportant:the
sowhatofyourargument.Youareontherighttrack,butcontinuetopushyourselfdeeperto
proveyourargument.

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