Fernando Herrera Flores

3-CM

Advantages and disadvantages of technology in

caring for the environment
People since the creation of the new machines have used the environment to
their advantage but because of this they have achieved that this would
deteriorate in the passing of time. The new technology were created by people that want a change
and a better future. A lot of people have been worried about the pollution that the big factories cause.
Furthermore there are a lot of these new technology such as solar energy, wind power and so on and
it has a lot of advantages like these removable energy polluted less than normal energy also
environment campaigns were made by environmentalists and this help a lot because some people
help between this social media. These energies are safe and doesnt create pollution.
Althought there are a lot of disavantages such as the direct environmental impact because when the
engineer builds these machines they modificated the ecosystem. Also the increase in energy
consumption has made to increase considerably the proportions of certaingases
(carbon dioxide, oxides of sulfur, etc.) in the atmosphere, mostly nearindustrialized areas. Some con
sequences of air pollution are the globalwarming of the planet due to the greenhouse effect or decrea
se in thethickness of the ozone layer.
In conclusion we dont need a polluted earth because young generations dont deserve something
like that but we need start to change our habits and remember that the earth will be destroyed by
people including me so we really need change. So do you really want a horrible future?

LENGUA EXTRANJERA III INGLS

RUBRIC TO EVALUATE AN ESSAY ABOUT THE ADVANTAGES AND DISADVANTAGES OF THE TECHNOLOGY AND CARE OF THE ECOSYSTEM
Students name:
Group:
CATEGORY
INTRODUCTION AND
THESIS STATEMENT

BODY:
TOPIC SENTENCE AND
SUPPORTING DETAILS

USE OF LANGUAGE

CONCLUSION

Date:
Score:
PRE-FORMAL
2 POINTS
Lack of thesis statement and
development of the
introduction. No controlling
point about the subjects is
evident.

RECEPTIVE
4 POINTS
Introduction and thesis
statement introduce the subjects
for advantages and
disadvantages, but they either
do not give accurate and
complete information.

RESOLVABLE
6 POINTS
Introduction and thesis
statement introduce the
subjects for advantages and
disadvantages, but they give
complete information.

AUTONOMOUS
8 POINTS
Introduction and thesis
statement create interest
and are fairly well
developed while they
almost cover the topic
accurately.

STRATEGIC
10 POINTS
Introduction and thesis
statement are very welldeveloped. They engage
the reader and create
interest. They cover the
topic.

There are no apparent topic

sentences for each paragraph.
Details are either wrong or
lacking and do not fit the
advantages and
disadvantages.

At least one topic sentence is

not clear nor does it relate to the
thesis statement.
There are some details, but they
are not clear and specific and do
not give the same importance.

The topic sentence is clear

in most of the paragraphs
and related to the thesis
statement.
There are details, but they
are not clear and specific.

Each paragraph contains

a topic sentence that is
related to the thesis
statement.
Details are clear but not
specific, to support the
arguments for the
advantages and
disadvantages.

Each paragraph contains a

clearly focused topic
sentence that is related to
the thesis statement.
Details in the paragraphs
are clear and specific, and
there are enough details to
support the advantages
and disadvantages.

There are a lot of distracting

and major mistakes (10 or
more) in grammar,
punctuation, spelling, and
capitalization.

There are several mistakes (7-9)

in punctuation, grammar,
spelling, and capitalization that.
While distracting, the meaning
and intent of the essay can still
be discerned.

There are some minor

mistakes (4-6) in
punctuation, spelling,
grammar, or capitalization,
but they do not detract from
the overall meaning and
effectiveness of the essay.

There are a few minor

mistakes (1-3) in
punctuation, spelling,
grammar, or capitalization,
but they do not detract
from the overall meaning
and effectiveness of the
essay.

There are no mistakes in

punctuation, spelling,
grammar, or capitalization.

There is no conclusion evident

in the essay or itis not related
to it.

The concluding paragraph

makes a point about the topic for
the advantages and
disadvantages, but it does not
unify the essay.

The concluding paragraph

makes a point about the
topic for the advantages and
disadvantages, but it does
not unify the essay
effectively.

The concluding paragraph

unifies the essay around
the topic for advantages
and disadvantages, but it
is not very engaging or
interesting.

The concluding paragraph

effectively unifies the
essay around both sides of
the topic for advantages
and disadvantages. It
contains an engaging and
interesting point of view.