Final paper

by Prarthana Shankar
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great intro
with solid
thesis.
or when talking about animals' rights?
hmm, these two definitions are very different, I
think.
and others? don't need to list them all (like
dogs) but at least say, and others.
Some people would
disagree that they're "just
like" us--why do they
disagree, and how do you
respond?
hedge
claims
:
perhap
s it's
not so
differe
wait--need the percent in
captive whales to
compare
nice
counter
(but so
easy to
crush it!)
all claims--no
evidence (on his
part, not yours :)
FINAL GRADE
96/100
Final paper
GRADEMARK REPORT
GENERAL COMMENTS
Instructor
This is excellent, Prarthana. I can tell you, though, as a
30-year vegetarian, that many people don't think
sentience is enough, and they disagree that animals are
"just like" us. Can you find someone talking like that, add
it (and their reasoning) to your paper, and try to
respond? That would make this paper extra
sophisticated.
Great job!!
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Text Comment. great intro with solid thesis.
Text Comment. or when talking about animals' rights?
Text Comment. hmm, these two definitions are very different, I think.
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Text Comment. and others? don't need to list them all (like dogs) but at least say, and others.
Text Comment. Some people would disagree that they're "just like" us--why do they disagree, and
how do you respond?
Text Comment. hedge claims: perhaps it's not so different?
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Text Comment. wait--need the percent in captive whales to compare
PAGE 4
Text Comment. nice counter (but so easy to crush it!)
PAGE 5
Text Comment. all claims--no evidence (on his part, not yours :)
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